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Posted: 12 years ago
Oooi! mah!!!!
Tai!!
awsum!!!
I realy am luking 4wad to Chotu-mona luvstory!!
Di thoda thoda Ariya k bhi jhalak dikha do na!!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
bahu ki mehnat sasuma ko pasand aayi ...😉... lovely update 👏👍🏼
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Sorry friends,
Was stuck up with family problems... not able to reply to all individually 😭
One more thing 😉 ... I'm not upset with Behzaad's exit as a writer 😛 ... I can keep him alive here in my stories. I'm actually sad because he was the only reason I was watching the show. I will stop watching the show once he leaves, but not leaving the forum and my FFs.😊
So here is the next part.
Part 21A
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Around 4 PM.
Mona is a little upset. She actually tried calling Chhotu for a movie, but he turned down her. She was furious. She knew he was behaving like this because of Sameer. This had happened earlier too and she was really annoyed by now. She decides to take this matter with Sameer, DSR and Suman.
Sameer is talking to Anwesha on phone in the balcony and Mona was angrily staring at him. Suman notices this.
Suman: kya hua Mona beta? mood kharab hai tumhara? ye Sameer ko aise kyun ghoor rahi raho? kuch kaha usne tumse?
Mona(sarcastically): Maa... mera mood kharab karne ke liye Bhai ko kuch kehne ki zarurat hai kya?
Suman chuckles. She knows something is wrong between brother - sister.
Sameer's phone call is over and he comes inside blushing.
Mona(pouting her face): Bhabhi abhi to yaha se gayi hai? to fir aadhe ghante se phone par kya baat kar rahey they?
Sameer is surprised but blushes at this question. Suman chuckles.
Suman(teasing Sameer): Mona... tu nahi samjhegi ...
Sameer blushes and Mona is annoyed.
Mona(sarcastically): haan Maa... mai kaise samajh sakti hoon... ye to sirf "pyaar" karne walo ki baatein hain na... mera isse kya lena dena...
DSR, Suman and Sameer are confused.
Mona: haan Maa... mai sach keh rahi hoon... mai kisi se pyar kaise kar sakti hoon... aur agar karti bhi hoon to... jisko mai pyaar karti hoon wo mujhe kyun pyaar karega?
Sameer raises his eyebrows trying to understand what she meant.
DSR: kyun nahi karega?
Mona: kyun karega? ETF Chief ACP Sameer Daam Singh Rathod ki behen se pyaar karne ki jagah... suicide karne ke aur bhi better tareeke hain is duniya mein...
DSR, Suman and Sameer look at her with a question mark on their faces.
Mona(coming to the point): ek ladka hai... mujhe wo bahut achchha lagta hai... I love him and mai usse shadi karna chahti hoon...
Suman and DSR are surprised and Sameer flares up.
Sameer(angrily): ye kya bachpana hai? ...kaun hai wo? naam bata uska...
Mona(sarcastically... lashes out..): dekha .. dekha.. dekha ... Maa ... abhi thodi der pehle apni pasand ki huyi ladki se, jise ye pyaar kartey hain, phone par pyaar bhari baatein karne wale ye Mr Sameer Rathod ... achanak se kaise badal gaye... sahi kehte hain... "Love is the most beautiful thing is this world... unless it happens to your sister" ... khud ka pyaar ... pyaar hai... aur mera pyaar bekar? inki feelings sachchi hain... meri feelings inko bachpana lagti hain...aur wo ladka kaun hai... ye jaane bina hi uske barey mein ek opinion bana lete hain... ki... wo ladka achchha ho hi nahi sakta... kyun? ye kisi aur ki behen se pyaar karein to chalta hai... par koi inki behen se pyaar karey to wo characterless aur awara ho jata hai... (by now she had tears in her eyes.)

Suman, DSR and Sameer are shockeded. Sameer opens his mouth to say something but couldn't find words because in a way what Mona said was true.
Suman(wipes Mona tears): wo ladka bhi tujhe chahta hai?
Mona: pata nahi... shayad...
Sameer(sarcastically): Lo... is ladki ko ye bhi pata nahi ki wo ladka isey chahta bhi hai ya nahi... aur ye yahan mujhpar hi baras rahi hai...
DSR(chipping in): ek min Sameer... usey apni baat poori kar lene do... Mona ! Are you sure ki ye sirf infatuation nahi hai? Aur tum usey kaise janti ho? kya wo tumhare saath kaam karta hai? humein poori baat batao beta...uske bina hum tumhari help nahi kar payenge...
Mona: Papa, pehle jab mai usey janti nahi thi... sirf dekha tha... tab ye sirf attraction ya infatuation hi tha... Pyaar nahi... par jab mai ussey mili aur usko jaana to mujhe pata chala ki wo bahut achchha insaan hai... pyaar to mujhe ussey mile ke baad hua...aur ye sirf ek nazar ka pyar nahi hai Papa...aap samajh rahey hain na? (looks at her father with teary eyes)
DSR: haan beta ... hum samajh rahey hain... par tumne ye to bataya hi nahi ki wo tumhare barey mein kya sochta hai? dekho beta... hum jantey hai ki tumhare Bhai ki tarah tumhe bhi apna jeevansathi chun-ne ka adhikar hai...par beta...is ek faisle pe tumhara poora bhavishya tika hua hai... tumhari sari khushiya tiki huyi hain...
Mona is listening quietly. She understands her father's feelings.

DSR: dekho humari baat ko galat mat samajhna... par bhai ke liye hum tumhari bhabhi ko apne ghar la rahey hain... aur wo humari zimmedari hai...aur hum usey utna hi pyar denge jitna hum tumhe kartey hain... usi tarah tum is ghar se, parivar se nikal kar kisi aur parivar mein jaogi... tumhe humne bahut pyaar se paala hai... isliye hum chahenge ki tum jis ghar mein jao waha bhi tumhe utna hi pyar mile... hum chahenge ki jaise Sameer tumhari Bhabhi ka khayal rakhta hai, waise hi tumhara pati bhi tumhara utna hi khayal rakhey... tum humari baat ko samajh rahi ho na?
Mona nods in "Yes".
DSR: aur is baat ki tasalli to humein honi chahiye na? to uske liye humein us ladke ke dil ki baat pata honi chahiye na?
Mona is in tears so DSR cheers her up.
DSR: aur ismein koi problem to honi nahi chahiye... I mean, waise bhi hum Rajputon mein Swayamvar ki pratha rahi hai... Ladki apna dulha khud pasand karti hai... bas dulhe ko apni kabiliyat aur apna pyaar saabit karna hota hai...
Mona smiles listening to her father's encouraging words.
Mona: Papa.. mujhe lagta hai ki mai usey pasand hoon... par wo apni feelings nahi dikhata... wo mujhse baat karne se pehle bhi wo sau baar sochta hai... maine usse kitni baar poochhne ki koshish ki ... par wo har baar baat ko taal deta hai... maine usey poochha tha... ki kya wo mujhe as a friend ek baar mil sakta hai kya? ... to usne manaa kar diya... wo bola ki Bhai ko ye baat pasand nahi aayegi... wo Bhai ko hurt nahi karna chahta... he respects Bhai a lot... Lekin Bhai to uske barey mein galat hi sochenge... mujhe pata hai... (again tears well up in her eyes)
Sameer feels bad for forming an opinion about the unknown guy who seemed to be decent. So he decides to make up for it and cheer up Mona. He too agreed to what his father said. All he wanted was his sister's happiness.
Sameer(faking anger): achchha... aisi baat hai? ab to jaldi se naam batao uska... abhi khabar leta hoon... ACP Samer Rathod ki behen se dosti karne se inkaar karta hai... aur uski ye himmat?
Mona looks at him sobbing and Sameer is smiling now.
Sameer: ab bata bhi do... kaun hai wo?... nahi to jo delay hoga... uske liye tum zimmedar hogi... (goes near her and wipes her tears and she hugs him)
Mona(still hugging him): Bhai ... aap please naraaz to nahi honge na...
Sameer: naraaz hone jaisi koi baat hai kya? (caresses her head)
Mona: pata nahi... shayad... wo actually... aapki hi team ka member hai...
Sameer is shocked. He parts from her and make her face him.
Sameer(suspiciously): meri team mein se kaun?
Mona: wo aapka Commando... Chandrakant...Chhotu... (makes puppy eyes)
Sameer gets another shock of life. Well... Shock would be a very small word to express his feelings...Suman and DSR also shocked but they wait for Sameer to react because he knows Chhotu better.
Sameer: KYA? CHHOTU?
Chhotu's innocent face flashes in front of Sameer's eyes. His cute smile, his tender nature, his intolerance for crime, His efficiency and above all his caring nature. He cared for all in the team and he respected Sameer and Arjun a lot. Sameer has always seen his past in Chhotu's present. He was just like Chhotu in his initial days of job, intolerant for the crime and criminals and a little violent at times. Just like him, Chhotu also never thinks twice before putting his life in danger to save an innocent. Chhotu is brave and very competent as a police officer and has a very large informers network which has helped a lot in solving many cases and getting evidences. Chhotu always knew whom to contact for the right information Sameer also knew that he belonged to rural background and was strongly connected to his roots even after living in Mumbai for his job. His father was a sarpanch of a village and a very respectable man actively involved in social work. His mother died when he was too young. But his father has brought him up with good values.

Thinking about Chhotu as a potential match for Mona, he is actually happy because he knows Chhotu is a nice guy.
He smiles thinking about him but very next moment he is scared at the thought of Mona being with Chhotu and he pities Chhotu. Mona is at times a "Toofan Mail" whom it is difficult to control.
But he thinks that it would not be a bad couple either. He decides to give them a chance.
Sameer: Mona, sach kahu to mujhe jhatka laga hai... par ye baat to manta hoon ki tumhari pasand hai bahut achchhi... Chhotu meri team ka sabse achchha aur seedha ladka hai... (grins)
Mona is shocked but happy.
Sameer: I mean agar ye relationship agey badhti hai... to mujhe tumhare barey mein fikar karne ki koi zarurat nahi hai
Everyone smiles.
Sameer(naughty tone): par uske baad mujhe Chhotu ki chinta zyada ho jayegi... pata nahi tum us becharey ka kya haal karogi...
Mona(screams in frustration): BHAI...
Sameer runs around the house laughing and she chases him to hit him. Mr and Mrs Rathod also laugh looking at their antics.

After 5 mins they settle down.
Sameer: Are you serious Mona?
Mona nods her head in yes.
Sameer: dekho... wo ek chhote se gaon mein raha hai...aur ab bhi dil se wo bahut seedha hai...uski Maa ki death bahut pehle ho gayi thi... wo bahut sensitive hai... Maharashtra ke chhote se gaaon mein pala badha hai wo...mai uske papa se mila to nahi hoon... par ho sakta hai ki wo thode conservative hon... unke taur tareeke hum se alag hain... kya tum adjust kar paogi?

Mona: Haan Bhai... I know ... aur itni samajh to mujh mein bhi hai... i'm ready for all adjustments ...
Sameer: My lovely sister...i'm proud of you... ab mujhe kuch na kuch to karna hi hoga... let me think...

DSR and Suman are satisfied with Sameer's views about Chhotu. They are confident that his decision for his sister would always be right. They leave it to him.
All of them smile. And Mona hugs her Mom, Dad and her Bhai who stood by her. She has office next day and she has to finish some work, so she leaves for her shared apartment.
In the night.

DSR is sitting in balcony a little worried. Suman comes to him.
Suman: kya baat hai? Shaam se dekh rahi hoon, aap kuch pareshan lag rahey hain?
DSR(takes a deep breath): Kuch nahi Suman, aaj achanak Mona ki shadi ki baat nikli... to bas dil bhar aaaya... kal tak humari god mein khelti thi... chocolates aur gudiya ke liye zid karti thi... aaj itni badi ho gayi hai ki uski shadi ki baat kar rahey hain hum? yakeen nahi hota... aisa lagta hai abhi bhaag ke aayegi aur rona shuru kar degi... Bhai ne mujhe dhakka deke gira diya... meri doll tod di... mujhe nayi doll chahiye... Bhai mere baal kheench raha hai... (tears well up in his eyes and his words trail off)
Suman's eyes to are brimming with tears.
Suman: beti hai... ek na ek din to sasural jayegi na... (wiping her tears and smiling).. ab dekhiye na... Sameer ki shadi hai aur hum Anwesha ko dulhan bana kar apne ghar laa rahe hai na... wo bhi to apna ghar, apni behen, apni purani zindagi ko chhodkar aa rahi hai na... aur mai bhi to aayi thi... aapka haath thaam kar...
DSR(cheered up remembering their marriage): hmm... wo to hai... mujhe to abhi yaad hai... kaise dari huyi thi tum...aur humari suhag raat...(gives her a mischievious smile)
Suman: haaye ... kya aap bhi? ... kahan ki baat kaha pahuncha di... bahut raat ho gayi hai... so jaiye...
DSR: arre... ye koi baat huyi... mai to bas purani yaadein taaza kar raha hoon... waise bahut sundar lag rahi thi tum us raat... par dekha jaaye to tum ab bhi utni hi sundar ho...
Suman: aap bhi na... aapse kuch kehna hi bekar hai... (pouts her face)
DSR chuckles looking at her and continues to tease her.
Sameer was listening to their conversation till here and goes to his room smiling. Even he was getting the same feeling about Mona's marriage.
Sameer(thinking in his room): Theek hi to keh rahey they Papa... Mona pata nahi kab itni badi ho gayi? ... lagta hi na... abhi kal tak to jaise bachchi hi thi... bachpan mein meri books faad deti thi... mere khilone chhupa deti thi... aur jakar meri hi jhooti shikayat laga ke mujhe hi daant padwa deti thi...(chuckles remembering all this)...aur baad mein ...jab mai Mumbai se ghar jata tha... uski shopping list to khatam hi nahi hoti thi... aur mai bhi kabhi uski koi baat taal nahi paya... fir uska Mumbai aana... independent hona... kitni badal gayi hai wo... sach mein badi ho gayi hai wo... I'm proud of her... Aur ab uski nayi zindagi... ek naya safar... dua karta hoon ki wo humehsa khush rahey... (tears brim in his eyes)...
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Part 21B

Please koi logic mat dhundhna Flashback scene mein 😉😉
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Next day in office.
Shree and Chhotu are having coffee sitting in pantry area.
Sameer goes to them.
Sameer: Shree, Chhotu... mujhe tum dono ke parents address chahiye?
Shree and Chhotu are startled. Both spit out a little coffee and start coughing. Sameer chuckles at their reaction.
Sameer(chuckling): tum dono to aise darr gaye jaise tum dono school ke bachche ho... aur mai school ka principal... aur mai tuhare parents se tumhari complaint kar ja raha hoon...
Shree and Chhotu are embarrassedand pass a sheepish smile.
Shree: aisa kuch nahi hai sir... par aapko address kyun chahiye?
Sameer: Meri aur Annu ki shadi ka card bhejna hai... wo kya hai na...hum sab apni family se door rehtey hain... aur yaha ek tarah se hum ETF team hi ek family ban gaye hain...to socha kyun na is extended family ka ek get together ho jaye... aur is shadi se achchha mauka aur kya ho sakta hai (smiles)
Shree and Chhotu are relieved.
Shree(happily):ohh... wo to hai... mai mom dad ko insist karunga ki wo zaroor aayein...
Chhotu(to tease Shree): Sir Navika apne parents ke saath hi rehti hai... aap unhe invite kar rahe hain na (looks at Shree from the corner of his eye)
Shree again spits his coffee at the thought of his parents meeting Navika's parents.
Sameer(smiles): Of course...
The way Chhotu looked at Shree and Shree's reaction didnt go unnoticed by Sameer.
For last few days even he had been noticing how close Shree and Navika were coming. And he was happy for them.
Sameer:Chhotu... tum bhi apne papa ko insist karna ki wo shadi mein zaroor aayein...
Chhotu was a little nervous but nodded in "yes".
Chhotu and Shree have finished their coffee and three of them go to the conference room where Riya and Arjun were already sitting.
Sameer was hoping for Chhotu - Mona relationship too. His marriage was going to set these two love stories on right route. Now he was worried about Arjun and Riya. He had to settle his friend back in life and had to find a good life partner for Riya too as he had promised Annu that he will take care of Riya just like Mona.
He looks at Arjun who is engrossed in a file and then at Riya who is busy finding some research data and takes a deep breath when his mobile rings. A smile comes on his face when he looks at the caller id. It was Annu's call. Everyone else's attention is drawn to Sameer with his mobile's ringtone and looking at the blush on his face, it was easy for them to guess who was calling. Sameer just happens to look up and finds everybody except Arjun smiling at him. Arjun looks at him with a raised eye brow. He is embarrassed and runs out of the conference room. Arjun couldnt help but smile after Sameer left. Riya is quick to notice this.
Well, this was not new. This has been happening almost everyday since Sameer and Annu's engagement was announced.

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Annu's project was to finish in June beginning. She also talked to the seniors in Wadia hospital for a permanent job there and which she got. She also got relieved fron her job in Delhi.
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25th May

Saturday
Arjun's birthday.
Arjun woke up as usual with the Roshni Murder's case file in his arms. He looked at the file and glided his fingers on thr name "Roshni Arjun Rawte".
It was his birthday and this day had another important event attached to it. He met Roshni 5 years back on his birthday. Events of that day were fresh in his mind as if it happened few moments back.
Flashback begins*
25 May 2008
Arjun was not able to sit because he was in pain. Sameer had got a cake for his birthday last night and they celebrated at 12 AM with few more friends. And Sameer being his best friend, didn't show any Kanjoosi in giving him birthday bumps.
He was cursing Sameer since morning. And Sameer was chuckling. Both of them go to their respective departments. Arjun to his crime branch and Sameer to his Anti-corruption bureau office.
Around 2:PM, a news flashes on TV, that a school bus with 15 children and one teacher on board is hi jacked. Media persons and parents of kidnapped children had come to police headquarters along with some school officials. They gave out the details that while bus stopped at a signal, two terrorists forcibly came into the bus, pushed the driver out and one of them was driving the bus now. They were driving the bus on highway. They demanded money and release of one of their gang members.
Crime branch is contacted and Arjun personally goes to handle the case. They chalk out a plan to follow the bus and try to get into it.
They had to avoid bloodshed in front of children.
Team follows the bus in another bus and Arjun using a rope manages to climb on the hi jacked bus from the driver's side. The terrorist see him and make him fall off, the driver terrorist drives the bus more recklessly. Arjun is about to fall but still manages to hold the grip on the bar of the window. Arjun peeps in and watches kids crying and getting hurt because of reckless driving. The teacher is also scared.
The other terrorist fires on Arjun but he dodges the bullet but this firing scares the kids and their teacher more.
Arjun quickly moves towards the driver on the bar, opens the driver seat's door and pulls outs the driver making him fall off the bus. The bus is about to hit the divider when Arjun controls it and stops right in time.
The other terrorist fire on him but he cannot fire back from driver's seat because just in case the terrorist dodges the bullet, it might injure the kids and the teacher. So he picks up a spanner lying on the dashboard and throws it on terrorist's hand and the gun falls down. Before the terrorist could understand what happened, Arjun leaps towards him and punches him on face and drags him out of the bus and beats him black and blue.
By this time, back up forces too come and they have also caught the other terrorist who was injured of falling from the bus. Both the terrorists are arrested and the case is filed.
Parents of all the kids come running to the spot and hug their kids and thank Arjun.
Media persons surround him and praise him but he excuses himself. He jus happens to turn back when hi notices the teacher. She was in tears sitting on the step of bus door and was visibly shaken and scared.
For a few moments he is lost looking at her but quickly composes himself and goes to her.
Arjun: Aap theek hain?
She was in a shock but looks at Arjun with teary eyes and somehow manages to nod in "yes"
A lady constable comes forward to take her statement.
Arjun: Dekhiye mai janta hoon ki aap is waqt dari huyi hain... but ab ghabrane ki koi baat nahi hai... wo dono pakde gaye hain... ab koi khatra nahi hai... par aapko apna statement dena hoga... please co-operate.
She again nods in yes.
Lady Constable: Aapka naam?
"Roshni"
This name registered in Arjun's mind.
She narrates the whole incident how it happened in her statement.
Later she was required to report for follow up in the case and Arjun and Roshni met again for few times and became friends. This friendship culminated in to love before they could realize it and later got married within a year and celebrated his next birthday together, which turned out be his last Happy birthday.
Flashback ends*
All those moments flashed in front of his eyes and he closed them. A lone tear escaped the corner of his eyes
He somehow tried to shrug off those thoughts, got ready and went to ETF office.
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So how was it?

Please excuse the spelling mistakes
And sorry for any other errors... thoda jaldi mein likha hai to kuch illogical ho sakta hai 😉. Koi blooper ho to batana.😳
This double update is more than what I mentioned in precap because even I didn't know I will be able to give this. Now next update after 10 days. Will be busy in Gauri-Ganpati festival.
And no precap this time because now also I don't know how mych i'll be able to write for next update 😳
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And please don't thank me for PMs 😉
Regards,
Bhavna
Edited by bgargate - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
UNRESED**

Di first of all a huge sorry for commenting so late. I was realy busy. missed you a lot. 😊

now to the update. For the last part I loved Riya & Mona convo & Mona's hard trying to get info about Chotu 😉 I was quit shocked to read the precap.

but now when I read the update it was awesome. I absolutely spill bounded by the logic Mona raised. Every brother always makes opinion about sister's boyfriend whereas they can have a girlfriend. 😕

but then Mona's supersolid dose knocked senses to Sameer's brain thats good. Cant control Rofling on his thinking about how chotu's condition would be with his sister 😆 but chalo sabne accept kiya thats great. loved Sameer & their parents concern & quick flashback of Mona's childhood.

Lol Sameer asked for Shree & chotu's parents adress aur undono ki toh hawa nikal gayi. lagta hak ab sachme story proceed honewale hai 😉

Arni's first meet flashback was superb. Arjun ki entry was total hero ki jaisa 👏

No precap matlab aur tension. chalo koi nhi I am waiting. Di you truly wrote the emotional bond of their relationship very well. I could feel the every lines of the 21A part. 😊 update soon 🤗

P.S. Me too heartbroken about Behzaad khan leaving the show 😭
Edited by -sree13- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
loved it
this mona is a great gal ...she was upfront with her family abt her feelings
wow i am looking forward ..
will arjun riya fall for each other??
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Posted: 11 years ago
Awesome update...
Mona woah she was just superb...
loved the way DSR talked to Mona...
Sam expected reaction... what Mona said is true bro's can have girlfriends and love marriage but when it comes to sisters double standard... Sam's reaction on hearing it's Chotu lol
I loved the concerned and worried bro Sam...
DSR talks abt Mona's marriage... every parent would be feeling the same nah!!!
Arni Fb was nice...
update soon
Edited by Leki - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
yeee yeee yeee ......mast update ... loved it🤗 ..thank u ... ye dil mange more 😉
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Posted: 11 years ago

The whole update belonged to the naughty yet emotionally sensitive Mona...nd her lover boy...Chotu...

Awsm update rukku baby...missed RNP like hell...
nd now the two updates of filled up well for it...
I mst say...Mona is quite a daring gal...
apne ACP bhai nd mom dad k saamne apni dil ki baat rakhna...not a cake walk it is...
but the way mona told Sameer abt dat 'bhai ka pyar pyar...' weala part...I loved it...
totally right...
it mostly happns in siblings...whn the elder brother or sister falls in love...thn its th most beautiful phase...bt whn the same happns to us...they state..."bigad gayi ladki..." lolz...
bt apart from it...I even loved the sayings...nd soothing words of Mr. DSR... papa Barfii...talks minimum...but jab bolte hai toh...bohot acha bolte hai...
I agree to each nd every word he said...the same kind of soothing words reminds me of my Mumtaj-Shahjahan...(I hope u got it)
gosh...the whole Rathod family shocked hearing the boy's name...bt Sameer knws Chotu very well...nd true to his thinking Chotu is indeed a Perfect match for Mona...
bt same like Sameer...even I m worried for Chotu...lolz...
loved the last part of the 21 A part...whr DSR nd Suman are talking abt Mona...its so true...ladkiya kitni jaldi badi ho jati hai...
dat reminds me dat even I m a gal...nd even th thought of leaving myt Parents...shakes me up...
cmmnt on 21 B down...
Edited by Aisha.Vashishth - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago

part 21 B

ohhhooo...now even Sameer is pulling legs of both shree nd chout...poor lads...
the flashback scene was very gud...well written...bt I hav one query...
I dnt thnk...its gud to ask it u here...
I hav asked it to u in a pm...
ans me...
continue soon
love
Birdie... 😉
Edited by Aisha.Vashishth - 11 years ago

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~Whimsical Flukes of Essence~ By Mysticaldivine [INDEX]

Dreams feel real while we're in them. It's only when we wake up that we realize something was actually strange. ~Inception MY STORIES ARE NOW...

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Posted by: desidillse

3 years ago

Ink-Stained Pages: Aditi's Writing Index

[NOCOPY] [MEMBERSONLY] Tags Credits to Quantum-Dot Hello people! This is Adv. Aditi Jain aka Adi or AJ. I am a writer and here is the...

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Posted by: minakrish

8 years ago

One Girl. A Hundred Journeys.|Mrina's Index

Hello people, This is me, Mrinalini , aka Mrina or Mina . And here is the Index of my stories. Now it would be easier for you all to find my...

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Posted by: zajedno

1 months ago

new morning, new day.

new morning, new day. what does the new day bring us. what will the morning be like after the storm that rages in my heart all night. What is...

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Posted by: Koeli

5 years ago

Comment Migration Request Thread #1

Hey guys, This is the place where you can request for comment migration. Please know that FFEs are going to migrate your comments. Rules - You...

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