Arhi SS: Tewari & Sons, No. 23, Chandni Chowk (THREAD I)

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RasgullaSP

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Posted: 11 years ago

#471

Chapter 4:

Hari Prakash is the very definition and description of chaaploosi. That Anand Raizada fought criminal cases is an aberration, Anjali is a disappointment and the entire family coming together to spend some time is looked down upon as celebration of disloyalty by all towards his mistress! He is so funny! 😆

Now, sobering up. Why does HP think Khushi is such a menace? What wrong had Khushi done that Poonam got her ousted from the college? Is that because of Anand collapsing before Khushi or there was more to the Arnav Khushi friendship/ non-friendship scene? So many questions... But one thing is common. Khushi never had an easy life. Hand to mouth existence and no completed college education to work towards a better future 😡 No wonder Khushi gives all the Raizadas a wide berth. Woh Dilli ki sardiyon main college ke dhakke kha rahi hain in the present coz of their involvement in her past! 😡 😭

Preeto, Lavanya and Anjali all feel that both Aakash and Arnav are drawn to Khushi. And of course, Arnav is marrying Payal soon. Khushi is still in touch with Aakash. Aur inn sab main Aman ki waapsi... What is in store for poor Khushi? 😭 The Tiwari-Garima angle is more than what Khushi is ready to handle aur unn sab main Khushi ka past... 😭

ARNAV KO Q FARAK PADTA HAIN DAMN IT!!!!! She has cried enough coz of the Raizadas... ek aur baar sahi. He has no right to be bothered... yet...

HP, Hira Singh (poor Hira shares his surname with Payal 😆), Major Anand Singh Grewal, 'AnandRams', Mrs. Anita Chawla... every character isnt just introduced. You always lace their entry with enough information to allow us to have an idea in our head what the character is all about 👏

Edited by Rasgulla_sp - 11 years ago

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RasgullaSP

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Posted: 11 years ago

#472

This is only the second time that I have done this, leaving separate comments for each chapter. Also, I had stopped reading and commenting on on-going stories long back. Currently, I dont have time... well just had enough to squeeze in my comments. But your story is so fantastic, the writing so fabulous (and I know the final outcome will be fantabulous) that I gave myself no option but to read and comment.

I can see you are quite regular with updates. Please please please please keep it up. Also, pleaseee pleassee pleassee dont disappear, leaving the story incomplete. My heart wont be able to take another FF heartbreak 😭 It is a humble request

Thanks for penning this brilliant piece. I am waiting for more 😊

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DiyaS

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Posted: 11 years ago

#473

I saw the link to this FF posted in the Sanaya New Shows thread ... and knowing it was by you, YB, I came running to check it out!!! Caught up with all the chapters in one sitting .. you write beautifully, and I love the way you're bringing out the layers in each of the characters and the story as a whole ... also love the way you intersperse the past with the present.

All the characters, known and unknown, are fascinating and unique, and they all seem to have their own skeletons .

Waiting for the next update 😃

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motichoorladoo

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Posted: 11 years ago

#474

Originally posted by: Rasgulla_sp
This is only the second time that I have done this, leaving separate comments for each chapter. Also, I had stopped reading and commenting on on-going stories long back. Currently, I dont have time... well just had enough to squeeze in my comments. But your story is so fantastic, the writing so fabulous (and I know the final outcome will be fantabulous) that I gave myself no option but to read and comment.

I can see you are quite regular with updates. Please please please please keep it up. Also, pleaseee pleassee pleassee dont disappear, leaving the story incomplete. My heart wont be able to take another FF heartbreak 😭 It is a humble request

Thanks for penning this brilliant piece. I am waiting for more 😊

Enjoyed reading all the wonderful comments that you posted on this thread.

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Amiarisme

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Posted: 11 years ago

#475

just when i thought i could like ponam raizada things went downhill!!!!

what must she have done for khushi to leave college

actually what must have been the reason is the bigger question here.

arnav can not makeup for the wronged past. no one can.

i am loving aakash.

liking lavanya's faince.

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abcdefg1234567

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Posted: 11 years ago

#476

Beautifully build up plot dear. The way you're writing past and present parallel is just helping to understand and feel story better. You have written so well dear tgat I can now fairly understand each character pretty well including HP and his wife. Waiting for past to unfold. Please PM me whenever you update. Thanks. Keep up the nice job.

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sman

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Posted: 11 years ago

#477

any luck today? desperately waiting

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Anamika100

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Posted: 11 years ago

#478

What an utterly satisfying read this is. Each time, you give the characters and events greater detail and story becomes like a rich tapestry.

I am so fascinated by Khushi because while you are showing some details, she is mostly shrouded in mystery. Another mystery is Poonam Raizada and I cried when I found out Khushi had to leave college. Is there no end to the damage that Raizada family has done to her?

Love Anjali Di and I also love the depth in Hari Prakash.

By the way, the pace is perfect. This story like fine wine needs to be savored and consumed very slowly😉.

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1chilly

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Posted: 11 years ago

#479

Originally posted by: sman

same to same

I love thursdays too! 😉

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1likeNoOther

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Posted: 11 years ago

#480

Heyyy just read this story by chance and its awesome!!!!! Each update is so detailed and well written that i can see everything happening in my head. There are so many revelations in the story and i can't wait for them to unfold!