Originally posted by: deeya123
nice part
lukin fwd for ak meet
Thanks Deeya! AK meet coming up in next chapter.
Originally posted by: sameira-90
hey great part.. continue soon 👏 👏 👏
Thank you Sameira! Will continue in a few days.
Originally posted by: Dark Love
Rabia!
If you haven't already glanced at the username...guess who it is? XD 😆😆😆 Guess who's finally almost done with the most third most stressful week of the year? (Cuz finals and midterm are one and two😆)
The first thing I did when I got home was read this :P and I don't wanna be killed for not commenting, so here I go! ;]
Chapter 1
Woah woah woah! So did Saakshi just deliver Namrata's baby in the middle of a forest! :o
How cool is that! This tells me there's gonna be a bunch of action in this one! Awww baby Mukti's description is soo cutee!
Saakshi's a sweet maid, usually, many of em aren't as considerate as to give the wife privacy while she talks to her husband 😆
What's SPC? And where's Shekhar? And seems like their lives are in danger, so is that why they're separate? Shehkar wants his wife and child to be safe, so he hid em.
So since Namrata dropped the phone, did Shehkar hear her words? 😉
I wonder where Saakshi will end up taking Mukti! And what will happen to Namrata!
Ahh this is bothering me! Continue soon soon soon! The chapter was just as I expected it to be - Rabia style - detailed, well -written, and imaginable! =D
Chapter 2
This one was perfect in the descriptive category, and the imagery was just beautiful! Like I've told you before, I've never watched KZK, so I'm not familiar with this couple much, but since I've seen pictures, I could imagine them in my head, and what I loved the most about the character descriptions was the fact that I could picture it all, like Mukti's wavy hair and Prem's GAP shirt and shorts; usually it's hard to picture people in a totally different way, like a very conservative girl wearing a mini skirt and such, unless it appears on TV or something, so your descriptions of them in average clothes added to the perfection!
I love the subtle foreshadowing with the whole Angad Khanna appearing on TV for his engagement and such, and Mukti thinking of it as worthless news. It sounds like she's either 1) familiar with who he is or 2) not familiar, and she could really care less. That was a great way of introducing the news about him getting engaged to! Those eager to know about Angad already know one more thing about him through the Prem-Mukti chapter! =D
News about the Prime Minister, blah blah blah. And she wants to be a network engineer. I love her attitude, but she's quite the nerdish 🤓 one😆
LMAO! Prem the flirt amuses me. He stares at her, and then when she turns he stares at the other girl. What an annoying guy 😆 Mukti has full reason to be peeved by that one :P
Ah, he's one of those, 'I'm not letting you go so easily babe' types 😆
Haha! Poor Mukti's sprinting on that treadmill, burning more and more calories, pushing herself really really hard, yet the guy doesn't get the hint and continues chatting. Uff.
Model or Actress. Another flirting attempt! Tsk tsk tsk boy.
OMG! I am srsly LMAO at this one:
After taking a glance at it, he stopped his treadmill. "Sorry, mujhe jaana hoga."Shaukh se chale jaaiye, Mukti said in her mind.
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And he still doesn't give up, love the parting line. Today you got a few words, next time you'll get the smile. The package doesn't come all at once. 😆
Aha! So he was checking her out! He couldn't have seen her eyes until she turned around cuz he was next to her, so lame excuse Premmyy boy 😆
Prem will save her life?! O.o! Okay, I don't like suspense (when reading, while writing, it's so much fun!) so you better continue soon!
I absolutely loved the chapter! After a tiring day, it's really refreshing to come home and read something so well-written with some sarcasm in the dialogues and some amazingly amusing scenes!
Your utilization of exuberant language really was the cherry on the top for this delicious strawberry ice cream :P (I sound like such a fat kid!)
Keep it up! 👏👏👏
Damn girl! You really took my threats seriously didn't you? Well, I don't mean to take you away from your school work, but I do love your comments!
Sakshi did deliver the Namrata's baby in the forest....the reasons as to why they were there and Shekhar wasn't with them basically form the crux of the mystery. So don't expect to know the truth anytime soon. 😉 Awww...I'm glad you though it was a detailed and imaginable chapter. I did my best to make sure I was painting a picture with my words.
You know, I've never watched KZK either! lol. I've just watched a few short scenes of Prem and Mukti together and I think they make an adorable couple. Of course, the characterization in my story is probably completely different from the show. I think you've grasped the essence of who Prem and Mukti are pretty well. Mukti is indeed somewhat nerdy, but she's also very confident and slightly arrogant. Prem is flirtatious, fun and carefree. About the Angad foreshadowing...I was afraid to disappoint AK fans for a second chapter in a row, so I decided to give Angad a brief mention. The way I thought it out, Mukti may have heard of Angad, but she doesn't really care about what's going on in his over-advertised life. She's only interested in serious issues that matter.
Thanks for the long review! Love ya!!! 🤗
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