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Posted: 9 years ago
Thank you so much for reopening it...
finally
Will complete this asap...
thank you
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Posted: 9 years ago
The FINAL CHAPTER:- Truths and The Final Goodbye (Part-1)






(Ok I don't know what i have written and why...i have skipped the story line from its actual plot because i have to finish it as soon as possible...i never wanted to finish it like this but it will take time if i will go with its actual plot...and i don't have time for it and story will be closed if i will take it long to update...Sorry if you don't like it...)



Eshaan's heart beats were running faster with every single minute his eyes were falling on Jannat. 'Nothing will happen to you, I won't let you go away'' Eshaan was consoling Jannat but moreover he was trying to make himself believe that after two years of separation he can't let anything happen to her at any cost.'Please stay here, you are not allowed to enter in ICU'' the nurse told to Eshaan forcing him to stand outside of the ICU.


After ten minutes Ishaan was moving towards ICU with a glass of water in his hands when he heard something very disturbing. He halted in his tracks and turned around to see two police officers and a middle aged man talking to a doctor as if trying to convince him for something but that doctor was constantly denying. Then all of a sudden his gaze fell on the two stretchers behind them, Ishaan tried to avoid it and return to ICU when in a gaze falling second that doctor moved from there clearing the view.



AT THE RECEPTION

'Excuse me, where is ICU?'' Jannat's mother asked to the receptionist.

'Go straight and then left'' the receptionist replied.



Ishaan was standing frozen on his place as the doctor moved away clearing his view.

Tej and Edha were on the stretchers wounded and lifeless. Then he heard that old aged man passing through him, talking to the doctor, 'Please doctor, you have to do it, he is a criminal and that is the only way I could save my daughter from him, you have to end his life''.


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Eshaan was going through the toughest times of his life, on one hand Jannat was in ICU, fighting for her life and on the other hand Edha's father was trying to kill Tej during his medical treatment.

But answer for the question he was not getting was 'Why Edha's father was trying to kill Tej? And why was he trying to separate Tej and Edha? And why the hell he was saying that he is a criminal?'' he has to save his friend at any cost, only he is the person who could answer all his questions.

He was struggling with his thoughts when a known voice interrupted him, 'How is she?'' Jannat's mom was standing behind Eshaan, 'She is in ICU'' Eshaan answered quietly, for few seconds both of them were quiet, 'Jannat had never ditched you, it was his father'', all of a sudden Jannat's mother confessed taking Eshaan with a surprise, 'What...What do you mean by that?'' Eshaan asked confused, 'you remember once Jannat had told you that she was going for a singing competition?, that time you were out of City because of your football tournament representing your collage. When Jannat won semi-finale of the competition one of her opponent forced her to eat sweets on her victory.'' She paused to look at Eshaan who was listening her carefully with all the mixed emotions he was going through, 'She had mixed vermillion in them, because of which my daughter lost her voice'', eshaan was heartbroken on the information he got through Jannat's mother, before his legs could give up he sat down on the nearby bench 'but she could have got her voice back, if...'', 'I tried but Jannat was not co-operating with us, she didn't wanted to socialize with any one after you left her, she parted herself from the outer world, so that she could not face anyone, who could show sympathy on her.'' Jannat's mother finally cried remembering all the pains her daughter was gone through, 'I left her? It was not me, it was she who ditched me, I came to her but she didn't even dare to face me, to tell me that she wanted a break up from this relationship, I lost my father because your daughter insulted him to that extend that he couldn't tolerate it, what was his fault?, he was just trying to sort out everything between both of us and she...'' Eshaan's face was fully red remembering his father lying in the hospital taking his last breaths.

'No, No, It was not her, that night when you were thrown out of the house, Your father came to us, Jannat didn't even knew that you and your father were there to meet us, she was in hospital for her treatment, after which she decided to quit all her treatments, it was not Jannat, it was not me, it was her father who tried to separate both of you'', Mrs. Singhania finally revealed about the real villain between Jannat and Eshaan taking Eshaan by shock.

'From the very beginning he was against your relationship, he always wanted to be in the good books of Jannat that's why he always used me, so that I can create misunderstanding between you but when I denied, he himself decided to separate you both, he rejected all your calls, he used to check all her mails before her and delete them before she could know about them, he tried all possible ways so that you both cannot contact each other at any cost, once Jannat had gone to your home to meet you but by then you have left the city, She didn't even know about your father being dead. Her father poisoned her ears about you insulting him, asking for handsome money to leave you and what not''

'And you didn't said a single word, when all this was going, knowing everything?'' Eshaan taunted her feeling devasted on the truth he was confronting after two years of destruction, 'I tried... I tried hard to tell Jannat about her father's real face but she hated me so much that she didn't even heard a single word against her father from me, I am her step mother after all,'' Mrs. Singhania broke down on the last statement she made, 'I left Mr. Singhania after a month I got to know about you leaving the city and your father being dead, I tried Jannat to take with me but her father poisoned her so much that she didn't even want to see my face, I was left with no option then to leave without her''.

'I am sorry'' Eshaan apologized for misunderstanding her for years.




TO BE CONTINUED...

Edited by ridzzi - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Next ud kab milega ???
Feeling so bad for 4of them ... Plzz reunion them soon ...
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Posted: 9 years ago
What was that? Poor Ehsaan..how much will he suffer? Ishani os in iCU his friends are almost on the death bed with Edha's father forcing the doc to kill Tej!!!
How will he come out of all of this commosion? And now this truth about Ishani...

kya krega yr...kaise thik krega sab kuch?
please update soon...plz...
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: Rajat_Fanatic

What was that? Poor Ehsaan..how much will he suffer? Ishani os in iCU his friends are almost on the death bed with Edha's father forcing the doc to kill Tej!!!

How will he come out of all of this commosion? And now this truth about Ishani...

kya krega yr...kaise thik krega sab kuch?
please update soon...plz...


even i m also waiting for update ...
hope she will update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
JEET-The truth and the final good bye (part-2)





Eshaan was sitting right beside Jannat's bed holding her hands tightly, looking at her without blinking for a second.


''Eshaan you should go and rest, you haven't relaxed for a moment since you brought Jannat here'' Mrs. Singhania asked Eshaan as she entered in the hospital room.


Eshaan looked at her for a moment and thought something, then slightly nodding in yes he stood up, carefully placing her hands on the bed ''please don't leave for a second, until I come back'' saying so Eshaan left the room leaving behind Mrs. Singhania with Jannat.



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Eshaan was walking through the corridors thinking about the conversations he overheard between the doctor and edha's father.

''i have to figure it out, before something went wrong'' Eshaan thought and moved faster to find the room in which Edha and Tej were.



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Eshaan stood stunned hearing to the conversation going on in Edha's room.


''you always knew that he was innocent, even then you trapped him and now you want to kill him, why?'' Edha's mother asked completely shocked at the information she just received.


''because I don't want him around my daughter, he is a son of a criminal after all and he himself was a criminal'' edha's father replied not meeting his wife's eyes.


''he was not a criminal'' edha's mother shouted ''you made him criminal, he wouldn't have walked on that path only if you have believed him, you brought misunderstanding between them, Tej kept on saying that he didn't killed anyone but you didn't listen to him, you didn't even allowed him to see his mother for the last time, you knew that his mother was killed but you didn't do anything, just said that she committed suicide out of guilt, which guilt?'' Edha's mother stopped only after realizing that her throat has been dried and she needed water



After gulping down a glass of water she continued ''Edha would have never came to know about your plan and ran from the house until I myself haven't told her about your real intentions'' Edha's mother confessed taking her husband by surprise ''and let me tell you one thing very clearly that, no matter what but I will not let you take Tej's life at any cost'' edha's mother challenged her husband openly.


But they were disturbed by a familier voice ''no one has to do anything, he will die either'' the doctor standing at the doorstep informed.


''what do you mean?'' Edha's mother asked all scared and confused.


''Tej was already injured badly and was shot too, and the jumping from that building made his condition even worse , we tried but can't save him, he have very less time'' the doctor informed to both of them.



Eshaan's heart stopped beating for second hearing about Tej having very less time '' no it's not possible'' Eshaan literally ran towards Tej's room without thinking about the consequences.



Edha's father relaxed hearing to the news and left with the doctor to see Tej leaving behind Edha and his mother all alone without knowing that the girl laying on the hospital bed was conscious, listening to their conversation.


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Jannat opened her eyes instantly after she recalls the scene of her accident, she turned around to locate Eshaan only to find Mrs. Singhania sleeping on the nearby couch.

Without paying attention on the severe pain she was having in her legs and elbow because of the accident, she silently took out all the pipes transplanting blood to her body and stepped down only to fall on the ground because of the disbalancing due to her pains in her legs.


Jannat instantly looked at her mother and thanked her stars that she didn't woke up because of the noise.

Gathering all her courage she stood up and moved towards the door and turned around to see her mother, then she carefully opened the door making sure that her mother didn't wake up and peeped outside to make sure that there wasn't any nurse or
ward boy around.



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Tears were making there way from Edha's eyes as the past memories of her and tej flashed infront of her.
eyes.

She heard the voice of water coming from the washroom, she turned her head to look at the closed door of the bathroom. Her mother was inside.

With great difficulty she dragged herself a little up and took the notepad kept on the nearby table and scribbled something, teared that paper from the notepad and kept it on the table and closed her eyes before her mother came outside.


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Eshaan waited till the constable sitting outside Tej's room walked out to have a glass of water and as soon as he left Eshaan taking the advantage entered the room only to find Tej dead.

Eshaan was shattered to see his friends lifeless body, he stepped forward and took out the oxygen mask Tej was wearing, only to find his body filled with several cuts and burn marks, his face had lost all the colors, he was not that Tej he knew, he was someone else.


Eshaan cried badly but as soon as he sat down the constable outside entered and misunderstood that Eshaan killed Tej as he was still holding that oxygen mask in his hand which Tej was wearing.


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Jannat was literally dragging herself in the corridors keeping herself safe from the view of nurse or any wardboy when all of sudden she saw two constables dragging Eshaan with themselves and Eshaan shouting and trying to get himself free from there hold.


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(ok fine after ages i have updated this one...i don't know what i have written but i had to complete it soonish...honestly i forget about it's actual ending which i had thought when i had started this story, so that's why i had to change it's story line, i never wanted to end it like
this, i had thought a happy ending for this one but main aur mera dimmag 🤢...)




Sorry for any grammatical mistake...



HOPE YOU LIKE IT

LOTS OF LOVE

RADHIKA 😊
Edited by ridzzi - 8 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
sorry for the delay
next update
coming soon


😊
Edited by ridzzi - 8 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Don't tell me its end of story plzzz ...
Give next ud soon
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: murataru

Don't tell me its end of story plzzz ...

Give next ud soon






sorry but I don't have any other option, I never wanted to end it like this but just 1-2 chapters left...
but don't be sad, their is still chapters left, ;-)
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Posted: 9 years ago
JEET-Final Good Bye and The end of a beginning (BLOSSOM)...






mehfil mein teri
hum na rahein jo
gham to nahi hai
gham to nahi hai
kisse hamaare, nazdeekiyon ke
kam to nahi hain
kam to nahi hain.
kitni dafa subah ko meri
tere aangan mein baithe maine shaam kiya


channa mereya mereya
channa mereya mereya
channa mereya mereya beliya
o piyaa..



Jannat was literally dragging herself in the corridors keeping herself safe from the view of nurse or any wardboy when all of sudden she saw two constables dragging Eshaan with themselves and Eshaan shouting and trying to get himself free from there hold.


She stood there still as her eyes fell on him but then why he was struggling with those constables?, a sudden query crossed her mind as soon as her and Eshaan's eyes met with each other.




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AFTER TWO YEARS...



Eshaan was nervously standing in the hall looking almost all around of the hall, 'Enough Eshaan, don't be so nervous, it's your engagement and she is your jenny'', Jannat's mom scolded Eshaan for being so nervous at his own engagement ceremony, 'sorry, it's my first time'', Eshaan spoke up without thinking but suddenly realized his mistake as he saw his would be MIL slapping her forehead, 'sorry, I didn't mean that'', Eshaan apologized to which Miss. Singhania broke out in fits of laughter. Miss. Singhania, yes she was now Miss. Singhania, it's been two years, she has divorced Mr. Singhania and the most strangest part was, it was Jannat who encouraged her for this, 'don't behave like a teenage boy, who got nervous on his first date'', Miss Singhania again laughed but this time Eshaan too joined her. Soon their laughter was joined by the slow murmurs around them which made them to look at the entrance of the hall.

Jannat was descending near the stage where her mother and her would be fiance were standing. A bright smile spread across her lips as soon as her eyes met with the love of her life. It's been two years since that incident, she still remembers every bit of that moment when her eyes finally found him in the hospital corridors struggling with the constables, how badly she wanted to run to him and tell him that it was all a misunderstanding created by her own father, it was not them, their love was not weak but before she could have moved forward to reach for him, he was dragged by the police away from her. She tried to move but was too weak and exhausted to even walk a step, she had literally dragged herself till there but after that she couldn't able to stand properly on her own feet, only if her mom wouldn't holded her she would have been obviously broken her head by dashing herself near the glass door.

Her smiled widen as she saw Eshaan looking at her with the same intensity as he used to look at her when they had started to explore their new relationship in collage.

Somewhere she knew that she can't blame her father for all the things they have gone through. Somewhere she knew that it was their lack of trust in their relationship and her father new very well about their doubts. She had shared everything with him only if she had knew that what he was actually planning to do.

As soon as Jannat reached to the stage, Eshaan moved forward and withdrew his hand for her. Somewhere 'Jannat still felt strange and still have a doubt about moving ahead in her life walking with him. Well how could she not doubt about it, she had lost her voice years ago and is still not able to convey her thoughts properly. It was Eshaan who forced her to learn the sign language, not only that, he use to sit with her till her classes gets over and he himself learns with her, as if it was needed, she had protested Eshaan as to why HE was learning, she is mute but not a deaf that he had to learn it to convey his thoughts but Eshaan being Eshaan, didn't listen to her protest and said 'it is important to you and that's all matter to me, if you are going to be sitted in this place for hours then I'll be beside you, whether you like it or not''. Jannat smiled at the thought as she places her hand in his plams, who wrapped his fingers around her and slightly drags her upwards to the stage. It was not necessary for her to learn any language to convey her thoughts to him. Whether she is able to say it or not, Eshaan understood everything, everything single thought going in her mind.

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Edha's mom was sitting a little far from the stage leaving first few rows of the hall, looking at the cute couple smiling at each other. As the ceremony goes in full swing and Jannat and Eshaan exchanged their rings, her mind goes back to the day in the hospital where her husband was interrogating the innocent boy.

The moment she got to know that Tej was dead and they have arrested someone for his murder, she ran to find her husband. Somewhere she knew that the person they had arrested was innocent but her husband being a high mighty commissioner and still being in the rage of not being able to stop her daughter to run back to the person he despises the most, he would surely let out all his anger on the man and would have made sure that he would have spended his whole life behind the bars. But her breath was caught up in her lungs as soon as she reached the room they were interrogating in and her eyes fell on the person tied to the chair. He was not a man but a boy merely of 25 or 26?

Edha's mom took a deep breath as she saw the couple dancing in the middle of the floor lost in each other.

The instant her eyes fell on the boy she recognized him as one of her daughters friend, she had seen him few times dropping Edha home and as the realization drawn, her eyes were burning with rage and an unknown emotion she herself doesn't recognized. That was the moment she had decided that she will fight not for the boy but for the truth she herself buried somewhere with the fear of losing her family and her husband. She had never raised her voice against her husband with the fear of losing everything she had in her life, a husband, a daughter and a loving family but her silence had caused the more harm than the fear of raising her voice.

It's been two years she is living away from her husband, though they were not divorced but she couldn't find the strength to live with the man, whose so called reputation was so important that he never thought twice before running his own daughters life. She closed her eyes and released a tired sigh but when she opened them, her face brighten up at the sight of her lovely daughter dancing with Eshaan all smiling and enjoying but being a mother she was completely aware of the emptiness behind her jovial nature and beautiful smile.

When her daughter learned about Tej's death she didn't responded as if she had knew about it long before, she was unevenly quiet and calm, she hadn't expected her daughter to be all quiet and calm but instead she was ready to engulf a broken and a crying Edha at the loss of her love but the only reaction she got from her daughter was silence.

But she didn't questioned her at that moment, though she was hell worried about her behavior but at the same time she didn't wanted to push her for something she was emotionally so much attached that it would have broken her beyond repair.

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Edha has finally managed to get herself out of Jannat and Eshaan's reach and now is standing near the fountain outside the engagement hall.

When she had woken up on the hospital bed on the day Tej died, her mom and her dad was beside her, she wanted to cry, she wanted to shout at her father and ask him, that why he had done that?, why he ruined her life?, why Tej had to die because of him?, if he wanted her to be away from him he could have simply told her, Tej would have left her without questioning. They both had already decided it that if their parents will disagree to their relationship they will not force them to accept it though they would have not backed out without trying but even though at the same time they didn't wanted to upset their parents.

That day she had decided that she will not cry, she won't mourn over his death, No, Tej would have never liked it, he will never appreciate it, she wanted him to be in peace and she had knew that he loved her so much that it would never let him be in peace if she cries or made her miserable.

She smiled looking at her best friends, a smile which only came up when she is with them, a Genuine smile though sometime it hurts her to see their fate of being together which she and Tej never had.

The day Tej died Jannat and Eshaan was there with her and from that day they never left her. Though it was difficult for her to move on in her life forgetting about everything happened with her and Tej but she did, all thanks to her best friends.

Sometimes she cried when she use to be alone but then she use to think about her friends, they both had also suffered so much but at the end of the day they are together and it gave her strength and hope that no matter what one day everything will be fine, though Tej is not with her at the moment but he is still with her everywhere, where ever she goes she can feel him around her, walking beside her, laughing with her, sitting beside her savoring the taste of their favourite chocolate drink, EVERYWHERE.

At present she is an independent woman, working with an MNC, living with her mother in an apartment which she buyed herself. Her mom and she left her father the day she discharged from hospital and decided to never return to him; this was the only best punishment they thought for him. According to her no law can make him feel all the pain and helplessness Tej had felt. This was her way of making him feel what Tej had felt. Miserable...or more than that.

Edha closed her eyes as a cool breez passed her making her feel him around her, she smiled and turned around just to see Tej standing at the opposite side of the fountain looking at her with a soft smile and with all the love he had for her. But suddenly his eyes moved somewhere else. Now he was looking behind her with a broader smile and eyes shining with happiness of being satisfied.

Confused she turned around only to find a guy nearly her age walking towards her. Still confused she again turned to face him only to find him slowly stepping back still smiling at her, then with a last wave saying bye to her he was disappeared into the shinning rays of the sun but not before winking at her.

achchha chalta hoon
duaaon mein yaad rakhna
mere zikr ka
zubaan pe swaad rakhna

dil ke sandookon mein
mere achchhe kaam rakhna
chiTThi taaron mein bhi
mera tu salaam rakhna

andhera tera maine le liya
mera ujla sitaara tere naam kiya
channa mereya mereya
channa merya mereeya
channa mereya mereya beliya
o piya..


Edha was confused because everytime it was her who turned around or shifted her gaze from him from last two years; this was the first time she saw him leaving her but why?

'Hey'' her eyes widen at the voice which came from behind her, this voice she knew it very well, not exactly but it is so close to...TEJ's.


tere rukh se apna raasta moR ke chala..
chandan hoon main apni khushboo chhoR ke chala..
mann ki maaya rakh ke tere takiye tale
bairagi bairaagi ka sooti chola oRh ke chala

channa mereya mereya
channa merya mereeya
channa mereya mereya beliya
o piya..

==================THE END==================

Finally the story is finished...too long time but yes I did. As I said it before that I forget it's original ending and I have to finish it, I didn't wanted it to hang it, so the ending may not please you but I can't do anything now. Even I myself don't know what I have written. 😆 So don't find logic and please forgive me if you don't like it. But no negativity please.

I don't know how many RM fans are still here but please who are still here comment & like.



Thank You!

Enjoy...hope you will like it.

Lots of Love

Radhika 😊

Edited by ridzzi - 8 years ago

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