Something in the mist: KriYansh OS *challenged*

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darshita

@sweetydiyafrien

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Posted: 11 years ago

#11

what a update... loved it... but to long finally finish reading...
that was well written and awesome and wonderful os... loved it

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chetna

@crazysky

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Posted: 11 years ago

#12

r u kidding me *fell asleep*?

it was awesome

the challenge given with,

u could have written a very simple os but u made it extraordinary with ur idea

simply awesome storyline girl

i could see a writer back in tracks

Edited by crazysky - 11 years ago

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madhu

@Madhu_ArSha

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Posted: 11 years ago

#13

Di. . . . .kal unres karungi. . .abi bhaaging. .:-P
unress. . .
Wah. .kya os tha. .it was realy awsm. .
Lovd d bold yet naive kriya here n caring yet possive rey here. .i realy likd it concept. .
Di, kaha se laate ho aise amazing ideas?
Kahi se bi laate ho,do write such os, its a treate to read. .
Lovd it os. .

Edited by Madhukumari - 11 years ago

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shakz_KR

@shakz_KR

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Posted: 11 years ago

#14

u rocks
os was awesum
keep it up
luvd it

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Fida

@aTTiTude_dIvA

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Posted: 11 years ago

#15

res! unres..

OMG!! 😲 😲

it was just fabulous...loved itt like sooo muj!

u carried it off so well...i mean when i gave the plot, the way u started it off was relatable and could be guessed...

but the way u proceeded, with Kriya stripping, had all of us thinking..is kriya ACTUALLY stripping!!...but then again...that was something we all loved to witness...especially to get n see Rey's possessiveness..and anger..

and the ending..omg! just unpredictable.. It was just like u trned the tables twice...first with Rey trying to bid for some random girl but inturn Kriya backfiring him with her show...

and the second where Rey was angry at Kriya, maybe us too..for just going ahead n stripping infront of the huge crowd of hungry beasts... but here again u twisted the entire plot... and revealed Kriya's true identity of that of a secret spy!...proving Rey's as well as our assumption wrong yet again😉

this OS ws full of pleasant suprises...one after the other, and the way the second half of the story totally changed things...beyond our imagination is something that needs a huge round of applause!!👏 👏 😃😃

do keep writing more...

soo love the way u frame stories... i felt so content reading ye wala! just my types😊

Edited by aTTiTude_dIvA - 11 years ago

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Maneet

@moon_cupcake

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Posted: 11 years ago

#16

It was abdolutely wonderful!

loved it

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Yogini

@yogini64

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Posted: 11 years ago

#17

Wonderful os...😃

Totally unexpected ending...😛

I thought she's just a waitress there .. & wanted to make him jealous by stripping...😳

Job toh chodni hi thi... aise hi nikal jaati... but rey ka kharcha kaise hota fir...🤣

Rey bhi chalu hai... he feels for her... but end tak bhi 'I love you' nhi bola 🤔

Such a slizzy place...these men are bl***y perverts... shameless ppl...😡

Rofl... ye bhai hai... mujhe laga bf hai... tabhi itna bhid raha hai...😆

But samajh gaya vo bhi inka connection... isiliye nikal gaya..😉