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awesome part nivi...you are a fab writer... loved it... <3

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THANK U FOR ALL THE COMMENTS N LIKES DEKTHE HI DEKTHE HUM SAB NE HALF CENTURY COMPLETE KAR DI (PAGES HA😉 UPDATES TOPH PEHLE HI HO GAYI THI😆 ) SO PARTY TYM!!! 😃👏


On the other hand shree has reached d location'

Host: aur ye lap dekhiye kitnaromanchak ho raha ahi dono hi apni jaan laga rahe hai'

Shree(in his mind): pls durga maa sia ko jita do usko safe rakho'

Host: aura b blackheart aage hai ' but no leo aage jaa rahe hai ' it's a tie finally' lagta nahiu hai inhe ye pasand aaya ohk here come's the tie breaker' dono ek dusre ki taraf badh rahe hai dekhte hai kaun darne wala hai'

Shree(in his mind ): pagal ho gayi hai ye ab mujhe hi kuch karna padega'

Removing his gun & firing in the air to create fear'

Sia(in her mind): shit isne Al ko chance de diya bike chod bhaag uske peeche'(aloud to shree) thank you dekho kya kiya ab follow Al'

They follow Al & land in a warehouse near the location'

Sia: shree taiyaar ho jao super-top action hone wala hai yahan chocholate boy '

Al enters the scene with his men

Shree(visibly irritated): pata tha mujhe isiliye kaha tha Jhansi ki rani mat bano but tumhe toh shauk hai na sabki saansein rokne ka aur rules todne ka'

Sia: ha hai but tumhe kisne kaha tha mujhe follow karne ke liye acche khase plan ka korma bana diya ' zarurat kyat hi bullet waste krne ki'

Shree: wah wah ek toh chori upar se sena zori tum pagalon ki tarah uss Al ki taraf badh rahi thi accident ho jata toh'

Sia: 2 saal ki bacchi nahi hu na hi inn khelon mein nayi hu taur tareeke pata hai mujhe harta who main nahi but tumhe toh hamesha yehi lagta hai ki sia toh damsel in distress hai mere bina kuch nahi kar sakti'

Al: hogaya ya dono ko aapse mein aur ladna hai?

Sia: tum chup karo jab taiyaar honge bata denge' shree tumhe toh main ghar jaake dekhti hu'ha ab bring it on'

Shree n sia start battling with Al's goons but after every 10-15 mins they keep increasing'

Sia(whisperin): shree lagta hai ab salsa karna padega goliyaan almost khtam'

Shree(smirking): isiliye keh raha tha backup late hai but nahi sherni akeli hi shikar karegi ' thodi der salsa krte hai ree aur chotu backup leke aate hi honge'

Just as shree finishes his dialogue riya & chotu arrive with backup'

Sia: lo aa gaye ab aayega mazza'

Shree: lets go nail Al yahan ree n chotu handle kar lenge'

Shriya sneak out following Al'

There is countinous firing from both the sides'since there is very constricted space available shree is standing facing sia & they fire turnwise'suddenly a gust of wind blows'

Sia: uff ye baal bhi na abhi irritate krna tha inhe bhi'(she is unable to pin her locks as she is firing from one hand & the other is holding the doorknob for support)

Shree(mesmerized): ruko main krta hu'(he slowly takes those locks & pins them behind her ear')

Sia: Al ki goliyaan khtam ho gayi hai chalo lets catch him before he reloads his gun'

Shree n sia catch Al & ree n chotu have handled all the oher goons '

Back in the ETF office'

Rathore: sia what was all this tum koi bacchi nahi ho kya zarurat thi aisa karne ki?

Arjun: sam meri baat toh suno'

Rathore: jun tum toh kuch bolo hi mat' mujhe iske plans k bare mein batane ki jagah tum usse hi support kar rahe the'totally unacceptable tum dono ka behavior is totally unacceptable'sia do minute ke liye ye nahi socha ki agar tumhe kuch ho jata toh main maa aur aashi ko kya jawab deta?

Sia: bhai unhi ke liye toh maine ye kiya'

Rathore: wo job hi ho tumhara bhai aur ETF ka CIC hone ke naate tumhari safety meri responsibility hai backup team leki jaati mana toh nahi krta na main?

Sia: bhai aap mana nahi krte?

Rathore: ha shayad krta but ye jo tumne kiya isse repeat mat karna ab jao jaake lab ki reports complete karo you are not interrogating Al n that's my final decision'

Sia(teary-eyed):yes sir'

Rathore: kya team hai meri ek madam mujhe inform krna zaruri nahi smjhti second in command unki side hai n technical expert wahn logon ko injure kar rahe the'. Amazing team(sarcastic claps)

Shree: par sir' matlab maine kya kiya?

Rathore: tumne jo bullets fire kit hi usme se ek jaake ped k upar baithe ek bacche ko chu ke chali gayi aur wahan pe jo stampede hua uss bullet k karan uss mein 35 log ghayal ho gaye tum bhi al ki interrogation se dur rahoge '

Shree(to himself): hey maa durga kasam se meri hi mat maari gayi thi accha khasa software engineer ban jaata ye kahan aa gaya wahan inki behn mujhe chillane ka kaam kar rahi thi yaha ye ' kothaye ami bhai r bon er modhhe phase galam'.

Sia(in her mind): bhai bhi mi kay lahan ahe aata kiti tyanla tension arrey haravnar nahis ahe me kelat nahi kaun bhai yewdi tension ghetat tya varun ha shree yhala pan dusra kaam nahi tikde yeun sagla plan viskatun thewla yhana me kounacha kay ghair kela ahe je sagdle majha maghe haath dhun paddle ahet'yecha peksha tar teacher jhali asti mi'

Both are blabbering to themselves & walking up & down when they crash'

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Posted: 12 years ago
baaki sab theekh jo tum dusri language mein likhti ho usse translate karogi plzzz kyuki mue sirf hindi or english smjh aati hai...
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Posted: 12 years ago
oye hoye... Shriza scene was so cute!!
Yay...! Al.. u r dead meat dude!!
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Posted: 12 years ago
ila didu sorry for the trouble next tym brackets mein translations zarur dungi thank you for pointing out this loophole...
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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update thanks for pm plz cont soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
superb update :) loved it
shree and sia scenes were so adorable :)
loved their cute nok jhok :)
thank god team arrived at the right time
rathore was really so worried for sia
last part was cute :)
thanks for the pm
continue soon
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Posted: 12 years ago
LOVING THE STORY NIVI...SO WELL WRITTEN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!LOVED IT..

CONTINUE SOON...
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Posted: 12 years ago

Ohk iss part mein shriya confession hai 😳i hope u all like it i tried giving my best shot but koi improvement ka scope hai toh do pm or comment about it!!😃


Both are blabbering to themselves & walking up & down when they crash'

Sia: shree dekh k chalo na'

Shree: tumhe bhi toh ankhein di hai na tumhara dyhan kahan rehta hai pata nahi'

Sia: kahan hoga Al mein hai bhai ne ek toh interrogation room k aas-paas bhatakne se bhi mana kar diya' waise tum yahan kya kar rahe ho?

Shree: mujhe bhi sab tumhari bad planning aur carelessness ki wajah se'

Sia: oh hello! Planning meri sahi thi tumne aake raita failaya ab bhugto waise tum aaye kyun waha?jab dekho tab meri inefficiency ko prove karne pe tule rehte ho hamesha aake mere plan ka satyanash kar dete ho kyun? Itni tension kyun mujhe leke? Hamesha ye mat karo wo mat karo yahan mat jao usse dur raho? Subah bhi mujhe khich k le aaye kavya ke paas se kyun?

Shree: tumse toh baat hi karna bekar hai'

Sia(standing in the doorway): nahi ab toh batao kyun kyun kyun? Aaj toh ya toh saare kyun ke jawab do ya yahin locked raho'

Shree(irritated): hato sia m in no mood of ur stupid pranks'

Sia(egoistically): nor m I jaldi batao ya yahan fase raho chice is totally urs'

Shree: tum nahi samjhogi sia jst leave my way jaane do mujhe'

Sia(angrily): what do u mean by main nahi samjhungi? Shree tum kuch bataoge nahi toh kya samjhungi? Hamesha aisa hi rte ho tum jao main nahi rokungi(steeping aside)' pls leave'

Shree(to himself): oh no ye kya kar diya maine ab fir ye gusse mein kuch todfod karegi'(hugging sia from behind) sia suno na'

Sia(struggling): chodo mujhe' mujhe kuch nahi sunna jao na '

Shree(childishly): ye kya hai jab mujhe bolna hota hai tumhe sunna nahi hota & jab tumhe sunna hota hai main bolne ke mood mein nahi hota' ek kaam karte hai kismet ka khel I mean toss krte hai heads toh main bolunga & tumhe sunna padega bina mujhe mare ya gussa kiye n tails toh hum 1 pura din baat nahi krenge'

Sia(with lil fear): toss rehne do isme meri kismet hamesha se khrab hai bolo kya bolna hai?

Shree(to himself): smjh nhi aa raha kya bolu kaise bolu? Kya reaction hoga' chup chup bas bol dete hai'

Sia(getting irritated):bologe ya nahi?

Shree(spinning her around n pecking her cheek): I love you' ok bye'(runs out)

Sia: huh?!?! Shree ye kyat ha? (pinching herself) sapna nahi hai!!(she goes behind shree) shree shree!!

Shree: sia marna mat pehle hi bola tha maine aur maine sirf apni feelings batayi hai tumhe EBM karke tumse nahi kaha hai kit um bhi aisa hi feel karo'

Sia: shree matlab maine jo suna'. Matlab tumne jo kaha 'err matlab u love me?

Shree: ha jitney baar kehne ko kahogi utne baar kahunga I dunno tumhara answer kya hai par main krta tha hu aur krunga'

Riya passes by n hears this

Riya(to herself): arjun aur baaki sab ko batana chahiye'.

Sia: bina mera answer jaane?

Shree: ha'

Sia:robot I don't love u 2'.

Shree(a lil sad L): its ok'

Sia(smiling): bcoz I love u 3,4 n lots more'(hitting him on his forehead) robot tum pagal ho pure k pure pagal' tumhe kya laga tum batoge nahi toh mujhe pata nahi chalega' bhulo mat main ACP Sameer Damsingh Rathore ki behn hu aur ACPArjun Suryakant Rawte ki saali observational skills mere bhi theek thak hi hai mujhe toh samar wale case ke time hi hints mil gayi thi but maine soch nahi kit um mujhse itna darte ho ki pure 4 mahine baad bataoge'

Shree(amazed by sia's words):ha toh matlab main kaise bolta? Aur bolta kya uspe se do do live bombs ka khtra pata hai kitne mushkil se aaj bhi maine tumse ye kaha'

Ariya come n hide near the door & listen to shriya's convo'

Sia:shree I know tum sochte hoge ki main shayad negatively react karungi ya mere job hi fears hai tum unke bare mein soch ke bhi shayad chup the but actually mujhe tumpe uss din pura bhrosa ho gaya tha jab mujhe sunaina ke bare mein pata chala I knew ki tum unme se nahi ho jo mujhe meri insecurities k saath nahi apnaye fir jab maine aashi aur tumhe ghlte milte dekha toh mujhe laga ki shayad uski sacchai se anjaan hoke bhi tumne usse apnaya hai' main hamesha darti thi aage badhne se kyunki aage badhte hue kahin main aashi ko apne sabse bade vaade ko peeche na chod du' shree main toh janti bhi nahi ki kab aashi ke life mein tumhare aane se tumhare mere saath dene se hamesha mujhe hasane se mujhe pyaar ho gaya'(with teary eyes) maine maa ki aur tumhari baatien sun lit hi uss din jab tumne riya ko call kiya tha' maa ne mujhe smjhaya ki tum onir jaise nahi ho uss din se tum mere liye khass ho gaye I love you shree'(wiping her tears) I love u robot'

Shree(hugging sia): bas bas senti mat ho jaana ab pata chala bahar aake tumhe senti dekh rathore sir & arjun sir mere murder kar de'(sia playfully hits shrees chest) ouch bechara mera dil lag jaati toh?

Sia: ha toh usse bhi bata rahi hu ki kisi aur ke bare mein socha toh bahar nikal ke bhrta bana dungi uska main'

Shree n sia hug each other tightly'..

Ariya(entering the room n coughing to gain their attention): ahem ahem'

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Posted: 12 years ago
Awesome...loved their confession 😊
Continue soon 😊

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