When I Was Your Man - Drabble Story - Epilogue - Page 42 (17) - Page 6

Originally posted by: ilovepyaar

Six: The Rebound

"Randhir," she whispered. "Can you kiss me?"

"You will regret it," Randhir told her, removing his arm from around her and looking directly in her eyes.

That was harsh man... super harsh! I mean, I thought you would allow them to kiss. But I am kind of glad you put that like that. It makes it so much more real... YAAR. Step 1 on perfection scale- keeping it real.

"I won't."

"You will."

This had to be the rebound phase. If it made Sanyukta happy, Randhir would willingly be her rebound, the person she used to get over Parth, but he knew that in the end, she would only hate herself for it. And he couldn't bear to see her hate herself.

"Randhir, I was thinking about it for a while. I want to move on."

Exactly. This was the rebound phase.

"Listen Sanyukta, I'm not going to be your rebound," he told her, forcing himself to raise his voice at her.

Wow. That is just again... Plus points! I love your frankness in him. I just loved it.

He wanted to be nice to her, he wanted to explain to her patiently why it wouldn't work, but Randhir knew that she would only attach herself with him more. So he made a split second decision to go back to being the old Randhir - the Randhir who she would fight with, the one who she would react to, the one who would cause her to feel again, even if what she felt was hatred, and maybe... just maybe the same Randhir she wanted once too before Parth came into their lives, the same Randhir who had once been too late.

That is the Randhir we see today still... his ideology... I love how you incorporate his thoughts of knowing what she would think. It just proves how much he understands and loves her. And the fact that even though it will burn him inside, he is willing to revert to the old Randhir so she becomes normal... 👏 Step 2 on the Perfection scale- Bringing the same element and showing understanding.

Sanyukta lowered her gaze as tears fell from her eyes. "I'm sorry."

"You know what Sanyukta," he said coldly, feeling his own heart hurt with the pain he could see this was causing her. "I've been nice to you for too long. If you're so stupid that you can't even move on from someone who clearly used you until he didn't need you anymore, then I have nothing to say to you either."

He stopped the movie, feeling terrible as more tears fell from her eyes.

He couldn't bare it yaar... this makes me😭... awww... so beautiful yaar...

After a few moments of silence, she spoke up, "Randhir... did you... did you move on from me?" she asked hoarsely.

"Yes," he said simply, "But you're my responsibility now, so don't try and leave this place. From tomorrow, you're making us food and doing the laundry."

He said yes?!!?!? WHAT! I get it I get it... it was for her to move on. I hope she isn't jhalli enough to believe it.

He just wanted her to fight back, but she was crying instead. Parth changed her for the worse. He took away the fighter from Sanyukta, he took away her strongest quality. Randhir could feel himself detesting Parth for this very reason. He could feel himself detesting himself. He had been too late. Randhir knew that he would never have let the fighter in Sanyukta die.

AHHH PERFECT! I LOVED THIS! Step 3 on Perfection Scale- Showing appreciation. You make him show his appreciation of her fighting spirit that is lost somewhere in the depths of her rejection and hardships. Beautiful yaar... I loved how he compares what happened with himself saying that he wouldn't have ever let that die...

"The couch is all yours, or you could share the bed with me. It's up to you," he told her, trying to sound smug,
Step 4 on Perfection Scale- No matter how serious it is. Bring in a dialogue or action that will make the reader blush like a tomatoe. Hahahahaha! 😳😉 Naughty Randhir... that made me blush and smile like an idiot while I read that ... hahahahahaha! CUTE!!!!
before he walked towards his room. "Oh," he said, turning back for a moment. "Just wanted to say once again, you owe me, so you can't leave. If you do, I will call your brother."

He saw her eyes widen with fear before he turned back around and made his way to his room and lay down on the bed, feeling extremely guilty for what he just did, but he knew that he didn't have bad intentions at all, and that made all of this tolerable.

That's the Randhir I love! OH MY GOSH! PERFECTION! He didn't have any bad intentions and that's what made it tolerable... yaar. his toleration is amazing... I love how he threatens her to stay because he wants her with him.

I'm going to bring the fighter back, he thought to himself as he lay awake in bed. I will bring back the strong Sanyukta.


Step 5 on Perfection... Bring the reader into a beautiful closing... one that makes the reader feel like "YES YES! YOU GO RANDHIR! YOU'RE PERF."