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Posted: 11 years ago
Hopefully my comments will post this time round...Sorry but they're a wee bit long.
Aright, I have some catching up to do, so here goes...

Chapter 5

Yeah I was dreading reading the confrontation with Sameer. Quite badly I would like to add. How I wish that Riya had actually screamed out the truth to all of them considering that she was in her parent's home.

🤔 Actually, no. That wouldn't be a good idea since she signed the papers and because..well because this is Arjun that we're talking about.

" Arjun:-kya huya wify..mujhase etana kyun sharmana...
I m ur husband...or maine to sab dekha huya hai...
Her back hit with wall... Arjun simrk n block her way by putting his both hand on the wall.."

Oh gods, he sure as hell can be damn hot when he brings out his dominant side. But then again, I feel a strong urge to slap him.

Again with the sister comment. I swear Piya, since the last update (chapter 4) that memory has been playing in my head. I can imagine the grief he must've gone through.

Is that guilt that I read?!? Oho! I think it is! *grins widely* I knew it! I knew my Arjun could never be such a heartless man. He feels it!

I'm with Sameer on this one. What the hell had Mr. Mukherjee done? Is he the reason behind what happened with Arjun's Di?? Well, at least Mrs. Mukherjee spoke up against her husband. Kudos to that one right there.

Hey look! It's Shree again! 😆 I was so caught up with ArIya-Sameer and the Mukherjee's I completely forgot about Shree. Wow, one month already huh? What else happened during that one month? Arjun hasn't told anyone? How come? Aww, Shree wants to meet his Bhabhi. That's so cute.

Talk about bad luck. The moment my beautiful angel decides to yell at someone, my SHSB (Smokin' Hot Sexy Beast 😛) makes his entrance.

"Arjun looked her top to bottom...first time his eyes widened ...
She looking so beautiful..."
My boy's feelin' it! He's feelin' it alright! *rofl* Get used it to it hun, I'm sure she'll be surprising you quite often with her beauty.

"Wify u late ...almost two minute...
So I m not in mood to go in pari...Arjun pointing toward the room...
I think we hav a batter option..what u say wify.."
🤣 A bad situation to laugh in but I couldn't help it. The man's got a knack for making things awkward and daunting for Riya.

"I m ur husband so behave like my wife samjhee ya samjhayon..."
Et voila! I was waiting for that infamous "samjhe ya samjhaun" Perfect timing too! Lol, loving it so far.

Aw innocent Riya not knowing how to behave at a business party. I burst out laughing again when he said that if she's done staring we can go inside. Lol, typical Arjun. Thank god you specified that he heart was beating out of fear, otherwise I would've started smiling like a fool.
Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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Here's the next comment...
Chapter 6

First thing that I see that makes my jaw hit the floor:

"She was unwhere the fact that...it was the starting of his revange... "
What the hell has he been doing for the past month then??

My innocent angel, there she goes again with covering herself up out of modesty and just to make herself feel more comfortable. Then comes my SHSB and just whisks her away to show her off. Er, make her life terrible.

Shree is so cute! And funny! Loved how he addressed Arjun as "sadu" and "akdu" 😆. That's so Shree.

Aw what the hell?? When she doesn't smile, the man gets angry with her, when she smiles a real smile after such a long time, he get's angry with her. The urge to whack Arjun again is back. Honestly, I don't think I will ever want to smack my SHSB 😆.

Oh I see what you did there. You're finally introducing Shree as the person who knows about Arjun's past and know what he really is like only having Riya negate that fact (mentally that is). See, this is what I like about this FF. The fact that this is so realistic with the main characters being thoroughly disgusted with each other is what makes it so enjoyable to read.

Hey look her parents! Ok for a moment you gave me a heart attack. I thought that Riya was seriously going to spill the beans and tell them everything. But no, my SHSB would never let that happen. It's like his 6th sense. Knowing where and whom Riya meets.

Damn, that was a smack in the face for Sameer. It just adds to my curiosity as to what really happened between them. Again, nailed it with the "samjhe ya samjhaun".

Ok. This is for Mrs. Sunaina Mukherjee for pimp slapping her husband. Honestly, WHAT DID HE DO?!?!?! I'm like ready to pull my hair out screaming. I really want to know what he has done.

Another one for my SHSB Arjun for standing up for Riya, albeit it wasn't the best way he could've stood up for her, the fact he stood up for her was enough for me to be happy. Now this Mr. Mehra is another fishy bloke.

OH MY LORD! Sam! You can't just do that! What the hell?!?! "Bez sach to ye hai...maine tumhen kabhi us najer se dekha hi nahi...
Tum hamesha se meri ek best friend ho, the or hamesha rahogi... " Are you kidding me?? Chico, that was just a sick move you played. To second Riya's question, why would you say yes to marry someone whom you don't love?? Unless...oh dear.

Oh there you go again, making me fall in love more and more with my SHSB Arjun "nathing meri jaan lagta hai aaj raat tumhen sab kuch yaad dilana padega.. " Rehem karo! His sly wickedness is just too much to handle. Love you my SHSB Arjun!

Well another round of applause for Riya first kiss to Arjun. I will just pretend to ignore the fact that he didn't force her to do so 😃

Precap: Oh dear...please don't tell me he's planning on drowning her 😕😕
Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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And here's the next...
Chapter 7

Aww, hope you feel better Piya!

Onto the update.

Arjun hating side says "Gods, what the hell is wrong with you for saying such things to her?"
SHSB Arjun side says "Da man's a BEAST!!" 😆😆

"He don't know but whenever he claimed her lips..he liked it...he loved to kissed her again n again on her lips.."

Oh hell...Boy, you cuckoo.

"Don't force me showing my evil side..kiss me back..Arjun wishper bw kissed.."
Saving Riya side: Quick kiss him back so he doesn't do anything bad!!
SHSB side: Bring it on baby! 🤣

Oh damn, Sam. Now who is this "someone" that makes your heart pain?? *whiny voice* I want to know!!!! Then Arjun's little statement about him not respecting his love...what the hell is going on here???

ARGHHH!!! SHSB WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!?!?! Damn, Riya's little monologue about her destiny killed me. That was just...painful.

"She coverup her feared n again yelled...Aab kuch nahi bacha mere pass khone ke liye .."
Go get 'em girl! Show him who's boss.

"By mistake she slapped arjun's face..."

Oye, maine toh sirf usse apni himmat dikhaane ko kaha tha!

"She was the most beautiful girl..he ever seen in his life...
.
Some unknown feeling touched his heart..
But his anger his ego..much stronger n powerful on his feeling... . "
He's feelin' it again. But damn his anger and ego for taking over this softer side of him that he keep hidden away from everyone. That one small feeling that he has, if he ever finds it in his heart to listen to it..the magic it would do to both their lives.

"how could she expect his nice n soft side...??"
🤣 My comment above was answered within the update itself. Lolol.

OhmygodOhmygod! SHE'S DROWNING YOU FOOL! GO AND SAVE HER!!

HELP HELP HELP! SUPERMAN! GREEN LANTERN! WOLVERINE! DAMN YOU SUPERHEROES! WHERE ARE YOU WHEN WE NEED YOU?!?!?

"Arjun heart again shouted
.
Go n save her...what if somthing happened to her... .

How could u be so heartless...???
.
when u love her deeply n madly... .

.
Ur revanger is not greater then ur love...not her life...
.
Riyaaa...!!! No I can't lose her...I can't...Arjun imedeatly run outside... .
(finaly after such a long time he heared his heart voiced)
.
A chill panic shiver run inside his body when he saw her lifeles body...
Arjun jumped inside the water n hold her life less body in his arms...
.
N run imedeatly inside his room"

Did mine eyes just read that??? Has my SHSB fallen in love with my beautiful angel? No way...has he?? For real?? Are you serious???...AWWW!!!!!!!!

"A long tears fall down his eyes...Why???,
u do this riya ,why..???
He bend down n kissed her forhead...
U doesn't disurver any kind of love...
.
My hatered is more then my love...
Arjun slids inside the same blanket ,hug her tightly In his arms...giving the warmth of his body...
"
Again..AWWW!!! Cuteness overload girl, cuteness OveRLoAd!!

Precap: WHAT?? ARE YOU SERIOUS?!?! MY SHSB AND MY ANGEL ARE GOING TO BE PARENTS?!?! Well I was expecting that, with the amount of...ahem ahem...he's been doing with her...😆😆
Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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And the next one is on the teaser...
Chapter 8 Teaser:

Kay, so she's pregnant. *does a little dance* That's confirmed. That's good news right?? Then why am I freaking out with Riya about SHSB Arjun's reaction??

"nooo..dont..plz stoped hurting baby..
Arjun:-Baby but hows that possible??
u cant be pregnent..
.
Ri:-why should not I ??,u raped me remember..
Arjun:-Whose baby u carry.?
Riya completely shocked .."
Uh uh! Not cool Mr. Raute. Not cool at all! You should know yourself that it's yours. Have you counted the times you've done the dance of love with her??

Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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And the latest chapter!!
Chapter 8

"He just want to give her punishment...not want to play with her life... "
I swear to god, I'm like sniffing and going through tissues at seeing him so scared for her. Finally, ma beast's feelin' the guilt. Honestly loved this line so much. Even though he acts like a cruel person, he proves that he still has a heart! This is probably my favourite one out of the entire update. I don't know why, but this provides this sort of justification for the fact that he can't take anyone's life. If you know what I mean...

"Its true he hates her most...but one more truth is..hidden in his heart..he loves her more...
Arjun was just blinding in his anger...he wannted his revange at any cost...
He was fighting with his emotion..."
Another round of applause for portraying his emotions so beautifully. Truly shows a man who is fighting an inner battle. Oh those battle of the mind and heart, always puts a person in the greatest turmoil of all.

"It was the first time..when he can't stoped himself for staring her so carefuly... ..
She was to beautiful to innocent... "
See another urge to whack him. Guy! It takes you three months to realise that fact when it's standing in your face screaming at you to look at it?? 😆😆 Boy, you cuckoo. I have to admit though, it was high time my SHSB decided to actually look at his so called "wify" 😆

"At last Arjun again touched her lips by his...n give breath to his mouth..."
Honestly speaking, this has got to be the most innocently beautiful gesture. I don't know why but it just made me stop and stare at my screen with a goofy smile on my face. Kudos for this one Piya! Though the whole of the bed scene was beautiful, this line just caught me off guard, in a good way.

"She slids more in arjun's arms...n hide her face on arjun's chest..."
😲😲 Did mine eyes just deceive me or did Riya just hug Arjun (once again, I will just pretend to ignore the fact that she was half unconscious)?? OH MY GOD SHE DID!! *does another victory dance* Boo yah! Lol, I just can't get over this part...😆😆

Oh no! Please no! Don't retract back into your shell Arjun! NOOO!!!!! Uff, I thought we would be getting a bit more romance. Ah well, that's what makes this FF so enjoyable! Hats off for nailing a vengeful Arjun! He loves her but he still cannot forget what happened with his sister.

Speaking of which, what the hell has Mr. Mukherjee done?? Me is now on the point of puling out my hair and screaming in frustration because I really want to know what he's up to!! That whole convo between him and Arjun is making me super restless. Although, a big thumbs up to Arjun for ending the call with a bang. Lol, typical SHSB.

Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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My final comment of the day from my side to you Piya dear!
Finally!! I've caught up...please excuse me for the uber long comments but I had to get it down. I always write my comments as I read the update so don't mind my crazy outbursts. Now eagerly waiting for the next update. Update soon! And since you haven't been feeling your best, here's a bunch of flowers so that you can get well soon!


<3
Edited by AWriterAtHeart - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
Awesome update...
WHAT MISTAKE MR.MUKHERJEE HAD DONE?????
Continue soon...Thanks for PM...
plz plz plz plz jaldi update kiya karo...plz plz plz plz...
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Posted: 11 years ago
i m following only dis story of urs di..
awesome part...
past effects future or not..
but defo present ..
lovely ..
so mr. mukherjee make bro life past hell..
wat happen to sis..
waiting
very well written
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Posted: 11 years ago
Awesome update
love it
continue soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
Awsome update..just loved it...plz continue soon..waiting eagrly 4 next update..

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