Collab FF: IPK 2.0-Doing it right#3, Ch23, p144

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EXPELLIARMUS

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Posted: 12 years ago

#471

Res for comment on chapter 18 😊

Edit:

Okay, no offence to the other writers, but that has to be the best update yet!

Maxine, I think that this is one of your best works, ever!

Where do I begin?

With Mamiji's killer eye-shadow?

Or Akash's utterly hilarious inner voice?

Lady, you killed me with that conversation, I just couldn't stop laughing!

But you took the cake, and the entire bakery, with mobile Ratnagiri and Mr.Goddess of Wisdom Moon man. Freaking hilarious!

How do you even come up with these gems?

And the Arnav-Khushi bit at the end, Hum Aapke hai kaun?! LOL!

Flirt karna bhi na jaane!

And now Payal has done..what, exactly?

Khushi ke careful plans ka kya hoga?

Overall, I just have to say this: Brilliant, brilliant update, you have really outdone yourself here!

*Goes back to reading it again while clutching tummy and ROFLing*

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Take_That

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Posted: 12 years ago

#472

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Oh most are writing again! That's cool!

Akash is scared of Manno's eye shadow more than Manorama itself!

Glad Akash got married here. Unlike the show where Arnav had to speak to the family on his behalf!

This is really turning out to be IPK 2.0!

Ye lo Kumud ne bhi cameo kar liya hamare FF mein! Everyone wants to be a part of this story!

Loved loved the update!

Vo ladki kaun hai jisne Arnavji ka phone uthaya? Emma-ji aap batayengi?

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RasgullaSP

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Posted: 12 years ago

#473

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Firstly, you have done the mehnat of reading all the 17 chapters before this one and it shows. The update is perfect in every way possible. ⭐️

I will now list down the things that made me laugh a lot and made me wonder how much more pagal you must be in real life to write something like this.

The neon green and hot pink eye shadow of Mami (her deadly weapon) that could blind normal people, but since the other members were conditioned to it they only shaded their eyes but Payal, not accustomed to this, fainted. Ivan Pavlov must be laughing his butt off in his grave at this use of his Classical Conditioning theory... 😆

PayAsh are just married and Aakash is already irriated! Men! 😡

This is definitely IPK 2 where the entire wedding rigmarole with all the rasams and sambhars and the madness and the Raizada frenzy with all things traditional will be redone for PayAsh. 😃

Payal now wants the pheras and Aakash wants to start backwards with the Suhaag Raat? 😉 IPK 2.0 main sab ulta?

The digs on aashramwali Dadi, Shyam's Daiya ho and Anjalis requirement of Shyam for her Rajkumari only were super funny 😃

When Khushi Called Kumud... and planned to go to Delhi. I have not seen SC but reading your sarcastic take on it I know I am not missing much, what with all the floating of a part of Maharashtra to Rajasthan which is now docked in Delhi 😆

Backless blouses and Mr. Goddess of Wisdom Moon Man 😆 😆 😆 😆

I LOVE a teasing Arnav and a jealous Khushi 😳

You reminded me of lagi sharth! Of Jiji tere Jethji deewane! 😔 I miss all that.

But then you made Arnav say Hum Aapke Hain Kaun? and who was that on the phone? A surprisewa???

Loved the update 😊

Dont say thanks!

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Nikita

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Posted: 12 years ago

#474

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Awesome update! I loved it so funny and Akash and Payal went And got married... I can't wait for them to make it to Delhi

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-Emma.K-

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Posted: 12 years ago

#475

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Maxine, I think you already know how much I loved this! And so the hilarity goes on, I couldn't stop laughing while reading this. Akaash talking to his inner voice, and his comment about his mothers eyeshadow had me in splits. Poor guy won't have his suhaag raat! Or will he? I guess it's up to me...

Khushi called kumudsundari?! 😆 I love how you added that show here! And the way you described how that place became Delhi 🤣

Absolutely loved this. So will she get to Delhi? And how will she deal with Payal? I guess I should figure that out 😃

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Deeksha

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Posted: 12 years ago

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Mamijee's eyeshadows do speak volumes - of colours that is. :P I like that Akash like his mother needs a lot of drama in his life. The way manorama is addressed.. ha! 'Maathey' and 'Mummyjee' dramatic and demure - yeh exchange offer kab chalu hua bhaii? 'Maang Bhari Haddi' HAHAA!

Happy 'kaalities' wali Khushi is very clever. She got herself an extra job for her gottas and promoted SLB's Saraswatichandra too, rightly illustrating the blues of it. :P

Who is the woman? Hmm??

Maxine your talent for humour is awesome. I have laughed every time I read the chapter. Wonderful Update 😆

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Kishmish

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Posted: 12 years ago

#477

😃

🤣 🤣 🤣

"Lhee-gal? Bhaat Lhee-gal? I AM the law in this house. And I say no pheras, no suhaag raat!" said Manorama sternly...

Kumud lives in Ratnagiri. It's on the Konkan coast of Maharashtra which migrated to Gujarat and floated up to the deserts of Rajasthan during the last Monsoon. It's currently stationed at Delhi near Chandi Chowk. Aur koi sawaal Sanka Devi?" ... 🤣

Gosh just can't stop laughing ...

You are a riot ... Maxine jee

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applesauce.

@applesauce.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#478

Awesome Update!😆Cant stop laughing at the humor in it.
Minimum coverage,maximum mileage🤣

and Ratnagiri floating over deserts🤣,nw stationed at Delhi..🤣🤣

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choochootrain

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Posted: 12 years ago

#479

Like e update n would have totally enjoyed it if only there's english translations...don.understand hindi...

Nevertheless, tanx for updating...

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@flowers4u

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Posted: 12 years ago

#480

wow...superb update totally agree with the saraswatichandra punches...poor payal and akash and loved the discription of mamis eyeshadow...looking forwardto read more