NEW ASHLOK FF NEW MOON part 7 NEW UPDATE!21 PG - Page 5

Created

Last reply

Replies

146

Views

40.7k

Users

43

Likes

343

Frequent Posters

rbb1 thumbnail
19th Anniversary Thumbnail Elite Thumbnail + 4
Posted: 11 years ago
#41
Nice update thank you I wish it was more in English
rajani_sid thumbnail
Explorer Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#42
Interesting storyline Tanya. But ur in 12th & not long for ur exams so please don't ignore ur studies...u can update in ur leisure time..it might give u a refreshing break to do something else besides studies. Good story...do continue...without neglecting studies. All the best 4 ur board exams.
Serviana thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Stunner Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 11 years ago
#43
i am interested in your story but i dont speak hindi at all😭
lively_roshani thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail + 3
Posted: 11 years ago
#44
next part ??????????
loved it
please read my ff beintiha
and os once upon a story
niki795 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Rocker Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#45
awesome update
loved angel and alok
continue soon
plz pm me
latha_555 thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#46
it was a really nice update, so she is moving from dubai to USA and shlocks going there too...i like the twins, and how different they are...so the boy is like shlock and aastha is worried...glad she still hates shlock..still not sure how shlock was or is since aastha left but clearly still in his mind...and still very angry dismissing her as aastha who, even though he was the one who called her name... Interesting about kavya. Hope for more updates soon. Please add me to your pm list
Edited by latha_555 - 11 years ago
adeena_89 thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Explorer Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#47
nice story... plz continue...
and plz pm me
Edited by adeena_89 - 11 years ago
AmYraaA thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#48

well thankyou every one for all your lovely comments

and I can see some new readers here...soo I have prepared out my pm list so this is it

PM LIST

spcl thanks to each one of eww...rbb1
, Serviana...guys I just came to knw that u ppl are facing problem with my way of writing so I assure u frm next time i'll put the update totally up in eng or else I will surely translate
roshanii swt heart I read ur ff beinteha...but through my mobby...so cud not comment i'll comment ryt away but trust me the story is very intresting and hats of to you
rajani_sid thnku vry much I am really glad ppl here do understand my situation so you all will excuse me for late updates but I guess i'll manage to put up one every week
a spcl thanks to every one who took efforts to read like comment...silent readers please put up a comment or just a like that really encourages and lifts up once confidence
well I have got 15 specific readers by now but still I am glad that u ppl liked my ff...so thank you every one thank you soo muj!!!!
AmYraaA thumbnail
13th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail Networker 2 Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#49
Heyyy people hwz ya all hope everyone feeling fab in this wintry season...damn I love this chilled weather...ever tried eating ice cream in midnight at chilly winters it super awesome...well guys so here's the third part once again a filler update😭 em sorry but this is needed to bring the story in the ryt track but belive me from part 4 it is gonna be a ashlokisious update...!!!!! well I dunno hw well or bad I am writing but still I am glad tht u are accepting my ff...😃
PART 3

"what are you doing angel don't tell me you packed that 3 bags just for your DOLLS?"shouted alok and looking unbelievably at his sister who was standing in btwn 12 big bags which she packed for herself

"ok fine I am not telling you" pouted angel and was almost about to cry cuz of her brothers shouting

"what is this bacha why are you shouting now alok"asked aastha coming towards their room

"mumma just look at this gal she has packed a hell lot of stupidity and see her luggage is 10 times her own weight can you believe it"said alok

And that was it angel could not handle it more streams of hot tears made its way down her rosy cheeks and du'uh she lunged at alok and jumped over him both landed on the floor and she started pulling his hair

"stop complaining like sushie baby nw"shouted angel still pulling his hair

"my god leave me witch...who is sushie baby now"shouted alok

"YOU...u are such a baby u everytime order me out angel do this do that angel dnt do this tha...WHY?"she shouted but by now alok had holded her tightly and she was neatly placed in his lap she tried to free her self but was helpless

Aastha meanwhile was about to faint to see this wild behaviour of her children...and some were seeing their fights she always remembered the way she and shlok used to fight she shaked of all the thoughts and shouted

"some manners is expected from both of you ryt...dnt talk with mumma "she said angrily and stromed out of the room

"uff this girls na...gaining attention is their birth right only"murmered alok

"aacha bachu"said angel and started tickling him

"Aastha i will miss u re"said Lidia giving aastha her air tickets passport and all the other important papers which she needed

"hmm CHICAGO?" asked aastha

"yeah just for a week or two till our main office in new York is completely set up till then you can have a very convenient vacation in Chicago for two weeks there is very c/ool Indian street there were you can shopm anything Indian so sop and set your chotu sa paradise and now even i am not there to help u..."

"ohhww Lidiya why can't you come"asked aastha almost in tears and both the best friend hugs

12 pm SAN FRANSISCO AIRPORT

Aastha lifted a sleeping angel in her arms and patted her back and in front of her alok was struggling to push all the luggage by his own she smiled seeing the antics of her son he wanted to do everything by himself...even at this tender age of 5 he was too mature and responsible for his age...and she was sad her both children never had normal childhood they have been in all sorts of embarrassing situation after all living without your DAD is indeed difficult she thought and a tear made it down her cheeks suddenly they notice a rush of news reporters and people towards the main elevators some business man or some VIP must be coming she thought and took aloks hand and they entered the nearby cafe were she called Mrs Joe she was a widow and they were going to live at her house for two weeks in Chicago

"mumma i want to have choco ice cleam "said angel in her sleepy voice

"yup meri pari she said"

"excuse me 1 chocolate icecream and irish coffee and a little less cream in d coffee k said aastha and alok..."

"i'll order for myself muuma...yeah one kiwi classic lemonade with lots of ice and lil mint please and tex mex veggie sandwich and saut the veggies in pepper k and extra salsa sauce please..."he ended his order

"yeah u order tons of things and i know how much you are going to eat"aastha teased alok and angel covered her mouth so as to not show her brother her silly grin

"these ladies na"said alok self pitying

Aastha smiled at her small and cute family who said it was incomplete she thought

She was about to dial her landlady's number that is when she heard the commotion

"ohhh my god SHLOOOKKK AGGGNNNIIIHOOOTRRRIII"shouted some random gals

Aastha's heart skipped a beat and she followed the gaze of the gals

She slowly turned and saw a crowd of reporters and people creating a havoc there and between them stood a man in black handsome and dashing as ever his one look melted every girls heart there the situation was hot to handle cause it was shlok agnihotri in flesh standing before them young filthy rich and handsome...and now single too!

"DEVIL"murmered aastha...this was too much for her to handle to think and curse him was very different from seeing him raw and alive in front of her eyes she mentally kicked him a thousand times and then all their memories started to come in front of her one by one it was too much for aastha to handle she felt everything around her going dim and images getting blurr and LE se fainted

"shlok"she mumbled before losing her balance and she fell to the ground

END
so hw was it? Bearable I guess...well ppl please let me knw abt my story through ur comments likes and criticism...catch ya in d next update till then stay fab..u all r amazing 😃
Edited by chaichil - 11 years ago
latha_555 thumbnail
12th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 11 years ago
#50
Oh I just love this storyline, and please update asap, as you have ended the chapter in such an interesting part. Looking forward to hopefully a quick update

Related Topics

Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: zajedno

1 months ago

new morning, new day.

new morning, new day. what does the new day bring us. what will the morning be like after the storm that rages in my heart all night. What is...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: Rizz-ington

1 years ago

⭐Back⭐ Arhi FF | Iss Darr Ko Kya Naam Doon: Chapter 3 - Part 3/3

A N A R H I F F ---- Iss Darr Ko Kya Naam Doon Summary: Khushi is an internet famous 27 year old fashion designer from Lucknow. She has a chirpy...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: goodkashish

6 years ago

Kassir ...Sujal&Kashish...Part 28 - Pg 33

Kassir Extremes Intro 9pm - London Airport - Christmas Day It was a cold chilly night in the beautiful city of London. We arrive at Heathrow...

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: MidnightLibrary

10 months ago

Rishtey the Bond of marriage (new chapter) Rishtey the Bond of marriage (new chapter)

Chapter : Melodious Encounter https://www.indiaforums.com/fanfiction/chapter/52348

Expand ▼
Fan Fictions Thumbnail

Posted by: zajedno

8 months ago

HAPPY NEW YEAR HAPPY NEW YEAR

happyy. New Year 2025

Expand ▼
Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".