Arshi: Making Khushi Mine I (THREAD 1)

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padmakrishnan

@pokemonian

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Posted: 12 years ago

#381

lovely update

finally arnav realized the love for khushi

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Shru9ti

@Shru9ti

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#382

LOVED IT_UPDATE NEXT PART SOON

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laksh65

@laksh65

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Posted: 12 years ago

#383

awesome update

arnav's battling emotions were portrayed excellent, he is hell bent upon making her study to divert her from the marriage business, he is just in a fix now, cant even ask her directly is planning to get married, as he fears what if she is not thinking about it and by asking this he may actually plant this idea in her mind?

please cont soon.

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segad

@segad

Inactive

Posted: 12 years ago

#384

I agree with some of the commentators, you write well, have a good concept for this story but to truly bring it to life we need more character interactions with sentiments expressed thru dialogues. this is like watching a drama on screen but the characters speak very little and the voice over from the narrator tells the whole story.

as part of a story telling skill, you need to have the characters speak for themselves and indicate their feelings thru body language and non verbal communications as well

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Samiya

@SamiyaIPKKND

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+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#385

Captivating... I cant wait for the next chapter...

Update soon

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Megha

@naughtymallu

Rocker

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#386

Cute update..Atlast Arnav convinced Khushi somehow...He is restless thinking about "Khushi's marriage"..That he don't even want to admit to himself...Wow..Career oriented class for Khushi by Arnav..I loved it...Hope he will realise his attraction which would turn to LOVE sooner..soon..Thanks for the PM...Keep writing..😊

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rskumar

@rskumar

Voyager

Posted: 12 years ago

#387

lovely update...
Hope he will realize his love for khushi...

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Prerna

@prerna1

Sparkler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#388

hi dear just read your story
its great
liked it
continue soon and add me in your pm list

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silent_whispers

@silent_whispers

Explorer

+ 4

Posted: 12 years ago

#389

wonderful update
so arnav finally manipuated khushi to continue her education and in a way not even think about marriage
glad that he has slowly started realising his feelings
khushi's dedication for kids is really commendable
will be looking forward to the next update please do update soon

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choochootrain

@choochootrain

Navigator

Posted: 12 years ago

#390

Finally she agreed to further her studies...really want kushi to cont w her studies n b successful...have new friends in school n widen her knowledge...wanna see how arnav will handle all this...

Cant wait for more!!...n tanx for great updatw!!