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Posted: 12 years ago

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Mmi just amazing .. wow ..ur writing always make me think from different ways

It was quite unpredictable one

okk lets start from d start

ur presentation n description of that club (must be a s*x club) was too good

with so perfection u described the atmosphere that we can feel the filth of surrounding

then Maan's entry n his description .. what is he in usual days n what is he today ..

in two or three lines u painted his character so aptly that he become a blood n fleshed contract killer .. alcohol drugs sex addicted one ..👏 for it .. never seen such presentation of Maan ever

well another place where ur description just made the atmosphere .. description of Maan's apartment .. brilliant .. u just put ur readers in the very place letting them witness everything

now coming to MAANEET .. difficult to say anything about their chemistry in this OS .. too complicated .. relation between Murderer n his victim .. can love bloom here .. difficult to answer ..

what was in Geet's mind .. revenge? was she searching something .. or may be she got d only guy who is really sad for her death .. n that drags her there .. there can be a thousand of explanation ..

n I really love such OS what makes me think .. n find out different possibilities .. well done .. keep writing .. love ya

Edited by sayaneegupta - 12 years ago

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Posted: 12 years ago

#32

Originally posted by: sayaneegupta
Mmi just amazing .. wow ..ur writing always make me think from different ways
It was quite unpredictable one
okk lets start from d start
ur presentation n description of that club (must be a s*x club) was too good
with so perfection u described the atmosphere that we can feel the filth of surrounding
then Maan's entry n his description .. what is he in usual days n what is he today ..
in two or three lines u painted his character so aptly that he become a blood n fleshed contract killer .. alcohol drugs sex addicted one ..👏 for it .. never seen such presentation of Maan ever
well another place where ur description just made the atmosphere .. description of Maan's apartment .. brilliant .. u just put ur readers in the very place letting them witness everything
now coming to MAANEET .. difficult to say anything about their chemistry in this OS .. too complicated .. relation between Murderer n his victim .. can love bloom here .. difficult to answer ..
what was in Geet's mind .. revenge? was she searching something .. or may be she got d only guy who is really sad for her death .. n that drags her there .. there can be a thousand of explanation ..
n I really love such OS what makes me think .. n find out different possibilities .. well done .. keep writing .. love ya

wow!!! Di thanks for such a beautiful comment..

n wat was on Geet's mind.. the answer is known by none but Geet🤢

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Originally posted by: pearl.white
😳 This was out of the world..
So Maan killed Geet n then he fell in love with her ghost or was it his dellusion!!!
His guilt ws already killing him n knowing that the girl he killed was Geet was the last nail on his coffin. Did Geet's soul came back to take revenge on her killer i.e. Maan??

Brilliant conceptualisation!! Your work is really unique. Do write more...
Loved Maan's turmoil , his guilt...
Alas, some sins are unforgivable n he had to pay his due...

thanks for such a lovely comment.. glad u liked it..

ya.. Geet tk her revenger or may be Geet felt it he was d only one who is feeling the pain for her death..