Chasing Dreams (1) Chp 10 Pg132, Thd 2 link pg 144

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gauriangel

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Posted: 12 years ago

#991

read ur story in 2days..jus loved it...actually i cn imagine myself there...u write so well..i mean characters and everythng seems so real...dis drama is day to day life it seems...pls pm me...

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Posted: 12 years ago

#992

I have just started reading your FF and OMG..I can visualise each and everything in front of mine..your writing is awesome..just completed the first 2chapters..love it simply

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_Janki_

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Posted: 12 years ago

#993

Great story, love your writing!

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#994

Juhiji directed me here..

And you had me at kushi gupta - 'i want an abortion'.

Only because I had read the girl was wearing 'a plain yellow kurti teamed with blue leggings'.

(yes yes very stereotypical of me)

So just wanted to let you know..I am here to read more and figure out how the...she ended up saying that?!

Hitashi

ps. your writing seems simple and refined, which makes it easy for me to read and easier to understand what you are getting across :)

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#995

I love how this story begins..and how everything is mostly out on the table. I mean about khushi as a person. I like the straightfoward-ness of your writing style. I am not the best at reading between the lines isliye I guess.

I am glad she did get away from that and decided to explore life on her own terms. And yet at the same time I can understand why her parents want to keep her confined to themselves..in many ways she is what they have lived for. It reminds me of the change we face nowadays as our society becomes more individualistic..(not in a negative connotation of the word)

I lol'd a little at the age old delhi-belly wala nuska. Parents and their "yeh mat khaana" "yaha mat jaana" and the million advice..

And so payal gives her a little dose of what its like to live in a big city? Or just life. I really enjoyed this conversation and the stances they both hold, right now. And then khushi's catch "As long as you both would get married I guess its fine." And how ironic her thoughts sound when we know what happens 15months later anyway "The world could sometimes be very unfair to women".

I love just how relevant these things are today..it feels like its going to be one of those "coming of age" sort of stories..

hitashi

ps. I hope you dont mind me going chapter by chapter. I find it hard to summarise things succinctly :p

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#996

Then we have Arnav...he feels like a character out of a Murakami book. The loner at peace.

We change our mindset from the traditionalist (hate labelling) khushi to modern day arnav.

We know we can't judge either, both have their reasons..and nothing they do makes them a "bad person". And that is precisely because of the way you write and justify their choices. He is loyalty shows that he cares about his relationship with lavanya and his conversations about the big house shows that he cares about his family and friends too.

And even if we understand arnav and his ways..we can't not sympathise with Lavanya. Who wouldnt be attracted to the smirk, sarcasm, experience, arrogance with good reason, aloofness. And who wouldn't hope after 2 years something might change?

I enjoyed lavanya trying to make the conversation and arnav knowing that she was.

All in all the characters so far seem so real.

Now all we have to see is how the said "fate" or rather "rabba-vey" changes this.

ps. I am glad you gave us an older, maturer..knows himself wala arnav..not a boy but a man.

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#997

I am glad payal is there to hold her hand..not in a shoving-her-ideas-up-her-throat way or baby-ing way, but as a friend. It takes a while to climatise to a new place, and I love how understanding and suljha hua your characters sound. First the clothes, than the japanese food and than akash.

Oh Akash with his own personality is nice to see and fiery payal too.

"and hoped they would get married soon." - lol khushi...ilu,dammit! Sometimes it reminds me of vimla mausi in juhi's stories. No mocking, i promise.

Where would the world be without medling nani's? and the soon to be introduced medling sisters..(i presume too much?) And so asr, anjali and akash are all siblings. no cousins, mami-mamas and lakshmi?

"I don't need a certificate to spend time with a woman." - This further tells me that commitment might not be an issue here..loyalty is asr's middle name it seems.

I enjoyed your description of khushi's first day at work..and then the inevitable high-heel + running for the lift leads to a fall...or a catch this case.

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LooneyLuna

@LooneyLuna

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Posted: 12 years ago

#998

I love how thorough you are with your story and the background information..AR Group and its foundation..and the issues you discuss. sweat shops and fashion world.

And what follows is such an unpredictable rabba-vey!! I like that for once the attention is on the scar, and not just eyes..and her description makes me think of a man taming his badboy looks in a refined way (overthinking..probably!) I like to see this sarcastic arnav, I hope as he dishes it out..he can take it as well! And first time me hi he laughs..

But what I like the most is how they shrug off the encounter..welcome to real world first meetings.

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I like how you described arnav and lavanya's break-up from his perspective, gives a lot of insight into his character. He knows how relationships work, everything about him reads sulja hua? And so even when he says "spared him of the usual emotional drama"..can't mistake him for a barney stinson type prototype.

Nice to see khushi already impressing her boss, she is one of those gets things done type person from her IPK days.

And so they meet again..and I love Arnav's sense of humour..mostly because he has one!

It feels like Khushi is a bit out of place..new job, new place, new culture lots to grasp and whats more having a crush on your boss's boss. You do a great job at capturing it all..her quest with alcohol, her blushing at pda and her letting go of all the apprehensions and concentrating on making new friends. Beautiful.

I like Akash and Payal they are much needed to move our leads forward, more payal definitely.

So the age question keeps popping up in both their heads. hmmm..

And meeting 3 here we go..