SanDhir SS: Burning //Part 8-Pg.41//28/7/14 |Complete|

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akshara

@--Akshu--

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#41

I thought this was a OS :p
But I loved it the way she asked him who gave him the fight to kiss her and our Randhir god lovd his answer she kissed him back,twice haha!

Loved her outburst he kissed her twice that too in the lab they are hawt man !!

Cousin rofl Beti poor Sanyu I am still rofling!

Loved it update soonish Beti love uuu

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Priyanka

@Prizi

Achiever

+ 30

Posted: 11 years ago

#42

Oyye hoyye randhir is jealous nw..
Amazing update

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bewakoofLadki

@bewakoofLadki

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#43

no y would u make it shorter???
plss make it a longggish update
pls

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don girls

@don girls

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

#44

just read both parts to this SS and they both are amazing ...

beautifully written

can't wait to see the next update

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-Cascade-

@-Cascade-

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 11 years ago

#45

Oh my effin Lord!!!
No coherent words can ever describe how mesmerized I am after reading this awesome drabble of yours... I've been rendered speechless..
This is bound to make anyone and everyone spell-bound...
I'm glad to know that this forum is blessed with amazing and brilliant writers who are blossoming every single day.

I loved the core topic of the drabble- Jealousy.
I admire the way you have manipulated the words to portray SanDhir's feelings.
I'm glad that both Sanyukta and Randhir have equally felt the pangs of jealousy. Suits them both..
SanDhir convo just left me laughing.. He was pushing her to her limits. Even I could smell her burning.
Damn girl you are so very good with the dialogues writing..
I'm happy that Riya turned out to be his cousin otherwise Sanyukta might have choked her to death...
Parth's entry was a bit too unexpected for me. He ruined such a mesmeric moment between SanDhir but I'm glad that you incorporated him to payback Randhir.. I could literally imagine Randhir fuming and radiating deadly aura.
Ah! So we are having a glaring contest between SanDhir...

Girl you write with so much expertise that its hard to believe that you are just 14...
The two portions were flawlessly perfect and radiantly enticing.
Everything was so much in sync that it hooked me up till the very end.
The updates were small but sweet and lovely nevertheless...
Do update the next part soon...
Could you PM me when you update?

--With love
Kajal

Edited by --ScarletRed-- - 11 years ago

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Tisha

@BeyondWords

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 11 years ago

#46

You were born as a writer chick!!

The way you sew the emotions in such few phrases with so many scenes!! Commendable!!

I heart you for this!! I didn't want this to end this soon but then we know who you Are! The Drabble queen!!

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Sanchari

@.hea.

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 11 years ago

#47

Shorter? 🤣 Oooh. I like your sense of humor dude 😳

It's so freaking small I could recite from a to z and it'll take me more time pft. Okay, maybe not, but you get my point?! 🤔

That classic she's really my sister/cuz and I'm not even kidding 🤣 Sanyukta like I say, zubaan pe lagaam 😳

"Who gave you the right to kiss me?"

"You, since you obviously kissed me back, both times,"

Talk about being smug 😳 Heck Randhir, what was she supposed do? It's you and kissing and jeez, you could hardly blame her ☺️

Oops someone's bubble got busted 🤣 I can literally see how his face would be after Parth utters the word date. uff, priceless that one 🤣 How many veins did you pop Randhir beta? 😳🤣

You see I'm rofling more than it should be okay but I can't help so 😎

Kripiya karke thoda aur likhne ka kasht mohtarma? 😳

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Arushi Kotecha

@PrussianBlue

Dazzler

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#48

Hey Ananya! Haven't interacted much with you, but I wish I had after reading your drabble-turned-SS! Hugs and kisses to my Tanu (Hitler Ki Maa) for pestering you xP

Both parts were just. No words. Funny, sensual, electric and effective. Aur kya chahiye ek story se? :')

Only one complain! Make the updates longer?

And please PM me when you update? :D

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Unknown

@AnatomyAddict

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 11 years ago

#49

"Cousin is a child of one's uncle or aunt. Shame on you Sanyukta. Tch tch. You don't even know what cousin is?" he replied, the smirk never leaving his face for a second.

^^^^ Favorite line out 😆😆😆

Jealous Randhir trying to get rid of Sanyukta's jealousy... Well he did a great job, until sugar factory decided to join them 🥱

Hmmm... Now you have to update soon! Apparently, it only takes you 10 mins to update (I have my sources😉)... Hmmm, getting my hint yh😆😆

Conti real sooon!

Otherwise, I will get Tanya on you 😈