Polemic Jackanapes #2: [COMPLETE] Chapter 13-27B - Page 32

SO we have a full on Arshi chapter - Totally awesome one if I amy add. I loved Arnav's vulnerability and the way he shares things with Khushi - how he is doing what he is doing because he feels that this this is the best choice and not his passion. Will he ever find his passion - I wonder or will he learn to make this his passion! And his understanding of how life is moving on for khushi and accepting it as a given - that was incredible. I do so like the realism of your story so much.

Beautiful update, and thanks for early one (I guess we should thank Sandhya fr this equally - Happy birthday Sandhya). How more natural and realistic this story could get?, you stump me with each update and raise the equation higher, but I ask how come a story be so natural yet so gripping (and with no twists and turns)? - a big applause for that, I wait for updates on this story always and never gets disappointed.

Coming to the update, I don't know what the right words are here - sensual, carnal, natural, witty and what not? You started it on high note and then put a break in between - then gave Arnav's thoughts presented beautifully while Khushi is taking an important call. Then Khushi apologising quietly and Arnav forgetting all the thoughts and just enjoy the time he has with Khushi - this whole scene has been written so beautifully that everyone would re-read it, and you did a fabulous job with the entire scene. The conversation that followed is light and yet serious and intense - showing where they stand in their relationship. Arnav is very honest and open to Khushi, he never pretends or backs off to share anything with Khushi, of course Khushi does the same in the initial parts of the story - I guess that is the biggest strength of the relationship they share. Honestly, I don't know which way this story is going to go - and I don't even want to make guess works - but I will cherish reading anything you write - that's because you have a way with your words making brilliant impact on whoever reads it.

Originally posted by: meera30

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I don't know what makes me a little teary eyed today with this episode but I am all blurry - maybe it is because i see a couple that is floating in paradise as life tries to butt in at every given chance.

Shrugging it off, let me say this Twiggy - that first scene was steamy and then some. Remember how I said on EIT that some people do beautifully with intimacy - you are turning out to be one of those - there was nothing tentative on this one - this was all sex - urgent and needy - of a couple who knows what they are missing and take it any chance they get, who get annoyed when some intrudes on their time, more when that someone is important to the other!!! BEAUTIFULLY done. I am taking lessons from you in writing - no wait, I had decided no more intimacy writing for me...okay all is well :D

To the second part - what a lovely conversation - all comfortable, easy, serious, knowing, and setting up what is coming their way. He undermines himself. I can see that. And I can't wait for him to cut through that layer of inadequacy he doesn't even realize he bears like a crown of thorns. I can't wait for him to shine!

You are underestimating yourself Meera, the scene you portrayed in EIT is outstanding as well - the story is different, the mood is entirely different to this one, but you have written amazingly beautiful. If you ask me, you both have written fabulously keeping it with the essence of the story and you both should never think you can't write these parts - you both can and actually much better than many others. Hats off to you both.

Just caught up with your whole story.

i hope khushi won't have any problem on her trip...awesome story

love teh passion btw them

Oh my God!!! This update has made me dizzy...


In a good way!!!

Lovely chapter Twiggy! I see our favorite couple is maturing and progressing. I hope all the Arnav's worries are allayed and he finds himself real soon :)

The opening was steamy & hot!!

Loved the update...
They are the couple perfect for each other... They are always there for each other... and the way they understand each other is amazing...
Just loved it...