Smitar's OS SERIES: TRYST IN THE CARDS #3 OS 7 (7~31) Link to #4 Pg 1 - Page 10

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Posted: 10 years ago
#91
Wow!! Don't know where to start. This was one heck of an update!!! I can't believe I'm saying this, but I am so loving this version of Shyam and hating this ASR! 😳 While, I'm normally against separation in married couples (having experienced it 1st hand), I think Anjali got what she deserved... a good dose of reality because everything Shyam said was true!!! So proud of Khushi for being strong and not turning into a weeping mess. 😛

Smita, Rashmi... You 2 are spoiling us readers by writing/posting such frequent updates!!! Love you both for this.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#92
Smitaji
I am normally a person of brevity but I am not going to be brief here. There are a lot of things about this story that hit all the right notes. FIrst and foremost, Khushi dealt with a horrible situation in a calm and mature manner. Loved it when she questioned him about ladies calling him about work. NO hysterics needed to make your point. Also when she brought up the fact that Anjali did not confront her husband. Secondly, your Shyamji is absolutely on point, A normal man with no hidden psychoses unlike a certain pair of ASRs. You made my day when Shyam read the Riot Act but oh so softly to the neurotic woman who is his wife. Loved all of his actions and recommendations. Urging the family to stop mollycodling her. Walking out of the mansion and asking her to decide where and how she wants to live her life. And most importantly asking her to see a therapist. Something long overdue. I think she has probably fooled everyone and herself too by immersing herself in pooja paath and giving an impression of normal. I don't know if that is how you intend to depict Anjali but that was a problem with the show. A grown woman supposedly in love with her husband but unable to confront him about her doubts should trigger alarm bells all around. Her overdependence on her brother seems to me to be a sign of a control freak who likes to be the center of the universe of those around her. She definitely needs therapy. I would love it if you could bring out some of these traits in your story.
Arnav also needs some therapy and separation from his sister. Obviously he will be getting a much awaited contrition and redemption track here. Varna gaadi aage kaise badhegi? But he also needs to look at why he did not raise the issue with his jiju himself. They seem to have a good relationship. Why did he chose the underhanded way? I think that too can be explored here.
Ok I think I said enough. looking forward to the rest
PS: My mom loved it specially when he told Anjali off

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Posted: 10 years ago
#93
i wonder how ur going to unfold this story from here as our dear asr already damaged this before it started .
nice story i am loving it .
thank u
eagerly waiting for the next update
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Posted: 10 years ago
#94
awesome..
happie dat truth is finally out...nd shyam is actually right...anjali I spoiling her lyf plus arnav tooo...
thnxx fr pm
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Posted: 10 years ago
#95
This is by far the best OS according to me... :D I love the way Shyam stood up and gave a reality check to Anjali...Even in the actual story, I hated Anjali's character...and felt as a woman she was never independent and was a parasite (which women should never be)

Thank you for writing such wonderful stories! You are so gifted! :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
#96
I am loving Shyam and I never thought I would say that!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#97

Originally posted by: segad

Smitaji

I am normally a person of brevity but I am not going to be brief here. There are a lot of things about this story that hit all the right notes. FIrst and foremost, Khushi dealt with a horrible situation in a calm and mature manner. Loved it when she questioned him about ladies calling him about work. NO hysterics needed to make your point. Also when she brought up the fact that Anjali did not confront her husband. Secondly, your Shyamji is absolutely on point, A normal man with no hidden psychoses unlike a certain pair of ASRs. You made my day when Shyam read the Riot Act but oh so softly to the neurotic woman who is his wife. Loved all of his actions and recommendations. Urging the family to stop mollycodling her. Walking out of the mansion and asking her to decide where and how she wants to live her life. And most importantly asking her to see a therapist. Something long overdue. I think she has probably fooled everyone and herself too by immersing herself in pooja paath and giving an impression of normal. I don't know if that is how you intend to depict Anjali but that was a problem with the show. A grown woman supposedly in love with her husband but unable to confront him about her doubts should trigger alarm bells all around. Her overdependence on her brother seems to me to be a sign of a control freak who likes to be the center of the universe of those around her. She definitely needs therapy. I would love it if you could bring out some of these traits in your story.
Arnav also needs some therapy and separation from his sister. Obviously he will be getting a much awaited contrition and redemption track here. Varna gaadi aage kaise badhegi? But he also needs to look at why he did not raise the issue with his jiju himself. They seem to have a good relationship. Why did he chose the underhanded way? I think that too can be explored here.
Ok I think I said enough. looking forward to the rest
PS: My mom loved it specially when he told Anjali off


Who wants brevity, Seemaji?😆


Anjali in the serial was neurotic. A perfect case for therapy. She lived in a make-believe world, in a bubble where everything was made to order, a world her brother sustained for her.

ASR's sole job in the family was to fund her lavish lifestyle and maintain & repair her perfect dream world.

Anjali was one of the most selfish characters in the serial. In fact, at times, she seemed to deserve a rotten apple like Shyam.

Bad judgement runs in the family. Both Arnav & Anjali suffer from it. So glad your mother enjoyed the telling off..ha..ha.. Now it is ASR's turn to face a few home truths.😉


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Posted: 10 years ago
#98
Anjali seriously need a counsellor
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Posted: 10 years ago
#99
This OS The Other Woman is really good. It's nice to see Shyam standing up to Khushi and making Anjali realise how much immature sometimes she is. Also she has to stop running to Arnav for every other issue.
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Posted: 10 years ago
...and the bulldozer,as a teacher for Arnav's subtlety was awesome too!

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