If Only You Saw Me (2) - Page 97

Originally posted by: Onir

Wow... Lovely part!!!. Your writing is very refreshing & simplistic in it's approach. When I read I feel as if I'm experiencing & witnessing it in front of me. Kudos to you girl for bringing it out so beautifully & subtely. Never OTT yet soothing & calming in the approach used. One can't just help but feel all happy & like a teenager all over again. Your writing does transport to the time when I too was in college, & in turn helps to connect with the characters here.

Thanks Onir! I'm so glad to know that my not-so-good approach has been making you feel connected to the characters. 😳

Loved the Mother-son bonding. The ease & comfort of their sharing about their day & in general the realtion they share feels so special yet one which affirms your faith in relations & their existance. Maan's reaction & thinking about Anya's - & his mom's bonding & all gossiping was so typical a boy.. also one who is disheartened on being left out and can't express it so. Just like "Men are just grown-up babies nedding pampering", something that I read recently & has stuck to me.

Those lines are true. Men probably need more pampering than a baby! 😆

I guess I have an inkling on who the new talkative friend his mom was referring to. *fingers crossed* 😉. I feel Maan is going to be in for a sweet shock on discovering who it is, if what I'm guessing is true. He just goes into his lala land just by remembering her what will happen if he experiences her altogether new & unexpected quality. I feel she is so as she bonds with his Mom as her being a person so attached & bonded to her family back home. Guesses guesses & guesses that is.

I'm not going to say if your guesses, guesses and guesses are correct or not. Just keep guessing! 😆

The gradual & subtle progression from the initial misjudgements, akwardness was aptly & smoothly flowing. The gradual ease & comfort, plannings, touches, laughter shared, knowing of likes was so Cute & adorable. I love this Maan. Does he even exist?? His irritations & dilemma on Ayush's unexpected & chipkoo entry & interfernce was so justified & needed. The realistic view & emotions makes it a complete & hearty read. Maan hasa lot of competition up his sleeves. 😆

If only such guys existed for real! Sigh.
But yes, Maan will probably have to roll up his sleeves and get ready for any competition heading his way! 😃

Geet here is quite interesting & mysterious. She carries an aura around her that you can't resist from wanting to know more about her. Can't blameAyush nor Maan. 😉. She is so dignified yet grounded, never stepping within the inner circle of their friendship yet not being too stiff & uptight in her approach. She is just introvert& reserved but not that she is not up for friendship or companinship. It's just that she needs time & space of her own, which Maan up till now is quite beautifully doing it.

That is exactly what I've tried to portray about her character.

The chemistry is well progressive... with all the eyelocks, touches, comfort, blushes, leaves with feeling of so much happiness within wanting them to just be together. They is quite a lot of awareness of being in each others company & acknowledgment of emotions. Good progress on both sides if not equal but good one...

Progress happened but the degree and importance of it differs for these two. 😊

Waiting for the party.. to begin... Hayee loved this part so much...😳

I'm glad you like it, Onir. Thank you for this comment, it means a lot! 😊
And yes, your greed to read more is the only thing which has me writing the story further, or I'd have stopped at the first chapter! 😆

Originally posted by: had2bu

Deal or no deal

I will send u a PM of the epilogue for Dr. Khurana (for your eyes only)

You put the scenes Aashu and I requested...

😲

Originally posted by: mayyo13

So you have an epilogue for it? 😃
Arey yaar, wo scenes are really not my cup of tea! They are for my eyes only, not for fingers! 😆

Originally posted by: had2bu

Achi baat hai... no deal...

😕🤢

Originally posted by: TheBrat

Why epilogue only for Mayya mayya? *Pouts*

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Okay. Let me think...

What if unn mein se ek scene daal doon? Tab chaley ga? 😃

Originally posted by: had2bu

Nahi, ek dream sequence, ek real mein!

Originally posted by: mayyo13

Itna bata rahi ho toh ye bhi bata do ke kaunsa dream sequence aur kaunsa real? 😆