A night in Lonavala (FF)updated 3pt pg 8

Guys my very first try at FF, And the credit goes to priyanka who asked me to write it.I dont think i am that good with it the way some guys are here but the way Priyanka said it i decided to give it a try.
Just a make believe scene in Lonavala
which is definitely not going to happen
but still ...

After reaching Lonavala it was decided by Dr. Keerti that
shubha (Atul) will share the room with Anjie, Stella (Rahul) with Muskaan and she is left with no choice for Gurmeet ( Armaan) so she asked Ridz to share her room with him.
And after taking Armi to her room Ridz tell him to take rest for a while.
And she brings tea for him,which they share together over general talk
about Lonavala.
As the evening progresses, Kirti tells them all to come out in the garden
so that they can sit together and get to know each other well. Ridz decides to change,she opens her bag and takes out some suits and then takes out a saree.she looks at the saree lovingly.Armi watches her all this while, He askes her what is she wearing
R...tum batao
A..mujhe lagta hai tum sare mein bahut sunder lagogi
isliye tum saree pehno
R..laughs but there is sadness in it.
R.. theek hai
she goes to the bathroom to change and meanwhile Armaan leaves the room as he doesnt want any awkward position to come up between the two.
After the dinner finished they all went to their respective rooms.
But Ridz was nowhere to be seen, Armaan got worried but he knew the place where he could find her.
he went to the corner of the garden and saw Ridz sitting there on the bench shivering a little. Armaan put the shawl he had over her shoulders ,she got starteled and turn back to see Gurmeet behind her. She gave her a sad smile and tells her to sit besides her
Armaan sits next to her and saw something in her hand
It was the teddy bear he gave her
his heart skipped a beat.
does she still cares for him
A..bahut sunder teddy hai , kis ne diya
R..hai koi
A..us ka naam nahi bataoogi
R..batane layak ab kuch hai hi nahi 😭
A..Kyu kya woh tumhara ab kuch nahi hai 😭
R..(tear dropped from her eyes) nahi woh mera sab kuch hai ,tha or rahega.😭😭
A..to phir yeh ansoo😭😭😭
Ridz keeps quiet
A.. kuch bateein keh dene se maan halks ho jaata hai,tum mujhe apna ek acha dost samajh ke dil ki baat kar sakti ho
RIdz hugs the teddy close to her heart
R..woh mujhe bahut pyaar karta hai aur main bhi usse bahut pyaar karti hu
A.. to phir problem kya hai
R..hum dono ek doose ke liye nahi bane hia
A.. yeh tum kaise kah sakti ho
R.. Kyunki woh apni zindagi jeena jaanta hai aur main usse har kadam bandhan main daal deti hoon
A..kya usse bhi alsa lagta hai
R..pata nahi , lekin jab woh mere saath hota hai to mujhe lagta hai ki woh khush nahi hai
woh apna sab kuch mere liya badalne ki koshish kar raha tha...jo mujhe bilkul bhi accha nahi lagta tha
Mujhe lagta tha ki main us ki liye theek nahi hoon...kyunki main us ke jaise nahi hoon. Agar main uski zindagi main na aati to woh ek se badkar ek ladki chun sakta tha, lekin meri wajah se usse woh sab kuch nahi mil raha tha jis ke woh layak tha.
A..to kya tum ne usse chod diya
R..us ke khushi ke liye mujhe laga ki mujhe us se door jana hoga
A..to tum ne phir door jane ke liye kya kiya
R..woh sab kuch jis se admi toot jata hai ( and she starts crying),maine usse bahut dukh aur choot phuchai hai aur main jante hoon woh mujhe is ke liye kabhi maaf nahi karega..lekin us ke khushi ke liye yeh sab zaroori tha.
Armaan is jolted to his inner core he realised what Ridhima was doing to hurt not only him but herself also.He died a thousand deaths for thinking the wrong way for Riddhima.
He realised she has suddenly occupied his whole existence,and he is so touched by what she just said that his eyes brimmed with tears
A ..to kya usse ab woh saari khushiya mil gaye
R..pata nahi
A..aur tumhe?

Ridz starts crying loudly and Armaan holds her in his arms
he hugs her tightly and gently pulls back her hair
Ridz got startled for a second, she looks up to him and saw tears in his eyes also
she realises Gurmeets gentle touch is not stranger
She can feel the love and promises in the hug
and many assurances of being with her
All the barriers disappeared at that instance
she was where she belonged
she was about to say something but Armaan puts a finger on her lips
tears flowed from the eyes and with that flowed all the past hurt and aches


I dont believe i am doing all this 😳😳

Part 1 page 1
Part 2 page 3
part 3 page 8

omg..itz awesome..!!!!!! itz really good..!!!!
plzzzzzz continue..!!!!!
n do PM me if possible..! 😊

Continue, or I will kill u. jst kidding.. brilliant sweety 👏

Originally posted by: *sameera*

omg..itz awesome..!!!!!! itz really good..!!!!
plzzzzzz continue..!!!!!
n do PM me if possible..! 😊

Originally posted by: Sweet Mermaid

Continue, or I will kill u. jst kidding.. brilliant sweety 👏

LOL
If thats the case then i have to dedicate the second part to you
It will be like the credit goes to Sameera and mermaid for making me write the second part...😳😳😳

Hey ZZ!

I've finally found the time to comment! I'm really sorry for the delay!

Omg that scene was so incredibly written! It was so touching and it really tugged at the heartstrings. You portrayed both their emotions so well! I love how Armaan realized that what he thought about Riddhima was wrong and how he "He died a thousand deaths for thinking the wrong way for [about?] Riddhima."😳😛😉

I know it was only a make-believe scene but I wish you were a creative for real! I highly doubt this will happen in real DMG seeing the way things are going at the moment…but I agree with the ideas portrayed in your scene… the way it shows Riddhima indirectly explaining to Armaan why she did what she did…making them both realize their mistakes and making them both realize how much the other actually means to them!😊

I know this is going to spoil the comment…but after reading it, I couldn't help but wonder whether when Armaan was talking to Riddhima and trying to comfort and console her…was he doing it his a fake-sounding girly high-pitched tone or a lower voice…?😆

Are you going to make this into a story now? Please please please do! I really want to see how things go from here in your ff! I wonder how Riddhima will react when she finds out that Gurmeet is actually Armaan (that is, if she does find out). I wonder where this will take their relationship…😛

I can't wait to read more from you! I'm glad you listened to me and actually started an FF!😃

Take care,

Lots of love

Priyanka

Originally posted by: *believeinlove*

*reserved*

Now this is bad Priyanka
LOL
my heart is racing to see the comments of my mentor 😕😕

dam cute ya... continue if u can..!!! 😃 😃 😃

hey it was awesome...do cont soon...if possible could u plz pm me wen u update...

tc,
asmita

Originally posted by: zzoombie

Now this is bad Priyanka
LOL
my heart is racing to see the comments of my mentor 😕😕

lol i know ZZ...i'm an awful mentor! sorry! LOL😆

and don't worry my feedback will be completely honest!😛

i will comment soon! as promised!😊

aww soo cute.. very well written, continue 😉