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Pyar ya Dosti...
..A story of destiny.

Character Analysis:

Dhanaks:

Shabd Dhanak - A 21 year old boy living in Mumbai with his Mom and sister.

Kasturi Dhanak: A 18 year old girl and sister of Shabd.

Naina Dhanak: Mother of Kasturi and Shabd

Prachi Shah: Bestfriend of Kasturi.

Chaudry's :

Kripa Chaudry: A 20 year old girl living in a small town outside of Delhi.

Shagun Chaudry: Mother of Kripa.

Anitah Kaur: Best friend-->sister type of Kripa.

Background knowledge:

The Dhank's are from Mumbai, living in a huge mansion. Shabd has been working for 6 months now. while sister, Kasturi is currently in college with her bestest friend, Prachi.

The Chaudry's are from a small town off the edge of Delhi. Kripa has just graduated college and is off job hunting.

Watch, how two love birds, are destined to be together.

Love,
Priya

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Posted: 18 years ago
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awesome priya cnt wait to read more
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Princuu, the FF seems great! 😳 😳. You should definatly write it! 😳

-Rachna
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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow the concept sounds really interesting!
Can't wait till you start! 😳
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Posted: 18 years ago
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areeeee wah wah priyaaaaaa yea i agree with the other carry on jiiiiii 😛 seems different an intresting 😳 an i will read 😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Awwwww 👏 👏 👏
My Priyuuuu 🤗
I love the storyline 😃
U have Shabd as the main lead 😉
N u told me you hated him...Liar 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
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🤗

Will post part 1 soon 😃
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Posted: 18 years ago
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aww..thts a good start and SHABD is in it!!! 😃 lolz well continue this is gonna b great!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Pyar Ya Dosti: Part 1

Over at the Dhanaks:
Shabd: S
Naina: N
Kasturi: K
Prachi: P



Dhanaks house:

S: Momaaaa!! Chalooooooo!!

K: Kya hai bhaii?! Mommy ko sone dho nah!

S: Kasturii!!

K: Whatttttt?

S: I'm going to Dehli today!

K: 😲 WHAT? Oh no! MOMMYYY!

N: Arre hain beta..I was getting puja ki thali

S: Oh fo momma. Train is almost here.. we have to leave.

*Naina forcefully puts the thika on Shabds forehead*

*Reaches for dhoke*

S: Okies chalo..
just then a bueatiful young girl enters..and puts her hands over his eyes

P: Guess who!

S: Prachi!

P: Shabd! Howd u know😲

S: Praccchiii, i've known u for so long..are u coming to drop me off?

P: Of course😳

*Naina and shabd says their goodbyes*



Chaudry's house:

Shagun: S

Kripa: K

Anitah: A



S: Kripuu. Neeche aao.. u'll get late!

K: Jee momma..aari huee!

*She comes down*

K: Anitahh!!! ur here so early?😲

A: DUhh!! Im dropping u off at the station!

K: Oh yah

S: Kripa beta, bhagwan ko handjordna.

K: Karliya momma. Chalo Anitah..

A: bye aunty..oh hain momma go phone karlena.

S: jee theek hai bye anitah beta

kripa gives a tight hug to her mom.

S: bye beta😭😭..eat nicely.. aur make sure u call wen u get there😭

K: MOMMA😭byee😭

*they both leaeve*

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Shabd, Prachi, and Kasturi arrive at the train station..He says his goodbyes and sits in his seat..He opens his bag and takes out his ipod. And starts listening to songs..

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Kripa says her own goodbyes to Anitah and sits in the train.

She opens her book and starts to read
The Namesake
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NOTE: its NOT the same train
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END OF PART 1.

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Comments??
Boring nah?

First time i'm writing a fan fic😳

Love u,
Priya😛
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Thanks everyone🤗

Pyar Ya Dostii

//<Part 2>\\

K: Yayyyy. Delhi agaya!!

S: Uff. What kind of train ride was that? It was soo long!🤢

Kripa manages to catch a rickshaw , and settles herself into her apt. where she will be living now..

Shabd gives gets a taxi, and finds his hotel.

K:*Thinking* ..Arre ab mein kya karu?😕 Oh I know! I'll go shoppingg😃

*She gets out of her apt. and asks the rickshaw driver to get her to a nice bazar.*

Back at Shabds's hotel:

S: Uffff. Mein kyaaaa karoo? *echoing in his mind* shabd beta mere liye salwar kameez lanne, oh hain aurr kurtas ..pleejjj .

oh fo ye momma bhi nah. chalo lets go shoppin shabd

*Accidently, both end up at the same bazar😲

K: Haiii re! Ye salwar kintaa sundar hai!

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*goes in dah shop*

Shabd sees the same salwar , and goes in.. and sits next to Kripa

Employee: Hain madam, kya dikhna hai?

K: Hmm woh wala dikhana pls.

Employee: Jee .

S: Wow .. Ye bahut hi sundar hai! Kiske liye lere ho.

K: 😆 Hain. .Accha..Mere liye😳

*Then gets side tracked when someone comes to help him*

Kripa ends up buying the salwar, and walks out. Shabd purchased another salwar, and ran after Kripa.

**Tring to catch up with her he starts yelling.. Excuse mee. AApp jee. Pleaseeee. **

Kripa turns around and stops.

S: Hii.😃

K: Hello again.😳

S: Um.. Do U live around here?

K: Jee nahi. Sorry. I just got here today I myself am looking for a resturant.

S: Same here..soo..maybee u would like to come find a place to eat with me?

K: Hehe. I would love to uhh.. Sorry, I didn't quite catch your name.

S: Oh sorry..The name is Bond. James Bond😎😎.

K: Ufff😆 Sach mein yaar.

S: Hahaha, Okay.Shabd, Shabd Dhannak.

K: Kripa, Kripa Chaudry.

S: Well nice to meet u Kripa!

K: Sameee. Chalee?

S: Letzz.

They eventually find a resturant.

S: So , where are u from?

K: Ghazibadh, yaahan se bas 6 gaante door hai .(Its just 6 hrs away from Delhi) Aur app?

S: I'm from Mumbai!😃 Business ke silsye mein..

K: Acchaa. I came to find a job.

S: *Shabd pulls out a pen and writes down a phone number* Heres the # to where I work, they are currently looking for jobs.

K: Emmhagawd! Thank you soo much Shabd! 😳😃

** 2 hours later**

S: Bill please!

K: please plase let me pay my half.

S: arre nahii . on me.

K; nahin ye mein kaise karsakti hue? ..pls?

S: your right.. aakre mein, hum aap ke hai kaun?

K: 😕😆(laughing AT him)

S: bad joke😉

K: Verry.😆😳

K: Okies, well muhjko chalna jeeye ab. 😛

S: Same here.

They shake hands..

And they both go there separate ways.

Couple days later:

Kripa was walking around the street, looking for the building where she has an interview.

Shabd was looking at his watch looking at how much time he had.

And as destiny said... they bumped right into each other.

K: Omg. uff. Im soo sor-----ARRE APPPPPPPP? SHABD JEE?

S: pata nahin, ye 'shabd jee' kaun hai..par hain, shabd hi hoon😃

K:😆 thoo kaise ho? how arre u!

S: I am veryy gud. you?

K: Im alsoo good, im just trying to find this adress.

S: Oh , ur standing right iinfront of it😆

K: Uff silly mee. thanks, chalo, phir milte hai!

S: Kaise!?

K: Excuse me...?

S: Ufff. If u dont have my number how do u plan on meeting again?

K: Oh hain😆😆

S: okies tho mii number is 222-5683-9051

K; Alrighty then. I'll talk to u soon😛

S: Take care! ..Bies😛

Its the next the day, and Kripa is staring at Shabds number. Shes puts it down. She picks it up. Puts it down. Picks it up. Stares at the phone, and then at the number.

Will she call him? Find out in Part 3 of Pyar Ya Dosti.


Till' next time

I'm Priya😳

xx

Edited by DesiChocolate - 18 years ago

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