SwaRon OS - O Re Piya

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She lay there motionless trying to get some sleep but whenever she closed her eyes his image would pop up in her mind. It reminded her that thing she wanted to forget at the present moment. She sprang up and stared at the wall for maybe few minutes before realizing how uncomfortably she was sleeping on the couch. She felt a sense of pain not due to her neck cramped up because he did not reply yet. She looked at the watch. It was 3 am. He must be sleeping peacefully. Maybe he replied and she did not notice it. She picked up her phone and inspected it. 1 msg!! After all he had replied but her smile faded when she was it was actually simmi's msg saying she would not be able to come to college. She threw the phone in frustration and clutched her hair sitting back. A lone tear escaped

His sleep was disturbed. Sharon was all he could think of. He looked back at the day when she came storming asking for his dad,as soon as she knew she hurried downstairs. There in front of his dad she confessed her feelings not entirely a good situation but finally she fell in love with him or had she?? One part of his mind shouted at him... of course she loves you!! Look at her eyes. They are the witness of her love, pure true love! But the other half would scream back saying that if she loved him then why was she afraid of accepting her love in front of everyone?? He shook his head to get rid of the thoughts. This debate was going on since the time he broke up with her! He tried to suppress it but eventually they surfaced. Deep down in his heart he knew she loved him. Maybe it was the time he stopped suppressing his feelings. One more chance. It may hurt but it was love after all...It could give you the greatest joy and even the greatest pain. He loved her even when she had no idea he existed. He was just a guy in the college crowd! Then why was he letting go of her when she wanted to be with him, in his arms for eternity. He longed for it too. He picked up his cell, found her number. Should he call her at this time?? It could probably wait till morning!

She hugged her pillow even tighter trying to ease out her pain. Her eyes were dry and no longer did any tears fall as she was crying for a long time. She cried remembering the moments she spend with him. She cried remembering the care he showed for her. She cried longing for his touch. All has just disappeared. He completed her and for days she felt her heart crying out for him. She closed her eyes feeling his presence. She let some more tears fall and wished he was there, besides her. Deep in thoughts she did not notice the phone ring several times before it finally stopped buzzing.

He retired his phone and placed it back. After all he should have called her in the morning. But he felt a sense of uneasiness. He turned and adjusted his pillows but that did not stop the thoughts to enter his brain. Was Sharon alright?? She wasn't feeling well in the morning too. What about her asthma? He checked the time. 5 am. He wanted to know whether she was alright or not. She wasn't even picking up her phone! What was he supposed to do? He got up and ran towards the door, took out his bicycle and peddled as fast as his body could. His head throbbed with pain but he didn't mind it, the only person he was concerned about was Sharon. He felt his mobile vibrate. He scooped it out. "Sharon"

Sharon sat on her couch fully awake. She wiped her tears and tried to act normal. She had to be stronger. She was stronger than this! His love had made her venerable, venerable to pain. She went and picked up her phone lying on the cold floor. 5 missed calls from Swayam. She smiled but then wondered why would he call at this time?? Was he in pain? She immediately pressed the call button and held her phone near her ear. She heard his voice speak- hello!! Sharon? Kaha ho tum?? Tum thik toh ho?

Mein thik hoon Swayam.. tumne iss waqt phone kyu kiya?? Tum thik toh ho?

Tumhari awaaz se lag nahi raha kit um thik ho!

Believe me Swayam, i am fine! Tumne mere sawaal ka jawaab nahi diya!

Mujhe tumse milna hai...bat karni hai!

Iss waqt?? College mein baat nahi kar sakte?

Nahi mujhe abhi baat karni hai! Open the door!

What??!!

Tumhare darwaze ke bahar khada hoon, darwaza kholo wanra window se aana padega!

She was shocked but happy too. She wanted to hug him tightly and never let go

She opened the door and saw his tensed face. They both stood there without moving, looking into each other's eyes for minutes. Finally Sharon spoke and asked him to enter

Itni kya urgent baat hai?? She asked

Sharon mein...

Tum kya??

Tum roh rahi thi?

Kya?? Nahi toh...

Jhooth mat bolo Sharon tumhari akhein sab baata rahi hain...isliye tum itna wierd sound kar rahi thi

Nahi mein roh nahi rahi thi.. woh shayad aakh mein kuch..before she could say anything else he cupped her face

They both looked into each other's eyes...they both cried realizing how much they missed each other.

Finally finding words to say he uttered do you love me Sharon??

Always Swayam... mene tumse humesha pyaar hi kiya hai! Chupati rahi but my heart was always yours. This feeling is nothing but love!! U made me fall in love Swayam you did!!

I love you Sharon! Nahi reh sakta aur durr tumse... u belong with me...

I love you!! Sorry for the pain that i have always given you

Hey...tumne kabhi mujhe koi dard nahi diya hai... bus khushi di hai!! Just promise tum mera saath kabhi nahi chodogi...

Never...i won't even think of it!!

Coffee??

Nahi chai...

Your wish is my command :D

Jhoothe chappals welcome!!

P.s- this is the result of waking up till 3 in the morning so feel free to criticize 😳

-Rachel

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.nerfherder thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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unres

rach..🤗
this was very well written
short, sweet and swaronish..😳
i liked swayam's internal stuggle with himself and how he finally went to meet Sharon
and the last convo they had..
and the last line of the OS ' your wish is my command'..😳 you had me there
mast re
do write more

thanks for the PM
regards
your carbon copy
nishi😆

P.S. me first..
Edited by Nishi.Kss - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Omg it's beautiful. I so wish aesa kuch jaldi se show mein ho. It's really magical. Write more
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Rachel beautiful OS.
I loved it.

I loved the way u wrote this.
They missed each other. This os was emotional .

I loved the way Swayam understood she cried.
I loved the way Swayam cupped her face.
And stopped her from saying anything.

You penned it down amazing.
Keep writting
- Jasmita

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Posted: 11 years ago
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that was a fantastic and wonderful os... loved it
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Fabulous...
Your style of writing is really awesome...👏
Loved it...❤️
Wish aisa kuch show mein bhi dikhaye...

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Posted: 11 years ago
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Wonderful os... It's beautifully written
TannuVsmSwaRon thumbnail
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Posted: 11 years ago
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That was Beautiful
A blissful piece of writing indeed
The understanding..
The love..
The pain..
The longing..
Amazingly penned 👍🏼
Very SwaRonish and maybe something we all are missing 😔
Felt really happy after reading this 😳
Would love to read more stories from you 😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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it was an amazingg os
if tis is the aftr effects of waking up at 3 am
then i wish you wake up at 3 always
it was just amazingg
from the title to the content
every thing was perfect
i loved how swayam became restless n came to see her
thr longing to be wit each othr
was beautifully penned
the hug in the end gave tis story a perfect ending
all in all a very well formed pleasing read 😛
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Posted: 11 years ago
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i loved it...!! do write more 😳

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