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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Yagyaseni

Awesome update, darling!!!! Oh My Arya and Panchi!! really that shouldn't have been her reaction!!!! Entry of Maha Khalnayaks!!!! And how to forget my naughty Bhrathasri krishna!!! Very well written!! Update soon!!!

Dhanyavaad behna!!!
Your Aarya would not have expected a girl to react like that on seeing him shirtless!!😆
Thanks for replying!!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Sha-Ja-Fanatic

Mamashri ko bhrata Krishna avashya sambhal lenge! Pp's reactions towards eachother are always hilarious! I loved the update! Thanks for the pm and update soon!

Thank you dear! Updating it!!!😳
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: LiveYourDream

PP were alone and they wasted the opportunity by screaming at each other?😊! I hope they get together soon 😉
This is getting very interesting...waiting for the next update

So what did you want them to do while they were alone.😉 😆
Thanks for replying!
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: KHUSHI-99

👏 Hello..I was just looking for MB fanfics and got this..its very nicely written and thought...I mean the entire story is so adventurous ...Will like all parts till part 11 later...not commenting separately becoz all are good...but the Pyramid of sorrows is well thought...

And all the following couples :
Vausena-Vrushali ,Bheem-Hidimba and Yudhishthir-Devika are also done nicely...glad you din't link Panchaali and Yudhishthir /Bheem,But one confusion...are Bheem-Hidimba married?? I hope to see some of Bheem -Hidimba,Yudhishthir -Devika in the next one but along with some more adventure:), And I love when all brothers discuss together about things...especially that Vausena-Vrushali date...Please do continue ,will wait for the update :)...

@bold - No dear!
Now I am really happy that you liked the idea and the FF. As I said earlier the it is your all's comments and appreciation that encourages and excites me to write ahead.
Thank you and keep reading!!!!!😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
@bold - No dear!
Now I am really happy that you liked the idea and the FF. As I said earlier the it is your all's comments and appreciation that encourages and excites me to write ahead.
Thank you and keep reading!!!!!😳
Oops wrong assumption...Yes it is good..I wanted something which involves entire unit..this quest is fun..I will keep reading..hope you update soon😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
Will update tomorrow guys. :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
Get ready to go 'dola dola'.
Lots of dance and music in next update.
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Angela_Grokes

Get ready to go 'dola dola'.

Lots of dance and music in next update.

Great! Always wanted to see something like that...please free us of this suspense as soon as yoU get time.
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Posted: 11 years ago
Thank You to all those who have been reading this FF which I have been writing!
It is the encouragement and appreciation from all of you which encourages me write better and to write.
A big thanks to all of you!!!
forever friend with a rose
Edited by Angela_Grokes - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago

Chapter 12 : When She felt It for the First Time
"We are back!!", shouted all of them as they entered the Secrecy. "Oh! So now all of you are finally back! Thank God!", Paarth welcomed them back. "Paarth where is Panchi?", asked Subhi. "She might be in her room. ", Paarth told Subhi. "Did something happen?", Subhi asked with a smirk. Paarth instantly remembered the incident which took place that morning, "No!", he replied. "Not much! I was preparing for test and so was she!", he gave an excuse. But Subhi knew very well that what all happened. So giving a smile at the tensed Paarth she proceeded to Panchi's room. "Paarth! Hungry? ", Vrushali asked. "Yes! Can you please! please! cook. Even rats are tired of jumping in my stomach now!", Paarth said with a puppy face. "Sure! I'll cook something!", Vrushali smiled and went straight to the kitchen. "Yudhishtir bahiya! Devika ji called from your office. She had some important work to talk about. So whenever you are free please talk to her. Okay.", Paarth known to what was the important work said with a little smirk. Yudhishtir gave a sharp gaze at Paarth. "For some reason I guess he knows!", was the instant thought that struck Yudhishtir when he observed Paarth's hard to hide smirk. "Paarth! Did you think on where did the Scrolls and the Key disappeared?", asked Vasusen. "Yes bahi! And look what I found!", he said so and ran to bring his tablet. "See! The locationer has traced some particle traces of the Key in the nearby environment. But unfortunately they are not strong enough to construct it's exact location. So we will have to wait until we get traces which can help us steadily.", Paarth informed. Vasusen nodded in agreement. "Come one you hard working people! Get a life! get some food!", Vrushali called all of them for dinner.
Vrushali was on the terrace. She was immersed in the beauty of the moonlit night. "Beautiful! Isn't it?", Vasusen said as he joined his sweetheart in the silence. "Yes! But it doesn't mean that the night should continue for ever!", Vrushali told. "What do you mean?", Vasusen asked. "Vasusen! How long will we live like this?", she asked him with a soft voice of expression. "What do you mean by - live like this?", Vasusen asked, confused. "Like this means how long will we be just lovers. When will we marry?", she asked with a smile. "Vrushali! Why such a question all of a sudden?", Vasusen asked with the ever-soft voice which he possessed. "Because I don't want to be your love. I want to be your wife. I want people to know me by your name. I want people to know that I am yours. I want them to know about our relationship.", Vrushali explained him. "My brothers know about us dear!", Vasusen reminded her. "No Vasusen! I am not talking about them. I am talking about the society. I want the society to know about us. I want everyone we know to know about us.", Vrushali expressed her wish. "Ok. dear. If you ask for that. We shall marry soon. And don't you worry, we will marry in a proper way just like a true wedding takes place.", he assured her. "I knew you would understand.", Vrushali said, smiling. "I knew you would say that.", Vasusen said wrapping Vrushali in a sweet hug. The couple stood their enjoying their time. In the beautiful full moon night they had decided about a very important step of their life.
"I understand dear!", Yudhishtir talked to his ladylove on the phone. "It has been a month since had a lunch together. It is not fair. We have to meet tomorrow. I don't know how. But we have to. We have to. We have to.", Devika was very angry now and was not ready to listen to Yudhishtir at any cost. "Okay we will meet tomorrow. ", Yudhishtir assured her. "Good! So how are you? You should look after yourself dear. You have been working hard for the company presentation. And I can already notice the tired body needs a rest. I say let us go out of a vacation for a few day.", Devika told him. "No Devika! I have to work even harder in the month approaching. So I have no time to go on any kind of vacation. Yes maybe a the end of the next month when I am free we can.", he told her. "I understand. But if we work together we will be able to finish it faster. So... You can always ask me for help.", she told him. "Sure! Now dear, did you tell anything about us to Paarth?", he asked. "No! But why did you ask this?", Devika was confused. "I guess he knows about us.", Yudhishtir said suspiciously. "How is that possible! We have kept it a perfect secret.", she was shocked. "I can be wrong too. But still I don't know why but I guess he knows!", Yudhishtir was confused at his own thought.
"Here we reach! The Chamber of the Dragon Vase!", Shakuni's joy knew no bounds. "What now? We have to defeat that guardian of this chamber. Right?", Duryodhan asked for reassurance. "Yes we have to! But I see no guardian around!", Dushshasan said. "So that is good. Right! Lets us barge in!", Shakuni said as he got ready to run into the door of the Chamber. But as he ran he hit the guardian shield and fell on earth. "I see this is the guardian. A shield.", Duryodhan said, amazed. "How will we break it?", Dushshasan asked. "Arrows!", Shakuni exclaimed as he got up. "Arrows?", Duryodhan asked, still confused. "Yes! In the Messenger Scroll it is mentioned 'to defeat whom you need arrows keen and sharp' so arrows are going to help us for sure.", Shakuni explained. "I see now! But from where do we bring the arrows?", Dushshasan asked. "Stupid! Not the literal arrows. They are talking about the arrows of wits because such a shield cannot be destroyed using metal arrows. You have to use the arrows of wits to destroy this shield.", Shakuni explained them. "But the question is HOW?", Duryodhan shouted.
Panchi's eyes opened. The howl of some verse she heard woke her up. But when she got up she saw that she was not in her own room. Suddenly some Bengali tongue ritual sound began to reflect into the room. Panchi was driven out of her wits by the sound. "What was that?", she turned around to check. But behind her was a mirror which reflected her own image. "Is this me?", she was shocked to see herself in such finery. She was covered with gold from tip to toe. "Baalis, bajuband, rings, necklaces, maagtika, and God know what else I am wearing. I am wearing more jewellery then the names I know. And this saare attire. Not even saare, an over glorified form of it! It cannot be me!", she was shocked. Suddenly classical music started to be ring in the environment.
"Ha ha hmha
Ha ha ha ha ha"
She was shocked to hear the sound of various Indian instruments at the same time. But the music she was hearing was pure Indian classic. But it was beautiful. Her legs started to move in the direction from where the music was reaching her. "Beautiful!", she said as she opened the door of her room and saw the mansion she was in. Decorated with a thousand roses and a lakh red curtains the mansion was surely witnessing a celebration. The classical music she was hearing was becoming louder as she walked around the floor she was on. But she could see no singers or dancers. Only and Only music could be heard for now.
"Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola"
"God so beautiful! Which song is this!", she was enjoying the music but was becoming impatient to see the dance. She paced with her steps to see where was the site of performance.
"Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola"
Once again the same was heard as she was fastening her step. She was too excited to wait or have patience.

"Lag jaane do najariya
Gir jaane do bijuriya
(Bijuriya bijuria
Gir jaane do aaj bijuriya)

Lag jaane do najariya
Gir jaane do bijuriya"
The echoing voice was melodious and beautiful so she could not wait to see the live performance. Panchi now was enjoying so much that she wanted to join the dancers in their performance. But she could not view any dancing people around.
Baandh ke main ghungroo
pehen ke mein payal
Ho...
Baandh ke main ghungroo
pehen ke mein payal
"Oh my God and I thought Indian Classical music was boring!", Panchi was repenting on her thought with each step she took forward. The sound of the two singing women was so immersing that she forgot that she was not in her home. She was just moving ahead in the direction where the source of the music was located.
Ho
Jhoom ke naachungi, ghum ke naachungi
Now she even started to stamp her feet on the beat of the sound. She was loving the music and the sound both. Unknown to what she was proceeding she was just moving ahead.
Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Now she was hearing the sound crystal clearly. Each rhythm, each word was enough to wake up the dance inside her.

Dekho ji dekho,
Dekho kaisi ye jhankar hai
Inka aankhon mein dekho
Piya ji ka pyar hai
Inki aw mein haaye
Kaisi khankaar hai
Piya ki yaadon mein
Yeh jiya beqarar hai
These line made her think. She was suspicious to their meaning now. 'Inke piya' means a common love of both of the women. No, she can be wrong. She is not PhD in interpreting hindi lyrics.

Haaye haaye haaye haaye

Maathe ki bindiya mein woh hai
Palkon ki nindiya mein woh hai
Tere toh tan mann mein woh hai
Tere bhi dhadkan mein woh hai
Now are they pointing at each other's husbands or each is pointing to the one common love they have. For some reason she was now getting confused with the meaning of the lyrics. And this thing annoyed her a lot.

Chudi ki chan chan mein woh hai
(Chan chan chan chan
Chanak chanak chan
Chanak chanak chan)

Kangan ki khan khan mein woh hai
(Khanak khanak khan
Khanak khanak khan
Khan khan khan)

She now was moving slowly to interpret the lyrics properly. "What do they mean?", she shouted.

Chudi ki chan chan mein woh hai
Kangan ki khan khan mein woh hai

Baandh ke main ghungroo
Haan
pehen ke mein payal
Ho
Jhoom ke naachungi, ghum ke naachungi

Dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
She was not liking the music now. Because the lyrics of the song probably meant that the ladies shared a common husband, which according to Panchi was disgusting!
Tumne mujhko duniya dedi
Mujhko apani, ho khushiyan dedi
Unse khi na hona door
(Dola dola dil dola dola dil
dola dola dola)
haan maag me bharlena sindoor
(Dola dola mann dola dola mann
dola dola dola)
Now she was sure that her suspicion was indeed true. And so now her step became fast again but not to enjoy but to stop this song with lyrics which possessed a hard to digest meaning for her.
Unki baahon ka, tum ho phool
(Dola dola mann dola dola mann
dola dola dola)
Main hoon kadmon ki, bas dhool
(Dola dola dola)
"Stop it! Stop all this dola dola", Panchi covered her ears to stop the irritating music, which once she liked a lot.

Baandh ke main ghungroo
pehen ke mein payal
Ho...
Baandh ke main ghungroo
pehen ke mein payal

Ho
Jhoom ke naachungi, ghum ke naachungi

"Smash the ghugroo, throw the payals away! Please stop it!", she sped up to reach the spot and stop the nuisance.
Hey dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
Dola re dola re dola re dola
Haye dola dil dola mann dola re dola
And finally as these verse reached her ears, came into view the great hall below the floor she was on. Two women were performing on the song. "Who are they?", she thought. She was now determined to stop the music so she started moving towards the stairway that led to the floor below.
Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola

Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola
Dola dola dil dola dola dola

Hey dola re !

As the dance came to a halt she kept her foot on the first stair which led to the floor below. Everything blackened. Lights went off. Sounds stopped. Panchi felt like she was blind.
TBC...
STAY TUNED FOR THE PREVIEW.










Edited by Angela_Grokes - 10 years ago


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