Right Left Right (upd on 17-03 pg 24)

sunaina02 thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 6
Posted: 17 years ago
#1

This is how my vision of how LRL could be.

I never posted it before here. Some of you have read it visitng Orkut or RP-FC. But I thought that I should start posting here too.

Please excuse my wrong hindi dialogues as I am not good in it. But hindi dialogues do give punch to these stories.

I am just posting the PArt I. . If get positive responses I would post more.

I received lot of positive respones from you all. Thanks for liking it. Please enjoy, but post your comments, positive or negative,

Right Left Right

I

Naina had turned into a stone. Even her eyelids did not move. .She blankly stared at the emptiness. He right cheek and headed rested on the stony wall of the confinement cell. The coldness of the walls pervaded into her body. Dr. Shalini came towards her and touched her arm and forehead. She touched the nearby wall too. Her hand could not say the difference. She waved her hands in front of Naina's eyes. No, her eyelids did not move. The only thing that responded was her iris when a torch was flashed into her eyes.

Yes, Naina was in a complete shocked state. Her mind and soul were in trauma. She must be immediately transferred to the infirmary and given proper medication.

Dr, Shalini ran to Major Nair but stopped right in front of the door. She understood her request would be in vain. She turned towards Brig, Chandok's office.

"Sir," pleaded Dr. Shalini, "We will lose two of our cadets if we don't take immediate action"

Brigadier chandoK, who was standing with his back towards the Doctor turned around "Wastage of talent, wastage of courage - ," removed drops of tears from his eyes, " How can I help You "

After an hour, Huda was transferred to the military hospital and Naina was shifted to the infirmary. Dr, Shalini put her under saline drip and drugged her into deep slumber.

Naina stayed like that for three consecutive days, mostly in unconscious state. Even when for brief periods she regained consciousness, she was in a state of amnesia, recognizing no one, responding to nothing.

But in the unconscious state she kept on dreaming. Her dreams were not consistent and swiftly changed from one scenario to another but one factor was consistent - "Rajveer Sir"

The fire, everything is on fire, burning , charring and there- someone rose from the fire. Someone in blue shirt with all ruffled hair, blood all over - coming towards her, floating towards her with his hands spread out wide - inviting her to his embrace. Naina ran towards him - calling out his name - "Rajveer Sir"

Naina started to shout, she couldn't even hear herself but he is drifting away towards the clouds. She can't reach him. She tries to fly towards him.....

Next she turns around. There Sir is standing behind her all suited, bowed and booted, smiling at her, showing her the upright thumb. She was in the red dress - smiling, dancing - suddenly a black cloud swept over them and carried them up, up to the point 1857. She is running and running and tripped over a stone. Rajveer Sir comes from behind, picks her up easily in his arms and is carrying her while echoing the words "Mera Pyar, mera Pyar…" . He dropped her on her hostel bed with a thud.

Naina opened her eyes to see a female face watching her closely. two drops of tears flowed from Naina's eyes and moistened the white pillow under her head.

It was Dr. Shalini. She was happy to see those tears. It meant Naina was coming back to her senses., very slowly but surely.

Dr Shalini put her hand over Naina's head and lovingly caressed her. She knew and understood what pain Naina was going through. She kissed her forehead, "Naina ,how are you feeling now?".
But Naina still did not respond. That light of recognition did not appear in her eyes.
But Naina knew the doctor to be kind and smiled as a patient would smile to an unacquainted doctor in a big hospital.

Dr, Shalini fed Naina with a bowl of warm soup, gave her the drugs and bade her good night. As she came out of the Infirmary, she found other cadets standing there. She nodded at them. "Naina is much better now. You people don't have to worry. Go back to your rooms. Do - teen din mein wo thik ho jayegi. "

She got out of KMA , ordered the jeep to take her to the hospital to check on Huda.

Naina,"
"NAina"
Naina woke up. Someone was calling her name. She knew the voice. She was dying to hear that voice. She quickly got up from her bed and ran towards the window.
He was standing there in the same blue shirt, covered with dirt and blood. Naina opened the shutter, jumped out of the window and ran to his embrace. They stood there for eternity in each other's arms.
"Sir aap yahan kaise..koi aapko dkh lenge to phir se aapko mar dalegi," she sobbed.
"Nahin Naina , mujhe kuchh parwa nahin, aaj main azad hoon, azaad hoon tumhare liye mera payr izhaar karne ke liye." he kissed her on her forhead and the tears on her cheeks ."
" I will go now and will continue to try to find out the truth ,"
Naina did not want to let him go, She clung to him with all her strength, like a desperate child.
She screamed out , "Rajveeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeer".

Naina woke up at her own voice screaming aloud. "Rajveeeeeeer"
She gasped for breath. The room was dark but that smell of blood and wet soil was all pervading. She looked at the window. In the faint moonlight she could see the window shutter left ajar and the cool night breeze blowing in from there
Her whole body seemed to be under the spell of his touch; his fragrance, his manliness still lingered on her whole being. Was it because he hugged her so closely near the shootout or was it because ........tonight ....he was here, in this very room. ??!!!!

Edited by sunaina02 - 17 years ago

Created

Last reply

Replies

157

Views

89.6k

Users

40

Likes

192

Frequent Posters

shareen thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 17 years ago
#2
Fantastic sunaina 👏 👏 👏 .Its really good.I just loved the first part.Pls continue 😃
Life_Is_Dutiful thumbnail
Posted: 17 years ago
#3
I am again saying brilliant fic. 👏
.Rabi. thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 17 years ago
#4
i want to say it again...that its a fantastic Fic....Hatts of u 😊
Edited by cute_rabi - 17 years ago
-Divyaa- thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail + 2
Posted: 17 years ago
#5
absolutely brilliant su 👏 👏 👏
ranjitha thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Fascinator 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 17 years ago
#6
Hey SU
I had already read it
still read it again
n believe me it touched me even this time as much as it did when I read it for the first time!!!
ossome Su 🤗
sunaina02 thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 6
Posted: 17 years ago
#7
Thanks Ranjithe.

Thanks everyone.
I will sonpost the second part. In fact within few minutes.
sunaina02 thumbnail
20th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 6
Posted: 17 years ago
#8
COntinuation

Next morning Naina woke up all fresh and her memory back. Dr. Shalini came and greeted her. She saw the smile returning to Naina's contour. "Good morning Naina, how are you feeling today " perked the ever smiling doctor. "Your friends are waiting for you outside., should I call them ? "

Naina nodded and one by one all four of them entered. Not seeing HUda, Naina asked "Where is Huda?"
Alekh started to stammer "Huda - goli -tujhko... "
"Huda was hurt in the encounter and has been sent to the hospital. But he is well now and will return tomorrow. " Shalini interrupted.

As Dr Shalini moved away from the cadets , NAina excitedly whispered to the cadets, " Kaal raat Rajveer Sir yahan aya tha, wo zinda hai "

"Tujhe aur rest ki zaroorat hai ," remarked Pooja, "So ja aur aaram kar. "

Alekh put his hand over her head and assured her of his friendship and support.

No one believed her. Naina stopped smiling. It was her battle . only her battle. She would face the world, the system, the army bureaucracy, alone but firm.
Only one man always supported her, and he would continue to support her.
She knew he was alive, she knew he was not far away. She knew he would not forsake his love- Her.
She knew.
She had found the handkerchief she gifted him before that ill-fated mission. She had found it all soiled and marked with red black spots of dried blood, beside the window last night.
raju73 thumbnail
Posted: 17 years ago
#9
wow! superb 👏
please continue soon.
Arushi. thumbnail
18th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Commentator Level 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 17 years ago
#10
splendid
that is the only word i can think of rt now 👏

Related Topics

Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: desidillse

7 months ago

SuVeer/RUhaani TS ~ Happily Ever After (Chapter 4 upd) SuVeer/RUhaani TS ~ Happily Ever After (Chapter 4 upd)

[NOCOPY] Cover credits to ExoticDisaster C H A P T E R 1 After the completion of the final year exams, Mamta insisted Ranveer to come home from...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: zajedno

6 months ago

When is the right time???

Everything happens at the right time, but we can't always recognize that right time. Don't wait for the perfect moment, because the perfect...

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".