AR FF: Defeated In Love pt17 pg1 10/09

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#521

Originally posted by: aravi
ooohhh!!!!!!!!!!!!! 2 parts in a day!way to go gurl!!!!!!!!!!!!! but me totally luved d party but y armaan so rude may b just teasing ridzy!!!!!!!!!! n wow ridzy was purple wid envy i could see!!!!!!!!! me luving d track completely n armaan was crying!!!!!!!!! he was abit weird dis tym!!!!!!!! neways thnks a ton 4 D PM hun!!!!!!!!!!!!! luv
aravi

Okay i know i m really stupid to be moving the story on so fastly but i guess i'll be able to clear out all the confusion in the next part.............

m glad u liked the last bit because the next part is going to be totally based on that ad it will reveal his past as well.

Thanks a lot

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#522

Originally posted by: .:.MONA.:.
hey nice update........poor armaan missing his mom on her birthday..........well continue soon.........i enjoyed reading it............thakc 4 the pm.........
❤️MONA

Thanks Mona😊

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#523

Originally posted by: angullgrl91
i love how things are moving along in the story. i think the end where armaan is all depressed is really sudden nd unexpected..but it was still a gr8 part!

Thanks a lot and you'll understand the whole thing better when u read the next part

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#524

Originally posted by: missypatel
tht was a quick update!! ..

it was much interestin..bt m a lil lost..terz too mny thinz happenin..hopefully ull wrap tem up together in yur nxt part..

although i liked d last bit d best..he walked out holdin d beer..n ovb i liked d part wer he felt d shudder 2 durin AR scene!!

Thanks a lot

Sorry about the confusion that i created but i did all that to lay the foundation of the parts ahead.

Glad u liked the last bit and alos the lil romantic scene between them

Thanks and keep reading

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Jodubai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#525

Hi Taira,

Thanks for the pm

2 parts - a/b thanks for that, too, my lucky day!!

This part was good, Arman is definetely plotting something against Priya, but can't put a finger to it,. think he also wants to put Ridima down, so he invited Claire to the party as well

I hope this Amar guy is in love with Priya, but cos Priya is so influneced by Arman's charms, that can't see Amar & his love, that leaves Arman for Riddima, Perfect!

The dance bit was very cheeky, she is attracted to him, but wouldn't admit cos of her model status & being friends with Priya...& for Arman, I think its plain ego...

The last scene was touching, him thinking about his mom, but don't know, why for some reason, that beer bottle is going to play a major role, cos if he is thinking about his mom, why with a drink??

do continue soon & take care

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#526

Originally posted by: spln
hey hun....oki duno abt ayone else...it was my personal fav in ur fic, n in my opinion also ur best attempt so far at the most natural n coherently emotional part.....like not a line out there was redundant it was perfect....n i cant help but add that um delighjted u did what i was so hoping for....made armaan ignore her....she really needed it....even the best ppl on earth need lessons she had to get hers!!!great job....loved it!!!

ps:of course the addition of that lil twist in the rear end...him sentimentral abt his mum only adds to the spark....!!!!

Okay now i really have to thank you for leaving that comment otherwise this part would have taken ages but when i read your comment and the suggestion in it....the story just flowedand i started typing.

so thanks sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much for that.

am seriously happy that u liked the part and i think you are right though i liked the way i created Ridzie's character but today when i read the previous partseven i felt that she is actually quite an arogant person here but i'll mellow down a little in future.

okay thanks again for the invaluable suggestion which made that part possible.............thanks soooooooooo very much

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#527

Originally posted by: twinkle94

hey thnx 4 tha PM n tha update! AWwwwwwww! soooooo sweet Armaan rely cares 4 his mom i fel bad 4 him i wonder wat happened do cont soon!

❤️twinkle!

Thanks so much Twinkle

and ya as i have mentioned before he does love her mother the most.

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#528

Originally posted by: Jodubai
Hi Taira,

Thanks for the pm

2 parts - a/b thanks for that, too, my lucky day!!

This part was good, Arman is definetely plotting something against Priya, but can't put a finger to it,. think he also wants to put Ridima down, so he invited Claire to the party as well

I hope this Amar guy is in love with Priya, but cos Priya is so influneced by Arman's charms, that can't see Amar & his love, that leaves Arman for Riddima, Perfect!

The dance bit was very cheeky, she is attracted to him, but wouldn't admit cos of her model status & being friends with Priya...& for Arman, I think its plain ego...

The last scene was touching, him thinking about his mom, but don't know, why for some reason, that beer bottle is going to play a major role, cos if he is thinking about his mom, why with a drink??

do continue soon & take care

Thanks a lot for leaving this exceptionally motivating comment....your comments always give me an insight into my own writing.

Lets see what his plan is because to be honest i have not planned the story at all and this part was made possible by Spln's help whose suggestion helped me make this part

She just started to feel attracted when she noticed how much she missed the Armaan she had met when she had arrived in India and Armaan has admitted it but is still trying to understand if its plain infatuation or actually love

and lets see what that beer did.........somehow i feel that depression and beer always go hand in hand......lol.

Thanks a lot

Keep reading

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Posted: 17 years ago

#529

Originally posted by: Taira

Okay now i really have to thank you for leaving that comment otherwise this part would have taken ages but when i read your comment and the suggestion in it....the story just flowedand i started typing.

so thanks sooooooooooooooooooooooooooo much for that.

am seriously happy that u liked the part and i think you are right though i liked the way i created Ridzie's character but today when i read the previous partseven i felt that she is actually quite an arogant person here but i'll mellow down a little in future.

okay thanks again for the invaluable suggestion which made that part possible.............thanks soooooooooo very much

oki seriously now ur elevating my mere wish into a suggestion.....i did want u to take the story as per u plan....but having it go the way i was hoping for is super special so i shud say thanx...ur doing a fab job hun...n please build ur characters exactly how to plan to do them....arrogant or not, apoilt or not....ur char sketch is captivating, stick to watever ur plan was when u started, we all happy with ur treat to us!!!

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Taira Rai

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Posted: 17 years ago

#530

Originally posted by: spln

oki seriously now ur elevating my mere wish into a suggestion.....i did want u to take the story as per u plan....but having it go the way i was hoping for is super special so i shud say thanx...ur doing a fab job hun...n please build ur characters exactly how to plan to do them....arrogant or not, apoilt or not....ur char sketch is captivating, stick to watever ur plan was when u started, we all happy with ur treat to us!!!

Okay okay i got it...........

what i am trying to say is that when i read your comment the part formed in my mind itself and then once i started typing i was done within 20minutes while it takes me a long time to write the parts but wen i came online last nite i was really sleepy but still i was able to complete it coz of that 1 comment of yours.

And yes the characters will remain like that but the comments that you guys leave really help and i'll be more then happy to mould the story in a way that u guys enjoy reading it as much as i enjoy writing it

Edited by Taira - 17 years ago