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@dreamymaya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#711

"Many women love ASR. That doesn't hurt Lavanya. But ASR reciprocated your feelings. So he is the cause of Lavanya's pain. It is his action of loving you back that hurt her; not you loving him. It wouldn't have mattered, if ASR was faithful to her."----There you nailed the problem! Its very hard to correctly deduct the matters of heart. What hurts you most, what makes you most happy, why you feel pain, ---like inthe first part Khushi was confused and muddled with her feelings- whether right or wrong, choosing between what she want and what is the best (considering through everyone's eyes)..in that daze or fog of too many factors we get clouded by the exact true reason for our pain...the point which Anjali made is bang on...

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Nutcase

@dreamymaya

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Posted: 12 years ago

#712

The song was awesome...certain scenes were cute and beautiful,certain which made me smirk... but certain little overdone or may be it didn't move me...but your camera angle description and presentation gave a visual treat. One suggestion though - instead of putting camera sliding etc, why don't you explain what you are trying to say through words - what I mean is give the visual treat through words itself - string the sentences in such a manner that while the reader reads automatically the scene paints itself in the reader's mind instead of reading camera moves overhead etc...because then it will have a continuity to it, there wont be a gap or artificial feeling to the story...am not sure whether you are getting my point...when you write camera angles, i know you are trying to describe what you want the reader to feel...but that hinders the flow of the story's beauty. Anyways song was a surprise..Anjali-Khushi was well scripted...did it slightly went too matured and philosophical..??? but the points were absolute truth...Khushi's mind whirlpool was too much to bear..all her confusions and fear and frustrations..you could have toned it down in language...at certain places I felt redundancy

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mythraye

@mythraye

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Posted: 12 years ago

#713

SUPERB... Worth ur effort... KEEP WRITING... :-)

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#714

Originally posted by: dreamymaya
The song was awesome...certain scenes were cute and beautiful,certain which made me smirk... but certain little overdone or may be it didn't move me...but your camera angle description and presentation gave a visual treat. One suggestion though - instead of putting camera sliding etc, why don't you explain what you are trying to say through words - what I mean is give the visual treat through words itself - string the sentences in such a manner that while the reader reads automatically the scene paints itself in the reader's mind instead of reading camera moves overhead etc...because then it will have a continuity to it, there wont be a gap or artificial feeling to the story...am not sure whether you are getting my point...when you write camera angles, i know you are trying to describe what you want the reader to feel...but that hinders the flow of the story's beauty. Anyways song was a surprise..Anjali-Khushi was well scripted...did it slightly went too matured and philosophical..??? but the points were absolute truth...Khushi's mind whirlpool was too much to bear..all her confusions and fear and frustrations..you could have toned it down in language...at certain places I felt redundancy

Thank you for the long detailed comment.

My replies.

1. I knew it before hand, the song won't move you. Reason is you, not me. You know what I mean. But it is not a problem. Not everyone will feel moved by the romance of Arshi here, if they have in mind the basic framework of Arnav being a married man and Kushi going after him. If my characters were two new people and not the celebrated Arshi, most of the audience won't feel so moved. Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna would have moved people more if SRK-Kajol was the pairing than SRK-Rani. You get my point?

2. I understand your suggestion. But trust me, it is difficult for me. You know I am not an avid reader and I often skip the description parts in books I read. If you have closely analysed, you would rarely find descriptions in my work. I find it more easy to depict through the camera angles and the setting, as if in a film. I am more familiar with the techniques of a film than that of a narrative.

And this is one kind of style. Where you come out of the narrative and let the reader know this is a fiction after all. I forgot the literary term for it. But this is a freedom writers' can have if they want. So excuse me there please.😆 I really don't know to wrte that way. I understand it affects the continuity, but this is the style I am comfortable with. And some people will like when we are out of the conventional styles. I personally prefer that as a writer too. Hope you would accept it as my taste and pardon me😛

3. I don't know. I had thought of cutting short Anjali-Kushi part. But when I read it again to edit, I felt that each line was important. Kushi was in a vulnerable state who needed assurances and Anjali is a practical minded woman. She don't know to talk in any other way than point blank-direct. I didn't feel the need to edit. It is matured and I believe this is the right level of maturity in this matter, from a third person point of you. I don't know if it is too matured.

Philosophical? Really? You expect my Anji to be philosophical? She was just stating the facts she knows. She will kill you if you ask her "are you being philosophical?"🤣

4. Well, Maya, I don't think I can explain Kushi's mind in any other way. I can't bring order into a chaotic mind. And I wanted her part to be strong because I wanted to convey to people, it is not an easy decision to be the 'other woman' for any girl. She goes through all this -fear, guilt, insecurity, doubts, self-doubt, blaming, pain, crying, blankness, fatigue, sometimes suicidal. I purposefully avoided 'suicidal' point here. I have brought in all the rest. And I am satisfied in doing what I wanted to do. You are a bit prejudiced to my Kushi. So maybe, you couldn't accept her feelings without feeling it to be a bit fake. But trust me, even A would have felt all this. It is not easy.

I placed myself in Kushi's shoes and analysed how will I feel in that situation and wrote this. After all my story is speaking for the 'other woman'. But due to Anna Karenina's influence and because of my love for La, I was being pulled to two sides. So I decided that when I write La, I will be in her shoes and when I write for Kushi, I will be in her shoes. But it is mentally tiring!

5. Yes, Anjali is another shoes that I enter in. A third person point of view; how a third person who is not against the whole thing will think. I must admit that I remembered Geetu of TFS when I was drafting this. Do you remember her perspective about Shyam's suicide in TFS? I always agreed with that. And my Anjali is me. You know that. So she will definitely think this way. And yea it is so much easier to see the whole thing as a third person. You will reach the correct conclusion, even before the people involved does!

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Shree Nanda

@Mrs_Darcy_Shree

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Posted: 12 years ago

#715

awesome song- check

dilemma-check

love-check

love guru anji-check

cute, sweet, crazy moments-check

damn good chapter dear

this was just so awesome

hey, 1 question popping into my mind again, so finally i'll ask u

r u by any chance student of film studies/ media??

coz the way u mention the camera shots n angles, we do it in scripting

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#716

Originally posted by: Shree.Nanda
awesome song- check

dilemma-check

love-check

love guru anji-check

cute, sweet, crazy moments-check

damn good chapter dear

this was just so awesome

hey, 1 question popping into my mind again, so finally i'll ask u

r u by any chance student of film studies/ media??

coz the way u mention the camera shots n angles, we do it in scripting

No dear. I am a Literature student. But I am crazy about films and have an eye for all this. Plus my dissertation for UG, was a study of three films. So I had gone through some technical terms back then.

I loved the style of this comment. I was grinning. In fact it would be best to say, I had a small grin forming from the start of the comment and it became a full blown one by the end of it.😃

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#717

This situation is too critical 😕

Nobody's at the fault 😕

Yet each person has to suffer...

Khushi's double thoughts on her decision r natural

She is a bit selfish

No doubt

But I guess everyone is

Especially Arnav...

M feeling bad for La !! 😭 😭 😭

But if we see it through another way

then its bttr for her too..

cz she was making false hopes in a relation which had no future...🤢

Arnav clearly wouldnt have reciprocated her feelings in future...

n the situation would have been the same...😕

But still m feeling very very bad for La

I never thought, I will hear this from you. But it feels so good to know that you feel for La.😛

Anji is soo damn right...👍🏼

These lines :

Maybe. Or some other Kushi might have come into his life. But now that YOU have happened to him and HE has happened to you, just accept this fact and live with it. No one is forcing you into anything. If your conscience is not letting you be in peace, close your eyes and ask yourself what you want. Your soul will give you the answer. Do that and you will be at peace. But trust me when I say this Kush, no matter how much guilty you are feeling now, if you didn't want this, you would have let go of this love' of yours long back. Admit it, you are selfish and you want this. Accept that you are selfish; ASR has been able to do that and that is why he is handling the situation in a much better way than you.

She is sooo mature n sensible 👏

OMG 😲

She is now my favourite in this FF 😆

Oi mine too!😉

How smartly she handled the situation n explained it to Khushi...😉

Had it been someone else on the phone...

The matter would have worsened 🤢

Plus the Arshi scenes were too cutee 😳

n the way descibed it through the song...❤️

n the camera's angles were just amazing 👍🏼

The theatre hall scene😲

I couldnt stop laughing imagining Arnav in that attire...🤣

Poor him...😆

n that beach scene was just superb 😃

n these lines made my day

Still there were quarrels and fights between them, like any other couple. Most of them were made up on a cup of cold coffee or hot pakoras, leaning on each other's shoulder avoiding the hippopotamus sized egos and voicing complaints and disappointments and apologies and assurances.

Maybe coz thee lines define that they r not a perfect couple 😉

they also have fights over small small things😆

But still they resolve it 😳

cz cant stay away from each other...😉

Exactly. This is what I wanted to communicate by that paragraph. They are not the perfect couple, just because they love each other and this is all part of life.

N the last white rug scene gave me goosebumps

One more thing hats off to u 👏

For writing on such a sensitive topic...

It must be very very hard to write on such a topic 😕

But u write it amazingly ⭐️

Describing each n very emotion n aspect perfectly !! 👍🏼

I m lucky that I read ur work !! 😃

Thank you for giving us such an awesome story🤗

Many of you said the same thing, this time and I feel blessed. Thank you so much dear. I'm smiling and crying at the same time. Love you 🤗

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#718

Originally posted by: Punya13
Glad anj called on time other wise i sure khushi going to ruin her holiday with arnav...i don't no why khushi think ing about la,like she is her dearest friend...la married arnav for her business sake ,not because she loved arnav in initial days...khushi don't you understand that loves you lot...awesome up date...thanks for the pm..

Hahaha I understand your thoughts. But it is natural of Kushi to feel so much for Lavanya. She thinks that she is the reason for her misery. Can you be happy if you think your joy is on the ashes of somebody's sadness?

Whatever La married Arnav for, doesn't matter. If Arshi can fall in love, La too can fall in love. Don't you think so? Otherwise its unfair!

Kushi has doubts about Arnav's love. Yes, it is because she is confused and in a perplexed mind set. But it is natural. Arnav has to reassure her. But often, men don't realize the need for this emotional reassurance. They either find it melodramatic or out of boundary. They are right, because they are thinking practically. But Kushi's heart is going through a devastating experience. Being a woman, Anjali could understand that and so she did what Arnav should have done - reassure her in the right manner, without giving false hopes, without guiding her into anything, but by jsut being there and talking what she must to keep Kushi sane.

And yes, Kushi didn't communicate her fears to Arnav. She feared his rejection of those fears as superfluous or she didn't had the mind to destroy his happiness or she simply thought he won't understand or maybe she doubted him! Only Kushi knows what she is going through!😕

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#719

Originally posted by: archmink
part 20... had just overwhelmed me...

in a business of showbiz it is hard to find a true friend like anji ... who can tell you the bitter truth without sugar coating it... she said see don't see any future for then ..
in the line of work both arnav and khushi are .. where there is pain , hurt , betrayal around them everywhere.. all plastic... amidst all of that .. they have found this little haven for them ... where they can be just them.. doing all the domestic things for each other,, with each other... sometimes just siting there all quietly holding hands letting the other feel their presence .. just let their eyes and soul do the talking ... enjoy each other before the cruel reality hits them with a force
I loved their little bliss of haven

but all the insecurities and guilt that khushi is having... it seems like that a bubble would pop any minute and she would say that I cant do this anymore... as if they don't have enough people to mess it up for them she would do it with out any one trying it..
ahh and ASR he is the man of action ... but she is afraid of someone spoting them .

ill come to more lat

I loved reading this comment of yours. It made me feel so many things.

yes it's true, it is hard to find such good friendships. But yet some are lucky!

You described Arshi's little haven in a much better way than me😛 But I can still be glad that it was something I wrote that conveyed such deep understanding in you of them. Feels so happy⭐️

"as if they don't have enough people to mess it up for them she would do it with out any one trying it" - this had me - 🤣🤣🤣

I understand what you are trying to say. Will Kushi's guilt make her take some decision? I don't know. Let's wait and see. But remember that she can't hurt Arnav without hurting herself🥺

Waiting for more from you as you have promised to come with more later😊

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daljeet

@daljeet

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Posted: 12 years ago

#720

Originally posted by: kondhili
Anjali talks a lot of sense...i like her.
But i wonder if khushi is brave enough to face the society when accusations fly at her?

Thanks for the PM.

True. That is the major point. If one is into a relationship like this, we must be able to handle it. Often it is not easy. But maybe if your partner is in with you, it can be endured, I feel.

Let's see what will happen with Arshi. The story is heading to its INTERVAL very soon😉