SwaRon OS : The best Assistant Ever!

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-spongy-

@-spongy-

Sparkler

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

Originally posted by: ..Aishaa..

tab theek hai. swathi di ne bhi shocked look diya isliye maine pucha

ha ha

ab kya are hum tujhse kuch expect hi nahi karte hain toh shock toh honge na 😆😆

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

I wont lie 😳
That was a nicely penned oneshot aish. Yes there were points where i could not.understand but i really liked the cocept! Its different..its fresh..it was innovative. I dont really know what.you would write iske aage.but if you ask me i'll say ki ki make it thoda practical..now interpret this on ur own 😛
The concept was very nice..execution was brilliant too..but u write well re..u could have done better..i dont know..i felt it was thoda rushed..i mean u should hv converted it into a short story and take time to establish their characters..
And yeah,next time pls proof read kar lena..it has some mistakes in it..
waiting for the next chap.

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago

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Sadaf Khalid

@sadafarsha

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

It awsum amazing

I luved it alooot

Rahul is her assistant na

Can u plzzz give the cs of rahul and alia

Plzzz update next part sooon and do pm me

Thanx for the pm

And sorry for trouble

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Autumn_Hue

@Autumn_Hue

Sparkler

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

Classy piece of work aishh..👍🏼.
The bond between swayam and sharon is so different here not the love hate relation but when they met sparks flew on both the sides..
I loved the bike ride specially the speed breaker..😛.
Sharon's dadi is quite a character badi funny. And interrogating hai dadiji..😃.
Part 2 jaldi update karna madam..😊

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VruShan_MaNan

@VruShan_MaNan

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

Res...Reading now.😳

Loved the title.😃

Wow a very different OS.👍🏼

I really liked SwaRon bonding in this one, like the way they clicked in their first meeting itself.

Really liked the way Sharon shared about her past with Swayam.😊😊

Loved Sharon's dadi😆. Saari Dadiyaan aise hi hoti hain😆😆

Awesome update👏, waiting for the next part.😳

Thank you for the PM.😃

Edited by VruShan_SwaRon - 12 years ago

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..Aishaa..

@..Aishaa..

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: tanha29
u have time to write a one shot but not to unres on my OS! Heights. This place is reserved.

i wont unreserve till u dont update

waise i felt bad. its very similiar to my OS

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Vishaka

@-Vishaka-

Sparkler

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

amazing os Aisha...must say brillent piece of work

A very much unique concept...
sharon characterisation were nicely plotted and cool swayam.
Indeed sharon bonded wit past and timing fndship bond wit swayam were nicely describe. I love swaron bike right and cool dadi's convo.

Ealier waiting for 2nd part..
Update it soon

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Mihika

@Legilimens.

Rocker

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

Originally posted by: ..Aishaa..

i wont unreserve till u dont update
waise i felt bad. its very similiar to my OS

Update what? 😕

Me too felt bad. 😳 Mujhse meri feelings koi puchta hi nahi. 😕

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Varada

@damonTVDrocks

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

Awesome...👏It was different n I wanted to read more...😃 So, Sharon dance instructor n Swayam her assistant... He indeed is the best assistant ever!

Do continue this n all other works of yours...😛
Update soon n do pm me...😊