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Posted: 11 years ago
#61
Very intriguing start. I was having mixed feelings while reading it esp about Randhir And Sanyukta. Sanyukta is his wife who left him because she was career oriented. Now that sounds absurd. I am very much curious to know what happened between them. I hope everything goes well and they reunite.
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Posted: 11 years ago
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hello..my name is suchi..n i loved ur story dear..😛concept is really nice n some mystery as well..do update soon!😃
i have send u buddy request..accept it..
may i know ur name?😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Tsuchi

<font color="#cc0033">hello..my name is suchi..n i loved ur story dear..😛concept is really nice n some mystery as well..do update soon!😃
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<font color="#cc0033">i have send u buddy request..accept it..</font>
<font color="#cc0033">may i know ur name?😊</font>


Hi
I'm Ashlesha.
I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
I'm accepting it asap
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Posted: 11 years ago
#64

Originally posted by: infernofyre

Thanks for reading this attempt at a dark fic!
I tried to reply to all of you amazing people who reviewed but it keeps telling me spam n shit..
So all of you amazing people: Thankies!
Reviews are my fuel and I write faster cuz of them😉
Ok, again,
All I ask of you is that you keep all your assumptions aside.
Forget everything on the show. Except Sandhir.
There is only the woman called Sanyukta, her dreams and hopes.
And of course, the man called Randhir and his drive and passions.
That being said, enjoy this tale.
Disclaimer: I don't own anything except a twisted brain and a Dell laptop.
Payment in form of likes and reviews please!

As you already know... the stupid computer erased my review... Technology at times... BUT NOW... I get a chance to redefine my analysis. HAHAHA! Okay... okay... so here goes.

I know I am extremely late. IN FACT. I have never been this late for any of your updates. But stupid life and college catches in the way. I came back home. Ate. And then checked Sadda Haq and immediately started WRITING AND REVIEWING THIS! SO YEAHHH BUDDY. I am sorry though yaar... that it's late. BUT hopefully my long review would brighten your day. 😃 So let's get started... Shall we! Oh yeah... this will be the 4th time reading this. yes... I have another confession to make. I read this the day that you updated... but then I didn't have time for the review. And then yesterday I read it twice... and today... I am reading it again. And I swear I love it more and I find small small things again. Alrighty... enough of the intro... let's get to business.



She could have kicked herself.
That was the thing with impulses wasn't it?
They make you do crazy things. Silly things . Stupid things.
Things you'd give your life to do again and again and again.
Things that changed your life.
Impulses also make perfect things too. And it would be the beginnings of many relationships... and an impulse to talk to people eventually make them your best friends! *cough Ayye cough* *cough you cough*
'Like that kiss. Like every kiss that his lips had stolen from hers.
Like every night she had spent in the cage of his arms.
Because that was what he was, wasn't he?
A gilded Cage.
He'd kept her like a songbird.
And then she'd been stupid enough to fall...'
Alrighty... before anything... I'd like to remember my other post where I had beautifully explained the gilded age during the 1890s and how it tied into the feeling that she had written down. And now I have the chance to go ahead and explain it again... but with less obscurity hahaha! Ash... kudos to you using those very controversial words. It has two tones to it. She had spent in the cage of his arms... cage. that word has a double meaning. And I love you for this. My American friends tell me that I am a bird living in my cage (home) hahaha! That could be negative in there eyes. But a cage also provides support and security. So with Sanyu.. Randhir was her cage. Now you go with the word Gilded. In history, we know that it is like an age of corruption but with showiness and glamour being the main focus. So like a cage that bound her. Songbird. Unfortunately I don't know much about Songbirds and the significance that it has when he kept her like one... But then. the last line...she was stupid enough for her to fall. That. That line just shows Sanyu falling into the pit. NOW... when that is compared to Perse... the same thing... she was stupid enough to FALL into the trap... and that she is caged within the depths of hell...
Sanyukta shook her head at the words that lay across her lap.
Those words had been pulled out of her heart and onto paper. She had found her escape in words and grease.
No. It wasn't working like it used to anymore.
Found her escape in words and grease... ahhh, the famous scapegoat technique... but yeahhh...
The grease had been replaced with a cubicle and the words? They didn't flow like they used to from her heart.
She was a published writer for God's sake.
hmmm. a published writer! I like it... but the grease had been replaced... why?
'Persephone' had been her personal joy and agony.
And now it graced bookstores and people's bedside tables.
Words she had written echoed in millions of brains.
She closed the book with a snap and took a breath.
The words were meant to be therapy and not induce a nostalgic reaction, damn it!
She clutched her forehead as she was thrown back into the worst place in the world.
Persephone was her personal joy... and agony. Yup. this just ties back that Sanyu is being compared to Perse.
Her memories...
(Approximately 4 years, 9 months ago.)
9 months agooo... wow. 😉
Randhir had that flaming look on his face. He was pissed at her again.
"You are getting married?" He spat out the words like they were something bitter that had spoilt the taste in his mouth.
"My parents want me to get married." She sighed.
All her fight had left her, leaving behind a husk of a person, a lifeless container. She had resigned herself to the unevitable fate.
The shore can't fight the tide. And so she let them eat away at her, piece by tiny piece.
He shook his head.
"I told you only I have the right to torture you. I promised you I will make your life hell in this college. And I don't break my promises. You will complete your third year." Randhir's words were more of an order than a statement.
"I.. I'm... I want to. But I can't" She confessed, tears starting to fall.
"Are you sure you want to stay in this college?" his question was a challenge. And challenges was what she took head on. It was her habit now.
"Yes. Yes. I want to stay in this college. Engineering is my life. My passion. And thanks to you I can't do it!" her frustration from the past few months had reached boiling point and she pointed an accusing, trembling finger at him, her eyes screaming curses no one would hear.
No one except him, that is. He knew. He alaways did. He was acknowledged as the genius of FITE for a reason.
See...you still made engineering her passion. Why was it replaced yaar!?
"Then I'll fix it." He had grabbed her hand. His eyes were dark and filled with shadows she hadn't been able to decipher then.
She had given him control over her the very minute she stopped trying to free her hand from his grip.
Woah... so it was Randhir that ended up saving her. But why why whyyy would she say it was the worst place...gah!
(Present.)
'Control' Her fingers flew over the keyboard, hitting each key in a rhythmic tune that now possesed her mind. Like he possesed her.
'Control is a hell of a thing. Once you give it up, you give your old life up.
Control can take you from hell to heaven and back again.
It was always a battle between us. You and I.
We were escapists in our own ways. Liars and cheats. And above all others... we were theives.
You claimed I stole your heart. I told you that you stole all my past from me.
You changed me irrevocably, making me stronger even as a I...'
Her fingers fought on, fighting to capture her thoughts as they flew past her head.
The memories visited her again, this time one that made her hit save and leave her laptop for a glass of warm milk. She abandoned her whole idea of getting anything done and instead, pulled a book off the cupboard.
Well... stealing hearts is a good thing... but stealing the past. Does that have anything to do with engineering?
Not book. A photo album.
Their wedding album.
SHE STILL LOOKS AT THEIR WEDDING ALBUM. SHE LOVES HIM. WHAT'S THE PROBLEM.
She flipped it open, her eyes taking in the photos like she was seeing them for the first time.
She smiled in each and every picture and so did he.
But the truth was, none of their smiles were a reflection of their hopes for marital bliss.
One was a smile of a conqueror.
And the other was the smile of a graceful captive.
So... it's like randhir "conquered" sanyu... and Sanyu was held "captive"
She looked through the album. At photo of those who were her well wishers.
Kaustuki smiling brilliantly at the camera, her arms around Yoyo and Jignesh.
Kaustuki and Jiggy had a mutual breakup and Jiggy had tried to be friendly to Yoyo.
DANG. Still on friendly terms after a break up... nice!
Sahil and Vidushi. They had announced their relationship at the reception. Both had infectious grins on their face, a result of the free flowing wine that night.
YOUUU. ASH. YOU MADE SAHIL AND VIDUSHI TOGETHER. EW. VIDARTH ALL THE WAY MAN.
Parth, the tortured look on his face. She and Randhir had apologised to Parth as soon as they had gotten engaged. Parth had agreed to forgive them, but he had asked for his space. He was in another picture, an arm wrapped around Randhir and one around her. Another fake smile for the camera.
The tortured look on his face?! Why... did they apologize? Because of Vidushi?!?!?!
The last picture brought tears to her eyes.
IT AFFECTS HER SO MUCH. WHY. WHY. why.
Randhir and her, looking like a perfect couple, flanked by family.
It looked like a her dream come true. Her parents were happy on her wedding day. Her brother was being nice to her. And her husband wanted her to purse her dreams.
Isn't the first rule of wisdom that nothing is what it seems?
The world had once again proved itself to be filled with fools.
Her phone rang with a loud noise, pulling her out of her thoughts.
'Parth?' she looked at the screen and put the call on speaker.
"Bhabhi? I heard about the divorce papers from Randhir." Parth's voice was strained
"I have told you many times not to call me that." Sanyukta sighed.
BHABHI! OMG! I TOTALLY LOVE THIS BHABHI DEVAR RELATIONSHIP... Ahhh. *remembers the song... didi tera devar deewanaaa... haye ram... kudiyo ka daale daana* hahahaah!
Parth chuckled "You are my brother's wife after all."
Parth and Randhir had sorted out their issues within a year after Sanyukta and Randhir's marriage. The so called brothers were a force to be reckoned with. Especially when they had a common cause.
I love that they became brothers... a common cause. gosh. this is creeping me out... *remembers what you texted. god no.*
"You can't divorce him. He loves you too much. You love him too much. You can't throw that away" Parth argued.
SEEE. I don't think he'll come in between them... but you. you. you are unpredictable...
"Parth. You won't understand...it's no use telling you. You won't understand." Sanyukta was close to sobs.
The beginning of her marriage had been a battle. She had survived it by the grace of god.
YAAR SANYU... Seriously... eveyone just needs to sit down and talk their problems out. Like... when that happens... then everything else falls into place. Seriously... Seriously... 1000000 of our problems in the world would be solved if people sat down, talked it out, listened to each other... and make things work. Sanyukta just sit with Randhir and talk it out...
And no one except her and Randhir knew the details.
No one knows... but THEY STILL LOVE EACH OTHER!
"Sanyukta. Talk to him. He loves you. I know it ok? He loves you more than you can imagine" Parth urged.
SEEE! PARTH IS SO SMART. Hehehe! I wrote about talking it out and he goes ahead and tells her too. Kya tuning hai!
HE LOVES YOU MORE THAN YOU CAN IMAGINE... this. this... whyyy, Randhir come to me!😳
"He put you up to this, didn't he? " Sanyukta frowned. "Give him the phone."
"Sanyukta?" Randhir's voice was hoarse. Like he'd been yelling.
"Randhir. I can't do this anymore. I have to move on. You have to let me go" she begged, knowing that moving on was impossible.
THEN WHY AREN'T YOU GIVING IN SANYUUU.
"Don't do this to us. Come on Sanyukta!" the sound of something breaking in the background shook her.
"What did you break this time?" She asked, concern overpowering her anger.
"A vase. I'm not hurt. Parth is okay as well" Randhir answered before she could inquire about them.
See... they know each other extremely well. Sanyu yaarrr... he puts himself in danger...
"See? You keep breaking things!" She yelled at him.
"You keep breaking my heart" he countered.
OWWW! BURN! Want some aloe vera for that burn😆😆
" Randhir...you can't understand me. My heart was broken as well. I was her mother. I was her mother and I lost her as well." she said between sobs.
GOSH. NO. THEY ACTUALLY HAD THE BABY?! WHAT! EVEN. (I know I know... I have already read it.)
"Sanyu...I don't" he protested.
LET HIM FINISH YAAAR!
"Goodnight Randhir."
The phone and her world went silent with a click.
She pulled out another album.
It was picture of hope.
Soon to be parents.
SOON TO BE PARENTS... so that means she had a miscarriage... ah huhhh.
And then the frame shattered.
Just like their hearts.
The frame shattered just like their hearts... woah. GREAT IMAGERY YAAR...
She sobbed herself to sleep.
Just like she did everynight.
...
Randhir stomped out of Parth's apartment, a fire burning in his eyes, His fist clutched a spare key to someone's apartment. She was going to let him in. There won't be any closed doors. Not again.
YES! I love you for this Ash... you made him still determined...
...
He smirked as he looked at the book that was lying on his coffee table. He had been looking at it the day before and it had been left open at the middle somewhere.
The page read:

'Like that kiss. Like every kiss that his lips had stolen from hers.
Like every night she had spent in the cage of his arms.
Because that was what he was, wasn't he?
A gilded Cage.
He'd kept her like a songbird.
And then she'd been stupid enough to fall...'
"You'll fall for me soon" he traced the name on the cover.
"I'll make you" he promised, looking at the photo of her that he kept stashed away in his wallet.
HADES HADES HADES HADES HADES ALERT. THIS IS SO SANDHIR/ PERSE AND HADES. OKAY... you messed with my mind... i know it.
See. This is where I think I was right. Because this is the "I'll make you fall in love with me" attitude. And Hades has this. I can't wait to see what will happen next yaarrr!

...

Wrap.
No potatoes plz.
U can flame me and critique.
Loved it? Hated it? Speak up!
Love,
Ash!


Yaar. Sorry Ash! I have been awful I know... But you know yesterday I spent an hour and 30 minutes... and it all went away within a second. I was so upset because that was my longest review that I have ever given anyone... but let's forget it and think about the next chapter...

There are two ways that this can happen.

Sandhir wala in the sense that Hades will hold her captive again... so that she falls in love with him... and I think that is the best way...

Sarthwala... now. Of course I must be overthinking and using my brain too much but I think... that Parth can be like secretly in love with Sanyu... and so he will go through the depths to separate her and Randhir so that he can have her to himself. And so... like I don't know... I feel like maybe Parth could be Hades as well.

But ... from the info that you have given about Parth... especially the line that Randhir loves her more than she can imagine makes me think it's Sandhir wala... and honestly. I think there wouldn't be a Sandhir FF if it was with Sarth... hahaha! You get what I mean!?!?!

I totally want to know more about the background and why her engineering was replaced... why she doesn't want to be with him WHEN SHE CLEARLY LOVES HIM A LOT...

AND WHY CAN'T THEY BE JUST AMAZING TOGETHER.

Hahaah! Di... I can't believe you told me not to read this. I am in love with it. It's already the 1st chapter. Again di.. sorry about it being so late. And I know it's bad that I wrote all of it yesterday... but then I had to study yaar... I have my last test tomorrow! WHEW. then I got to make sure to do summer assignments and a Hatke Sandhir Story 😉😉😉

By the way... now it's my turn to be despo and ask for your review! 😆

AND AND AND... CAN'T WAIT FOR THE PLOT THICKENS. AWH. MY VIDARTH YAAR. LOVING IT.

OKAY. I GOT TO GO. LOVE YOU!
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Posted: 11 years ago
#65
res
unres!

this ws very intriguing!!
i am loving this story to the core!!!
grl u r an awsome writer!!!!
Edited by chowanisha - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#66
beautifully updated
u didn't pm me this time ..
plz do pm me next time.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#67
I just absolutely loved it.That was so intense and possessive RanDhir.
Brilliant update .
Do update soon.
I am just loving your update
Edited by anjipankaj - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#68
It was awesome update it was really heart touching n thanks alot for pm 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
#69
Hey... dis ws fab...
N d story is very intriguing...

Luved d storyline... plz update soon n thnx for d pm😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
#70
Loving this story to the core!!

Beautiful update!!!

Keep writing!! Update asap!!

Love,
Sam!

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