D3 - As I Cherish it - a D3 & SwaRon FF - Page 10

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Posted: 11 years ago
#91
Awesome update 😊
really loved it ❤️
it is penned down mind blowing
especially the classroom scene was damn hilarious 🤣
loved that scene ❤️
your FF is bringing back the old memories yaar ❤️
really loved this FF a lot ❤️
superb job 👍🏼
u r a amazing writer 👏
keep up the great work
and update the next part soon
thanks for the PM and do PM me...

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Posted: 11 years ago
#92

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Woah lady splendid job and it was pretty much up to the mark infact I loved it..😊 ❤️.
The conversation between kria and reyaansh in the fire exit where kria is in her baatcutter mode cutting rey's talks and uske kria ke saath couple dance karne ke saari wishes pe paani fer diya hehehe..😆.
Then the entire classroom scene had me in splits I was laughing my wits out.. The time when simmi doubts nil & vicky to be gay then vicky's freeze freeze freeze & his daydream bout neha and amar then swayam & rey's talks and last but not d least mr chatterjee's outburts blacklisting the entire class mhan I had a gala time reading that portion..😛 😃 👍🏼.
Sharon wants swayam's attention.. Him not pursuing her bothers her she wants the undivided attention which she would get from swayam nice.. I loved the krisha conversation they actually talked like civilised people for the first time without fighting and biting off each others heads..😆.
Mhan I'm gonna miss reading the updates of this FF Rini till you don't update it next hope the day comes ASAP till then all the best for your assignments..🤗.
Love,
Kashmi..😊

Thanks you so much Kashmi. 🤗 I love KriSha too. Wish we got plenty of KriSha in the show itself. They would make a strange but lively pair. Mr. Chatterjee is an an amalgam of all the nosy, pedantic teachers I've had. Honestly, I wasn't very confident about the classroom scene or KriSha either, because watching something and reading the same thing are two entirely different experiences and KriSha is an entirely new experiment. Glad you appreciated it.
I returned today, extremely tired, but my work ain't over yet. In fact it's just beginning. I will try to update ASAP. 😊
Love Rini
Edited by bleu98 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#93

Originally posted by: SanskritiS

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Loved the Kriyaansh convo
The class room was mast😆
mujhe apne school k yaad aa gayi hamari class ko same comments milte the
Krisha's scene was awesome
Rey trying to convince Swayam

The best thing in update was VIcky's freeze🤣
Sharon ka reaction achi tarah bataya

I'm pretty sure all of us have heard the 'fish market' comment when we were in school 😆 and we have all had one self-important Chatterjee teaching us. I wanted to bring back our school memories through that one scene, glad you liked it. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#94

Originally posted by: dashinggirl

Awesome update 😊

really loved it ❤️
it is penned down mind blowing
especially the classroom scene was damn hilarious 🤣
loved that scene ❤️
your FF is bringing back the old memories yaar ❤️
really loved this FF a lot ❤️
superb job 👍🏼
u r a amazing writer 👏
keep up the great work
and update the next part soon
thanks for the PM and do PM me...

Thank you so much. I'll try to update as soon as possible. But I'm still up to my neck in work 😭. Will certainly pm when I update. 😊
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Posted: 11 years ago
#95

Originally posted by: austen4ever

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there wasn't much swaron in this but i didnt mind at all. the gang was hilarious. esp d boys were a hoot. vicky n neha were cute. nil was d highlight with his "we'll pray along with you sir" 🤣😆
rey n kria were extremely entertaining. thank you for making them a part of this, i had forgotten just how much i liked them. rey as usual trying to assess kria's feelings n kria again as usual lost in her own schemes to notice😆.
sharon's realization of truth was logic n magic n equal measure. that was a fab job rini. i really liked how natural that epiphany was n of couse it had to be followed by the inevitable burial of her realization.
fantastic update rini, i was right you are gonna be a super director one day.
come back soon n update the next part. i wanna read about their couple dance😛

Vicky is an idiot- like all boys. He is insecure and juvenile. In fact all the boys are insecure about their respective ladies, and they'll know it sooner or later.
Yeah good ole' KriyAansh- loved how their story always complemented SwaRon. There was an equilibrium which went topsy turvy later on.
Sharon's realisation occurred even before she herself or the viewers knew it- it was always about her coming to terms with the truth, and once she does that, there's no stopping her. She'll claim the love she rightfully deserves. 😛
The couple dance- yeah of course- even I wanna write about their couple dance. 😆

Sounds like you had quite the adventure this Puja. Were you driving in your hometown or roshogolla city? Can't say my work is no fun but it's also a lot of pain in the arse. I'm back in the city but my work isn't over, in fact it is just beginning. Will try to update when and if I get a break in between. Take care. 😊
Edited by bleu98 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#96
Chapter 7
It's Complicated
1
Evening/ Rehearsal Hall
"No way!!" shrieked Sharon as she jumped and started walking to and fro. She looked disturbed. Rey was prepared for this and followed her- he had already anticipated all the possible arguments and knew it wasn't an easy task. "But Sharon..."
"I said NO Rey. How can you in your right mind even suggest this?" retorted Sharon.
"But Sharon, mujhe ye nai samajh aa raha ki tumhari problem kya hai? It's just a dance..." pleaded Rey.
"Dance? With Swayam? Seriously Rey! Tum chahte ho ki main ek weakling ke saath couple dance karun in front of the entire college!" Sharon said as she glared at Rey. Rey was indeed scared now, but he decided to pursue the infuriated Diva nonetheless.
"But Sharon, tumhi ne to kaha tha na that tum pehle St. Louis ki CS ho and then a Dazzler and this is for St. Louis. You see..."
"Rey, shut up. I can see what you are doing here. Don't try to twist my words around. I said I'll keep peace with the Weaklings, that does not mean I'll choose a Weakling as my partner," said Sharon not letting Rey mouth the dialogues he had prepared.
"Okay fine. But I thought you didn't care about Swayam..." Rey continued in his one last desperate attempt, "in that case you shouldn't have a problem regarding dancing with him. I mean, kya farak padhta hai, you don't care right? I mean he doesn't affect you..."
"Of course he doesn't affect me." Spoke Sharon trying to sound convincing. "And this is not about Swayam." She declared firmly. A pause followed.
"Okay may be this is also about Swayam," said Sharon looking away. Rey smirked behind her. Damn I so knew it Sharon. He cleared his throat and started speaking in a grave manner. "Kya matlab? I mean what's with you and Swayam?"
Sharon fumbled as she spoke. After all it's not easy summing up confused jumbled emotions, even if it's only your best friend listening. "He... he... he is acting so strange these days. I... I don't like it. I don't like him."
"Okay... and..." Rey listened attentively as Sharon strove to frame grammatically and politically correct sentences in her mind.
"I mean... usse agar lagta hai that ye sab karne se he can come close to me or get me to think about him, then he is a fool. I don't think about him. And I definitely don't care. He wants attention. Yes." Sharon muttered to herself. "And if I dance with him he'll succeed aur main aisa hone nai dungi. So you see... I can't dance with him." Sharon turned to a clueless Rey.
"I kind of lost you there," said a bewildered Rey.
"It's complicated Rey. Anyway, bottomline is I won't dance with Swayam Shekhawat. Tumhe pata hai he cancelled our opening dance, that lowlife weakling!" complained Sharon.
"The cheerleading you mean? Yeah he told me about it. But Sharon we have so many performances this year, ek ka na hona won't matter. And it'll ease the pressure on you," said Rey.
"Wow! You knew. Of course it won't matter." Sharon said sarcastically. "You know what, this conversation is over!" yelled Sharon as she switched off the lights before walking out on Rey, leaving a baffled Rey sulking in darkness.

2
Next Day Morning/Corridor
"Complicated. Tera brand new relationship status." Chuckled Rey, as he and Swayam walked through the corridor.
"Relationship? Tere saath?" queried Swayam.
"Bakwas band kar. Sharon ne khud kal kaha, that it's complicated between the two of you," smiled Rey.
"What!" Said Swayam a little stunned.
"Haan wo keh rahi thi that you're acting strange and stuff. What's the deal bro? But whatever it is, it's working," nodded Rey.
"That's ironic. Considering for the first time, I'm not trying to make it work." Said Swayam.
"Probably that's why she finds it all strange," Said Rey, "Anyway, she is way too pissed with me regarding the cheerleading dance... and with you as well, so beware."
"Whatever! Like I care. Actually I don't even wanna know..." said Swayam, much to Rey's surprise. He was about to speak, when both the boys were interrupted by Kriya who appeared like a storm, as usual. Rey and Swayam were both taken aback by Kriya's sudden arrival. "Rey... Rey chaliye mujhe aapse baat karni hai," said Kriya panting. "Hey Swayam," she greeted before turning to Rey once again, "Rey come on... It's important." She glared at Rey and then suddenly realized she was pulling him by his arm. Embarrassed she let go of his arm immediately. Both Rey and Kriya began blushing and grinning like idiots. Swayam was amused and quietly observed the two. An uncomfortable silence ensued. Kriya and Rey blushed and took turns to look at each other and Swayam, for what seemed like an eternity. Swayam was both bored and astonished seeing his friends behave like a bunch of ninocompoops.
"It's okay. Go," said Swayam breaking the silence.
"Swayam I'll meet you after the break, rehearsal hall mein..." said Kriya with a awkward smile.
"Of course of course. I'll see you. Tum logo ko important kaam hoga, please carry on..." said Swayam suppressing a smile. Kriya and Rey left.
From the other end of the corridor Sharon walked in, calling out to Rey but he was already too far to hear Sharon call his name. Sharon suddenly felt a surge of sadness seeing her best friend being dragged away by Kriya. She knew it was ridiculous to think that Rey was moving away from her, but fact was that he was too distracted these days and she didn't know what he had on his mind anymore. She continued looking in Rey's direction when she felt a familiar warm feeling that gave her goosebumps- a gust of wind blew from nowhere and she had butterflies in her tummy.
It was Swayam at the other end of the corridor, looking at her. And Sharon was going weak in her knees again, lost in those dangerously penetrating deep brown eyes. (Rihanna's what's my name in bg) The breeze swayed Swayam's hair slightly. Sharon was shocked once again at her own vulnerability and by the confidence that was exuded by the eyes that were watching her. Stop! There is no wind, and no music. It's all cliched romantic comedy crap. She told herself. High time I stopped watching those chick flicks. She composed herself and decided to walk forward. She started walking looking at her cellphone, pretending to read something really important when Swayam walked past her with a straight face. She thought she will melt like butter or evaporate in that fraction of a second when he was near her.
When she was sure he was gone, she took out a bottle of water from her bag and drank from it. This is unreal! I'm crushing on Swayam Shekhawat, the Swayam Shekhawat, especially now, when he chooses ignore me in a way that makes me wonder if I'm wearing the damned invisibility cloak! This can't happen. I'm sure it's just a phase. Yes, it's a phase. Sharon consoled the Diva in her and started walking.

3
Random deserted passage in St. Louis
Kriya held Rey against a wall looking deeply into his eyes. Rey was clearly lost, but she wasn't as she relentlessly worked on her plans. "Rey, dhyaan se suniye," she whispered.
"Okay..." whispered Rey.
"RDX Sir ne ek lady instructor ko bulaya hai for ballroom dance. My sources tell me she is effin hot."
"Your sources as in, universe ji?"
"Shut up. And that's none of your business," snapped Kriya without raising her voice.
"Okay okay... so what about this hot teacher? You are planning to hit on her?"
"Will you shut up and listen to me!! Here's the plan," said Kriya taking a deep breath. "We'll get her to like Swayam so that she gives attention to Swayam, and Sharon will be jealous, and if Sharon is jealous, she will try to get Swayam's attention and I'm hoping she'll say Yes' to the couple dance. And this jealousy and insecurity will eventually compel her to acknowledge her feelings for Swayam like it always happens," Kriya said in one breath. "Hai na kamaal ki plan?" smiled Kriya. Rey looked very much zoned out and wondered how was it possible for a human to talk that fast. "It's a li'l complicated I know, but trust me, my K-effect never fails," Kriya assured him.
Rey was still processing all the information when Kriya told him that he must help her execute this plan, and disappeared before he could blink.

4
Girls' Locker Room
Sharon was still grappling with her feelings for Swayam which more than often vascilated between dislike, strong dislike and intense attraction. She was confused if she actually felt those extremes of emotions for a single person, or was it Swayam's manipulation that caused those unfamiliar stirrings in her. She was certain that she could not be manipulated but then there was also a time when she was certain that she could never find Swayam Shekhawat sexy, or remotely attractive. Rinni and Simmi were talking about a new lounge bar in the city. "I need a drink" concluded Sharon. "Let's go tonight?"
"But Sharon kal early morning we have rehearsals," said Simmi.
"Damn. Btw that reminds me, you girls will be sad to hear that this year we won't perform our opening dance. There are too many entries for bollywood, and we are running short of time. I'm sorry guys," spoke Sharon.
"Ooh! That's sad. But it's okay Sharon. First day pe humara bollywood performance bhi hai," said Rinni.
"Yeah Sharon, don't feel bad. Next year kar lenge," said Simmi with a smile.
"Waise bhi I'm getting a cold feet regarding bollywood dance. But Neha is a great teacher." Rinni said. The two girls, Simmi and Rinni chattered on.
Sharon wondered if she was the only Dazzler left in St. Louis. She felt lonely, for the first time in her life. Solitude had been her best friend although she was always surrounded by people- people who worshipped her, people who wanted to be like her and people whom she called friends. But seldom did she let those people touch her, the solitary corners of her mind. She did allow Rey in a few of them. Had Rey not been there, perhaps she would have been a recluse. She relished solitude. It was like a warm cup of coffee in a starry winter night.

Today she felt cold and alone.

This is the only chapter till now, with which I'm not entirely satisfied. Got a break in between so decided to write some more.
Edited by bleu98 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#97
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Awesome update 😊
Loved the Sharey convo
Rey tried hard to convince her
Reyam convo was as usual nice
Filmi things happening with Sharon which she didn't want to believe
Edited by SanskritiS - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#98
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let me begin by saying how happy i am to see you back. welcome back🤗
coming to the chapter. i can see why you are dissatisfied. it lacked your usual zing and penetration. it was frothy and fun but didn't engage my mind like your previous updates did. that being said, it was a good chapter. yes it was a filler but i'm willing to excuse that coz it still brought a smile on my face. Sharon and Rey's convo was along the expected lines. after reading the whole thing though i was amused at poor Rey's condition, neither of the girl in his life lets him talk or waits for him to listen😆
SwaRon's brief interaction in the corridor was well written. Sharon acknowledging her crush was a stunner. oh the poor confused soul. your imagery in this scene was very good. i could easily picturize the shock, confusion and dismay on sneha's face while shantanu with his poker face walked past.
Kria and Rey's bit was entertaining. esp Rey wondering how a human could talk so much. clearly he hasn't dealt with a lot of girls😆 . so looks like the next update is going to have nicole in it. waiting to read your take on the jealousy track.
Edited by austen4ever - 11 years ago
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Whoaa you finally updated can't convey in words how much I have missed the updates of this FF.. As I said before its like I'm reliving the old D3 memories through your write up and I'm loving it so when I see your pm my day turns happier..😊.
Coming to the update I liked the Sharey convo.. Sharon did convey what she felt about swayam though it was through fumbling words.. She hates this new swayam who does'nt pursue her like before and she wants him to do it she kinda misses it..😊.
Swayam is getting those kinda reactions from Sharon by letting her be and by ignoring her.. He is getting her attention in her mind.. He did'nt get that attention when he would pursue her but now he rules Sharon's thoughts when he is ignoring her.. The scene where he passes by Sharon completely ignoring her existence was the best I could actually imagine Sharon melting due to Swayam's presence and the intensity of her own feelings.. You described that pretty well so kudos to you for that..👍🏼.
I hope kria's plan works and yess I have an inkling it'll work and it'll make sharon even more aware of her feelings then before..
I love how you write Rini you write like a boss.. Conveying every emotion every feeling perfectly.. Good job give us an update soon.. And again all the very best for all your assignments do well babe..😃.
Love,
Kashmi..🤗
Edited by sweet16cash - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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its a really aswom update as always...

plzzz update soon...

ur aswom dear...

day whay u right its aswom...

ur really suparb writter...
Edited by swaronlove001 - 11 years ago

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