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Posted: 8 years ago
#41
*Unreserved*
Shanocim 🤗

Every time I see an update of yours, the first thing that runs through my mind is, "Its so huge, How will I ever finish it??" and then when I start reading it I'm like "How did it end so quickly? It was supposed to be huge na?" 😆😆

Such is your style of writing, it keeps us wanting for more and more. And I always end up demanding frequent updates like a greedy baby

So, like the last time I sacrificed my nap time and read it, I love lying down on my bed and reading updates of yours, simultaneously imagining everything you wrote!! Ahh my vivid imagination 😳😳

I'll start with our love-struck puppy aka Mr-Badass-Ayedin who got mesmerized by our Tigress 😆😆. Poor guy! He got struck so bad he couldn't even make sense of WTH happened to him in that moment. Its so fun to see him flustered. But he gathers him soon enough coz he has more important things to do aka Beat the crap outta that Dimitri fella 👏👏

Steven is soo cute, he has never seen his Abi like this, scratching his head to put 2+2 together, just so he could understand his brother's reaction 😆😆

Ayedin believed Sayali and the way he kept thinking about her and chuckled at her threat! Ohh Man, you've gotta stop doing that to us. I soo imagined Bugra sitting in the Driver's seat, adjusting his Seat Belt and then remembers Sayali's Open Threat and chuckles, Bugra's smile in this scene would have been adorable!!

Harsh wants his daughters to behave like daughters, I'm not gonna judge him until I read more about what you have planned for his character. Reserving my opinion on him for now 😉. But he should know that he has real ballsy daughters who are not afraid to give it back to the goons

Sayali is a girl, but not in the traditional Indian sense, she has such a fire inside her when it comes to protecting her loved ones, she is a Tigress! 👏👏 She has all the feminine qualities of love and care but it doesn't make her weak or fragile. These qualities are her strength! 😃😃

I love Bhoomi and Sayali's bond, you described that scene so well 👏👏. I especially loved Bhoomi's stunned reaction when she found out who Sayali is going out with, lmao 😆😆. The way she keeps remindind Sayali that she's beautiful even when Sayali chuckles it off is so sweet.

Ayedin goes the Bad-ass way again, reminding Dimitri why he's the best at what he does!!👏👏
So Dimitri tries to offer Sayali on a platter to Ayedin Abi, thinking he could please his way out with this crap, to which Ayedin gives him a tight one . Serves him well!!

Aashi and Samar come across as such a normal couple, nothing extraordinary and nothing too ordinary. Its love without going OTT!! 😳😳 I cant wait for the entire family to re-unite 😛

Bhoomi's excitement levels lol 😆😆. And then her frustration of choosing a dress for Sissy's Date, lol. Poor girl went from maxi dresses to short dresses to everything else in the closet, finally finding a Anarkali to which Sayali says "Its too fancy" 🤣

Sayali still trying to claw her way outta this dat, trying to bribe sis with pizza and lasagna 😆😆, but Bhoomi's a smart girl. She wouldn't fall for these tricks 😆

And then Bhoomi going ineffable on seeing the Senator 😆😆. I love this girl!!
Jack likes Sayali's eyes more 😳😳. He has such clear loyalties 😆😆

Can't wait for the actual date 😳😳
Edited by sehar mehrotra - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#42
Res. 😎

*Edit*

Another fantastic update from you Shanocim! In Ayedin's words, 'Cok Guzel'! 😳
Okay, apologies first for being late to edit my spot, you know the reason.

Our Chhora aka Ayedin is clearly love-struck, and I can very well imagine how adorable he must have been looking while wondering about what happened to him when he saw Sayali! Steve trying to figure out about his Abi's unusual behavior was funny. 😆
Man, I can so imagine the brooding Ayedin throwing those goons in front of Dimitri & then openly warning him to keep away from Sayali & her family because now he'll protect them! Uff, just imagine how hot Bugra must be looking while being full of rage. *fans myself*

Dimitri the moron so needed that slap from Ayedin after he spoke disgusting about Sayali.

And man, I absolutely love Sayali. 😳 No doubt she's a soft-spoken & sweet girl from within but when needed then she can become a tigress to fight for her loved ones. 😳 I like her bond with Bhumi, lol the latter was in disbelief when she realized that her sister was going on a date with Senator. 😆 Can't wait to read how their date goes. 😳

Loved the Samar-Aashi scene. ❤️

You have to update sooner this time. 😛 Because *I'm greedy & I know it* Thanks for the PM hun. 🤗
Edited by whiterose29 - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
#43
Unreserved my earlier post!!
Shanocim Tussi Great Ho, Tohfu Kubool Karein
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Posted: 8 years ago
#44

Originally posted by: sehar mehrotra

Unreserved my earlier post!!

Shanocim Tussi Great Ho, Tohfu Kubool Karein


Aww, thank you My Chan! 🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
#45
Hey Shanocim, first of all for being late in commenting here. But kya karein...because of your story I felt like watching Dillagi once again 😛 and then my post wahi reh gaya 😔
You know what, I read all the 3 parts back to back and I got the feels of watching my fav serial. Sayali and Ayedin ne AnMoh ka yaad dilaya You have written so vividly that one can visualize what exactly is going on...really loved the characterization of each character...they feel like real people 👍🏼 Keep writing canim...yeh dil maange more ❤️


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Posted: 8 years ago
#46

Originally posted by: whiterose29

Next update kab milega?


First you need to comment on the Five Shot and then we'll see. 😆😆😉
Will update soon. 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#47

Originally posted by: .Archangel.


First you need to comment on the Five Shot and then we'll see. 😆😆😉
Will update soon. 😳


SWAK became a five shot? Don't worry I remember to comment there, will do it in sometime. 😳 But please update this one asap cuz I'm always impatient for this.
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Posted: 8 years ago
#48

Originally posted by: .Archangel.


First you need to comment on the Five Shot and then we'll see. 😆😆😉
Will update soon. 😳


@Bold- When on Earth will this 'soon' come? 😭🥺

Ayedin should probably chase you till you update this. 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#49
I'm so happy to have this thread safe and sound.
@AashiCanim I've begun writing, so yes will update soon. 😃
And I wouldn't mind being chased by Ayedin. 😆😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
#50
Hey! Loved the story. Looking forward to reading more of this and other stories from you. When can v expect the next update dear.

~Neha

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