Eclipse - CH 2: Pg. 5

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aanvi

@aanvi98

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Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: PanchaliKaArjun
Mera res ! 😃

Me unresed first!!!😉😃😛

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Posted: 9 years ago

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proteeti

@sambhavami

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Brilliant! Loved the flow of the story. And the waterfall.
Sorry for the late comment though! :$

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8520NK

@8520NK

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Posted: 9 years ago

#24

And finally comes my unres!😆

Well, I love historical fiction and your style of writing is beyond amazing.

I was intrigued by the history of the kingdom and the way you have explained it, further captured all of my attention. The way you set the tone for the story, made it so clear for me to imagine everything. It was absolutely wonderful.

I got the ancient feel when I was reading the part where you described Angika's chambers and it was just as if everything was reeling in front of my eyes.

The way they converse reflects their royal stature and I was amazed at how beautifully you have sketched your characters. Though not much, but the chapter gave a very eloquent sneak peak of the different personalities.

Your research, shines out in parts of the chapter and flows in perfect coordination with the story.

Loved every bit!

Agni and Bhramadutta seem two very headstrong characters. The formers emotions came across well, especially in tge last line when she completes his sentence. I can't wait for there. Confrontation amd more.

Loved it Angie!❤️

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not.here

@not.here

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Posted: 9 years ago

#25

Res

Intriguing beginning and I am wondering whether the revelation will affect the marriage. I look forwards onto the next chapter to see how it all develops!

Edited by Cortana - 9 years ago

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Revelio

@Revelio

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Posted: 9 years ago

#26

That was a brilliant first chapter! This story has such a captivating plot. And you've laid the base for it so fabulously well. The exactness with which you describe every little thing is simply outstanding, it makes it so easy to picturise exactly what's happening. And clearly, you've taken the trouble of researching every minute detail and the outcome is beyond amazing. Agni turning out to be an illegitimate child surprised me, can't wait to find out what happens next. Loved it!

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Angela Grokes

@Angela_Grokes

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Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: aanvi98
Resss!!!
This is sooo amazing di!! Just loved it!!!

The first part started so good!!! I loved it!!!
Loved the bubbly sisters!! Nd elder sister going to be married... aww!! But when is arjun coming...🤢 can't wait for his entry!!😛

But what was it? Haaw!! Agni not sister of vaidehi??😲
Bichara! Must be so hurt!! But how can he say lyk tht!!😡 shameless... no mercy at all! How bad agni must be feeling!!!😭

Ok enough of senti talks, this is just amazing! And as i said before... will be now clinged to ur updates!!!
Love,
Anu

Arjun is going to enter very soon. Always remember, save the best entry for the last. 😛

There are a lot of secrets in this story which will open up apart from this, so be ready for all of them.

Thanks for reading. And oh stay tuned. 😉

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Angela Grokes

@Angela_Grokes

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Posted: 9 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: Sonatia
Awesome update di. Beautiful and intriguing, just loved the chapter.
Vaidehi and Agni are sisters but not by blood. Loved their bond. :D
And how rude and filthy-mouthed Brahamdatt was and how can he use such words !! I felt so bad for Agni ..
Can't wait for the next part. Please update soon.

This is just the start, as the story proceeds I hope you enjoy the upcoming twists.

Thanks for reading dear.