ArHi FF|Mohabat Door Jaane Na De| #4, Last Part-pg.16 *Complete!*

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Arshix144

@Arshix144

Dazzler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#121

"But that was alright, because even though there were so many more changes they would be encountering in the future, she knew that this- this feeling of being loved and cherished, and the feeling of loving and cherishing in return- this feeling would never change"

What a beautiful way to end the chapter and end this FF at the same time N! There has never been a time when you haven't amazed me with your writing ability, the elaborate emotions you have captured, the characters you have portrayed, the sincere and honest thoughts that are always apparent each time we read something from you were all present in this last chapter just like they were present in every other chapter of this FF! So I can't help but thank you for gifting us with this special journey of MDJND! It is by far the best work of fiction on Arnav's redemption a track that I craved for both during the show and after the show ended. You covered this track wonderfully keeping the characters consistent all the way through making us understand him and love him on his journey of winning his wife's heart back. You most certainly covered all the loopholes here as well with Anjali and Shyam, Khushi's family and the respective inter relationships there.

The transition from the past to the present and inter-relating flashbacks into the present scene was done remarkably well N. It left me in Awe of your writing ability once again! I am writing this note feeling a little bitter sweet, I say this because I am a little sad that this special journey has now come to an end at the same time I am so happy about the turn of events in this last chapter with quite a subtle and realistic ending as Arshi embraced each other, silently promising to be there for each other and love eachother always! Things couldn't have ended on a better note!

And you ask us if we want an epilogue?! ofcourse we do woman! Who wouldn't love to have just a little more of this journey with more of Arhi. The way you have ended the chapter is perfect and it can remain this way but if you give us a choice and ask us then we would really love to have more!

At the end I will just have to thank you again for sharing MDJND with us, I have loved every single chapter and I will look forward to more from you! <3

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Raila1014

@Raila1014

Voyager

Posted: 11 years ago

#122

Congratulations on a job well done and for bringing this to fruition! I know of so many projects that I start and things get in the way . . , I hope you give yourself a pat on the back and take pride in not only posting your first ff but growing as a writer and outdoing yourself. Really I cannot believe your mastery at getting deeper under the layers, exposing all those unspoken feelings and sentiments, talking about their personal thoughts, and reactions. I fell in love with this story from the very beginning and simply love how you make them reconnect again, how he acknowledge his failures and mistakes, apologized and started appreciating the second chance he was given to court her all over. My favorite moment was probably what seemed like their first date - chapters 40 and 41 - when he came to pick her up and proposed. I really enjoyed her trepidations, his smooth as silk proposal and her final statement requesting that he stop apologizing for things that have already happened that they can't change and to start focusing on the future. You are the queen of angst and describe this beautifully. One can feel all the emotions of your characters, their helplessness, their fears, their insecurities and their hopes. I think by striping everything to,the very barebones and then re-constructing each one of them you make us really understand them and why they acted the way they did. Many writers went down the redemption path with a vengeance to make Arnav pay for his reaction to the terrace scene. You showed us the insecurities behind his actions and his pain while he was inflicting pain. Enough of my bakbaks, I am sad this is ending and would love to see an epilogue, one that will have more happiness and less remorse in it.

Btw, I also applaud your maturity in dealing with the characters in this story. These were no teenage Arhi but responsible adults fully taking responsibility of their actions and emotions.

Edited by Raila1014 - 11 years ago

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IPKKNDTheWorld

@IPKKNDTheWorld

Beginner

Posted: 11 years ago

#123

Congrats & Well Done.
This is THE perfect Arnav's redemption ff I have read.
Thnx for the PM.
I am eagerly waiting for the epilouge😊

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Arjuhisis

@Arjuhisis

Sparkler

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Posted: 11 years ago

#124

nafisa, iam fully overloaded with emotions after reading the last 2 parts

thank you so much for this superb story

iam a bit sad when I think that the wait for an update of MDJND is over - no more waiting for an update - but can I have a sneek peek into their happy life by way of an epilogue nafisa - whenever ur busy schedule permits