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just4this

@just4this

Voyager

Posted: 10 years ago

#271

Anxiously waiting for the family dinner date

Thank u for this wonderful emotional story

Waiting...

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rlaks

@rlaks

Beginner

Posted: 10 years ago

#272

Loved the story and waiting to see what happened in past. Why they were separated? Also waiting for the dinner nite and to see how Khushi feels for Mohan. Update soon pls .

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Manasa

@ManKiBaath

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Posted: 10 years ago

#273

Mira, that was another feather in the cap kind of a chapter. The delicate way that you manage to express the concerns of the grand old ladies or the nuanced introspection of Khushi and Arnav or the edgy banter with the texts - now that is what I call style with substance and I am glad to say that I fell for both 😊.

The spring in his step, the smile on his face, and the murmurs to himself - some butterflies in the tummy have a strange way of controlling what you do or say or when you say or do. Really glad to see Arnav could feel some of those butterflies.

The grand old ladies (Sumitra and Manorama) in Arnav and Khushi's life are worth a mention here. Anyone who thinks that old people are just worn out threads just waiting to get cut, one look at these ladies will make them realize that those thread are infact the invisible threads that pull you back just enough at the right times to put you back on the exact path. Glad to see that their blessings are with Arshi.

The sleep texting was an absolute fun to read. This is one of the exact reasons we love our Arshi. The banter was just about perfect and the boldness of Arnav was just about apt and Khushi's response was just about right.

Waiting for Sumitra to meet the reason behind Arnav's spring in his step and waiting to see how the kids get along with each other. I am sure they will give their parents not just reasons but the right reasons to become Arshi again.

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Mirabell

@Mirabell

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+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#274

Originally posted by: sman
Just checking

Yes, there will be an update Tuesday, March 24th morning, IST. :)

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sman

@sman

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Posted: 10 years ago

#275

Originally posted by: Mirabell

Yes, there will be an update Tuesday, March 24th morning, IST. :)

That is today evening for me...wupieee thanks Mira

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

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+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

#276

is it Tuesday already in india

damn, its just 10 pm Monday here yet

waiting eagerly for the update

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Mirabell

@Mirabell

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Posted: 10 years ago

#277

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Mirabell

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Meena

@chotidesi

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+ 5

Posted: 10 years ago

#279

You know, I really like the way you give us an entry into Khushi's mind. It's different from how other stories show us that glimpse- there's something of us peeking in, instead of being granted all access. Does that make sense? It is as if there are still bits and pieces that are hidden from me, but I am allowed to see... just enough.

I love Mohan. I love, love, love him. He's so endearing, just like your other characters- but he's just so... innocent. There's something about his reticence that makes me root for him to grow, to develop. And you've done an absolutely fantastic job depicting his character as someone with ASD- some of my close friends happen to have it, and I can just... it's very, very well done. Fantastic job with this, M. I am impressed. (side note: Meera-mama made me giggle).

Ah. Arnav and Khushi- that is truly what we all come here searching for, isn't it? These two, your Arnav and Khushi just... sigh. That connection between them is so potent, still so there. This Arnav is so convincing- I would have caved much much earlier had I been Khushi 😉 You know, watching these two always makes me smirk. Because we know, but they don't- it's like watching a romance play out between your friends. Everyone knows that there is something going on, but it is more amusing to merely watch it rather than spur it on.

I love Maya and Arnav- and Maya in general- I LOVE the way you've taken a risk and made them friends instead of enemies. It's refreshing, it's a lovely, lovely friendship.

I can see this coming together. Now make him slam her against a wall and... I will have to wait, won't I? But it'll be worth it. I just know it.

Love always,

G :)

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Jignasha

@Chokri_ASR

Rocker

+ 6

Posted: 10 years ago

#280

Ahhh what an update, that was simply superb... and M, it was not slow at all, the descriptions and emotions that you provide with every update makes me feel part of the scene. Your words capture me and I am lost in the world of Second Chances... so thank you! And feel free to take this just the way you have envisioned because it's pretty spectacular.

Can I tell you that I am falling in love with this Arnav more and more as you tell this tale? There is something about him that is just so real and relatable... and this update made me realize he probably needs this second chance more than Khushi. His loneliness coming through despite him having loved ones around him. The guilt he is holding inside of him regarding Mohan, and also to some extent letting Khushi go over ten years ago... my heart ached for him.

Mohan, our little shining star made a progress extending his hand out towards Khushi. And I bet the more she is around him, along with Meera, this little boy will reach all the way to the top like a shooting star. That is one part of this story I am really looking forward to.

Khushi feeling guilty is warranted. She needs time and I know she will follow her heart when the time is right. You can't push someone when they are not ready. To me she has made progress with even allowing herself to think of him out loud, though it seems he never left. Your first love always holds a place, doesn't it?

Overall I loved loved loved this update and your style of writing has sucked me into your world... it's been awhile that a story has done to me.

And now, I shall wait my dear yaara for another spell binding update.