|| Combined FF : Dented Scars || Part 9 , Pg 33 - Page 27

Originally posted by: Grenade

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I know I'm horribly, unforgivably late in doing this. But better late than never? *puppy face*

Sarunforeva

Nidhi! I wish I could hug you infinite times for creating something this beautiful and for making me a part of it. Coming to your update, the poem blew me. It was one of those rare, heart-touching ones that you want to keep reading again and again. It went perfectly with the chapter.

A million bows for the very idea. Hope to read more from you.

..Serendipity..

There were a million ways one could have continued Sandhir's story from where Nidhi left off but one could simply not have done it better than you did. I truly admire your style of writing. Brief and simple sentences that touched my very core and are bound to stay there for quite some time now.

"He realized for the 1st time...
that he had lost her forever!!"

My heart just sank after reading this. So excruciatingly painful and sickeningly true.

arshifan2012

"It hurts when you Love someone deeply , but cannot have them in your arms"

You stole my heart with that line. 😳

Sanyukta's reactions were so realistic that I could picture myself doing the same if I was in her place. (Okay maybe not the slapping part cuz I'm that biased with Randhir. :P ) Overall, a fabulous job in continuing the story. Kudos!

PrussianBlue

Instead of following the curve you took off a tangent. You chose to make Sandhir reminisce their past, giving us a much needed break from a grovelling Randhir and a hurting Sanyukta. I can't express how much I loved it!

Their first date. OMG it was so- Sandhir-like! I could totally imagine Sanyukta paying half the bill. 😛

And God, don't you have a way with words! Every scene you described was playing right in front of my eyes. I've got no freaking idea how mere words can pull such an effect on the reader.

But that's not all there is to your writing. You have a quality that poets possess. Your sentences read like extracts from poetry. There's something so mesmerizing about the way you write that I just didn't want the chapter to freaking end!

Okay, now coming back to the update, as sweet and endearing as the first date was, the ending just about managed to crush my heart. In fact the mention of their past is what made the ending more painful.

"She was broken because
she was reminded of the moment of his betrayal. He was shattered because he
would never be the reason for her happiness."

The sense of loss that these lines portrayed simply touched my heart.

P.S. You made me dig out my fat, old and forgotten dictionary.(It took more than an hour) On the flip side, I just found a new word to describe myself courtesy to your vocabulary; I'm a pluviophile.😆

federized2210

The first paragraph. Such simply put sentences but you were so clear with your point that each one of them stabbed my insides some more. Relatable, realistic and touching. I loved it!

"You are reason behind my smile. And i want to smile all my life...Sanyukta Agarwal, would u want to see this poor soul smiling?" he had said.

And she had responded by bursting into tears...tears of happiness.

Whatever's left of my heart, its yours. Completely. 😳

The betrayal scene was one of the many highlights of your update. Nobody could have described the betrayal scene better. A very sincere hats-off. The knife didn't just cut across Randhir. It affected me just as much if not more. I could imagine everything, feel every single thing those two were feeling.

"And this particular scar was dented deep, so deep that it disrupted her very being."

Hands down my favourite line. Complete justification of the title of the SS.

MitraAvinash

Mitra, you walking melodrama! I'm so running to you for classes the next time I'm participating in a drama. 😆

I don't think I need to tell you how stupendo-fantabulously-fantastical you are. Neither do I need to tell you how bloody amazing your writing is. Because there aren't any words I know that can justify your brilliance.

Are you for real, though? How in the world can someone be so freaking excellent at every genre of fiction- be it tragedy or humor or romance or drama ?

That letter made my cry and laugh out loud at the same time.

Mitra, you are and shall continue to be my favourite inspiration.

P.S. Omg Poor Sahil. Why would you do that? 😭

TheDreamyKid

Honest to God, it felt like I was reading something out of a best-selling romance novel. I wished you would go on forever!

I loved how you incorporated Vidhushi's POV as well. I think it is one of the toughest challenges to infiltrate the head of a negative character and replicate his/her thought process. Kudos to you, Priya for you did that flawlessly.

Your writing seems so effortless and your language is so freaking impeccable that I feel like worshiping you! I would've quoted my favourite lines from the update but I don't think the entire of part 6 can fit in this already drawn out post. 😆 I really should bang my head on the wall for not having read from such a phenomenal writer sooner. I must have been living in a cave all this while.🤔

P.S. Ooh that song! There was a time when I used to listen to it all day long. Needless to say, one of my favourites. I can't explain how fitting it was for this ff.

supriya.ipkknd

Wow! Yet another genius of a writer to look forward to!

I absolutely loved how you described Sanyukta's withdrawal from the kiss. The images of Randhir's betrayal, her struggle to shove them out of her head, failing and recoiling back into her shell was so marvelously depicted that I'm at a serious loss of words.

The parallelism you drew between Sanyukta and Randhir's life and the storm raging outside was breathtaking to say the least.

You took angst to an entirely new level.

"A man like you who can't even respect his mother. A man who treated her like shit! How could I expect that such a person could me!"

A blinding fit of anger and she uttered the words that shattered the last piece of Randhir's heart. I swear I could feel my heart dipping.

"They hadn't recovered from the storm as quickly as the sky."

This was inarguably the most inspiring line I'd come across in a long time.

Last but not the least, thank you for not reuniting them yet. Gave me something to write on albeit disastrously. 😉

SUV_Ashton

If this is how you mess up, I hope you mess up everything you write from now on. You really couldn't have continued it better.

"Its regret, I think that really is the worst kind of pain, yeah guilt is bad, and sadness is bad, but regret is the sickly combination of both."

Wow. That was sheer brilliance.

Never had I imagined I would be reading an entire chapter from the viewpoint of none other than Vidhushi and have such a good time doing so! Yes, she deserved every ounce of guilt you made her go through( a hearty thank you for that 😉) but reading it was heart-wrenching nonetheless. Congrats Sasha, you made us sympathize with the villain. That is quite a feat!

Originally posted by: gujjupari

Okay a warning before I start off with this comment, keep an aspirin near by and be far away as possible for any sharp objects that may cause me harm... I have commented as I have read the chapters😆... Bad Choice😆

Part 1a) That little poem was just amazing! Completely defined the mood of the start! The way you have portrayed the fire, yet the hurt was just brilliant! It was amazingly etched out since I could see it happening in front of my eyes! What a power-packed start!

Part 1b) That was one of the most powerful things I have read in such a small paragraph! I mean you managed to get out emotions in such a compact part! It made me quickly search up the next part...

Part 2) The opening quote stole it for me! Wondering if the opening quote is that good, how will the part be... *Clears everything from her table so she doesn't feel guilty about not studying, continues reading*

"Issi bahane se usne mujhe chuwa toh sahi!"

^^ Talk about being love-struck! That was such a "Naaaw" moment for me😳

Part 3) Desperately tries to find part 3 on page 7... can't find it, had a mental breakdown... Finds part 3 on page 4! Relief rushes in😃

"Fire to water, ying to yang, restlessness to peace" I loved this line! It was simple, yet it eloquently described how imperfectly perfect they are for each other

Aru's love for the rain kicks in! I loved that song when it first came out! And it was used perfectly alongside with the rain and their dance! I feel myself melting😆

The date and rain scene was just mesmerizing!

Part 4) A perfect quote to start off with the part! I swear this is your signature style Anu!

"If nostalgia could kill, she would be long dead" *mouth falls open* That is such a brilliant statement! Perfectly describes heart break!

And that flashback was just a cherry on the top! Very well written and necessary to progress the story

And that closing stanza (?!)... That was sooo emotive! It just added to Sanyukta's pain written at this point!

Part 5) That Parth-Randhir conversation was brilliant! And when Randhir agreed to "endanger his love itself", it was another perfect "Naaaw" moment for me!

I was thinking that the story will progress in to a revenge story, but then that letter was just an unexpected yet beautiful twist!

Even though that letter was meant to emotive, those little bursts of comedy were excellent!

OMG! Are they headed for a reconciliation!??!!?

Eeeks!!!!

Part 6) Just Give me a Reason by Pink! Oh-so apt for this fic! Thank You! Now I am going to have this song in my head for the next 3 weeks😆

Vidhushi is such a proper villain!!! I just got reminded of the Komolika song and the hair twirling when I was reading her POVs for some absurd reason🤔

OMG! There is like the hope rising in me that they are headed for a reunion! 🥳"Things might be rocky, things might be tough. But weren't broken. Not Yet."As I was reading this line, my hopes just started to sink! It was perfectly fine till "Not Yet." Urrr, opens the next part immediately!

Part 7) The starting was so sensual! And it was treated with maturity, so it didn't sound vulgar! It was just romantically sensuous!

And then I was right! I mean trust is a fine thread, and if it is broken it will only cause knots when it is tried to be repaired...

OMG, again the Komolika song plays in my head🤪

Anger does blind one's sense of speech doesn't it? And that inclusion of the rain was just a master-stroke! For me, it highlighted the vastly different the scenarios are, from part 3 to part 7!

"They hadn't recovered from the storm as quickly as the sky."

^^ Epic!!!!! Need I say more?! This was a classic example of pathetic fallacy(omg! English classes actually can come in handy today, who knew?!) and it just left me awe-struck!

Part 8) Another brilliant song choice! Now I am going to have two songs stuck in my head😆

Could you get drunk on orange juice?

Last time I checked, no you can't! But according to some movie dialogue (I don't whether I am making this up or not), you can get inebriated on the feeling: Love! This update was amazing!!!! Those actions of adding salt to wounds was just perfected elected out!

That last quote was just so apt!!! So poignant and completely complementing the fic at this stage! The whole paragraph before the last quote was just writing at its finest!😃

That precap though!!!!!

Part 9) Great! Now I need to get rid of my Komolika song!!! 😵 (Jokes, just wanted to make that clear😆)

On a serious note, I love it when writers manage to change my opinions and feelings about a character! So hats off sister!

Vidhushi's back story was just brilliantly written! I love it when a character goes through the 'guilt' phase, call me a sadistic, but it really highlights writing abilities for me! That starting quote was ran just parallel to the update!

Brilliant stuff!

To all the writers: Your control over your language and fluidity of expression is just magnificent!!! My vocab is not even strong enough to comment on it! In simple words; Perfection at its finest😃... And I love this idea of a collab, together all the chapters tie in perfectly! Well done guys👏

Eagerly waiting for the next update as I know how powerful Ashiqui is at writing!

Okay! Now people can throw whatever they want at me!

Pari 😎

PS: See how much effort went in to this comment! I even stylized it! The things I do to avoid studying!

PPS: I bet even this comment has grammatical errors😆

PPPS: My comment is massive! Sowwwy guys! I was a little over enthusiastic

Originally posted by: gujjupari

Okay a warning before I start off with this comment, keep an aspirin near by and be far away as possible for any sharp objects that may cause me harm... I have commented as I have read the chapters😆... Bad Choice😆
I like ur sense humour😛😛😛

Part 1b) That was one of the most powerful things I have read in such a small paragraph! I mean you managed to get out emotions in such a compact part! It made me quickly search up the next part...
u know I had a really bad today and ur comment just made my day...thank u😳

PS: See how much effort went in to this comment! I even stylized it! The things I do to avoid studying!

PPS: I bet even this comment has grammatical errors😆

PPPS: My comment is massive! Sowwwy guys! I was a little over enthusiastic
everyone likes to be pampered n complimented once in a while trust me u just made all of our day😳

Originally posted by: gujjupari

Okay a warning before I start off with this comment, keep an aspirin near by and be far away as possible for any sharp objects that may cause me harm... I have commented as I have read the chapters😆... Bad Choice😆

Part 1a) That little poem was just amazing! Completely defined the mood of the start! The way you have portrayed the fire, yet the hurt was just brilliant! It was amazingly etched out since I could see it happening in front of my eyes! What a power-packed start!

Part 1b) That was one of the most powerful things I have read in such a small paragraph! I mean you managed to get out emotions in such a compact part! It made me quickly search up the next part...

Part 2) The opening quote stole it for me! Wondering if the opening quote is that good, how will the part be... *Clears everything from her table so she doesn't feel guilty about not studying, continues reading*

"Issi bahane se usne mujhe chuwa toh sahi!"

^^ Talk about being love-struck! That was such a "Naaaw" moment for me😳

Part 3) Desperately tries to find part 3 on page 7... can't find it, had a mental breakdown... Finds part 3 on page 4! Relief rushes in😃

"Fire to water, ying to yang, restlessness to peace" I loved this line! It was simple, yet it eloquently described how imperfectly perfect they are for each other

Aru's love for the rain kicks in! I loved that song when it first came out! And it was used perfectly alongside with the rain and their dance! I feel myself melting😆

The date and rain scene was just mesmerizing!

Part 4) A perfect quote to start off with the part! I swear this is your signature style Anu!

"If nostalgia could kill, she would be long dead" *mouth falls open* That is such a brilliant statement! Perfectly describes heart break!

And that flashback was just a cherry on the top! Very well written and necessary to progress the story

And that closing stanza (?!)... That was sooo emotive! It just added to Sanyukta's pain written at this point!

Part 5) That Parth-Randhir conversation was brilliant! And when Randhir agreed to "endanger his love itself", it was another perfect "Naaaw" moment for me!

I was thinking that the story will progress in to a revenge story, but then that letter was just an unexpected yet beautiful twist!

Even though that letter was meant to emotive, those little bursts of comedy were excellent!

OMG! Are they headed for a reconciliation!??!!?

Eeeks!!!!

Part 6) Just Give me a Reason by Pink! Oh-so apt for this fic! Thank You! Now I am going to have this song in my head for the next 3 weeks😆

Vidhushi is such a proper villain!!! I just got reminded of the Komolika song and the hair twirling when I was reading her POVs for some absurd reason🤔

OMG! There is like the hope rising in me that they are headed for a reunion! 🥳"Things might be rocky, things might be tough. But weren't broken. Not Yet."As I was reading this line, my hopes just started to sink! It was perfectly fine till "Not Yet." Urrr, opens the next part immediately!

Part 7) The starting was so sensual! And it was treated with maturity, so it didn't sound vulgar! It was just romantically sensuous!

And then I was right! I mean trust is a fine thread, and if it is broken it will only cause knots when it is tried to be repaired...

OMG, again the Komolika song plays in my head🤪

Anger does blind one's sense of speech doesn't it? And that inclusion of the rain was just a master-stroke! For me, it highlighted the vastly different the scenarios are, from part 3 to part 7!

"They hadn't recovered from the storm as quickly as the sky."

^^ Epic!!!!! Need I say more?! This was a classic example of pathetic fallacy(omg! English classes actually can come in handy today, who knew?!) and it just left me awe-struck!

Part 8) Another brilliant song choice! Now I am going to have two songs stuck in my head😆

Could you get drunk on orange juice?

Last time I checked, no you can't! But according to some movie dialogue (I don't whether I am making this up or not), you can get inebriated on the feeling: Love! This update was amazing!!!! Those actions of adding salt to wounds was just perfected elected out!

That last quote was just so apt!!! So poignant and completely complementing the fic at this stage! The whole paragraph before the last quote was just writing at its finest!😃

That precap though!!!!!

Part 9) Great! Now I need to get rid of my Komolika song!!! 😵 (Jokes, just wanted to make that clear😆)

On a serious note, I love it when writers manage to change my opinions and feelings about a character! So hats off sister!

Vidhushi's back story was just brilliantly written! I love it when a character goes through the 'guilt' phase, call me a sadistic, but it really highlights writing abilities for me! That starting quote was ran just parallel to the update!

Brilliant stuff!

To all the writers: Your control over your language and fluidity of expression is just magnificent!!! My vocab is not even strong enough to comment on it! In simple words; Perfection at its finest😃... And I love this idea of a collab, together all the chapters tie in perfectly! Well done guys👏

Eagerly waiting for the next update as I know how powerful Ashiqui is at writing!

Okay! Now people can throw whatever they want at me!

Pari 😎

PS: See how much effort went in to this comment! I even stylized it! The things I do to avoid studying!

PPS: I bet even this comment has grammatical errors😆

PPPS: My comment is massive! Sowwwy guys! I was a little over enthusiastic