Collab FF: IPK 2.0-Doing it right#3, Ch23, p144

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Sonia

@sonia_92

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Posted: 12 years ago

#721

Haha buaji and romancing with bedi ji, oye hoye! mazza sa gaya. Plus naughty and smart payash, adds to the fun. Not to forget the adorable fuming khushi. I wonder why she called arnav in the work room.

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S.B.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#722

Loved the update
it was Fab :D

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1chilly

@1chilly

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Posted: 12 years ago

#723

Some dialogues in this update were little gems.

Madhusundari, come and take it. Go and do it saale sahib. Then there was the room of requirements and Payal wanting to go to Dhantinav as it has a poolside.

This was one of my favourite updates in this ff. Hope the next one comes fast.

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@flowers4u

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Posted: 12 years ago

#724

amazing update ...looking forward to what kushi is upto...continue soon...

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quicksand

@quicksand

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Posted: 12 years ago

#725

that was a fabulous update...
Loved Buaji's love story...waiting for Arnav's and Khushi's part

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Maddy1270

@Maddy1270

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Posted: 12 years ago

#726

a jealous khushi is such a treat to 'watch', especially her crushing sheetal's fingers, followed by the smug smile... one can almost see the steam emanating from her ears! loved the sneaky arnav knowing just the right buttons to push! afer khushi flounced out of the room, doubt if sheetal remained smug much longer!

the image of the budding romance was just adorable, especially given the chubby bedi's eagerness to have a glimpse of his reluctant love: ... walked towards the voice that beckoned him. And rightly he saw the lights of Madhumati's house on and heard the melodious string of 'Nand kisore!' being carried over a ten meter radius. He jumped in the air in joy, feeling a muscle pull at the back 😆 and he winced in pain. But this was not the time to cry over a ligament, it was time to meet his MadhuSundari. 🤣 the saraswatichandra effect, eh?! and the picture was to die for, sigh ! the arnav-khushi passion-play being unwittingly mimicked by these two was sheer genius 👏: Madhumati felt her very generously filled elbow being held and she was turned around in a slow motion, as her plait wrapped around her neck to come face to face with him. She started breathing heavily as he steadily gazed at her. He lifted his hand to her temple and she closed her eyes as a gentle breeze blew out of nowhere. His hand brushed her right cheek and further up. Tucking a strand of her hair behind her ear she felt something plucked out and she opened her eyes to find her glasses in his hand... these two sure can give arnav and khushi a run for their money 😉! their epic love story are what great romances are made of and may even be remembered down the ages 😃! the playful bedi with his arm round buaji's waist is unforgettable... given their ample girths, how did they manage to get close to each other? bedi trilling double entendres to a 'scheming' buaji just cracked me up: "It works as good as me. Try us!" he said cheekily... 🤣 I've died [laughing] and gone to heaven!

oh Zehra, Zehra, the way you play with words is just the tops... Aman as a messiah 😃 is apt, yet damn hilarious... I am fast running out of emoticons! wow, Sheetal is such an airhead: Arnav left Sheetal alone in his cabin, reading the file to the walls... how does arnav tolerate her?

khushi's note in 'English' was the death of me 🤣 🤣 🤣... bediji has nothing on our darling khushi when it comes to double entendres: "Need someone to ride me'.back to home ASAP. Anyone willing to volunteer?" ☺️ I am a 100% certain that arnav must be rearing to go, able and willing to 'ride' her home 😉! what is khushi up to behind that curtain? my wild imagination is going into overdrive! but seeing as it is khushi, she must be involved in something totally innocent.

poor akash and payal... a suhaag raat that the groom slept through abandoning his eager bride only to decide to enjoy the morning after, then see it go up in smoke 🤣 ! man, what an absolutely spot on definition of the famous poolside: "The room which magically appears whenever the need be, we can do whatever we want there and nobody can find us! Is there such a room here?"... "There is one such room... It is there in Shantivan, in Delhi. It is called the Poolside." 😆 Zehra, you really made my day, leaving me grinning ear to ear, with your amazing and absolutely rollicking update! I am a great fan of your utterly wicked sense of humor!

Edited by Maddy1270 - 12 years ago

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Take_That

@Take_That

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Posted: 12 years ago

#727

Khushi is getting bolder by the day! Need someone to ride me...! Lol!

What is Khushi doing behind the curtains?

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__blossom__

@__blossom__

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#728

Omg buaji and rabba vey!!! haila! 😆
great update! Payash are awsome...! Y did khushi call arnav here!??

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avantika_2012

@avantika_2012

Voyager

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Posted: 12 years ago

#729

Let me start from the start. Aaj list banane ka mann karr raha hai. That way one has to frame lesser sentences. 😆 You see, even though you aren't, I'm very lazy. Or are you? 😆 Trick question hui gavva! 😆

1. A jealous Khushi was more attractive.
Naughty ASR! 😆

2. Buaji and Bedi Rabba Ve? Aur woh bhi ArHi style? Dead-va! 🤢 😆

3. Why did you write MadhuSundari? Only inspired from Kumud Sundari? After I read 'madusundari', I starting chanting MadhuMoti...MadhuMoti! 😛 😆 No offence to Buaji or anyone else. I love Buaji. Was just wondering if that gave you the idea? 😆

4. "Hai re Nandkisore! Ee sasura chasma kaha gaya!?" I could Buaji saying it out loud in her typical accent. 😆 And then I started imitating her myself. Saying it out loud myself and then laughing away! 😆 You wrote the dialogue very well. 😉 Even "Theek hai theek hai. Humka humra chasma de deo". Too good. Aap Buaji ki dialogue writer toh nahi thi na? 😆

5. The tea cup fell from Madhumati's hand in a slow motion, breaking in to pieces and spilling the remaining tea on the marble floor.
😆 Sorry. I wasn't supposed to laugh coz Payash ka rishta toot gayya...or did it? 😉 But it was too funny. Jaise typically serials mai dikhate hain naa...wahi dimaag mai aa gayya toh I couldn't stop laughing!

"But that room isn't here. It is there in Shantivan, in Delhi. It is called the Poolside" 🤣

6. Need someone to ride me'(😲) back to home ASAP. (Oh, okay!) 😆
What's with all the innuendos? All the itillaics in the last line? Humne sab notice kiya! 😆

7. Loved the Payash scene. Cute and funny.
She nodded and then her eyes lit up and she asked "Do you have a Room of Requirements here, where we can hide?"
I love this Payal! 😆

8. "Shit!" he exclaimed as he got up from his bed.

"Then go and do it, Saale Saahab" Shyam said in an irritated voice as he snuggled deeper in to the quilt, humming Daiyya Ho to himself. 🤣

Then go and do it. 🤣 I almost fell from my chair and that! And Shyamji's obsession with Dayyi Ho is too much! 😆

9. Sorry for so many laughing emoticons but I was actually laughing alll through the update. Couldn't resist! 😉 And I have this obsessions with emoticons too! 😛

10. Brilliant chapter! 👍🏼 👏

11. (gyarah shubh maana jaata hai...issliye ek point aur add kar diya! 😆) I love you! 🤗

PS - Zyada bakvaas ho gayyi kya?

PPS - Point 5 edited. Ab itni cheezein batani hoti hain toh ek-do bhool bhi sakte hain!

Edited by avantika_2012 - 12 years ago