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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Susegad

Chapter 2

So in this chapter, we get a glimpse of Maan through his dadi's eyes and what a sad picture it is. He has lost something so precious that it is irrreplacable. My heart went out to the young boy who adored his mother to the point of worship. If Maan and Dev are twins, I amassuming they are pretty close, even if they are not identical. But you have have said that he was closer to his mother even than his twin. That must have been a very strong bond indeed and I can totally understand why maan has withdrawn. When such bonds break, you naturally fear forming emotional ties with people, as is perhaps the case with Maan.I am Wondering why Maan is restless that particular night and playing that wonderful tune. A tune that is perhaps his last happy memory with his parents. The last stanza he sings, brought a tear to my eye, for those few lines, perhaps show exactly what he is feeling.
I tend to play the music as I write the chapter and I was in tears too when I wrote that..
So Dadi konws Geet. Now I am curious about their relationship and whether Maan knows Geet too.

And I could not help but notice a Kishore Kumar loving Raj and a Kiran that he dances with. Apne aap ko Maan ki maa bana liya AVi. I think now Iunderstand the bond Maan shares with his mother. In this sad chapter those names had me cracking up. I knew who they were the moment I read about them.
Have to bring him and his songs into my story...😉 As I was telling Shika, as a happily married woman this could be my only relation with Maan. Character inspired by many people in and out of my life.
I am loving how you are introducing each character one at a time. Maan seems to be the strong, silent and sensitive type. Can't wait to read more about him and his relationship with Geet, if any.

Ok on the next one

I am dancing with joy that you are able to read this with us now!
Edited by dqno1 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Susegad

Chapter 3

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Cheating, Cheating. You falsely named that chapter and mislead us.
Yup😳 I confess...
That turned out to be NT. I loved it Avi. I totally, totally loved how you lured us into thinking that it was Geet and then sprang NT on us. I re-read it after knowing it was NT and I swear I am in love with this awesome woman.
She went from dreaming of Hrithik Roshan to heel grinding that amoeba in the bus, to slapping her new boss. She really is having a bitc* of a day isn't she.?
She hit Dev and then Dadi introduced them.🤣 I reeeally would have loved to have seen their reactions😆

Slap courtesy of an Indian boss I once had who received many such slaps from me mentally... credit stealer, blame shifter that he was...


What is this about her past?😕
I'm sure there is a painful story there, no wonder she is such a strong woman.

This is the best character ever created Avi. She is a lady of awesome contrasts.
I want to be her...
You know as I was listening to that song while she was dreaming, I was smiling and thinking that the dreamy tune suited the situation and then suddenly she starts counting those numbers on that bus and the tune in my head changed to aali re saali re🤣
😆
I just wish you had not stopped where you had. I so desperately wanted to read more.
I am hoping you will write more about them.
Log mujhe goli se uda denge for saying this, but I wouldn't mind if they are the main leads of this story.I can already see the fireworks and the fantastic story these two will have.😉
Awww... Log pehle mujhe marenge. Avi putting herself between log and Nisha... I will do it my way like you taught me...😊
Awesome chapter Avi. It rocked.👍🏼



Thank you! The bhooton ki toli had such a hand in this that I could not wait for you to catch up with us. Luv U Nisha...🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Susegad

Chapter 4


OMG Geet is so adorable. I thought you could not top the character you have created in NT and then you go and give us an adorable, innocent, shy, jhalli Geet and prove me wrong.She is such a sweetheart. Jo mann mein aaya, woh jhat se jaban se nikla aaya. I adored the glimpses of Maan you gave through her. 😳
Slow and sweet love story hai... I know it will not appeal to all but I want to do it this way... Humari toh chat manni pat shaadi ho gayi thi, all within less than a month ala Palin's Raj-Kiran, so whenever I see such soulful romantic movies I always complain to him ki aap mujhe aise kyun nahi milne aate the vagera vagera... so all the romantic things that are pending are coming out...Embarrassed

Now we get to see a little of their past. Still, the mystery of the locket is partially solved. perhaps it belonged to his mother. Tumhare Avi naam ke punarjanam mein, do you still own it?😆

No, I have not😆
Mujhe tingu aur 2 by 2 naam sabse zyada pasand aaye, Devji. I love their relationship.😃

Best lines from this update:

You are the boy.

You are supposed to say it first, hai na.

This was the elevator scene from GHSP where they are both in blue. Loved that so much.

Could she be any more adorable. Now I can't wait to read about these two.😳

Still, wondering why Maan was sad in the first update😕


He has a misunderstanding when he sees Dev carrying her and Daadima is blessing Dev. Uska sapna toot gaya. Mera soulful Maan bechara...such a Devdas...😆

Such are the times when I love that I have 2 more chapters to read and will not be left hanging.😆


Now I am caught and firmly hooked to this story. This is the magic of Avi.😳


Yay done with this thread. Now on the next thread. I have almost caught up Avi.😃



It is not magic, it is an effort. The fact that you say its magic of Avi, Shukriya for honsla afzaiyi...
😊
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: krati5


oh its my turn for blushing

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: Luvforever

awsome part... nw i think its making sense... so, wen maan entered 1stly he saw geet in dev's arm & thought dat she is in luv wid dev & so, he is in pain & ferto lose geet 4ever bt actualy dev luvs naina & geet is lyk a sis 4 him... i hope yeh confusion jaldi dur ho... bt yeh locket ka kya raaz hai... ???
will be waiting 4 nxt part...

Glad that the picture is getting more clear now.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: dqno1

I am dancing with joy that you are able to read this with us now!

Chalo saath mein dance karte hain. What do you prefer traditional or tribal.?😆
I am so happy to have finally caught up.😃

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: dqno1

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Thank you! The bhooton ki toli had such a hand in this that I could not wait for you to catch up with us. Luv U Nisha...🤗
Luuub you too Avi dahling and I mean it from the bottom of my heart, as the song says.
❤️

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: dqno1

It is not magic, it is an effort. The fact that you say its magic of Avi, Shukriya for honsla afzaiyi..
😊.

Magic happens b'coz of effort in real life. Mehnat ka jadui phal, sweetheart.😉

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Posted: 12 years ago
very intersting concept looking forward to read it
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Posted: 12 years ago
Dev and Tara are not married yet. The SMS Geet got was when Tara went to her mama and mami to tell them about Dev and herself. Dev wanted to go but Tara wants to do it by herself (Dev's chapter). They want to meet Dev and Daadima the next day (Geet's chapter).
Thanks for being you!

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