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Sugi

@Arshi.Sugi.IPK

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Posted: 11 years ago

#251

Part 4 - So itz Arnav awesome update

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Horizon

@Horizon

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#252

Inspired, My friend, Thank you very much for those credits, although I did nothing but it was all that

ar ticulation and dexterity of yours which is weaving this beautiful /enigmatic story.

By that update, you certainly are keeping your readers on tenterhooks.. your characters are so much in character that they bring the live images effortlessly while reading...hide and seek with drapes.. they both on the same side this time...sheeshmahal is emanating heat already..😊

Waiting for that cool gust of wind to delegate..

Love the fact that you are brining them closer in sheeshmahal..

"I am waiting" Inspired.. 😊

Almost forgot to say, those banners are amazing, when I saw the one on the update page, I immly knew it was Kate's, for a second wondered/ felt J ..😆 if you mastered editing as well..

but looks like you did make that edit on the first page, beautifully mysterious...great edits to go with your profound story..

Edited by Horizon - 11 years ago

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esamoe

@esamoe

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#253

Came across your FF now and I loved it! Read it all in 1 go ...

Prologue:

- could u please translate the hindi parts in english just a request.

So Khushi was hired as a maid to look after the sick man who I'm assuming is Akash?

Shyam and dadi seems to be evil here.

Very intrigued by the prologue.

Loved all the Characters and how you portrayed them ! All the characters are strong and I love that.

If Payal is educated why isn't Khushi educated?

Every chapter leaves me more intrigued! So its Dhruv not akash that's help captive.. Thanks for giving insight in Dadi's life it really helped to clear things. So Shyam is evil and brainwashed Dadi.I was wrong its Dhruv. I hope Nk,Akash and Arnav already know abou Shyams bad deeds. Loved NK and Dhruv already . Can't wait to see how Khushi helps Dhruv.. When I read how Khushi senses everything about hm and how her heartbeak picked up when she saw him I was thinking oh god please don't let her fall for Dhruv now I'm like What The ASR is dhruv lol its okay if she falls for him now :-) you writing style is captivating and it keeps the suspense going, reading Arnavs point of view its seems like the electric chemistry is mutual. loving Khushi non stop chatter and monologue...

I can't believe it ur first time you damn brilliant! Why only 8-10 parts this story has potential to reach over 30 parts and I'm sure every1 would love to read more..

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IPK007

@IPK007

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

#254

I just caught up with all the chapters and to say that I was instantly hooked by the ingenuity and the thrill of the plot, and the vividness of characters would be an understatement. Your narrative style is so engaging that I enjoyed reading every bit of it.

Oh and you pulled off that plot twist so well, loved it !

Looking forward to discovering what lies beneath the surface :)

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#255

Finally caught up with chapter 4. What a fantastic twist that was! Your narrative skill is very impressive and your writing skill really delightful. Am really enjoying this story enormously😃

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stg1

@stg1

Rocker

Posted: 11 years ago

#256

beautiful part 4! ⭐️ late to comment, though i did read this before but dont know how i forgot to say how much i loved it! u did a beautiful job with the reveal of arnav, i loved his point of view and his remonstrations with his knowing heart and of course my sanki's mice running in her tummy and her obligatory dhak dhak - i KNEW she could never have this reaction to anyone other than arnav love all the deeply tangled threads and the intrigue and thrills of the story - u have a lovely way of painting pictures with ur words and i feel like i'm there with them. cant wait for their romance on the run, kkg trying to contol her acidity and asr trying to control his out of control heart - perfect 😳

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vks11

@vks11

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#257

Loved the story. Very beautifully written.

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-Aurora-

@-Aurora-

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#258

Oh my god! This is an amazingly written story and I cannot get much of it!
Arnav is just what his name suggests - the ocean - calm amd composed but with a turbulence hidden beneath it and our very dear Khushi is just what her name suggests - happiness - flashy and bubbly, a balm to the needed.
Shyam, is the vindictive snake; ready for an opportunity to bite and Dadi, our very own, bitter indifferent personality.
Coming to the story, I actually kept thinking all the time tht somehow though not possible at all, that Arnav and Dhruv look exactly the same. So that when Arnav comes I would have an excuse for Khushi's heebie - jeebies for Dhruv but no! You have flabbergasted me. Arnav is Dhruv; kidnapped by Shyam, posing as Dhruv in front of Dadi and Khushi. Why the kidnap? Lets wait for the story to unfold.
At first I had little doubs over Dhruv's character, but now I guess I am wrong; because Dhruv followed just what Arnav told him to do. Akash has always been the supporting pillar to Arnav and would continue to be so. Anjali, thank god, with her basic possessiveness and religious personality; she does have a backbone now, unlike the serial. She has a good job, part of the AR Industries and is fierce when needed, hopefully.
About, Payal's marriage; that is the beginning of a twist. How Akash and Payal, I hope the destined couple of this story, find their way through its web.

Do update soon and PM me! 😊

Edited by -Aurora- - 11 years ago