OS : At First Sight...(last part @ pg 29) 15 July - Page 5

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Posted: 13 years ago
#41
Such a beautiful part. Loved the way you wrote Maaneet's respective feelings.
But why ended so fast. All of sudden point.. That's sad
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Posted: 13 years ago
#42
hey dear ur os is very interesting plz add me to ur pm list😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
#43


love at first sight...

Maan is totally in love with Geet...

is this OS has more parts or that is all...

thanx for pm...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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loved it very very much... continue soon...
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Posted: 13 years ago
#45
Hi dear..wen r u updating! waiting n do pm me! thanks
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Posted: 13 years ago
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sorry for the delay...😳

will prob post the next part by sunday or monday...😳
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Posted: 13 years ago
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This part is dedicated to Waheeda (luv_gurti), who encouraged me to write another part as i was not willing to...

This OS was supposed to be of one part as in one shot only ...😆..but seems like i have to write more...

Another person who reminded me to update this is mayapari...thnx dear...





Part 2:




At KM:





Yash was sitting on the couch dazed. He just could not understand his big bro.





It had been hours since they had returned from the mall, it was time to go to bed, but he just wasn't able to. He just sat on the couch deep in his thoughts.





Just then his dadi came out looking for water. She noticed Yash sitting there, totally oblivious to his surroundings.





She came near him and touched his shoulder, which made Yash jerk out of his reverie and jump.





"Aahhh... Dadimaa, you scared me." Yash said while taking a breath.





"Grow up Yash," Savitri Devi said while rolling her eyes, "and tell me what are you doing here at this time instead of sleeping?"





Yash made a pout when dadi said to grow up, but knew that only dadi could solve his problem now. So he asked her, "Dadimaa, I think Maan bhai par bhoot sawar ho gaya hai, wo naa, pagal ho gaye hain." he finished with an innocent face.





"WHAT?" Savitri Devi shouted, "Yash Singh Khurana, pagal aap ho gaye hain. What nonsense are you talking."





"Nahi Dadimaa, I am serious. I have never seen bro like this. Something is wrong." Yash replied thinking about what had happened in the mall.





Savitri Devi took a deep breath in order to calm herself and not shout at him again. She sat beside him and asked him in a calm manner, "Yash Beta, aap ye kya bol rahe hain, hame kuch samajh nahi aa raha. Try to explain it to me that how your bro has gone mad."





Yash then began to speak, "Dadimaa when you will listen to what I have to say then you will also believe that bhai oar kisi bhoot ka saaya aa gaya hai."





Savitri Devi shook her head exasperatedly at her grandson and said, "Beta when you will tell me only then I will be able to understand. Now stop all this and tell me what happened."





Yash started to explain, "Now Daadima Listen to me carefully and do not, I repeat do not disturb me in between."





Savitri Devi tried to say something, "Par..."





Yash immediately cut her and whined, "Daadimaa I said naa, please do not interrupt." Savitri Devi put a finger on her lips in order to indicate that she will not speak a word now, though she was trying hard not to laugh or scold her amusing grandson.





Yash then continued, "So, where was I, yes, Maan bro has gone mad. You know today he came to mall because I called, you know to make me look good and buy me lots of clothes. We went to DLF Emporio. The designers had all the new collections on the stores, then we went to the ..."





He looked at his dadi and she was looking at him sternly trying to say this is what you want to say. He gulped his saliva and again continued, "So I was saying, I mean Maan bro, I mean. Oh forget it. Maan bhai was lost when we got back and he all the time smiling. I thought something was wrong so I went with him to the office. In office he was continuously looking outside his cabin window and smiling. He even agreed to go to Dev Bhai's engagement, even though he refused when you emotionally blackmailed him and to top it all he bought new wardrobe I mean one pair of 'special' clothes for himself and when I was scrutinizing him, he went ahead and bought new ones for the three of us saying Dev ki engagement ke liye."





He finished it all in one breath and Savitri Devi was left with her mouth open, shocked at what her grandson has just told her. Before she could ask him anything, he said, "And one more thing happened, that girl, Maan bro was holding, and after that I lost him in the crowd." and he sat back happily on the couch after telling his daadimaa why he thought his bro has gone crazy.





Savitri Devi was first worried listening to all that Yash was saying but then she just smiled when he told her about a girl.





Yash looked at his grandmother and he got more confused. He thought here he is worried about his big bro and his dadimaa is smiling. What is wrong with everyone.





Yash then asked, "Dadimaa why are you smiling? Here I am going mad thinking about bro and you just listened to it all and smiling? I don't get it." He finished with a confused face.





Savitri Devi just smiled at his grandson, guess she understood what had happened to Maan but her other grandson seems to be unaware of it. She came close to Yash, ruffled his hair and said, "Don't worry, everything will be fine. You go and have a sleep." She finished with a smile and turned to go towards kitchen to get water.





Yash now got angry, first he is not able to understand what happened to his bro and now dadimaa is also not saying anything. This is not done. "Dadimaa you have to tell me what is going on? I am going mad thinking about this."





Savitri Devi knows that both her grandsons are stubborn and Yash is not going to let go. She smiled and said, "Yash whatever you told me, the answer to your question lies in those words only. Just think harder and you will know what is going on."





Before he could continue further, Savitri Devi said, "Just know that soon there will be lots of changes happening around here, and trust me it only good times lie ahead."





Yash wanted to say something, but soon they heard guitar strings being played. Both were confused, who was playing guitar at this time and that too in their house. Both moved towards the source of the music. It seemed that it was coming from the back of the house near the pool area.





When they reached there, the sight that was before them shocked them. There was Maan Singh Khurana, sitting near the pool, with Guitar in his hand, playing music. No light was there, only moonlight and some lamps were lighted in that area.





"Dadimaa, am I seeing it right. Maan bro is playing guitar." Yash asked with shocked expression. "Dadimaa can I please borrow your glasses, it seems like something is wrong with my eyes."





Savitri Devi wacked her grandson to speak like this. But even she was surprised seeing Maan like this. His grandson had stopped playing guitar and was away from music ever since their parents passed away, but it seems like what she thought was not the truth.





If they thought that playing guitar was shocking, the next moment left them speechless.






He had started singing.








Khamosh Raat
Sehmi Hawaa
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehra
Ek Chehra, Ek Chehra
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna






All he could think of was her. All he could see was her. Whever he closed his eyes, her face came in front. Whenever he opened his eyes, he saw her.






Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna





"Dadimaa, please tell me ye sach hai ya sapna? I mean he is singing. I thought he would never even touch his guitar after that but now," Yash said as tears brimmed in his eyes to see his big bro playing music and singing. He had missed this.







Khamosh Raat
Sehmi Hawaa
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehraa
Ek Chehraa, Ek Chehraa



Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna






"Yash, everything takes time. Now it seems time has come for Maan to get happiness back in his life." Savitri Devi said looking at his grandson who was not even aware that someone is watching him.






Jhuki Jhuki Palkein Jab Uthi
Nainon Mein Diye Madham Madham
Adh Khule Hothon Se Hansee
Jhaank Rahi Madham Madham






Maan remembered how they collided. When he saw her, her eyes were closed, and mouth tight lipped as if waiting for the fall. Then she opened her eyes slowly, and he got the glimpse of her beautiful hazel eyes. Her lips opened to say something but there were no words coming out.






Kaise Kahan Phir Ho Gayee
Uski Charee Madham Madham
Pal Pal Uthti Hasratein
Hone Lagi Madham Madham






How he wished to hold her in his arms. His heart was wishing something after a long time. He just wanted to look at her all the time. He closed his eyes to see her.







Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehraa
Ek Chehraa, Ek Chehraa






He saw her, opened his eyes to see that beautiful face in the water, smiling, hiding behind her friend.






Sooraj Tha Pe Noor Sa
Uski Tanak Madham Madham





He was in his office, looking outside his window, the sun was shining, and all he could think was HER.






Chaand Bhi Sa Bujha Bujha
Taare Bhi The Madham Madham


Jugnu Dilasa Dene Lagey
Nanhi Si Jaan Madham Madham
Shamaa Bhi Thak Haar Ke
Hone Lagee Madham Madham







When he came home, he couldn't sleep. He looked at the moon, and saw her only. He saw the fireflies in the garden, like they were telling him, to wait, for just one day. Their illumination indicating that his light is not that fae away. He just couldn't wait.






Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehraa
Ek Chehraa, Ek Chehraa...







Yash and his grandmother were just looking at him, being himself after such a long time. It seemed as they have gotten the old Maan who was lost in this world.







Jeene Ka Tha Hum Mein Dam
Par Nahin Tha Koi Humdam
Khushiyoon Ki Thi Justajoo
Mil Rahe Thay Bas Gham Hi Gham







He came outside. He took his guitar that was long stored in his cupboard, never thought he would do that, but he just wanted to pour out all his feelings. He needed someone, and what better than his companion, guitar.








Shuru Mein Is Duniya Ke Bhi
Khamoshi Thi Aur Ek Thay Hum
Rahein Sabhi Thi Sooni Sooni
Uth Rahe Thay Kadam Tham Tham


Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehraa
Ek Chehraa, Ek Chehraa
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna






He couldn't wait for the next day. To see her again. To make sure she was real and not a dream.






Khamosh Raat
Sehmi Hawaa
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Tanha Tanha Dil Apna
Aur Door Kahin, Roshan Hua Ek Chehraa
Ek Chehraa, Ek Chehraa
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna
Ye Sach Hai Ya Sapna





He finished the song. He just put his guitar on his chest and rested on the pool chair closing his eyes.





Yash and dadimaa looked at the serene smile that covered his face, smiling they also left to their rooms.





Saitri Devi (self thought) Maan it seems like God has finally listened to me and send an Angel for you, and I just can't wait to meet her.





Yash (self thought) I don't know what is going on, but I just want to see that smile on my bros' face every time. Please God make it possible.





Maan (self thought) I can't wait to see you again. You have made me mad AT FIRST SIGHT. Wonder what will I do when I meet you again. But all I know is that I have to. Maybe Maan Singh Khurana has done what should never have happened...Falling in LOVE st First Sight.



And I should thank Dev for making me see his would be's picture, otherwise I would have never recognized the your friend and there would have been no possibility of meeting you this soon. Waiting to meet you my sweetheart, my MISHTI.











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If u liked it, please press the like button and leave me comments...

I know it is not that good, but this is all I could think of writing ...

If you want me to write the next part, let me know...

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Jyoti
Edited by jyoti_l - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
#48
hey awsm part..kitne dinpm se wt kar raaahithi main
pls ab jaldi se updt kardo.
pls...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awsm ...pls complete it na me wtng...
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Posted: 13 years ago
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awesome di...
finally...
wow maan n guitar...
loved it...
abbb yeh bhi koi puchne waali baat hain kya??????????
ofcurse yu ll ve to write more parts...
ll be waiting
plllzzz update soon😃
Edited by mayapari - 13 years ago

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