Oh see who is here..😃 finally atleast i kept one promise.. seriously i had made so many promises to so many people in asli duniya and pata hai ek bhi complete nai hua abhi😭 they will kill me, pretty soon 😛
Now coming to the story- ahem ahem you are not a writer?? oh really ?? do want to change your line before i say anything?? you better do.. i still remember that darjeeling wasli story😳
From where you got the whole idea to write over this..?? this story reminded me of a song "ye haasi wadiyan ye khula aasman".. where do you live?? Some special connection with hill stations??😉 it look likes, tabhi toh saari story ka background wahi hota..
I won't flatter you, rather will be lil honest i din understand a word bas i was reading it only because it was written by you.. Thanks to disha that she pmed me be the last part uske baad sab samjh aane laga..😃 then i went back to chapter 1 again and re-read all the parts...you can't blame me for not getting the story at first read i have been surrounded by provisions and formulas from last 7 months you should have used written lil less complicated story..bache hai hum..😭
Pata hai after reading i asked myself "logon ko aise khayal aate kaha se hai?😕 meko kyu nai aate?" 😆That was a well thought and pre-planned story though you said in part 2 that you don't know where the story is moving but hum nai mante bass..!!😛😆
I wonder how you people write such a descriptive chapters with so less dialogue... 👏
Arnav never got a chance to meet khushi in first chapter at the end right?? seriously, you were so cruel that you wrote it as an OS bichare readers.. that was like one phase of life na? we readers always want arnav-khushi together toh obviously that won't have satisfied the readers.. good that you wrote the next parts as well..😃 story got some direction
But first part was written beautifully, sachii keeping it in mind that it was only an OS and ar-shi are not the leads i would have voted for your story... "hume pasand aaya" [ i was craving to write this "hume apka ye andaaz pasand aaya,😭 but ye line kahi fit hi nai huyi so i made lil changes😛]
Third n forth chapter ka connection samjah nai aaya mujhe.. 😕 as third part was about aman, though initially i thought it's arnav and then in fourth part first it was aman-khushi and than arnav-khushi.. But i am glad arnav-khushi are together finally...😆😳
You could have written more for greedy readers like us..that was not done ab hume "A Beginning" wali story chahiye... bataooo aage ka bas bas bas..!! chahiye chahiye chahiye...😭😭
Thank you ma'am for writing this beautiful piece and also sharing this with us..😳
P.S- I really don't know what i have written above, it looks more like a question bank than a proper comment but seriously i tried hard to write.. likhna hi bhul gayi jaise..😭hope you will take this as a comment...please...
Edited by Shruti21 - 11 years ago
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