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Posted: 12 years ago
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great going👍🏼
waiting for next part specially nam related secrets😉
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Posted: 12 years ago
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👏very well written plz..continue
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Posted: 12 years ago
#83
Thank you everyone..
Whatever i wanted to see in the show, i am feeding my desires here. :)
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Posted: 12 years ago
#84
Great going: 👍🏼

Waiting for next chaps... 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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bgscribe :


read all three back-to-back awesome updates in a single go and simply loved everything about them 👏! starting from how you used the NAM Foundation to take the story forward (unlike the show where no one knows what happened to the Foundation once Mohan shifted to Indore) to the scuffle with Vasu's goons vs Addu leading to the upcoming major revelation to Nanhi .. superb👏 ! there 's everything that we (at least I) wanted to see in the show post revamp, the buildup to each level has been systematic and logical. i loved the way Beera refused to let Megha use Mohan's resources to repay Addu's debts, i would have been happier if Megha hadnt mortgaged Mohan's Bhopal house too. Addu is still living with his illogical and stupid notions of Mohan Bhatnagar, the ruthless man and striving to erase him from his family's memories. well, good luck to you boy..coz now you are soon going to face facts in the hard way.. you will know for real what ruthlessness actually means. and i really hope that you learn your lessons well ! as for Nanhi, good luck to her too .. she's going to face a roller-coaster ride of emotions once again and a uphill task to do .. she needs a lot of good wishes now !👍🏼



update soon !😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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@ MonerRadio

Your detailed comments bring a smile to my face. Thank you so much.

As for Megha selling Mohan's house, I didn't want that. But i needed to put it in for an important part.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 8:

As I walked in with Bhau, he asked me about the guy who beat me up and told me to keep a watch on him.

We came to a halt on seeing a girl with pink spectacles and long curls in the verandah looking at Bhau's picture with Aai. Bhau immediately froze on seeing her.

I shouted out to her, "Aye! Who are you and what are you doing here?"

She didn't answer me. But she turned to Bhau and said, "Spiderman" in whispering tone that I could barely hear. I looked at Bhau who seemed to swallow a lump forming in his throat before answering her. "Spiderman? There it is." He pointed towards a spider on the wall. I could hardly hold my giggles. Bhau had the best sense of humor.

The girl walked towards us looking Bhau in the eye. No one had dared to do it till now. She had to be something for Bhau didn't (or couldn't) say a word. I answered for him. "He is Vasu, Vasu Bhau, the Lord of Ganesh Chawl." The girl didn't take that as answer to her question.

Vasu Bhau turned to me and said, "Bala! See what she is here for". He left towards his room with uncomfortable look on his face.

I tried to talk to this firecracker. She only shouted at me, "I want to talk to him, not you". With that she shoved me and ran towards Bhau's room. I alerted our men to stop her and throw her out. She tried to fight them but couldn't. After a short struggle, she was out of the house.

I went to ask Bhau about his connection with that crazy girl. He said, "May be there was a relationship between us in the past."

Not may be but was and is.

It's short as there is another one coming up as Part 8.1. Hope you liked reading this.
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nice part👏👏👏... waiting for the next part😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Part 8.1:

I was shocked to see the full length photo. I turned around and scanned the room to see if I would anything. My eyes came to a halt on a man in kurta wearing a scarf. As if on auto pilot, I moved towards them step after step. Just when I stopped, I called out hoping for an answer I yearned to listen, "Spiderman?" Apparently the word came out only as a whisper. Yet he heard it. But made fun of it by showing a spider on wall.

Did he really not recognize me? Or isn't he my Spiderman? How can this be? How can he resemble Spiderman so much?

I decided to ask, "Who are you?" I got the reply from the man next to him, "He is Vasu, Vasu Bhau, the Lord of Ganesh Chawl."

That didn't say anything. I stood still expecting to hear something from him. I looked him in the eye and plead silently that he be the one I imagine him to be. On the other hand, he didn't make any eye contact with me and hurriedly left into the interior of the house. I ran behind him but three men stopped me. I resisted and tried to pull my hands away from their grasp but they were too strong for me to handle. I shouted out Spiderman, but no response. The next moment I found myself on the ground in front of the house.

I replayed the situation in my head. What happened to that promise my Spiderman made to his little chavanni? Was he really not my Spiderman?

Lost in thoughts, I went back to hospital to check on Addu. He was still unconscious.

What was the name he held? Vasu Bhau? I remembered how Vasu Bhau got Addu beaten up. My Spiderman would never do such a thing. Then who was he?

I decided that whoever he may be... I should start on the work I came to Mumbai for. I met ACP Sanghvi whom Anupama had asked me to meet.

Will ACP Sanghvi solve my dilemma?

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Posted: 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: jia03

nice part👏👏👏... waiting for the next part😊


Thank you! :)

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