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Posted: 9 years ago
Congratulations hammie for century🥳

balli thanks😃 yaad hai we had such masti when we hit 100 before.. much love hammie QUOTE]
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Originally posted by: eternity_of_luv

Hey hammie.. hi ranju.. great to see you😃 and thanks for the century wishes
amazing update like always.. glad you liked it ranju
Finally Dutta is fine and truth is out.. yes after a bit of drama which he does
Looking forward for marriage track... am working on it.. just got bogged down.. will pm the next ud..
Thaks hammie for pm.. thanks for reading and commenting ranju.. much love hammie

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: stranger2rose


hi rosie 😃.. good to see you mate
Hey hammie congrats on crossing 100 Pages thanks and the credit goes to you all too..
So the Kat ( kanta) is out of the bag! And no need to be surprised seeing dutta' reaction even his family knew he would react like this. And anybody would. I'm with Dutta things so important shouldn't be hidden from closed ones. yaad hai it was thebane of his life..wouldbe the last to know
You need to have faith in your love and upbringing. Yes he would get shocked and mad but still it's better to share such bitter truths. it was aye sahib.. like LTL..
Now why does Ravi wish to see Dutta? I'm suspicious , keep him away please. we'll see what his issue is?
It's great to see that this time instead of nakku our little Krishna puts some sense into his brains. haaa haan.. thought change karo..Perhaps they both share a common background. Really liked that part. .. thanks Rosie
Now waiting for Tasha marriage.
all in good time.. sorry ud a bit late.. rosie am working on itthemoment its ready will post and sends you pm.. thanks for reading andfor commenting rosie, much love hammie

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Posted: 9 years ago
Hammieee, 😡 Jab dekh bahana aur drama. Whats taking so long for the update ??
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Mishal Raheja

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Dutta

Blue Blood

Part 25

Dutta, after so many years was now at peace with himself. There was a forgiveness and acceptance within himself regarding the woman who bore him, abandoned him and has now reclaimed as if by the miraculous hands of destiny. Perhaps Krishna is right that his family life is based on that of lord Krishna who boasted off having two mothers. Dutta rested his palm on his bare chest and cast his hooded eyes on his bandaged abdomen. The pain of bullet wounds was there excruciating, gradually getting distant from his gut and the side of his left upper arm. He smiled dryly with sided head as he cast eyes down at his left bandaged arm. What blessing it is for a friend to shed blood and salvage one's friend. But then Dutta smiled , Seema was more than a tag along friend right from yester years to now. Seema was family. Dutta waited for Naku to return with his mothers, she had been gone for some time and hadn't returned, what could the matter be?

Suddenly the door to his room flung opened as Baji entered the room assisted by a ward boy who wheeled a metal trolley upon which was perched the smallest havan fire holder one could find. Baji seemed in great haste as he wheeled Dutta's food trolley just a bit over his bed ,then placed the semi lit contained fire a top of it. Baffled Dutta looked at Baji , and asked the meaning of all this breaking hospital rules. At first he assumed that perhaps his self willed mothers might have organized some form of puja for his recuperation , but then the suddenly entry of pandit purhoit ji even confirmed some form of worship performed by him. but why the havan atop his bed?

To Dutta's confusion though there was some pottering about his side , as a folded silken cloth, other puja related perquisites were placed on a platter ,beside the small metal fire holder. He attempted to ask Baji but couldn't get a decent answer from his friend and brother. Dutta craned his neck as he saw one of his mother's head in the door porthole . With bated breath Dutta tarried as the door suddenly opened and his own mother mai and aye Sahib entered with one garland hang upon each arm. Dutta eyes widened this was unbelievable were they varmala's he saw before his eyes? This had to be an outrageous idea !as outlandish as the way he came into this world and pelted from pillar to post. Dutta's nostrils flared up and the subdued good feel of possible wedding diminished a bit only to be replaced by a feeling of being left in the dark again..

"will someone tell me what's going on?he asked annoyed. His mothers both of them slowly took their places by this hospital bed's head side. One on his left and other on his right. Doctor and nurse too slipped in and stood to one side of his bed. Dutta looked around helplessly. Something formal was about to happen. But things cannot be lumbered on him without his consent. He needed answers and as such he sided his head and faced the woman who made claims on his birth.

"mai, he called her , and he could see her eyes brimmed with instant emotional tears..

"mai , is this another shock you are giving your son?.. was not one shock enough ? that you land another one? seems you forget that your son is still recuperating !and this is a hospital!

" I know all Dutta, but this too you need to know that I am your mother and I am merely using my prerogative of being your mother! said Kanta mai as she raised a finger in Dutta's face. He gulped and wondered , she had traces of short temperedness like him and similar mannerisms like him. But Dutta still wanted clarifications as to all that occurred around him?

"so should I consider this as your ultimate command mai?

"yes Dutta it is! and if it makes you feel better , this decision for your lagan was reached after consultations with aye Sahib and after the vital spiritual guidance from pandit ji. So everything about your immediate lagan falls into place.. " Dutta nodded silently but then after a pause he wanted to know why the haste?

"Dutta look.. I found you after many years of tears and waiting. Under the present circumstances ,where you well might be hunted by bad guys ! your mai's faith is not as strong.. there resides fear that anything ,anytime, anywhere can happen to you .. as that's part of your occupational hazard... hence you will do as I ask! besides, Naku residing at your residence needed to be justified in the eyes of the gods and the society we live in.. Dutta, Naku deserves better! you will have to agree!" explained his mai .. to which aye Sahib his adopted mother added

" with Naku beside you as your wife , the chances of your healing are twofold, when you return home".. Dutta doubled his stubble chin bashfully .. but Dutta's wedding would be incomplete without his brother cum comrade Baji's quips and protests!

"bhau lucky boy you are ! family begging you to marry right away! consider , this, bhau , poor Baji who wanted to marry even before you , now is pushed behind in the queue! Bhauuu! what is Baji's future now? only waiting ! waiting! waiting! but why are we waiting?? jestingly bawled Baji, as he transformed the rather sombre atmosphere of Dutta's imminent marriage. Dutta slowly threw back his head a bit and laughed at his brother efforts to add some spunk to the event ,alongside fighting his case too..

"ohhh shut up ! your marriage will happen Baji ,at Patil Nivas with all the customs and rituals! not like Dutta , wounded in hospital sitting in a hospital bed!" called out Dutta , and Baji replied with a thumbs up at his friend.. and brother

"yes bhau , everything about you is blue blooded, exclusive and out of the ordinary! yelled Baji in his over exuberance.

The pandit ,though raised his palm and pointed out to the still stunned Dutta's mothers .That for the seven vows taken in the form of circumambulations Dutta would have to be moved from his hospital bed! dutta looked helplessly at the doctors and pointed at his bandaged belly and shoulder and disagreed loudly with the pandit

"pandit ji, and how do you suggest I would do that? seems you disregard these apparent bandages about me!, he roared. Aye Sahib moved from her position behind Dutta's bed and sailed over to the surgeon and sought his help regarding possibility and a feasible solution. The surgeon , instructed the nurse present to check the feasibility. All held their breath as the nurse gave a standard check of the bandage around the abdomen, nodded and then turned and glanced at the surgeon for intervention and final approval . The doctor moved forward and leaned towards Dutta and asked

"the bleed seems under control.. the plug seems to work ,as Dutta you can see the outer bandage is unmarked with bleeding.. so Dutta it's up to you , if you think you can undergo further pain and discomfort then we can make arrangements for an electronic wheel chair that you can manoeuvre by press of a button", recommended the doctor.

Dutta turned his head and studied his mai's face. She appeared so desperate to go through with this milestone in his life that he reckoned ; what's a little pain for all his loved ones. Slowly he bowed his head with consent.. the wheel chair was sent for and parked in the corner of his private room. Aye Sahib resumed her place behind his bed and placed her hand lovingly on his bare shoulder. Her darling boy Dutta, in total submission , accepted his elders decision ,without further dissension from him. Her heart went out for her Dutta. She nurtured and reared him up. Knew full well how he used to withdraw into his shell, of despondency, under throes of stress. Today too he yielded to unexpected circumstances .This time to generate unity of familial bonds. Soon after mai too felt the other bare shoulder of her son. Dutta folded each of his arm and reached for his mothers hands on his shoulders and covered each with his wide palms.. which of these two holds more significance ? he mused... mai or aye?. Dutta's eyes welled up, as the question in itself squeezed his heart. It was futile a notion that he trashed in his mind. He cast his eyes on the holy fires embers that twinkled like the tears in his eyes.. a flame sparked and it dawned on him, it is the designated role of the mother given by the deities that it vital whether she creates or nurtures ! blessed be the name of motherhood, every mother ! Dutta concluded as his palms gripped each mother's hand underneath, with his

Soon enough the pandit reminded all present especially the elders of the family that the auspicious moment for marriage has arrived hence the bride should be brought over..

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The pandit chanted mantras and suddenly the aura of marriage descended upon all present in Dutta's private room. Oil was poured into the fire and the presence of the deities was invoked as the brides arrival was awaited upon. Both the mothers held up the white sheet that concealed the faces of the groom and his bride. Amid ritualistic chanting the double doors of the room were held open and blocked from closure with door stoppers. From behind the antarpat, white sheet Dutta was desperate to see his bride ,his Naku.. but he persisted to honour the rituals, from his bed..

All present Seema , Nana sahib, the doctor ,nurses, watched as through the door Naku , dressed in a green silken blouse and purple silk sari flanked by Krishna on one side and Roops on the other..slowly was brought into the room. Tenderly, Kala tai came forward and helped Naku along with her two assistants to park behind the foot of Dutta's bed. Naku smiled and stole a hasty look up at the antarpat ,that separated them.. held by the corners by Sahib's mothers .. Dutta held his breath as slowly the white sheet was lowered down and Dutta's lion like eyes peeped from behind the white sheet at the full face of his beautiful Naku.. her purple pallu over her head , green bold eyes lined with kajal ,coral peach rouged lips.. her jet black winged eye brows and her fine chiselled nose adorned with a small Mahrashtrian pearly nose ring..

Finally the antarpat was lowered completely as Dutta and his Naku look upon each other. Naku was somewhat taken aback by the fact that he sat bare chest and looked every inch a patient who sported deep wounds dressed and bound under bandages. This then is her Sahib ,one of a kind ,who puts his neck on the line to save a loved one's life. Naku smiled shyly at him across the foot of his bed. She could tell from the way his stubble cheeks turned crimson that he approved to the rushed marriage.

Dutta hooded his eyes as the pandit began the ceremony. Dutta was handed over the garland to welcome his bride. Naku took hers to welcome her groom. Naku was led closer to Dutta by Krishna ,from the foot of the bed to the side. She arched her neck and arms sideways and Dutta with his mothers assistance, put the garland around his Naku's porcelain like neck.. his eyes kissed her face with stares of devotion. Shyly Naku stretched across and lovingly stole a glance at Dutta's anticipating eyes, as she gently put her garland around his neck. The ceremony was heralded by all present by a shower of unbroken rice at the bride and groom. The ceremony progressed by kanyaadan or the giving away of the bride .Dutta's sister Kala tai.. who supported Naku during her engagement to her brother, now gives Naku's hand in marriage, a gesture that swelled Dutta s heart with immense pride for the adopted older sister, under whose care he spent many of his infant years! Prayers and rituals progressed.

Pandit ji scanned his eyes for the arrival of the electronic wheel chair so Dutta could be transferred into it. The hospital nurses leapt forward to ensure his safe transfer ,but Baji begged one of the nurses, if he could help ,as Dutta's brother to move him. But his request was declined due to health and safety liability . Naku watched , silently at her Sahib as he clearly hurt! at the point where his long legs dangled off the side of his bed. Dutta threw his long arms around the shoulders of the two male nurses and was gently hauled and seated into the wheel chair. Naku winced too as his semi bare torso folded and he bit into his lower lip to disciple his excruciating pain..

The priest ordered Baji to move the contained sacred fire on the floor before Dutta's electronic wheel chair. Adjustments were made and Naku was moved from the end of Dutta's bed and sat on the floor next to the electronic wheel chaired Dutta. His mothers now stood behind his wheel chair, as the pandit looked around and asked a family member to tie the ghat bandhan the long silken cloth between them that united the bride and groom as they took their seven vows. Aye Sahib nodded at Kanta bai. His real mothers eyes brimmed with tears as she gently lowered the cloth over Dutta's well bare shoulder, that half covered his bare chest. Kanta gently tied his corner end of the cloth, to corner end of Naku's chunni. Dutta lowered his sided eyes at Naku as they both prepared themselves for the circumambulations.. where they would publically make declarations of their attitudes towards each other in their named life style as husband and wife .

Dutta was offered the pot of vermillion by his real mother.. Naku stood from her place and knelt before his wheel chair. Her head lowered before him in devotion. Dutta looked down at her beautiful smooth forehead and his love , his very soul cried out to make her his forever till time.. he took a pinch of vermillion and applied it to the parting of her hair above her forehead. Thus stamped his ownership over her ,a declaration before all. Aye Sahib on a platter offered him the sacred mangulsutra , which Dutta took and tenderly puts around his bride's neck, with a besotted smile. In return Naku dabbed her finger tip in sandalwood and with devotion applied a tilak on his forehead.

Once this sacred ritual finished the final ritual of the vows around the sacred fire begins.. Dutta gave Naku a sided glance ,as the priest invited Dutta to take his vows. Both stood up as Dutta led the first four circumambulations. With a gentle press of the button his wheel chair whirred on as he vowed, to love and protect her honour all her life; he would respect her family with the same reverence he has for his own family; that he would disallow any mistrust to come between them, and vowed to base their marriage on complete trust and faithfulness. Naku was granted permission to lead Dutta, and she gently by passed his electronic wheel chair and vowed the remaining three pheras, that she too would protect and guard his life and accept all harm that comes his way, she would with devotion show care towards his family and their children; and that she vowed to live the rest of their lives in peace and harmony.. the priest declares them man and wife.

Dutta turned his neck and jerked his head to his stunning bride Naku as he beckoned her to his side.. Naku joined him, gradually with dutta in his wheel chair and Naku beside him, they sought blessings from their elders, dutta's mothers, Nana Tavde!.. Baji exuberantly danced with kirshna before the wheel chaired dutta. Both Roops and Seema , hugged Naku and kissed her fervently .

Dutta and Naku especially thanked the doctors and nurses who allowed the ceremony to take place. Aye Sahib , discreetly pressed a big fat donation cheque for the Intensive Care Unit of the hospital. The surgeon though , announced to the family , that Dutta needed to be tended too and rest, hence the wedding party had to leave.. aye Sahib offered guru dakshna to purhoitji for solemnizing the first wedding in their family..

After Dutta was settled back in his hospital bed. Curtains were drawn around his bed and he groaned .. arghhh... as his dressings were changed. Naku stood in the room as all decided the couple needed some time.. but his immediate family continued to hang out side, his room.

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As soon as the nurse left, Naku rushed to his bedside and he smiled at her ,his upper body propped up in bed with puffed up pillows. He held his palm out to her and she placed hers it .. and gently he moved her closer to the side of his bed. His eyes fixed on her face..

" beautiful.. so very pretty you look Naku.. and he tilted his head backwards on his pillows, and looked at her with semi closed eyes.. as Naku blushed..

"you have to agree Naku that mai is truly my mother.. she too is outrageous and adamant like me , does exactly what she wants! just like me! Naku giggled and replied with a gentle smile

" I had no doubts Sahib.. after I had come across you , Kanta mai at my hiwali always reminded me of someone, the way she held her head up , pointed her finger in my face, her no nonsense attitude.." Dutta leaned forward and reached out for her hand and turned her soft warm palm over as he gently caressed it with his palm.. then sighed

"Naku.. so sorry , that no heena was put on your hands, you weren't given the turmeric ritual preparation to render you pure. But shall I tell you Naku.. they were rituals that we weren't meant to follow.. as the deities had already decreed that were meant to be united.. so be it" Naku nodded shyly and supported him

" Sahib.. the vermillion that you put in my hair parting is for me the highest level of purification ,that in complete love I belong to you.'. forever'',she felt her mangal sutra and continued

" that by this sacred thread you have given our love, a name and identity that together from now on wards we are one body, one soul eternally." Dutta slowly pulled her palm towards his full pink lips and pressed them on her warm soft palm.. he sighed and then pressed her palm on the side of his stubble cheek and slowly closed his eyes..

Naku realised he was tired .The day was tiring for him , he had not recovered fully as yet. She didn't know how long it would be ?till he would be back to normal. She wiped a tear that rolled out of her green eye and reluctantly , pulled off her palm from his prickly stubble cheek.. and softly left the room so her wounded husband could sleep peacefully..

Outside the room she tilted her head ,cradled on both her pressed palms, that indicated to all his family that he had gone to sleep. Kala suggested that Naku too needed rest and all should proceed home. Both the mothers wished to proceed first to greet the daughter in law into Patil Niwas.

Naku was ushered to the front door of the house by Kala, Roops.. the two mothers, performed her Arti and Naku tipped the pot of rice at the door step and entered her new home. With her feet dipped in red vermillion she walked into the house and took auspicious steps to the point where she sat surrounded by her new family. Tears welled up in her eyes, it was obvious to all there existed a Dutta sized gap in the huge house. But aye Sahib suggested that as of now Naku would stay in Dutta's room.. right from today! Kala and Roops , tailed by a nosey Krishna ,gently escorted Naku to Dutta's room and slowly sat her down on the end of his huge bed. Naku was pleased the room was not decorated as a bridal suite.. pointless! as her husband was far ,far away from her. Kala and Roops both suggested she get some sleep. But Krishna refused to leave and sat on the floor beside her knees , his curved arms rested on her lap. He tilted his head up and looked into her hooded green eyes..

"tai... shall I sleep over there on bhau's turqiouse settee, just to keep you company? Naku smiled and tousled his hair on the top of his head.. such a sweetheart ,mused Naku ,always looks out for me, just like Sahib looked out for aye Sahib probably all the days of his life. Naku felt she needed company and as such,she stood up and puffed a couple on pillows for krishna's head ,settled him on the settee, covered him with a blanket and kissed the top of his forehead and levelled up. Krishna reached out for her hand and bid her

"sit by me Naku mai.. tonight we both miss the one person close to our heart.. he'll be home soon. don't you worry , I'll put in a good word for bhau before Bappa".. Naku's eyes pressed her lower lip and nodded as she fought back her tears and softly moved from a sleeping krishna's side. Her eyes scanned her husband's room. His framed picture in a white kurta smiled at her from his bed side. Blurry eyed she held it as she sank on his the side of her Sahib's bed.

"Naku.. ayeee Naku! being Dutta's wife means having a big heart,like me... so no tears, Naku.. I'll be back soon.. I'll be back!, Naku heard him through his gentle tender loving eyes.. but her tear still managed to rolled down on his framed photograph . Naku slowly wiped her tear from the glass frame with her wedding sari's pallu.. and then slowly looking at his picture on his bedside ,Naku sank back her body on the side of his bed.. his image in her sad eyes, till her eyelids closed ...

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Muffled sounds stirred Dutta. His eyes opened to find armed security men all around his bedside. The doctor too stood beside him and tapped Dutta on his shoulder to indicate that this visit was authorised by the hospital under special measures. His door suddenly opened and Dutta's eyes behold Ravi in a prisoners outfit . Ravi held his handcuffed before him. Dutta narrowed his eyes and flared his nostrils and glared at the man who wounded his trust and tainted his reputation in the security forces. He just couldn't help feeling embittered by the nerve and cheek of this pathetic creature standing at the end of his bedside!

"ahhh ravindra.. so you come to see if your handiwork showed results! sorry to disappoint you but he up there wants me to live! so Dutta patil can wipe the likes of you from the face of this earth! Dutta rumbled.. but winced with pain and stopped. Ravi raised his clasped handcuffed hands before Dutta and then felt Dutta's feet at the end of his bed weeping. Roughly, Ravi was pulled back by the strong hands of the commandos who flanked him.He sobbed and tendered his remorse

" forgive me Dutta bhau! its you who needs to forgive me before I can ask for forgiveness from the gods! Dutta I know you have a heart of gold! so say the masses of Patil wadi. Today Dutta bhau this ravi comes before you on compassionate grounds!'' pleaded Ravi with folded hands before Dutta who raised his palm up at him dangerously

"enough! state your business ! can't you see I am in hospital! and you are taking up the precious time of the police and security forces by keeping them here with your snivelling!" roared Dutta and the doctors intervened that Ravi better get on with his problem as the patient is getting distressed. Ravi bowed his head and cried out

"bhau my mother and sisters are still held as hostages by Jhingar my boss! under the basement of his seedy warehouse.. bhau! I want you to get them freed, bhau please!'' he wept. The police officer intervened that the prisoners mother and sisters have been freed.. but.. they are homeless.. Dutta's heart melted and his eyes softened and his voice lost the sharpness in his tone..

" enough! Ravi , firstly I am not god but a mere mortal with many a dark deeds within my own life. Who am I to judge you? for the criminality that you carried out , the judiciary and the law will deal with you..as long as you understand that .. secondly as far as your mother and sisters are concerned. My house will be their home as of now! you needn't worry ,their lives will be safe their.. I give you my word Ravi.. and whatever I may be! I am not a liar!.. rumbled Dutta.

Ravi fell down on his knees and bowed his head as he cried..

' people are right you are truly Dutta bhau.. may Bappa bless you bhau! may Bappa bless you"! he broke down ! and was immediately dragged out of Dutta's private room.. back to the commando prisoner carrier.. and driven back to the police station. Dutta rang his brother Baji rightaway!

"yeah Baji , bhau.. listen pop down to the local police station and pick up a mother with her three daughters and take them to Patil Nivas.. speak to you later''... to be continued. Hamlet53, 24.2.16

Erhhh.. bart,rosie, afzal,tammy, ranju.. any chance of forgiveness from you, for my lateness?

sorry bart just read your message.. whizzed thro' much love hammie

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tasha married ravi begging forgiveness and dutta taking responsibility of his family
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Hammie you're so smart first you delay the update then to cool us down you give us a quick Tasha marriage and that too in the hospital. So how can we be angry?
I'm surprised that instead of dutta we have the mothers who hurriedly arrange the marriage. Wow. I'm sure in his heart Dutta must be doing a happy dance. He was always eager to have nakku in his room and now she is but sadly without him. Hope he joins her asap.
So ravi's chapter is over he asks for forgiveness and our sweet heart Dutta graciously accepts to take the responsibility of ravi's family.
I guess we are coming to a closure. I don't know whether you're enjoying IKRS or not but now I feel that LTL was such a GREAT show. I'm starting to value LTL so much more now.
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Posted: 9 years ago
Like always superb update Hammie.. 👏
So tasha married and that too in hospital..finally dutta's wish fulfilled but sad they are not at home...
Hammie you dont leave a chance to surprise marriage at hospital .. 😊
Mother's happy and bajji hve to wait poor guy ... 😆
Ravi feeling sorry for his deeds and our hero like always will help needful..
Marvelous update dear...
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Mubarak mubarak shaadi ho gaye .woh bhi bahut hatky hospital mein .Awww hammie you are great .bharti ka message range le aaya Thank you so much
Waiting for next update soon
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Hammie Hammie Hammie,
I am here,
had to finish before u post ur next UD,this BB gave me d opportunity to know u.Alhamdulillah ye wish bhi puri ho gyi mera.

u know i was having a hard time to restart after a break, n i m glad that ryt now i m back to life.i am so sorry i was late to finish it,but i am not as slow as u,ur readers r eagerly waiting for ur ud,plz do it soon.

i dont know from where to start,read so many parts at once it has become too hard to comment.n even if i comment u wont remember what u wrote urself 😆

overall it looks like a family drama to me,with all elements of brilliancy in terms of storytelling.i loved how u described d action scenes,it was like watching it live.u have done an awesome job hammie dear.at first i thought there were too many characters there,how things r going to b balanced?.but after making it upto 25th part, i am so glad u have justified d presence of every character in duttas life, u have done a fantastic job here too. 👏👏

update as early as possible, cant wait more.

I am tired of d fact that u keep saying sirf panch log, panch log.now u cant add me too?yaar kab CHAY sunne ko milega mujheee?????

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