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Posted: 12 years ago

ir was amazing chapter avatika di

i loved the way arjun talked to police

continue soon

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Posted: 12 years ago
My dear Avantika,
First of all, my apologies for being so late in commenting on this update, and this after having urged you not to neglect this tantalising tale.
The fact is that my laptop has conked out for the past few days and while it is being repaired, I have to make do with brief stints at a friend's, to clear my mail, if nothing else. So I managed to read yoiur chapter 1 only now, and here I am with my comments.
Your story literally smoulders with half glimpsed emotions, that eddy and seethe under the deceptive facades of your characters - Arjun and Rosanna in the first place, but probably Aisha as well.
Rosanna is one of the most unusual figures I have seen so far in this forum (though I admittedly read only a few FFs). She appears to have all that it takes to be a full blown femme fatale, who rejoices in her sultry appeal and power over men, but then again at times she seems to be a lost child haunted by secret sorrows. I hope you will take care not to dilute this mystery that is the essential part of her makeup; I would hate to have her become predictable.
Arjun's amplified back story has been well thought out; it is good to get away from the single-minded focus on Roshni, and broaden the parameters of his loss. There can be no rage so deep and lasting as that of an orphan who has lost his sole emotional anchor and is orphaned all over again. The heart of darkness within him is now deeper than ever, but his character is now more accessible.
I liked that delicate little hint that Aisha looks out for him, but not blatantly, of course.
I loved the verses you have chosen to embellish your emotional passages. In particular:

Raahein aisi jinki manzil hi nahin..
Dhoondho mujhe ab main rehta hoon wahin..


Dil hai kahin aur dhadkan hai kahin..
Saansein hai magar kyun zinda main nahin..

for Arjun, and for Rosanna, with such terrifying bitterness in the last line,

Aisi bhi hui thi mujhse kya khataa..
Tune jo mujhe di jeenay ki saza..

Lastly, Avantika, your mention of having made drastic changes in your plot (presumably in response to the comments on the prologue) really alarms me. I would not have expected you to change your track to accommodate the readers' views; that usually ends up like the salutary tale of the man, his son and their donkey. I would prefer you to write this mystery the way YOU visualise it , and for any changes to be the result of a rethink on YOUR part. I also hope that you will stick to your intial promise that this would NOT be a romcom. God knows a real, proper mystery is a rarity here, and I was so looking forward to one at last!

Shyamala Aunty

NOTE: Heylo pankhas.. Here's the most awaited beginning of The Lady in Red..

Thank you for the lovely words of praise and encouragement..😊 That's precisely what keeps me wanting to write more.. 😊

About the FF, I guess each one of you has your own set of expectations and that is making me nervous, now! But that was bound to happen considering the nature of the Prologue..
Anyway, I've re-considered the plot and have made a few drastic changes to it.. Let's hope they don't backfire on melater on.. 😕😊

Also, as much as I hate to say this, Riya does not exist in this FF.. She's already dead..
But we do have Rosanna and Aisha.. And of course Karan-Arjun.. 😉😆


I've said in the opening note that this one is a thriller.. Here I'd like to modify it a bit and call it a 'Mystery'.. Thrillers are something wherein, the audience is anxiously waiting for something to happen.. While a mystery is a novel of a series of revelations, with a lot of action, often more mental than physical.. Hope, I've defined them correctly..

And hence, there will be a lot of things taking place in the backdrop, which will somehow be related to the main plot.. Or else the story won't have a proper premise.. I hope you appreciate that bit..😊

Thanks!

Here's the first installment..


Chapter 1


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Posted: 12 years ago
Avantika, first my apology for commeting so late.
Okay now to your story, I just want to say that you could never disappoint me and this time to you are doing an exceptional job in the way you are telling us this story. I love the mystery behind Rosy and her past and I have a feeling Arjun and she are connected from way back.
I thought you might pair Arjun with Ayesha, but I think you have your own idea regarding this, whatever it is, I am looking forward to reading this mystery.
Please update soon, looking forward to next part.
Thanks for the PM.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: polly_03

avantika :


well, let me clarify that i'm more bothered about arjun than rosanna, for obvious reasons you know😉. loved the way you depicted arjun's past .. i mean, kahin toh kuch mila uske past ke baare mein which is NOT just about roshini's death !! and what i can infer from the story is , arjun had been sort of adopted by officer Gupte post his parents' death, who was a father-figure and mentor to him in his journey to become the ACP Arjun that he's today. and not to forget, the famous " Samjhe ya Samjhayu ?", toh unhi se sikha janab ne😊. bdw, Gupte was referring to someone else to whom he had said the same things ealier ..was that Rathore😉 ? and about rosanna, she's indeed one hell of a mysterious yet interesting lady, i'm waiting to read what she does next to move one step closer to success. update soon.😊



Hey.. Thank you!
Yeah! Reasons.. I know! 😉😳
Yupp.. More on Gupte-Arjun in the parts to come.. 'm glad you liked that bit..
And well, Rathore huh; ho bhi sakta hai.. Who knows?!! 😉

Watch out for the next one.. The show begins! 😉
Might update either today or tomorrow.. 😃

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Posted: 12 years ago
Wow! Today or tommorrow! I'm waiting.
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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: ll-Shilpa-ll

Avantika, first my apology for commeting so late.

Okay now to your story, I just want to say that you could never disappoint me and this time to you are doing an exceptional job in the way you are telling us this story. I love the mystery behind Rosy and her past and I have a feeling Arjun and she are connected from way back.
I thought you might pair Arjun with Ayesha, but I think you have your own idea regarding this, whatever it is, I am looking forward to reading this mystery.
Please update soon, looking forward to next part.
Thanks for the PM.



Oh! I was starting to miss you here.. 😉😛

I can't reveal much atm, dear.. All I can say is that it's too premature for any pairing to take place.. Jo dikhta hai woh aksar nazar nahi aata.. 😉😆
I have something in mind though.. 😊

Thank you!

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Posted: 12 years ago

Originally posted by: sashashyam

My dear Avantika,
First of all, my apologies for being so late in commenting on this update, and this after having urged you not to neglect this tantalising tale.
The fact is that my laptop has conked out for the past few days and while it is being repaired, I have to make do with brief stints at a friend's, to clear my mail, if nothing else. So I managed to read yoiur chapter 1 only now, and here I am with my comments.
Your story literally smoulders with half glimpsed emotions, that eddy and seethe under the deceptive facades of your characters - Arjun and Rosanna in the first place, but probably Aisha as well.

Yes.. There's a lot on the three characters in the chapters to come.. I understand that this is a mystery; however I'm trying to incorporate mysteries surrounding them into the mystery.. (Hope you understand what I meant!)
Rosanna is one of the most unusual figures I have seen so far in this forum (though I admittedly read only a few FFs). She appears to have all that it takes to be a full blown femme fatale, who rejoices in her sultry appeal and power over men, but then again at times she seems to be a lost child haunted by secret sorrows. I hope you will take care not to dilute this mystery that is the essential part of her makeup; I would hate to have her become predictable.

Yes, I do realise that bit.. I'll have to be extra cautious while drafting out her role in the story henceforth.. 😊
Arjun's amplified back story has been well thought out; it is good to get away from the single-minded focus on Roshni, and broaden the parameters of his loss. There can be no rage so deep and lasting as that of an orphan who has lost his sole emotional anchor and is orphaned all over again. The heart of darkness within him is now deeper than ever, but his character is now more accessible.

Exactly.. Foster parents are often more dear to children than biological ones.. And besides, this relationship is one of the premises of the plot. I'm happy to see that it's being well received.. 😊

I liked that delicate little hint that Aisha looks out for him, but not blatantly, of course. 😊
I loved the verses you have chosen to embellish your emotional passages. In particular:

Raahein aisi jinki manzil hi nahin..
Dhoondho mujhe ab main rehta hoon wahin..


Dil hai kahin aur dhadkan hai kahin..
Saansein hai magar kyun zinda main nahin..

for Arjun, and for Rosanna, with such terrifying bitterness in the last line,

Aisi bhi hui thi mujhse kya khataa..
Tune jo mujhe di jeenay ki saza..

Thank you.. I love the song to bits!! It leaves behind a misty and warm feeling, each time I listen to it.. 😊

Lastly, Avantika, your mention of having made drastic changes in your plot (presumably in response to the comments on the prologue) really alarms me. I would not have expected you to change your track to accommodate the readers' views; that usually ends up like the salutary tale of the man, his son and their donkey. I would prefer you to write this mystery the way YOU visualise it , and for any changes to be the result of a rethink on YOUR part. I also hope that you will stick to your intial promise that this would NOT be a romcom. God knows a real, proper mystery is a rarity here, and I was so looking forward to one at last!


Shyamala Aunty

I apologise for not being clear here.. That was incredibly careless of me.. I should've added a space between the two sentences..

I often ask for reviews from readers and try and include their suggestions into the plot.. However, please allow me to make myself clear, NOT ON THIS ONE! This one's been conceived after a lot of strenuous brain activity.. It would take a lot of persuasion from someone to make me change the plot.. 😉😊

Those changes were a direct result of repeated contemplation my myself! Also, I assure you that this won't be a romcom; however will it be too disappointing if I add in subtle romance? Just asking..

The genre of this one will be 'Mystery' only.. With a bit of a personal Avantika touch! 😃😆

I have something in mind.. Let's see if I can actually do it considering the demands of the story in the parts to come.. 😊


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Posted: 12 years ago
My dear Avantika,
After reading "Also, I assure you that this won't be a romcom; however will it be too disappointing if I add in subtle romance? Just asking..

I am relieved! No, I would not mind a subtle romance, but then again, I do not want you to bother about what I like or not. The important thing is that this story remains what it sets out to be, a tantalising mystery story.

I have not seen many of them here, and practically none that were properly finished, without bringing in doses of intra-ETF relationships, especially Arjun-Riya. I am not a Grinch who hates luv storys (sic), but they have no place in something labelled a mystery. I remember at least 3 that were left dangling after 3 or 4 chapters, like a half finished building, and I was acutely exasperated by that. I
am sure you will not let any such thing happen to your Lady in Red, and I look forward to watching the tale progress. Good luck to you with it, my dear!
Shyamala Aunty
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey pankhas.. I know.. I'm a bit late with this one.. Was supposed to update last Saturday itself.. Anyway..

Here are a few things I want you guys to keep in mind before I update Chapter 2..

Rosanna is an under-cover intelligence officer.. I'm sure all of you know about it by now..
Karan and Aisha have been working on a secret mission for the last 3 years..
Something went wrong and Aisha had to withdraw from the field-work; though she is very much a part of the mission on paper..
She now works with the ETF and is an integral member of the ETF..

Rosanna or Rosy is the sole lead of the FF.. No Arjun.. , Arjun-Rosy or Arjun-Aisha or even Karan-Rosy.. Any pairing may take place in the future, but the story will revolve around The Lady in Red!!

Also, I'll be posting a few video links in my future updates.. I request you guys to play the vids in the background or watch them, as and when I ask you to.. These will definitely help to set the mood for you read the story..

Okay enough of gyaan..

Chapter 2 in the next post.. 😃😉
Edited by mohabbatgirl - 12 years ago
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Chapter 2

Warning: Long update! 😉😕

Kohinoor Banquet Halls, Dadar, Mumbai.
They had just stepped into the deserted banquet hall.. However, the sight that met their eyes was unusual. There were no guests, no hosts, no sumptuous meals laid on tables; only two immobile bodies lay on the cold floor in the room decorated with roses..

Aisha crouched on her knees and checked the victim's pulse; she shook her head and motioned to the Chief.
Sameer Rathore took charge of the investigation and turned to the rest of his team. Having assigned them their duties, he dialed a number to inform people back at the Headquarters.

Shree was attentively clicking away pictures on his iPad, occasionally looking around the place.. The sight of red roses in the eerie place somehow made him uncomfortable.

Chottu, who had been busy questioning the guards, saw his friend frown and walked up to him, "Kya hua?"
Shree shrugged his shoulders and pointed towards the walls,
"Lagta hai, iss couple ko laal gulaabon se bohot pyaar tha.. Chaaron taraf bass yahi phool hain.."

Chottu looked around and nodded his head agreeing. The duo resumed their jobs quickly unaware of the fact that two figures had heard them.


Arjun had been looking around the place, for any clue left behind by the killer, when Shree's words happened to fall on his ears, Laal gulaab..

'Yaar yeh red roses ke bina koi bhi love story poori nahi hoti kya?' He had once asked his now dead wife.

Ayesha saw him lost and sighed as a scene from the past flashed in front of her eyes,

'Oho.. I promise, tumhari shaadi mein chaaron taraf sirf red roses hi honge.. Main khud saari decorations karungi.. Dekh lena.. Meri laal pari..'


Rathore walked in and called out to both of them.. They snapped out of their reveries and walked up to the Chief, not before exchanging a quick look. And within no time, their personal tragedies had been left behind and they had transformed into the stern and resposnible officers, that they were!


Hotel Regia Palms, Candolim, Goa

Karan glanced at his watch for the nth time in the last 10 minutes.. 7:05 p.m.
His eyes darted off to the elevator, when it dinged.. A couple of foreign tourists walked out disappointing him.

His phone buzzed and he answered the call; it was from one of his local informers, "Hmm.. bol.."
"Sir, pakka information hai, Woh punter log aaj raat Della Maria Pub mein dinner ke vaaste jaa raha hai.. Main abhi double check kiya hai.."

Karan looked around and whispered, "Hmm.. theek hai.. Lekin sambhal ke.. Kisiko shaq toh nahi hua na?"

"No Sir.. Abhi apun rakhta hai.."

Karan glanced at the wall clock and threw his head back against the cushions, God! Yeh ladkiyan taiyaar hone mein itna waqt kyun lagati hain!!


16 floors above, she sighed and made faces at her reflection in the mirror, For the love of God, just do it!

She picked up the maroon-red and black netted off shoulder dress and put it on. The gown wrapped around her slim form, hugging her curves in the right places. She looked up and stared at herself in the mirror..

The colour of the fabric shone against the dim lighting in her room.. She slumped on the bed and clenched her eyes shut,
There had been a time, when she had loved the colour! RED.. It had signified soo many beautiful things including love.. Love!
That undid the moment..

Today, the word irked her beyond measure.. She walked to the dressing table and picked up a matching bejeweled Choker.
She placed it around her neck and saw the black stones shine against her skin..

She stared into the mirror absent-mindedly and snapped out of her thoughts when her phone buzzed.. A familiar number flashed on the screen,
"Oh God Rosy! We're getting late.. You're supposed to be there in the next 30 minutes.. I need to talk to you.. We need to discuss the case.. Make it quick!"

Rosanna shrugged her shoulders, "10 minutes, Karan.. I'll be there.."

She quickly dabbed some face powder and lined her doe-shaped eyes with a thick black gel liner. The mascara added volume to her lashes and the light crimson blush on her cheeks completed her look for the night!

Quickly strapping on Black Stilettos , she walked to the safe in the wardrobe. Her eyes fell on it and her fingers curled around the dark black metal.
She sent out a silent prayer wishing she wouldn't have to use it tonight.. Not because she was afraid to, but because she couldn't afford to; not yet!

She threw her soft curls back and pouted looking into the mirror; the shimmering red gloss made her lips look luscious and delicious..
Having stuffed the 0.45 Glock Semi Automatic into her Prada Saffiano Leather Clutch, she snapped it shut and made her way to the elevator.
Karan's mouth fell open at the sight of the lady.. She looked worth a million bucks and she surely looked like she was dressed to kill..



He chuckled inwardly at the thought and offered her an arm, "Shall we?"

She raised a brow at him and rolled her eyes; he was disguised..
She eyed him top to toe and pointed at his extended arm,
"Is this a part of the protocol, as well?"

Karan led her out of the hotel and walked towards his car,
"Not really.. But a beautiful lady should always be escorted by a man, you see.. It'll be a shame if I let go of the opportunity.."

Rosanna blinked her eyes, not letting his chivalry affect her,
"So.. Any news? Tum keh rahe the, ki kuch gadbad hai wahan?"


Karan strapped his seat belt on and started the ignition,
"Okay.. Listen to me, very carefully..
I'm not sure if Aisha has informed you about this.. Anyway..
Three years back when he had traced the racket to Goa, baar baar do naam humare saamne aaye the.. Pinto and Francis..

Waise toh unn dono ke khilaaf koi serious charges nahi hain, but we doubt it.. We think they're just the weak links in whole fiasco.. There's someone, who's monitoring their activities!"

Rosy shifted in her seat, "Any guesses, who it could be?"
Karan focused on the road ahead,
"No.. None as of now.. One's a petty pickpocket while the other owns a coconut stall on the beach.."
Rosy eyed the invite lying in her lap,
"And they're attending parties at Della Maria.. Interesting.."

Karan eyed her and grinned,
"Nope.. What's more interesting is that they attend parties at Della Maria, only on Friday nights.."

Rosy fluttered her thick lashes and mentally made a note of it,
"So.. They're here to meet Daddy?!"

Karan nodded, "Maybe.. We'll have to find out.."

She fisted her fingers and grazed her thumb along the index finger, lost in deep thought,
"Daddy has to be here, Karan.. We have to find him!"

He looked at her clenched jaw,
"Yes we do.. I've tried a few times before.. One of my men almost blew it up.. It's been nearly six months since then.."

Rosy looked up startled,
"We can't afford loop holes, not this time.. If they really work for him, he will be here.. If not today, next weekend.. We need to keep trying!"

She turned away from him and gazed into the shimmering lights of the 'Nightlife Capital' of India.

Karan looked at her determined form and sighed hoping things would start falling in place soon.. They didn't have much time at their disposal.

She shut her eyes and rested her head against the glass window, mentally making a note of steps she would have to take..


Karan had pulled into the car park of the pub and turned to her.. She checked her attire in the rear-view mirror of the car and stepped down, leaving behind a grinning Karan. He led her to the entrance and introduced her to a few friends of his..

She tagged along with them and walked towards the backstage. Karan fished out his phone to alert his men inside, but froze when she glanced back at him over her shoulder. She winked!!

Karan grinned widely at her and motioned her a thumbs up.. He watched her walk away swaying her hips and wondered if he would ever be able to read through her mind..

Few minutes later, Karan sat at the bar with a couple of ladies, obviously flirting with them.. So what, if he was an under-cover intelligence officer, Karan Singhaniya never missed out on flirting with pretty women..

His head shot up upon hearing the host announce the performer for tonight, Rosy D'costa..
He excused himself and made way to the table that had been initially reserved for them.


The stage was set; the disco lights flashed on the audience, momentarily blinding them. A figure in red stood next to pianist, with her back facing the crowd..

Teenagers whistled, women envied her curves, elderly men lusted at her curvaceous form, while Karan simply grinned and rested his chin on his elbow and watched on..

She spun around seductively, snapping her fingers and swaying her hips to the soft music..

One of the bar-attendants threw her a wireless mike and she clutched it with both hands,

Nayi nahi nayi yeh baatein
Yeh baatein hai purani ..

Kaisi paheli hai yeh
Kaisi paheli.. zindagaani..

She twirled on her toes, earning a loud applause from the audience.. Karan shook his head when their eyes met.. She spun around ignoring him..

Thaama haan roka isko kisne..
Haan yeh toh behta paani..

Kaisi paheli hai yeh..
Kaisi paheli..zindagaani..

A pair of teenage boys walked towards her and swayed along with her.. Karan was nervous, wondering if she would shove them away in retaliation. However, she hadn't disappointed him, when she met their steps and danced along..
La la la la..
Zu zu zu zu

La la la la..
Zu zu zu zu zu..

Rosy dragged herself to the bar and poured a drink, spilling most of it on the counter,

Pee le isse..
Ismein nasha..

Jisne piyaa..
Woh gham mein bhi hasa..

She sat on the stool on the stage and poured the drink on the stage watching the stream of liquid on the floor..

Pal mein hasaye
aur pal mein rulaye yeh kahani


Kaisi paheli hai yeh
Kaisi paheli.. zindagaani


Karan saw her eyes fixed on the stream of the drink as it tricked down to the floor.. He caught a glimpse of the vulnerable Rosanna he had witnessed a while back at the beach..

Ha ha roka hai kisne
Yeh toh behta paani

Kaisi paheli hai yeh
Kaisi paheli.. zindagaani

She swayed her hips and walked to the pianist, leaning over his instrument.. Her blood red painted fingers moved in the air on their own accord as she moved to the soft instrumental music..

A man in a black tux walked up to her and knelt in front of her asking her for a dance.. She lifted her eyes to look for Karan and then slipped her fingers into his..

Aankhon mein gar.. sapna nayaa..
Aansoon tera.. ik moti hai bana..

She swayed against the length of his arms as he dipped her backwards,

Sooni dagar pe jaise..
Sooni yeh chaaon ho suhani..
Kaisi paheli hai yeh..
Kaisi paheli.. zindagaani..

Soon, the mesmerized crowd had joined her on the stage.. Teenagers swaying to the soft music with their partners, elderly Catholic couples dressed in their best, enjoying some spare time with their spouses, a small fraction of singles who had just hooked up with a partner sometime back in the party..


However, Karan's eyes were fixed on hers.. He saw her being led away from the dance floor and stood up slowly, his gaze following hers..
He saw her throw her curls back, to reveal a earpiece and understood her intentions..

He quickly fixed his earpiece in place and walked to a secluded corner of the pub.
Rosanna had been slightly taken aback at being asked for a dance by a stranger.. However, one fixed stare from Karan encouraged her to accept it..

She wriggled in the stranger's arms initially since a foreign touch disgusted her.. It had been years since she had been this close to a man!

Another close look at the man's features and her sharp sixth sense told her to play along.. She swayed in the stranger's arms and was stunned momentarily when he refused to let go of her..
She fixed her earpiece in place, hoping Karan would take the hint..
She wasn't scared; she simply wanted to keep Karan in the loop..


She saw the stranger walk her to the private lounge, which had cabins, to provide privacy to the guests.
The man pulled out a chair for her and requested her to sit.. Rosy complied and placed her soft hands in her lap..

The stranger ordered a drink for himself and waited for her to place hers.. She shot him a piercing glare when he wasn't looking and knew something was wrong..
She put on a fake smile, "A Green Lemonade please.."

The man knitted his brows, "By the way, I'm Mario Pereira.."

Rosy heard Karan shushing her through the earpiece and held out her hand to greet him, "Rosy.. Rosy D'costa.."

Mario kissed the back of her palm and smiled wickedly at her,
"Pleasure to meet you, young lady.. Waise, tumko yahan main pehla kabhi dekha nahi.. Naya hai?"

She gulped her annoyance and flashed a dimpled smile at him,
"Hmm.. Bass abhi last month hi aayi hoon.."

Mario sipped on his drink, "Koi khaas kaam ya sight-seeing ke vaaste?"

She smirked inwardly and eyed her drink,

"Errm.. A little bit of both.. Kuch kaam bhi tha aur socha issi bahane sight-seeing bhi ho jayegi.. Waise, I must say, you Goans really know how to party.."

He seemed pleased at that,
"Toh tumko party karna achha lagta hai? Main tumhara gaana suna.. Last week bhi aur abhi wapas se.."

Rosy heard Karan whispering Easy.. Easy.. into her ear and inhaled sharply,
"Oh.. Really? Toh, did you enjoy it?"

He nodded his head biting into the grilled prawns,
"Enjoy? Brilliant tha.. Tum singer hai?"

She nodded her head,
"Uhmm.. Not really.. But ab pet paalne ke liye kuch to kaam karna padta hai, na?"

Karan sipped on his drink and heard the conversation.. He had already tipped off his men to dig into Mario Pereira's background, since the man appeared slightly shady to him.. He was sure, Rosy would agree with him on that one..

Mario shook his head, "Toh wapas jaane ka iraada hai, ya phir Goa mein hi bassne ka hai?"

Rosy pouted, "Oh! I wish I could stay back forever.. This place is wonderful.. Yahan ka food, yahan ka culture, the beaches aur yahan ke log.."
Her eyes were fixed on him as she uttered the last words..

He acknowledged her praise with a slight nod of his head, "I wish I could help you.."

That rang a bell in her ears and she heard Karan whisper, Go on!

She made a puppy face and pouted, "Ohh.. I wish you could.."

His facial features tensed a bit and Rosy, being the vigilant officer that she was hadn't missed it. He chose not to answer that and pretended to check his phone screen, every now and then..

She glanced at his phone,
"Uhmm.. Aap kissi ko expect kar rahein hain, toh its okay.. Main chalti hoon.. My friend is waiting for me.."

Mario adjusted his tie and walked her back to the bar.. She saw Karan wave at her and pointed towards him.. The duo had soon reached him..

Rosy stood next to Karan and introduced the two men, "Karan, meet Mr. Mario Pereira.. And Mr. Pereira, he's Karan, my friend.."

The two men exchanged half-hearted pleasantries and Mario walked away after bidding her a good-bye.

She spun around and motioned Karan to hear carefully.. His mouth fell open as he recollected a red peony clip sticking to the lapels of Pereira's jacket..

He turned to her and fumbled for words, "You.. You put a bug on him??!!"

She shot him a glare and pointed towards the ear-piece..
A few minutes later, Karan was glad she had!


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Phew!! Done.. How was it?!! I need reviews dearies.. I'm super nervous and super-excited!! 😛😕
P.S. : There's a reason the first part has been added.. You shall soon know more about it..



Peep-in for Chapter 3..

Who's Pereira? Is Rosy mistaken?
Does he find out about Rosy planting a bug on him? How does she get away with it? 😲
What did Karan hear?! 😉


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