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Posted: 13 years ago

#961

I made a few changes. Somethings were too obvious and I had to tame them down purposely.

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Onir

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Posted: 13 years ago

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As usual I loved it...

I feel a deep ache for both... why couldn't things been a bit simpler for them.

So he does know or does have some inkling about the troubled relation she shares with Dev... his pain on seeing her in pain touched me.

The wind did carry something that connected these 2 souls in a very different way...

What lies ahead for them now...

You know what even after reading the earlier version, I'm left wondering what will happen to these two ... as this time round each thought, gesture & feeling is so perciptible between the 2. Also as there's much clarity in each part as in while reading everytime a different feeling creeps in - ranging from smile, sadness, curiosity, tingling, confusion, anxiety... to much more, that I can't get words for it...

Will comment more later...

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: Tyro
he knows it all...but wants her to realize it...

He didn't know if he liked what he heard of the night whispers then and wished the wind hadn't quietened down after all...

I thought that sounded like denial...

Originally posted by: Onir

You know what even after reading the earlier version, I'm left wondering what will happen to these two ...

😊 It wasn't intentional, but there is a lot of movement in the chapters. Something that was much ahead in the last version has been placed quite early and vice versa. Again, I think it will keep those interested in the story on their toes and keep them guessing.

I have made sure all the chapters with their titles are retained to the best of my knowledge, but have also added/modified the necessary parts that is characteristic of M&G of this version. So, hopefully its still a new and an old story for you.

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Posted: 13 years ago

#964

true...

but my ref here goes to the image he has in his mind abt dev...

i guess i write it wrong...it is what Onir said...he has an inkling towards her n dev's relation...

the man that he is...he surely can guess the tough time she is facing ...regarding her husband...

n don't men usually know what other men r thinking...😛..or doing...😆

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Posted: 13 years ago

#965

Originally posted by: 6th.Element

😊 It wasn't intentional, but there is a lot of movement in the chapters. Something that was really much ahead in the last version has been placed quite early and vice versa. Again, I think it will keep those interested in the story on their toes and keep them guessing.

I have made sure all the chapters with their titles are retained to the best of my knowledge, but have also added/modified the necessary parts that is characteristic of M&G of this version. So, hopefully its still a new and a old story for you.

Yup a lot of things are already revealed or partially revealed... & many scenes are brought quite ahead... makes me quite curious...

Mainly their reactions and thoughts, also the situations they are faced with alongwith the increased time period they've been spending with each other... are the ones which are providing much better reception & understanding.

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Originally posted by: Tyro
true...

but my ref here goes to the image he has in his mind abt dev...

i guess i write it wrong...it is what Onir said...he has an inkling towards her n dev's relation...

the man that he is...he surely can guess the tough time she is facing ...regarding her husband...

n don't men usually know what other men r thinking...😛..or doing...😆

Ah! You were referring to his understanding of their marital status. I thought you were talking about what he feels for her.

Got it. My bad!

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Posted: 13 years ago

#967

Originally posted by: Tyro
true...

but my ref here goes to the image he has in his mind abt dev...

i guess i write it wrong...it is what Onir said...he has an inkling towards her n dev's relation...

the man that he is...he surely can guess the tough time she is facing ...regarding her husband...

n don't men usually know what other men r thinking...😛..or doing...😆

Hmmm... agreed men do understand their species the best, as they are less complicated than what a woman's mind works as (or better a woman's heart reasons out)

But only he should not perceive it in a wrong way as in just cause she holds a very special & irreplacable part in his life ... cause as of now both are in quite a lot of dilemma to judge Dev...

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Originally posted by: Onir

Yup a lot of things are already revealed or partially revealed... & many scenes are brought quite ahead... makes me quite curious...

Mainly their reactions and thoughts, also the situations they are faced with alongwith the increased time period they've been spending with each other... are the ones which are providing much better reception & understanding.

Geet only hasn't spoken in so many words of her attraction. But she has felt it from her dream.

For Maan...he is really just chewing in the visuals as and when he gets to them. But really, there isn't much to be said of his unacknowledged attraction.

Fairly speaking, it wouldn't be justified if he is jumping mountains to pull her out of her cocoon when the tragedy hits her, if they don't have the clarity on what they are to each other. That is what brought on the extra scenes so that that their shared camaraderie is clear to them.

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Originally posted by: 6th.Element

Geet only hasn't spoken in so many words of her attraction. But she has felt it from her dream.

For Maan...he is really just chewing in the visuals as and when he gets to them. But really, there isn't much to be said of his unacknowledged attraction.

Fairly speaking, it wouldn't be justified if he is jumping mountains to pull her out of her cocoon when the tragedy hits her, if they don't have the clarity on what they are to each other. That is what brought on the extra scenes so that that their shared camaraderie is clear to them.

Agreed, quite understandable

I think this was the clarity & might be reasoning that was lacking in the earlier version... but honestly to tell you for me the earlier NYT was awesome & never felt any need for changes, yet now after reading this version I guess there was subtle changes & addition of scenes in order to justify the reactions required

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Posted: 13 years ago

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Hello every one...

H... I read last 6 parts together... n love them all... Ur wrting is impressive... drinking tea, going out for shopping in MK s silver hawi jahaz, hot choclate... all theses events n talks r like peeling off layers unveiling actual Geet n Maan... the gift that Geet gave to Maan... this can only be done by Geet... Instead of Tide she should ve given Surf excel with tag line dhag to achay hotay hain... lolzzz.. n she actually gave him sweets... awww... when ll he eat those or has he eaten them... lol

I loved it how MK hugged Dadi n then the scene a park... wooo hooo... she again ruined his shirt... Maan preaching about combating fear ll come in hndy in future ... I guess...

I haven't heard that song... so I m still unable to feel all the emotions but Geet is in pain because of her husbands ignornace n this unnamed pull that she is feeling towards Maan... poor she... what reason this Demon Dev has to ignore his wife like this... he has missed his flight... This fine thread of marriage is about to snap... n selfish me is saying jaldi asay ho so that Geet can go to her Maan... hehehe...

All this this sepeartion of personal n professional life... its just strenthening the pull between Geet n Maan... Reminding me of song Ring my bells by Enrique

Sometimes you love it

Sometimes you don't

Sometimes you need it

Then you don't and you let go

Sometimes we rush it

Sometimes we fall

It doesn't matter baby

We can take it real slow

Cause the way that we touch

Is something that we can't deny

And the way that you move

Oh, you make me feel alive

Now come on

You try to hide it

I know you do

When all you really want

Is me to come and get you

You move in closer

I feel you breathe

It's like the world just disappears

When you're around me

Cause the way that we touch

Is something that we can't deny

And the way that you move

Oh, you make me feel alive

Cause the way that we love

Is something that we can't fight

I just can't get enough

Oh, you make me feel alive

Ring my bell, ring my bells

So the bells r ringing in office in aparttment building making them aware of this physica bio chemistry that s between them lolzzz

The story of earth n moon marriage that Geet narrated is so sweet... n MK s comment... her Dadi haven't studied science... is hawlarious...

I m liking the pace of story... me is hooked to it... yarr I can't write serious cahracter or story analysis uskai liay ap ho n others... so don't mind my useless blabbering...

I m eager to read more n more... so puleeesee update quickly...

I still click like on all the upadtes... but I liked them all n ll click like when I ll get laptop back from clutches of my brother...

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