Swaron OS:Ye Khalish jo hai..Wo Khamakha Nahi

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Hi Friends ... This was my immediate reaction after watching today's episode...don't know..its an OS..or a post..whatever it is..hope u all will like it..please bear with my mistakes...i am in swaron dreamland...😳


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Ye Khalish jo hai..

----Wo Khamakha Nahi----




"I am not going to dance with him...noways..."


She tried to object...to whom...she had no idea...was it another unsuccessful attempt from her part to deny her hidden feelings for him...but how to control those heartbeats ..which were shamelessly chanting...or literally shouting HIS name...


He was standing next to her...there was noway...Swayam ...the same guy who could translate her silence...in to words...who could read her like an open book...who could sense her foot steps...from miles away ...who could control her heartbeats ...her every single breath ...was unaware of this ...



The uncontrollable waves of desires in those chocolate brown oceans...were making her insane...no-one was ready to listen to her protest...her denial ..went unnoticed...no-body was there to support her fragile self ...let alone others...her own heart...every heart beat...the blood cells dancing inside her...every portion of her existence ...betrayed her...they barefacedly declared their attraction towards the Greek god standing in the green and blue attire in front of her...Green...the color of envy ..the symbol of jealousy ...may be it reflected the jealousy of her each and every body cell...which wanted to touch him...they were dreaming about inhaling his intoxicating smell...they wanted to feel those perfectly carved lips...why the creator had to be so ruthless to give him all the breath-taking features together...that was so partial on his part...and why he had look so hypnotically irresistible when she was hopelessly trying to resist him...



She stood there being the prisoner of those dark chocolate brown guards...her tender heart was completely under his magical trance...his dark deep oceanic eyes so passionately absorbed her petite reflection...those brown orbs kept her captive...she couldn't move an inch for few moments...



She was completely in some distance world ..where no-one existed but HIM with HER ..


She came out of her alternate universe ...an angelic voice was the culprit...



Shall we??...He stretched his hand towards her ...in his signature gentle man style..



First those hypnotic eyes...than this husky voice of his...her heart was chirping like a mad bird...the glint in his eyes conveyed ..he was reading her heartbeats..more than she herself could understand her feelings...



"Why do you think...me tumhe ye mauka dungi...mere saath dance karne ka..."



I am Sharon Raiprakash...not every dancer possess the caliber to hold me in his arms as his dance partner...



I mean..u really think..me tumhe ye mauka dungi... She said...trying to put the veil of arrogance on her face...



Doesn't matter sharon...'Kyunki agar ye mauka tum nahi bhi dogi na to bhi cheen ke le loonga'


He whispered in her ears...and she knew its gonna be difficult to control herself...this time...as far as she knows Swayam...if he wants something he will get it...if he promises something ...he will fulfill it..



"I will make you fall in love with me Sharon"



He promised her...on the day they became a trial couple..when she half opened the door of her heart for him...she didn't realize he will be emperor of her heart ...he will control it ..and it will react to each action of his betraying her every single time...


She sighed...



Its going to be difficult ...the tussle in their hearts..their inner turmoil..took the form of music and lyrics...(Its described from Sharon's Point of view)



halki halki aahen bharna
takiye mein sar de ke dheeme dheeme
sargoshi mein baatein karna



He held her petite frame in his embrace...and she almost melted in his arms...she fitted in his embrace so perfectly ...as if...they were designed to be together ...destined to be together...her beautiful big greenish eyes were drowning in the deep dark brown ocean in front of the...their eyes were speaking in volumes...they never needed words to convey their feeling for each other...her eyes confessed her carefully kept secret love for him..yet again...her knees started to give away in front of his ascertained love...her breaths became heavy...they were competing with the fast pace of her hear beats...



pagalpan hai aise tumpe marna
ubla ubla kyun lagta hai
ye badan, ye jalan to khamakha nahi




He touched the bare part of her shoulders..her silky creamy skin almost burnt under his warm palms...he hid her inside his arms ...protectively ...It was home coming...she was back in my perfect place..where she was meant to be ...her heart started celebrating...and her mind revolted ..yet again...



His intoxicating scent ..the fast pace of his heart beats which were thumping against her frame...chanting her name..passionately ...those brown orbs kept her prisoner ...her body part were acting like her enemies...she tried to push him...and moved a bit...trying to control her foe heart ...but he was not in a mood to let go off her...he grabbed her wrist and pulled her towards him...she bumped against his heart ...he hid his face inside her silky tangles...he inhaled her smell...which gave her goose-pimples all over...her limbs betrayed her ...and declared her love for him...pridefully ...


She let out a sigh slowly..just like every night ...she used to do...with the head inside the pillow..while talking to herself in whispers...It's madness to love him so much.. but it was too late ..not to fall for him...


Her hand made its way through his dream-like soft hairs...accepting her defeat against him...



ye khalish jo hai, wo khamakha nahi
haan tapish to hai, par khamakha nahi..



Why her body was boiling..melting against his chiseled chest..This feeling of burning was not without any reason..this pricking is not without reason..the heat that was there between them, was not without reason..


She closed her eyes..trying to control...her heart...and mentally slapped herself ...trying to come out of his trance...but little did she know..he was determined to make her realize her place...in their equation...he was the one having the upper hand...he was controlling every single body cell in her fragile self...her heart..her soul...her existence refused to obey her...they were listening to their master...who tamed them with endless and unconditional love ...



She touched his face ...it felt so right...when his brown orbs were fixed on her ..and his face moved further..and he leaned towards her...the traces of her hair were coming between them...he pushes them aside...as they were hiding his perfect moon from him...the softness in his eyes...the depth of his love ...was reflecting in each of his gestures...he was making her insane...she was not in her senses ...he was dominating every part of her existence ...


No...This can't happen...this will hurt him even more...something inside her screamed she tried to free herself from his stubborn grip...but he nodded his head in negative...he was not going to listen to her ...any of her lame excuses...to keep distance from him...he declared his revolt against her miserable self...



Jo nahi kiya, kar ke dekhna,
saans rok ke, mar ke dekhna,
ye bewajah, besabab, khamakha nahi..
ye khaamakha nahi..


He slipped his hand on her bare skin...and kept his other hand on her waist ...which was enough to send shivers through her petite frame..she hated to be in his control...but the docile beloved inside her...loved his dominance on her existence..His eyes burning with desires suggested her to try and do what she hasn't done..To stop the breath and try to die..in his embrace..death in embrace of your beloved...every heart pray for it ...which has experienced the feeling of love...the burning desires..the uncontrollable feelings ...it's not without meaning...without reason...the reason ..LOVE...



Saari saari raat ka jagna,
khidki pe sar rakh ke rote rehna..
ummeedon ka jalna bujhna,
paagalpan hai aise tumpe marna..
khaali khali do aankhon mein,
ye namak, ye chamak, to khamakha nahi..
fikr rehti hai, jo khamakha nahi..



She was accepting her defeat ..in front of him...it was difficult to stay away ...she could push his physical frame..she could step aside ...and create distance...but how to create distance between two souls...madly in love with each other ....who were glued to each other ...and refused to come out of the magical embrace of love..even for a moment...



zikr rehta hai, jo khamakha nahi..
ashq aankhon mein, bhar ke dekhna
aaina kabhi darr ke dekhna
ye bewajah, besabab, khamakha nahi..
Deewangi sahi, ye khaamakha nahi..
majnu to hain, par khamakha nahi..



She stepped aside while pushing him away..But their souls remained in the same place where they were destined to be... they witnessed two souls passionately pouring love on each other..love..hidden in two tender hearts...from ages...it was not in her control to stop those two entities molded inside each other..they were not two...they witnessed only one entity...one heart...one soul...



Two parts of single heart ...were again becoming one... the Love which was composed of a single soul inhabiting two bodies...



zikr rehta hai, jo khamakha nahi..
ashq aankhon mein, bhar ke dekhna
aaina kabhi darr ke dekhna
ye bewajah, besabab, khamakha nahi..
Deewangi sahi, ye khaamakha nahi..
majnu to hain, par khamakha nahi..



Her fragile self ..was tired of being away from him..all these while..Waking all nights...Crying with the head on the window sill...the sudden glowing and dying of hopes...hope to be together with him..again...she knew ...It's madness to love him so much...but it was better than the pain of being far from him... her heart never ceased to mention him without any reason...to make her realize what she was loosing ...to try and fill her eyes with tears..tears of guilt..to hurt him beyond repair...To look at the mirror with fear sometimes..realizing his existence within her...it's not without meaning...without reason..



This madness is not without reason..I'm mad for him, but not without any reason..


She tried to push him away...He held her waist ...declaring his rights on her...their hearts danced together ...he picked her in his arms..where she fitted like a jigsaw puzzle...he twirled her ..and pinned her to the mirror...she couldn't hide the love kept carefully in the secret room of her heart...she couldn't hide the love...from herself...from him...the mirror in front of them mercilessly reflected her love for him hidden in her beautiful eyes ...the deep brown oceans in front of her were full with waves of unspoken feelings...hidden desires...endless love...he crossed the distance between them..and this time she lost her control on herself completely and hid her face in his chest...his melodious heartbeats were singing lullaby to her...two entities were engulfed in each other...she found solace on the way back to her home..her heaven..his embrace...their heart beats were celebrating their togetherness...their lips were about to touch...that was the last thing she could remember..He smiled and put his lips on hers ..with a promise to kiss her till the end of the world ...they were lost in their dream world of LOVE where nothing else existed ...

Finally they managed to search the reason behind the madness...it was not without any reason...



ye khalish jo hai, wo khamakha nahi
haan tapish to hai, par khamakha nahi..



The music of their hearts never stopped...it kept ringing in their ears..their hearts..their souls...



I am not sending PMs for this one..will post it in my gallery..u all will get PMs that time...😳


hey guys how was it? good ...bad ...very bad..boring ... plzzz do comment.. i will wait for your comments and feedback




Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago


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blithe thumbnail
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Okay now, As I promised you, I am here to read an OS for the very first time. Also, I am eager to know your views on SwaRon. This title brought me here.

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Well done deepika. The way you wrote it, I felt like I watching the episode again. Honestly, I was playing those scenes on my mind. I am sorry to say, its more like a post than a One-Shot.

Firstly, they way you started off with that line has set my mood. Unknowingly, I was drawn back to the episode. You became the voice of their thoughts. That was the ONLY and BIG difference. The thing that I liked more is that, along with the voice of their thoughts, you have mixed your thoughts too. That was something beautiful to read and this differentiates your post from other posts which I read till now on this forum regarding tonite's episode.

Secondly, the song altogather gave a AWESOME description. I really liked it. While reading, I felt a different experience. I mean in the episode, I watched a passionate SwaRon. And here, I am visualising the sweet-romantic SwaRon. You made that difference with your OWN style of writing. Kudoos to you, you have proved that the Same SwaRon scene can be as sweet as it was hot.

The line you brought from the trial-confession episode deserves a Thumps up to you.
And the line which I liked the most is that

"This madness is not without reason..I'm mad for him, but not without any reason.."

Also the para above this line, you wrote it good. And I gave my reviews after reading your work. I had to rate it I will rate it above Good.
Edited by blithe - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Right now I don't have words to express what I'm feeling at this moment..
Will unreserve it 2morrow...

Unres..

Hi My Li'l Angel...
This is my view on ur OS. Srry took a long time to unres... But I hope it would be worth it...😊
Starting with the first line...

"I am not going to dance with him...noways..."


This line completely depicted THE DIVA SHARON RAI PRAKASH's attitude..😉

Though Sharon is trying to hide her feelings from Swayam and the whole gang, She herself is sure that she has fallen in LOVE of Swayam.❤️

Although Swayam can read Sharon's mind and heart easily, this time he is totally unaware about the love that Sharon has for HIM.😭

Ur portrayal of Swayam as a Greek GOD was mind blowing and Sharon's point of view was AWESOME.👏

The world in which Sharon was with Swayam is THE SWARON WORLD..


Doesn't matter sharon...'Kyunki agar ye mauka tum nahi bhi dogi na to bhi cheen ke le loonga'

This line highlighted the new Swayam who was ready to make Sharon fall in his love again... no matter what he was not ready to let go off her so soon.😊


The song perfectly matched the situation. The lyrics were depicted with perfect ease.👍🏼

Ur description of all the lyrics were out of this world. I couldn't have imagined it in this way.👏

When I watched the episode, the sequence was a normal intense sequence for me. Though I watched it with the excitement of Swaron's first intense scene after Sharon's come back.😉

But after going through ur OS, I again watched the sequence, but this time it was completely new for me. I was in the SwaRon dreamland which was created by U, for all of the SwaRonians. This world is totally different from the outer world. It is built upon the basis of LOVE❤️ and only TRUE LOVE❤️. The love U express is completely different from what basically people think it is. This love is infinite, it doesn't want anything in return, it just wants the happiness of our loved ones, it is unimaginable.. no words can express it.

BUT U ALWAYS DO IT MY LI'L ANGEL. And U do it with an ease.👏


The love U express is always the love of pure souls. It is not physical. It always touches the heart of the reader. The madness U spoke about is not of Lust but of True Love.. The True Love once achieved will be there till the end of world, no matter what obstacles come in the way, the True love stays True to itself.

Yes, I completely agree with U, the rhythm of True Love never stops. It keeps on ringing in both the hearts, which are two parts of one soul.

While going through ur OS, I never imagine the characters as Shantanu and Sneha/Vrushika, or Swayam and Sharon, But I visualize them as two pure hearts and one pure soul. This is the impact of ur writing on me.👏👏👏(Srry don't know about other readers.. This is my sole opinion..)😆


Hope I didn't disappoint U with this comment.. But still I'm speechless to comment on ur OS.😃

It always takes me into the other world.. THE SWARON WORLD...

I'm still in SwaRon Dreamland...

Thanx for tolerating me till the end of comment...🤣🤣


I hope and Pray that U keep giving all ur readers such ARTISTIC pieces of work till end of the world. May GOD bless U and shower all HIS bounties on U forever... AMEN...


LOTS AND LOTS AND LOTS AND LOTS OF LOVE❤️❤️❤️, HUGS🤗🤗🤗, KISSES... Muuuaaahhh... AND BEST WISHES👍🏼👍🏼👍🏼 to MY LI'L ANGEL DEEPIKA...


From ur Dii... Afshan...


Take care... Bye...

Edited by Afshan9 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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wow well written u have penned it beautifully .u superbly emoted today's swaron sequence through os .another good piece of work by u on swaron 👏
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Posted: 12 years ago
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res...
will unres tomo..:)

Hey Di...🤗

Ur late-lateef commenter is here to trouble you...😆😆

sorry for being so late...you very well know the reason...so coming to the os ...it was...umm...i have to borrow geeta maa's statement for this awesomely amazing piece of work...
here i go...this was..STUPENDOUS - FABULOUS - FANTASTICAL- MAGICAL- SUPERFICIALLY - AMAZINGLY - AWESOME piece ...
(phewww...Geeta maa kaise karti hai...woh bhi roz-roz!! 🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣🤣)
Loved it to the core...you penned it so beautifully...the seq was much more effective after you add your incredible thoughts with that...

i always love the way you present your own swaron...i called them yours coz...they are the same swaron which we use to see everyday...but you made them different in your own style of expressing their love...which is so pure...so divine...

I read many posts/Os's after the khamakha seq...but your one is the BEST...PERFECT!!
you are amazing as writer di..i like the ease...simplicity...in your writing...which never fails to convey the depth ...captivating...you bound your reader till the end...writing is for you ...never stop writing di...love you😊

Luv ur
RockStar

Edited by OceanicRockStar - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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res for megha di

deeppyyy...pehle kaan pakar ke maafi for being sooo late in commenting...bahut gandi ho gayi hoon aajkal...but kya karu tu itna acha likhti hai ke kya comment karu samajh nahi aata 😛


and apni kya tuning hai...tune sharon pov se likha and maine at the same time swayam pov se likha...m glad hum dono ne same character ke pov nahi likhe 😛

the khamakha sequence has really blown my mind off...not only for the amt of passion it carried but also for the amount of deeper meanings each action, each move depicts...

we all always miss sharons pov in the actual serial and we readers are blessed to read such awesome works which can depict sharons pov!

i am not quoting anything cuz the entire piece is brilliant...love love love the additions u have done in the conversation like ... yes swayam is a man of words...he told her he will make her fall in loev with him...

"Why do you think...me tumhe ye mauka dungi...mere saath dance karne ka..."



I am Sharon Raiprakash...not every dancer possess the caliber to hold me in his arms as his dance partner...



I mean..u really think..me tumhe ye mauka dungi...



and see kya fall hua haii...itna solid! aur kaise nahi hota, akhir hai to wo the great swayam shekhawat...koi bhi girl usse kaise pyaar nahi kar sakti!😳


loved how u have connected the lyrics of the song, one hell of a beautiful song, to the entire write up!!


my favorite line in the song (and also the way it is sung) : pagalpan hai aise tumpe marna...sach mein pagalpan hai...hayyeee!!!!



p.s. : aise hi pagalpan se marti hoon tere stories and write ups pe!


love you babyy...muahhh 🤗

your di! 😃


Edited by deep_Tanha - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Res

Unres.

First of all, m really sorry. I forgot i had to unres dis. Thanks for reminding. I told u na u wil hav to hold me at Gun point 😆

Coming to Khamakha Nahi, That entire sequence still sends tingles down my spine, i mean really.

I loved your OS from the very start itself wen u said that she didn't know to whom she was objecting, it was to him or her own heart.

Basically, the entire part in d start wer u hav described her thoughts came out so damn beautifully.

Sharon, and her dil vs dimag, i so luv seeing her confused, coz she luks super adorable at dat tym.

The best line in the entire oS? The fact that you mentioned his dialogue "I will make you fall in love with me Sharon" Why? It was so very well relatable.

And then the way u hav explained the whole dance, it really gave me a totally different pov to look at the whole sequence. What we saw was intimicacy, what i read was purity. I was literally amazed at how well you have described every single expression, played with their emotions, hats off to you.

Sharon caring so much about swayam is a total pleasure. she has changed so much, in fact she doesnt bother about her emotions, how much she is hurting her own self by staying away from him...

And when she accepted her defeat, it showed that how unconditional his love was, that no matter what, love always wins.

Her entire struggle to not let herself get carried away to the part wer she finally accepts him and the kiss, it was a beautiful, gradual flow.

I m still in awe smarty, really.

Loved it so much, ek os yaadein pe bhi ho jaye? 😳😳

PS: I forgot to add dis..I am also mad for SwaRon, but its not widout a reason
Edited by sweetangelpayal - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Awsm awsm just awsm loving d sequence more nw..
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Posted: 12 years ago
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❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️❤️
SWARON

Di...just loved the OS...mindblowing...
Unable to express my feelings.for Today's SWARON's Dance...and moreover this piece of ur work was like.."Chaar chaand laga diye"
Loved it too the core...m just SPEEHLESS...!!!

Luv,
Sakshi...
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Posted: 12 years ago
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Amazing 😊
Every dancestep of Swaron is filled by emotions
Edited by sanstina - 12 years ago

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