If Only You Saw Me (6) - Page 104

Originally posted by: Sheen-Coolkiwi

Originally posted by: Sheen-Coolkiwi

After a long time... NPM 😳

Originally posted by: mayyo13

After a long time indeed! 😳

Originally posted by: dqno1

This update had so many small tableaus in it... For an update without any love scenes in it, I could feel the love in so much here...
little vignettes that shows various bonds in effective Mari style..
I'm glad to know that what I was trying to portray with the update reached to you. But tell me something. Mari style? 😆
Ayush Anaya and Geet on the bus, finding bad news about Maan's mom and immediately forming a cordon of support around Maan... Some of the awkwardness that lingers among new friends dissipates with the anxiety surrounding their friend, finding ways to help in the fastest way possible.
Exactly. The awkwardness dissipates when a friend needs support...
Then another with rushing home and finding Maan's mother alright. I confess I loved the way you wrote that. I could sense the relief he felt in his heart.
Mission accomplished then! I was actually quite unsure of the whats and hows of this particular part.
Love of neighbors and friends coming out to help and nurture, the finest of human qualities...
One quality which has always amazed me is the way people, as in, neighbours and friends come together to support you in your time of need, forgetting all the giley shikwe.
The new person in each brother's life and their judging them in their own brotherly fashion was written with just the right touch of boy behavior.
I don't know how the right amount of boy behaviour came out. 😆
Anaya finally coming out to Geet about her fear of revealing her own feelings about Ayush
Finally!
Geet getting resolution of the place Anaya had in Maan's life. I liked the way she asked it. That was so much Mari-ish...😆
Now I want to know what exactly you think of Mari-ish style! 😆
The piece-de-resistance, the declaration, again true Mari style... the relief in him and happiness of having a name to this relationship... friends...❤️
Of course naming the relationship 'friends' is the first step. 😳
You took me on a roller coaster ride and all is well in the world when it ended.
Just like you, I don't like to hang in there on nail-biting experiences. I want them to come and go before the longer wait of the next chapter begins. 😊
I had read it yesterday on the train itself but wanted to org my thougts to put it in a decent comment
I had read your comment last night at about 3.30 a.m but I wanted to read and reread it and think how I should reply hence the delay. 😆
Thanks for updating.. I loved it...🤗
Thank you for being here! 🤗

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Brothers I have. 😆

Ghuma phira ke? Seedhe seedhe karni nahin aati na! 😳

Nope, no experience. At all. You know it already. 😛

Originally posted by: dqno1

Edit karna pada! Sach bata nahi payi kya?

Yeh kiss baat ki baat kar rahi hai?😲

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Jisko batana tha usne padh liya isliye maine extra baat remove kar di. 😛

Arey general hai. Ainveyi. Nothing specific.

chupi rustami...