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Posted: 11 years ago
fabulous update
loved arhi

can we cancel manoramam off!
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Posted: 11 years ago
wow splendid update..!!!!!!!
i always like the way u describe every surroundings...emotions so beautifully..!!!!!
lovely wedding..!!!!!!!
felt bad for payal...!!!!!!!!!
pls continue soon..!!!!!!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
Since I resed on the previous thread, I'm posting my comments for the previous chapters here.


Love Is A Fire That Feeds Our Life...

I like your version of Aman a lot and you describe him so well that I can picture him almost as well as I can picture Arnav. Aman weary of keeping his feelings for Anya hidden away and wanting to express what his heart truly holds. And his predicament, the relentless fight between his indebtedness and love...was very convincing. You nailed it.

Arnav had always hated the dance floor because they are packed with people like sardines in a can...Exactly.!!

"Everything I do, I do it for you" ...Love your choice of music..

Their heightened awareness of each other, that magnetic draw culminating in what seems inevitable now..."Surely as the ocean that merges with the sea...it is just meant to be...".


Lovely chapter, Sandy and the title was very apt as well.

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Posted: 11 years ago

It's a wonderful life...

The sudden and insane impulse to pick her up in his arms and walk away from the madness of the wedding preparations around them was too strong. It took an inordinate amount of effort and self-control to stop self. The thought that she was young and inexperienced and he was rushing her into a relationship kept him tightly on a leash, albeit momentarily.


'Relationship'. That was the word that stood out for me in this para. I wonder if they are on the same page as far as expectations are concerned. But, maybe it's too early to be thinking about the future. Or, maybe not..!

Their mutual attraction at this point is just so potent...so intoxicating.


"Devyani Singh Raizada wasn't born yesterday. In fact, she had witnessed far more than needed to understand the current situation. The only reason she had stepped out of the kitchen before reentering with the warning cough was to save Khushi from embarrassment. She knew her grandson too well to know that nothing and no one could unsettle him".


Haha...grandmas are smart cookies...!


Loved their long drive. There is something just so romantic about long drives and if it's scenic, that's like icing on top. They connect so well and while Khushi is far more cognizant of her feelings for Arnav, Arnav is being more cautious. It's like even he doesn't realize what exactly he feels for her and is willing himself to take one day at a time...

"Yeh...mausam ka jaadu hai mitwa, ab dil pe nahi qaabu hai mitwa.." :)

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Posted: 11 years ago

Love Is In The Air...

Tripple treat..!

That was such a crackling, sizzling chapter and as usual, the title was just perfect.

Aman and Anya's Love story is just so sweet and poignant, with each having spent years thinking that their love was unrequited. Aman's confession was so realistic, straight forward and unpretentious that he stole my heart, right there.

Akash and Payal have slowly settled into this very comfortable equation where they are able to express their expectations, wants and thoughts in general, quite freely. Just how it should be.

Of the three, Arnav and Khushi have the most enigmatic, passionate relationship. Khushi, madly in love with him, considers herself his already. And Arnav realizes that too. They are slowly but surely reaching the point of no return and we still don't know ( Which is your intention) what his exact thoughts are on the direction, he would like their relationship to head from now on. They are both intoxicated right now, with, as far as we know, only Khushi recognizing this intoxicant as love.

Brilliant chapter...:)
Edited by IPK007 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago

Today,Everyday,Forever



Today, you proved that you are the undisputed queen of descriptions. From the description of Anjali's bridal look to Anya, Khushi and Payal's attires, to the description of the seating arrangement, the flowers and how the mandap looked, I felt like I had just attended the wedding of a close family friend. Could smell the flowers, sandalwood paste and henna and hear the fire crackling merrily in the pyre.

Then I came to this and my heart broke.

I'm feeling so fuming mad!


"Like I said, I have better things to do. So, take this as your last warning. STAY AWAY FROM MY SON. I let everyone think that I'm unaware of the time you were spending with my son. I let you sneak around with him. I only did that because I didn't want to hurt Anju and Anu. Now it's time for you to stop enticing my son away from me. You cannot and will not take away my son from me. I don't expect you to understand a mother-son relationship. How will an orphan understand the significance of family ties?" Manorama paused to take a deep breath.
Gosh, she is a b**** of the highest order!!! Poor Payal!


Aman and Anya are so cute and their relationship seems to be the least complicated of the three. Love reading their verbal bantering, they're already like an old married couple..:D


Coming to Arnav and Khushi, I found one particular thought of Khushi really poignant..."My instinct tells me he loves me".

This 'instinct' is often the root cause of many a heartbreaks in real life :(



Loved the way you ended the chapter..

"It's a mistake to look too far ahead. The chain of destiny can only be grasped one link at a time.

"C'est dur mais c'est la vie."

Yes, life can be tough and at times, it can be just like Manorama of your story.

A b*****



Edited by IPK007 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Thanks for the update really sweet story. :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
wow...that was one mega update, it had everything...the fun moments as well as the poignant ones, the bonding between the different relationships all neatly shown. wonderfully written dear, keep it up!
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Posted: 11 years ago

That was a really cute update - oops! I meant updates! I loved it! I'm just waiting for the day arnav will confess to khushi that he loves her... Thanks for the PM, and please update the next one soon.

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Posted: 11 years ago
beautiful stry just read it in one go n truly enjoy reading it

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