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Posted: 12 years ago
#61

Originally posted by: prateekdave7

Its Amazing concept..

Both taarey and Swaron in a one story..Well character sketch seems really interesting..

So keep update soon as u'r comfort..

Thanx for scrap

Prateek

you're welcome buddy and thanks for liking the character sketch and the concept 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Hey Tasha. See I am here 😆

I had already read the Character sketch earlier but you know the reason why I had been avoiding to comment. Anyways that is past. Now I am her to comment and will continue to do in future as well.

Okay coming to the reviewing part. I really liked the CS. The Characters have a unique essence which I liked the most. This story is going to be interesting to read. *I hope so*

And I hope you people would keep it upto the mark.

Mind if I suggest you something. Can you please avoid using short hand language. (SMS Language. De for the, n for and.) It will be much more effective.

Guys I dont intend to hurt anyone. So please take it positively or else ignore but dont take it personally.

#apologies if you feel hurt.
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Posted: 12 years ago
#63

Originally posted by: -shenz-

Hey Tasha. See I am here 😆




I had already read the Character sketch earlier but you know the reason why I had been avoiding to comment. Anyways that is past. Now I am her to comment and will continue to do in future as well.




Okay coming to the reviewing part. I really liked the CS. The Characters have a unique essence which I liked the most. This story is going to be interesting to read. *I hope so*




And I hope you people would keep it upto the mark.




Mind if I suggest you something. Can you please avoid using short hand language. (SMS Language. De for the, n for and.) It will be much more effective.




Guys I dont intend to hurt anyone. So please take it positively or else ignore but dont take it personally.




#apologies if you feel hurt.



Firstly thank you so much for commenting
Secondly we both will try hard to make it up to the mark dear
Thirdly I was thinking the same thing well u would have noticed I don't use that kind of writing its my co-writer who writes like this n CS is also written by her n I thought earlier to request her to use full words n now after ur suggestion I will definitely talk to her about this
She is out of town will be back by the end of this week will definitely discuss this with her n hopefully we will come up with the solution for this
Thanks once again for giving an honest feedback
Will be updating as soon as she returns n hopefully with full wordings my part is already written in the way u want but not hers so let's see what happens
Love
TaSha 🤗
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Posted: 12 years ago
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thanks dear 😃
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Posted: 12 years ago
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nYYC concepT plzZZ updatEEE soooNNN
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Nyc concept update soon Vl b waiting 4 d 1st chap
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Posted: 12 years ago
#67

for pms please add this account in your buddy list


hey guys..me and tasha are here with the update..thanks for ur suprt and encouragement...hope it will cntune in future too...i knw we are late..sry for dat..but we hope ki u people will lyk our wrk...and our efforts...okay i will stop my bak baknow ..let u people read de vry 1st chap of our ff...

Ch1: The First Kiss


A guy and girl came out from an office wearing black suit. Girl was holding a phone in one hand and her other hand was in her jacket's pocket. While the boy's both hands were in his pant's pockets. They had attitude, style and class in their walk. They went in the elevator and looked at each other. The boy smiled at the girl and the girl jumped in excitement when the door of elevator closed. She said "we did it, laddu" and hugged him tight and he hug her back smiling on her excitement and childish behavior. "Yes we did it, moti" he replied while breaking the hug. She said "we make a great couple" she paused and realized what she said and corrected her phrase instantly "I meant team." She said hiding her awkwardness and he smiled and replied "yes we do." What we do a good team or a couple she thought totally confused at his reply.

While she was thinking the elevator came to an abrupt stop and lights went off. She hugged him and he hugged her back and said "it's okay moti. I am here don't worry." "I am not scared of darkness when you are around." She was holding his buttons of shirt tightly with one hand and the other hand was clutching his shirt from the back. He was holding her waist protectively and she rested her head on his chest feeling secure while thinking stupid stuff and trying hard to push them away.

He felt her breath getting heavy. He made her face him and cupped her looking at her with full concern. "We're going to die Rey" she said while tears rolled down and her breathing got heavier. "shut up, I am not going to let you die" he said in full on angry tone and then took a deep breath and continued with a soft tone "chill in 10 mins the generator will start working and we will be out." "No we will not. Who will take care of bhai, now? You are going to die too, if it was only me you both could have supported each other" she said showing her concern for him while he was fuming in anger. Why the hell she care for everyone but not for her own self? Ugh. He thought. "What will bhai going to do all alone, no home food, no clean bedroom? How he is going to sur'" but before she could continue she was stopped by his hard lips. He sealed her lips through his so she can stop talking nonsense.

In the beginning it was a harsh kiss as Rey was biting her lips to show his anger but soon it changed into a passionate one when she held him closer to her by pulling him through his hairs. He deepened the kiss and so did she tighten her grip on his hairs. It was a different feeling as it was their first kiss they broke the hug as soon as they heard Beep Beep from their wrist watches respectively. They opened it avoiding their eye contact. And the next thing they heard their eyes went wide open "Scrapped. Located at the beach. Turning on my tracker. Find me." By this time the light came back and elevator started again as soon as the door opened they ran out it ignoring each and everything around them.

Scene shifts

A few minutes earlier

the night was clam..it was the time when the whole city was sleeping...but he was still in his duty of protctng her.. he was hidng behind a rock so that she doesn't see him dere. . he was suprized at the sight infront of him...He had expected her to be in sum mall, wasting all her dad's money... but no she was dere practng her kung fu moves...She was wearing a work out pair Tank top and shorts...her hair was tied into a pony tail... her kung fu movs wer so prfct jst lyk sum profsnl was partctng ...he was unknwly admrng her beauty ...he was jst lost in her beauty...but soon he saw red light shined over her back for just a minimal second...and den it vanshd..

swayam :was dat a real or i had imagined it?

his gaze scannd de whole beach for few mins...and then his eyes caught a jeep which is few meters away from where she was practicing ...person in the jeep was adjusting his diameter of the light. Luckly he was taking too long for it...but now our hero was in dilamma as what th do...if anythng happnd and if the acdmy's name coms out it will be a risk...he did the only thing he could do without risking the agency. But totally risking his life...and descd not to tell her about de jeep...he went near her and strt talkng to her...

swayam: tho lagtha hey ki bohat njy karahiho widout me?

sharon :tum? yeha..wat r u dng here? She asked in a surprised tone...he turnd his watch up and pretending to look at the time. ...He saw the jeep backing away.

swayam:kung fu pratce tho bilkul nahi karahu...

sharon:i knw tum yeha kya karahey ho..u wer keepng an eye on me rght? how many tme i told u i don't need ur help i can handle everthng by myself don't u get it?

swayam: oh come on its my wrk...i don't care weathr u r willng with it or not ...am jst dng my duty did u get it?

sharon: wat evr.. i don't care...jst lev frm here... she moved over to grab her hoodie when she realized he wasn't going ...she irrtd and descd to move frm der and she put on her jacket and started to slowly jog towards the where the jeep was a few mins ago...now swayam was worrd and was try to thnkng sum tme thaat wud send her home...so he ran to her..

swayam:hey siren..i thnk u have to go back to home...thats bettr for u ...

sharon(in full on attutd):and why would I do that? Especially when u tell abt dat?

swayam:look siren..am serus...go home rght now..

sharon:tell me de rsn..if i thnk its reasnble den i wil go frm here..(rolled her eyes)

swayam(angry tone):sirennn..ur testng my pasn ..okay f9..i heard in de news dat der is gng to come a strm here tonght..so u bttr go home...

sharon:den wat will u do here?

swayam was gng to gve her a back ans ..but befr that behind her he saw jeep cmng back again. One glance at the light sprinting from the barrel and he knew the it was going to shoot in moments...

sharon:bolo mr.akadu..kya..her was voice was cut off when he turned her to his side and took her postn ...put his lips on her...pullng her into a kiss ... swayam flinched as the bullet rushd into his back causng him pain..He felt hands pushng his chest hardly and he movd back wid a jerk ...

sharon: you bas***d..son of a bitch...how dare u to kiss me?.. she was furmng with angr..she shutd at top of her vce...de wrd wer echng in his ears...but he turned his eyes to look at the empty space where the jeep stood few mins ago...he mangd to cvr his pain and smirked. Involuntarily tears rolling down her eyes..she pushd him agn ... and He fell back into the water, and she ran away..cryng...He turned the dial of his watch and whispered. "Scrapped. Located at the beach. Turning on my tracker. Find me." He managed to say. Then put a tiny piece of equipment in his ear before laying his head back into the water. Soon aftr dat all he cud hear is rey and taani's panicked voice and he was trying to keep his eyes open... The last thing he remembered before his eyes gave up was his sis and his best frnd holding on to his hand and turning him around to aid his flesh...

so here it ends...hope u people have lykd it... Please leave ur comments..ur cmmnts means alot for us... and like the chapter if you liked it ..thanks for all ur lovly cmmnt ..slnt readr too..pls cmmnt if u want a soon update u have to cmmnt..pls igrn spllng mistks and grmcl mistks ..

luv,

renu & tasha


Edited by tasharenu - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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woohoo di loved it
the kiss of both the couples are so romantic
intense adorable
wow
plz continue soon

i m the first one yippee
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Posted: 12 years ago
#69
Hey guys the official name of our FF is



and here is the banner for our FF


hope u all like it don't forget to comment on it
Love
TaSha and Renu ❤️
Edited by tasharenu - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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amazing update pls continue soon

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