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mayurisb80

@mayurisb80

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#11

perfect!!!! reading through your If only OS i was wondering if only you made it into a SS or FF as the concept is too good...and viola here you are doing that ...good going :) cant wait to read the rest of the chapters ...cheers..

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Nicky saluja

@Nickysweet

Stunner

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#12

thanks for pm nice update continue soon i like it

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Mandy

@MrDarcyfan

Stunner

+ 6

Posted: 12 years ago

#13

Great beginning. Hope you continue soon!

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Ananya

@Anarocksick

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#14

After the marriage track began, there have only been a handful of sub-plots I liked. And this was one of the good ones...Arnav losing his voice! (Though I hate the part where he makes her do sit-ups. Not justified enough in the show I feel.)
And it was quite funny actually, and sad when Khushi gets to know that he'd been faking it for the last few hours just because he didn't want her to get any credit.

I loved Arnav's inner thoughts where he justifies to himself that whatever ASR is doing is right. LOL. Seriously, it's kind of hilarious!

But uh-ho, Khushi heard him. And she looks hurt. And it bothers Arnav.

Can't wait to read more!

And thank you for starting this so soon

You've already decided on the chapter titles? Quite a planner you are, eh? And I love the titles! Kind of shows how it'll progress...can't wait!

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nilanjana

@Nilanjana_20

Voyager

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#15

awww wooow continue

i am loving this

thanks for pm :)

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Anisha

@-Aniisha-

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#16

loved the update 😳

eagerly waiting for the nxt part

thanks for the PM

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jenshad

@jenshad

Stunner

+ 8

Posted: 12 years ago

#17

WOAHHH, This Was TOTALLY Different :)

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Preethi

@blackdove

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#18

awesome update...

i am so happy u decided to make this os as an ss...

Do continue soon...

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cheesemad

@cheesemad

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 12 years ago

#19

omg m super late this time...was busy with batman😉

m so so so happy that you decided to convert this os into ss...you have already decided the titles of all the chapters...

coming to the chapter 1:

u have written amazingly well...

poor khushi has to display confident and happy facade in front of family... i always feel bad for her... she does all the crazy things to irritate arnav but the moment she comes to know he is hurt she takes care of him genuinely...that is what i love about her...

awww ASR is enjoying all the attention he is getting...admit it ASR u love it wen she takes care of u...he is the most complicated character i have seen ever... somewhere he knows that khushi is innocent but his mind overpowers his heart every time...

the thing i liked the most about the ss is that you have written from povs of both the characters...and readers know what exactly is going on in their mind...

i found chapter 1 awesome..it was far better than what cvs gave us on the show...it was amazing...

continue soon n thnx for the pm😊

Edited by cheesemad - 12 years ago

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Sarah

@P4rveen12

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#20

Thank you so much for turning this into a short story, brilliant idea.

The update was brilliant and amazing, written perfectly.

Awww Khushi put the coil out and poor Arnav has lost his voice,

When Khushi found out at first she was happy but later Anjali confirmed his allergy, Khushi was actually horrified and felt so guilty,

Loved how you wrote the update in both of there point of views and absolutely loved there thoughts and personal monologues they were simply amazing and superb,

I can't believe Arnav actually made her do sits up and he had been lying that his voice had returned in the afternoon, poor Khushi looked hurt.

At least Arnav did like the way Khushi cared and showed him attention.

Eager to read more,

Please continue soon,

Thanks for the PM xx

Edited by P4rveen12 - 12 years ago