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Posted: 9 years ago
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Teaser : A Quick Trip


If you want to keep a secret, you must also hide it from yourself.

Its a full moon night. The moon is shining with a great radiance sending light to every corner of the setting but the demure setting of the landscape denies to conflate with light and remains shrouded in darkness and hides many secrets under the covers of eerie isolation.

Among the landscape's possibly endless area, a secluded fetching bungalow holds the attention. It is surrounded by darkness and has only one balcony which is full of lights.

The balcony is composed of crystal. Ever bit of light, thus multiplies to its best possible extent to refine the wonderful setting of the scene. With many a candles arranged on both its end, the setting shines with unending radiance.

A woman enters the balcony. Her face is hidden by darkness and she walks gracefully towards the center of the balcony. She looks up and finds the moon untoward and thus turns around. And just as she does, the flame of a candle gives birth to a peacock feather. All candles die out and balcony becomes dark, the only source of light being the unending shine given out by the feather.

As the feather rises from from its incipient position, it gets brighter and it goes up to cover the moon. With absolute light and nothing else it blinds lady who covers her eyes for protection.

The feather then comes down slowly landing on earth. Ulupi and Iravan watch it. An strange fear grips Ulupi. She looks at Iravan who is going ahead to grasp the feather but he is not able to do so because it rises and goes up to shine with great brilliance which blinds them. Iravan collapses on earth while a shocked Ulupli looks at the feather from between of her fingers as she has now covered her eyes. But her vision is ephemeral because she is soon blinded and has to close her eyes.

With absolute lissome, the peacock feather travels with the air and enters a dark room through the window. With its light, it brightens every corner of the room and comes to vision a family picture of Panchals and Atlantics together. It falls and glass shatters into pieces. From the picute, Shubhi's image dissolves and can not be seen. The broken pieces of glass soon turn into blood and flow away.

And a voice beings in the background,

"Some secrets, when come into light, give nothing but destruction, true destruction!"
Edited by Angela_Grokes - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#62
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And these are the updates for the day.

Well, obviously, they are quite dramatic. But then, the unending drama here is famous. 😆 Still, with the next set of updates, I will bring some light moments which will hopefully set a better mood for the storyline. Till then, I leave it to you to think.

Also, I think you all might be known but still, there are certain things in the story which have not been reasoned. To name one - How did Vasusen, Vrushali and Sahdev escape from the demolishing structure? So, I'll suggest you to read the updates that come and then guess until I finally unveil the secrets. 😉

And like the teaser suggest, this third journey of them will, be

A Game of Secrets


😊
Edited by Angela_Grokes - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#63
Yeah, okay. I am stupid and I forgot and left this Reserved like an idiot. But well, I was the first to reserve I deserve some credit there!
So, I was about to read the other chapter and I realized, 'Oh, haven't I read the chapter before this, not.' And the mine chimed in, 'No, you haven't, you forgetful idiot!'
So here I am, commenting on this almost after two months, voila!
Anyway, after this amazingly idiotic short story I am coming to the chapter.
Firstly, you have to stop underestimating yourself, because this is wonderful!
You know, you have this amazing quality, that you can write mystery so well, and the reader always has this environment developed around. Finally, when the mystery does unravel, it is done in a breathtaking way. You can really blend in genres but your main theme of mystery and adventure prevails.
I loved that little conversation between the three of them, it was just so cute and then when the building fell.
The scene really had my breath stuck in my throat and oh, Shubhi!
Does that bracelet belong to her? Why do I think that conversation about her finding someone is somewhere connected here? I hope she'll be alright.
And now, I am off prancing to the next update! See ya on page ten? Or eleven? Yeah either one😉
Edited by 8520NK - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Amazing chapter Angela😃
I hope nothing happens to subhi😕
Mysterious teaser⭐️
Who is that lady?
I hope that Govind does something this time
Edited by Nonie12345 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#65
Don't you kill Shubhi! 😲 Is she going evil or again Panchi? That would add to the drama but might be discomforting.
I guess the building teleported and her being in the vicinity teleported with the building. My thinking brain is on therefore I gave that answer 🤓 But govind will know what to do. He always does but I do hope he acts and does not just let fate unfold.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#66
Oh God! This was breathtaking! The way you started with the amusing convo. and ended in the supposed tragedy is absolutely wonderful!And the teaser was so beautiful! I could see everything in from of my eyes! You have a very nice sense of beauty filled with suspense!
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Posted: 9 years ago
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OMG angie di!! Maar dala suspense se!!! This was amazing!!! loved the way how u started with a hillarious convo and ended with a big suspense!!!Now plz don't stop here!!! Otherwise i will surely have a heart attack!!!! OMG did u killed subhi??? nehiii!!! I can't see this happy family breaking!!! Uff!! Why there are so many secrets!!!
Edited by naturelover33 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#68
I know Angie I am quite late to comment but finally read both the chappies at one go.
OMG what amazing chapters 👏 & last one ⭐️ was...like Shubhi's intuition did got right at the end...she is stuck there 😲
And the mystry teaser 😛...wow
Now update the next part soon 😳

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nonie12345

Amazing chapter Angela😃

I hope nothing happens to subhi😕
Mysterious teaser⭐️
Who is that lady?
I hope that Govind does something this time

Thank you Nonie.

All will be revealed. 😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Cortana

Don't you kill Shubhi! 😲 Is she going evil or again Panchi? That would add to the drama but might be discomforting.

I guess the building teleported and her being in the vicinity teleported with the building. My thinking brain is on therefore I gave that answer 🤓 But govind will know what to do. He always does but I do hope he acts and does not just let fate unfold.

Nah Nah! No one is turning negative. All will be the way they are. But well, I am going to dish out a stupid OTT dramatic storyline I feel. 😆

You'll see it. But maybe not like it.


Thank a lot.😃

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