Polemic Jackanapes#3: Complete [NOTE + BLOG LINK Pg69]3rd Jan - Page 10

Originally posted by: Viji79

Cursing my AD, didn't even know i am two updates behind.

I don't want to write anything. If you live in Pune, i would just meet you and give you a tight hug.

Originally posted by: 1chilly

When can we expect an update?

Originally posted by: vgedin

Im going to be travelling this week, Charu. So update on Monday 😊

Originally posted by: vgedin

Im going to be travelling this week, Charu. So update on Monday 😊

Twiggy,

Am glad I waited till I found some peace to read. And what an opening - a girl who relishes her food is a sight to behold for me. I was wondering during the dinner why Khushi wasn't aware of Arnav's mood. But later you explained her long day and how she missed the signs...Now their love-making. What should I say? Of course, in earlier updates, Khushi has displayed great maturity than her age demands. But still she was young. Arnav's thoughts clearly explains this and Khushi's realization it was beautifully done. I loved how she discovers her power as a woman. Its something Twiggy. I really loved that part...

The beauty was that she didn't plan it like a seduction or anything. It was a natural discovery and that highlightens its beauty according to me ----She welcomed the fear of the unknown here, it thrilled her. She wanted to see what lay ahead, wanted to experience it, enjoy it. In that moment - with the stormy eyes and the stubbled jaw, the messy hair, his chiselled frame evident even through the blue checked shirt with its sleeves rolled up to his elbow - he looked every bit like the forbidden fruit she wanted to taste.--- Here she was waiting for him to guide her as usual...but then it was a day of surprises for her.

I guess this part started paving way for her discovery "He made no attempt to move her hand from where it was. Instead, he brought his face closer to her's; "Please" he urged, in all humility. It was said with such tenderness and fervour, she didn't know how she was supposed to respond. But the madness in his eyes made her feel as if her blood was gushing through her veins. She felt powerful - something she had seldom allowed herself to experience in the confines of a bedroom.---- Here I liked one more aspect you wrote, Khushi admitting that she seldom allowed herself to feel powerful in bedroom. I felt it a reality. Ok my thoughts can be based on my assumptions hence I don't feel confident to put it out here. Anyways what I wanted to convey here was that I loved Khushi's admission.

Now this part I simply loved it- Smart and precise scripting - from Arnav's POV - it felt like he was seeing her for the first time as a woman. And his stunned amazement was neatly done.. and later he was a goner...

"He had been the one to introduce her to every aspect in a relationship, including the physical. He had held himself back till she turned the right age, till she felt ready, till he was sure she was ready. And even then, he had been careful every step of the way, not wanting to make any mistakes. Not wanting to break her trust, or the faith her parents had placed in him".

"Khushi wasn't sexually demanding but she had always been curious, and unabashedly so. It had been difficult for him to see her as a woman who was aware of her own sexuality and sure of the same. To accept that she wasn't a child he was seducing, but a woman he was making love to. He had seen her as a young woman whom he had introduced to the realm of physical love, someone who was still discovering herself".

"But that was until this moment. When he watched her undress in front of him this time - the artless yet bold seduction, not teasing but sure and proud, a simple yet splendid gesture to tell him that she was his to love and to possess hit him in the face like a splash of cold water. This was no little girl he had to tiptoe around. Here was a woman who wanted to love him and be loved".

I loved Khushi's boldness...-----He didn't, because what he was witnessing was in itself something momentous. She was taking charge of her own body and his, doing as she pleased and demanding what she wanted. She had always been open to experiment but there she'd follow his lead. This time, she held the reins. It was as if he was witnessing her sexual awakening of sorts, and he was enthralled. ---- You have simply outdone yourself Twiggy. So elegantly you have written about their intimacy.

Loved this part where she looked at him - that look speaks volumes I guess --- She looked at him, trying to say that it was time. It wasn't their first time - but it was a first. Earlier, he had possessed her. Now, she possessed him. He was hers as much as she, his. She savoured that feeling for a few long moments, eyes closed.

"He must really care for you, Arnav. I didn't know you meant so much to him."

He smiled and placed his arm around her; bringing her closer, "It isn't just me, Khushi. Sinha has always been like this, he is strict and very demanding as a boss, but he treats all his people like his children. He saves all his words for the court, in life he lets only his actions speak for him." ---- I love this Sinha...you have painted him beautifully even though he has not come into scene by himself before..only through mentions...but nice image you have given him "So grandfather-y"

When is he planning to send you away to that village to work with all the garbage?"

She smacked him on his chest. "Biomass. And I'll leave the week after the next." --- That was cute...garbage and smack...Khushi looks adorable then...

"It is a good idea... I guess." she replied. "I mean, I don't really know what to say. But yes, theres a good chance you don't get time to do this again, so you should make use of it. Have you thought about where you want to go?" --- I loved her reply...no pressure, honest way of approach...

Nice choice of location and reasoning why he wants to go there...and Khushi's support was admirable

I loved the scripting here - somewhere it connects a chord..."If what she thought was right, he was taking this trip because he found himself lost in the midst of the many things that were happening to and around him, and he just wanted time to take stock of all that and reconnect with himself.

Clearly, she had understood him better than he understood himself. -It's a blessing right? To be understood like that?

Again scripting here amazes me with its depth -----Because if he had any answers at all, he wouldn't need to go out alone in the first place. He had allowed the whole world to answer his own questions, tell him how things ought to be, what made him a man and what didn't. Made his world so noisy that in that cacophony, he didn't even remember his own voice any more. He'd found a glimpse of it when he'd last spoken to Payal. It was cathartic, but he'd only just had a little taste of it. He wanted it all. He didn't expect anything to happen overnight, or over a little trip - but it was a start. - Beautiful! That's what came to my mind when I finished reading the update..