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Posted: 16 years ago
#41

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!Mindblowing!!!!!

Naina's beauty was desribed very well!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Accha toh Raj ne mare ka naam Naina rakh diya!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›How cute!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Waha Naina Raj ko dhundh rahi hai aur yaha Raj gode bech ke soh raha hai aur Naina ke sapne dekh raha hai!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

In his dream he was admiring her beauty!!!!!!😍 😍 😍 😍Haaaiii!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

This reminded me of the bandage scene in the serial!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

He touched her cheek and it was gentle but powerful enough to burn her!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

But then he gently brushed the mud off her cheek and unwillingly withdrew his hand!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj ne kaha ke usne bandage theek se nahi bandha toh gussa ho gayi!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›How cute!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

It was soo romantic and passionate!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

The dream sequence by Ashi was very beautiful and romantic!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘
But that beautiful dream turned into a nightmare and Bhargav and Lolita pulled Naina way from him!!!!

Lolita bhi uske sapne villain ban gayi!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

And Shakti Chandra is stopping him from going after Naina!!!!!πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’Poor Raj!!!!!πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜”

"To surrender or Not to surrender" was very nicely written!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

The way his need to be with her was described was fabulous!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

The place was very well described!!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Raj was shocked to see Naina at his home!!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Ab itna shock honewaali kya baat hai Naina tumhare ghar pe nahi hogi toh kaha hogi!!!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Edited by Shaina_b - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#42
Another Great Update Di!! ..

And that dream sequence Wrote By Ashi ... Amazing!! .. There wasn't much going on, but yet sitting here i'm blushing ..

but one complain Di don't you think the Whole update is like a Size of a Promo lolz ...

But nevertheless, it was great ... The turmoil Rajveer's going through ...

"To Surrender or Not to Surrender" Was nicely Written .. Loved it.

The way you Wrote his Need to be with her, Fabulous ...

what more can i say Di !! ..

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Posted: 16 years ago
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That was fabulous Di...
His need for Naina has never been expressed in such a strightforward way anywhere else...(i think) and yet it was so effective...!!!
The lines "To surrender or not to surrender before Naina" was amazing....!!!
But pls try to write longer parts...!!!
And update soon...!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#44
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Naina liked the outer view of Rajuchacha's cottage. The structure itself wasn't really impressive but the garden surrounding it was. It had several different flowery herbs, shrubs and trees. Few of them were in full bloom like the yellow mountain orchid or the jasmine shrub and others were all green. Especially attractive was the climbing "Nayantara" plant that rose to the cottage rooftop. It had pine-like soft leaves specked with tiny red blooms.

"Wow" was all she could say.

"Chal chal," shouting and screaming, children ran through the door inside the cottage.

" Arrw rokko rokko , tumhe Chacha bahut datega ?"

" Kabhie nahin, Chacha bahut achcha hai , wo bachchelog ko nahin dante."

"Accha bolo , wo bahut Buddha hai kya ?"

"Nahin, wo bahut chikna aur jawan hai bilkul aap jaisi"

"Accha , to main andar aa sakti?" Naina was still standing on the threshold.

"Aiye na , Rajuchacha kuchh nahin bolega."

Rajveer was taken aback at seeing Naina near his cottage. Regretting that he had not taken his ubiquitous scarf cum shawl to cover up his head and face, he swiftly hid behind a wall of bricks and peeped out to see Naina getting into the cottage. How he had frequently dreamt of carrying Naina in his arms over that threshold!

Inside the sole room of the cottage it was not plush but neat. The cottage itself consisted of a room, a veranda in front and a small kitchen at the side with the wash room at the back, few feet away from the main structure. The bed was not really made but hastily covered by a printed sheet. A table and chair stood at one end and an almirah at the other. Few clothes hung on a string tied up between the window and a hook on the wall. A pair of jeans hanging on the sting seemed faintly familiar to Naina. A group of cane stools (morrah in Bengali) arranged according to their height stood beside the wall on the right side of the bed away from the window. There was a mirror on the wall over the morrahs and a map of Northern West Bengal and Assam including Bhutan and northern Bangladesh hung over the table. Just beside it, a wooden shelf was hooked to the wall, the types of shelves where Hindu idols are placed. This one contained no idol but only fresh flowers devoted to an imaginary Goddess. The small and soiled white piece of cloth beneath the heap of flowers was hardly visible to Naina. It was a spontaneous action from Naina to straighten out the bedcover as children messed it up. She fiddled through few books on the table and was quite surprised to find a book on military tactics there. A hardbound diary was there too, but her clear conscience did not let her open the dairy of a strange man, otherwise she would have been shocked to find her name inscribed beautifully on the first page

"Oh Naina, Naina , come out ? what are you doing at my home?" Rajveer was even more agitated as the backyard was not visible to him and would not know if she lingered over there. He definitely did not want to meet her right now. First he should find out more about her present status. He was nervous that Naina might open his dairy which he carelessly left on the table, or even worse, identify that small piece of cloth underneath the flowers. How in this world was he supposed to know that Naina would visit him today?!

After a quarter of an hour passed which seemed ages to Rajveer, just as he decided to come out of his hiding, Naina with the hoard of shouting children around her came out of the cottage and walked downhill.

"That was a very narrow escape.." gasped Rajveer with a sigh of relief.

He went into his very own room breathing in the whiff of Naina's very recent physical presence. He looked around the room and suddenly it seemed to be lot more attractive and cozier. He smiled and minutely observed himself in the mirror.

"Yes, I need a clean shave, a hair cut and clean clothes. ..Oh no !"
He recalled that he would have to wait for three more days as after three days he had a mission to complete. This time he got the information that a truckload of arms was on its way from Chittagong in Bangladesh to a rebellious group of Sikkim activists.

That evening he decided to get more detailed information about Lt. Naina Ah. Singh. He was especially interested in her personal life. He did not want to become unwanted in her life and make her miserable. He quickly took bath and changed into cleaner clothes.

It was already dark outside ' a perfect time to visit the countryside bar where all the military informers, smugglers and other suspicious members of society were present during the late hours. So many different kinds of deals of local, national ,as well as international importance were discussed over and completed at this tavern of evils. This very place was Rajveer's prime source of information about the cross-border movement of illegal goods like drugs, arms and explosives.

Edited by sunaina02 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#45

Originally posted by: Dhara_s

That was fabulous Di...
His need for Naina has never been expressed in such a strightforward way anywhere else...(i think) and yet it was so effective...!!!
The lines "To surrender or not to surrender before Naina" was amazing....!!!
But pls try to write longer parts...!!!
And update soon...!!!

Thanks and Sorry dears - It is very difficult for me to write longer parts, mainataining my busy schedule.
Edited by sunaina02 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#46

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!

Naina loved the outer view of Raj's cottage and its garden!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Haan haan uska ghar usse pasand toh aayega hi naa!!!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊

When Naina asked bacche bol rahe hai woh bahut chikna aur jawan hai bilkul uske jaisa!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

Raj is watching Naina getting into his cottage and thinking how frequenty he had dreamt of carrying Naina in his arms over that threshold!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

The description of Raj's cottage was beautiful!!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

So the jeans is seeming familiar to Naina!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj had kept flowers on that rumaal jo Naina ki akhri nishani hai uske paas!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳Wow!!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Naina toh abhi se ghar theek karne lagi!!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊

Too bad Naina ne woh diary nahi padhi!!!!!πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜”Warna usne usmein apna naam dekh liya hota!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

She should have learn to snoop after all she is in the army warna how will she find things out!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj bol raha what is Naina doing at his home??πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›

Arre maine kaha naa Naina tumare ghar pe nahi hogi toh akhir kaha hogi??πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊Thats her rightful place!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

He is nervous that Naina will open his diary or identify the small piece of cloth underneath the flowers!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

He did not want to meet her right now and wants find out about her present status first!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj went into his room and is breathing in the whiff of Naina's very recent physical presence!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›Haaaiiii!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

His room seemed to him a lot more attractive and cozier!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊Haan akhir Naina jo waha aayi thi!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Raj soch raha hai he needs a clean shave, a hair cut and clean clothes!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊Haan ab Naina yaha aagayi hai toh he has to look good for her!!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊 😊

Three days baad he had a mission to complete toh yeh sab usse pehle toh nahi ho sakta!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

He now wants more detailed information about Naina especially her personal life!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

So he is going to the countryside bar which is his prime source of information!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

No wonder as all suspicious men aise bars mein aate hai!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ πŸ‘πŸΌ


Edited by Shaina_b - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#47
really nice update......
please continue soon.....
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Posted: 16 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: Shaina_b

Too good!!!!Awesome!!!!!Mindblowing!!!!!

Naina's beauty was desribed very well!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Accha toh Raj ne mare ka naam Naina rakh diya!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›How cute!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Waha Naina Raj ko dhundh rahi hai aur yaha Raj gode bech ke soh raha hai aur Naina ke sapne dekh raha hai!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

In his dream he was admiring her beauty!!!!!!😍 😍 😍 😍Haaaiii!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

This reminded me of the bandage scene in the serial!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

He touched her cheek and it was gentle but powerful enough to burn her!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

But then he gently brushed the mud off her cheek and unwillingly withdrew his hand!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Raj ne kaha ke usne bandage theek se nahi bandha toh gussa ho gayi!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜›How cute!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊

It was soo romantic and passionate!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️

The dream sequence by Ashi was very beautiful and romantic!!!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘
It was certainly very romantic . Lst time when I ws looking for it i never found, but this I found this writeup very quickly
But that beautiful dream turned into a nightmare and Bhargav and Lolita pulled Naina way from him!!!!

Lolita bhi uske sapne villain ban gayi!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜† πŸ˜†

Sapne mein sab kuch hota hai πŸ˜ƒ
And Shakti Chandra is stopping him from going after Naina!!!!!πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’ πŸ˜’Poor Raj!!!!!πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜” πŸ˜”

"To surrender or Not to surrender" was very nicely written!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Shakespeare kis kam ke?
The way his need to be with her was described was fabulous!!!!!😊 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

The place was very well described!!!!!πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘ πŸ‘

Raj was shocked to see Naina at his home!!!!!!!πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› πŸ˜› 😊 😊 😊 😊

Ab itna shock honewaali kya baat hai Naina tumhare ghar pe nahi hogi toh kaha hogi!!!!!!πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜‰ 😊 😊 😊 😊 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳 😳

Exactly - Naina rightly belongs there πŸ˜‰πŸ˜Š
Shaina - thanks for the remarks. You are certainly a great fic-reader.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#49
too good....

beautiful indeed....waitin for rn to meet
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Posted: 16 years ago
#50
Hi Sunaina di......
so sorry k mai last ud par sahi time me comment nahin kar payi...!!! actually net ko kabhi kabhi heart-attack aa jaya karta hai...!!! isiliye mai OL me nahin rah pati hamesha...aur upar se study ka chakkar.
mai abhi aap k dono uds ko read kar k comment karti hun...!!!
arre haan...mai to Thanx hi kahna bhul gay...iii Actually dobble THANX kahna hai...mujhe...!!!
pahla thanx is liye ki apne is khubsurat fic ko phir se start kiya...!!! aur aap k her sentence me mai jaise khoya hua mehsus karti hun...!!! padhaate hue aisa lagta hai jaise sab kuch mere ankhon k samne ho raha hai...!!! sach me...agar LRL ka sequel bane na...to mai yahi chahungi...k vo aisa hi ho...jaisa aapne is fic me likha hai.
Thanx kahne ka dushra reason hai k mai jab bhi LRL ko baht miss karti hun na...to mera pahla option hota hai...aap ka youtube channel... jahan par mai aapne fav scenes dekh pati hun.

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