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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey Mihika...

That was an awesome update dear...loved it...the confusion is so common in teenage...swayam the new AGS...cool...and i loved the way you showed their POV...it was beautifully written...

SHAREY missing each other after break up which is normal...swayam 's POV was amusing...he don't want them to patch up but can't help and tell the truth...awww...this is going to be very interesting equation...

Plz update soon dear...luv ur style of writing 😳

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Posted: 12 years ago
Nice update... 😊

I really like the way u convey the whole story on both of their Pov...and poor swayam in the middle of two confused souls...Sharon has started developing a feeling towards swayam...even swayam seems reluctant to tell her that Rey misses her...hope they realize their feelings soon...

Update the next part soon... 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
awesume update.sharey miss each other.confuse shareyam.loved it.
thanks for pm pls update next part soon.
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Posted: 12 years ago
Hey this FF is really taking off now. You have made it really captivating by your efforts. I am really liking the way story is rounding up now. I am really very sorry first of all for not being visible here on this thread for long time. Actually I was busy with my CA exams first and than after exams I had some personal work so I was not actually very much active on India Forums so was not able to read your marvelous updates. But I was here today and I saw your PM for update no. 8 so I guessed I have lot of Catching up to do so I read update 6 to 8 in one go and I really enjoyed reading them.
Now talking about the updates I am not going with like in sequence with the updates as I am really bad in remembering numbers actually so I am going by what I read in three updates. First of all I really liked the way you set up the cold behaviour of swayam started affecting sharon and she was not able to figure out why actually in the world that thing was affecting her. Next thing I like the way you are diverting the complex relationship status of Rey and Sharon to break up and than all the way they are missing each other so all the emotional journey post break up and past break up is nicely covered and showed. You made the very visible that anyone who reads can relate to it. Nicely Done. Though I believe Rey and Kriya are still not utilised to the best effect possible but we are still progressing with story so i would love to see how Rey and Kriya turn this SwaRon story on its head. I for sure can say that you need to utilise the bitchness of kriya more to make this FF more exciting because Sharon here is shown arrogant but still she is the protagonist here so one evil character is required and kriya can perfectly be that. Thats just my view I know its your story and you would have thought how to go about it so get it personally.
Now the way Rey and Kriya were being with each other in the party really affected sharon too much and that conversation of Rey and Sharon really made sense to every word there. And the way whole break up was set up was very nice and that was seen by swayam. And that followed by a nice conversation between Swayam and Sharon which took place for the first time in this FF. The conversation was really beautifully crafted including the situation where they talked to the point how swayam made her feel comfortable and went on to drop her at home. She started getting affected by Swayam and was thinking about Swayam constantly. This was the change that came in sharon because of swayam's cold behaviour and than the way he consoled her. so confused emotions were shown very nicely. The whole ingrediants for a perfect love story have been roped in now i feel.
And than the joruney of Sharon from the Dive to a lonely girl was shown. She had introvert due to break up i guess. And the same time Rey was also feeling some strange feelings and the emptiness of Sharon in Rey's life was felt by Rey. Again the emotions were showed very nicely. Than I guess now Swayam is going confused about his feelings for sharon and his friendship with Rey. He feels Rey is a nice guy but not a right guy for sharon yet when he sees sharon missing Rey he thinks to make them united once again. So it would be very interesting to see what Swayam does in the coming updates. I guess Swayam's character is going to be the strongest emotionally of all.
And on the other part where Swayam is thinking about uniting Rey and Sharon, Sharon here came up with this idea and made Swayam her assistant so that she can spend some more time with him. Swayam somehow guessed it correctly and asked her but Sharon smartly turned down everything. But the fact really remains the same Sharon is too much confused about her feelings for Swayam and she is not able to make out why Swayam is becoming an important factor in her life. where she still is missing Rey, She still wants to spend time with swayam so this is really going very confusing and will be very exciting to read what happens next because Sharon's feelings are going to harm the ReYam friendship to a big deal so really looking forward to see how emotional journey is shown.
And the final thing the ReYam friendship has build up really well. Rey going to swayam's place for dinner and than Swayam's mean unlce-aunt were shown very nicely. What i liked most is Rey tried to defend swayam more the way still he remined nice to everybody. I really feel Rey's character here goes into too many shades in the story which is really interesting.
I guess the comment has become too much long and boring now so let me sign off at this note now. I really loved reading this updates. Thank you for PM. Do update soon.
Pratik
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Posted: 12 years ago
So, Sharon suggested Swayam's name for the ACS post but she doesn't want him know and she actually likes spending time with him !! This is pointing towards a crush now !! At the same time, I can totally understand both Rey and Sharon missing each other ! I don't know about a patch up though !! I guess Swayam should just leave that up to them and not do anything !!
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Posted: 12 years ago
Gr8 update...
Likd it vry much...
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Posted: 12 years ago

wow lovely update...

at the beginning loved the way swayam was consoling rey as a brother...

sharey missing each other after their break up...thats natural...

i really love the way u describe everything...well done dear...

wow Sharon suggested swayam's name for ACS..

n now he is the new ACS...thats great...

will be waiting for the next chapter...

update soon...
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Posted: 12 years ago
Chapter 9

Sharon felt uncomfortable there. She was continuously staring at Rey and all she was instantly reminded of vague yet strong memories. The tiffs they had, the secrets they shared, every single memory flashed in front of her eyes. Rey had been a part of her life and she missed him. She was still confused about asking him again. When she had second thoughts on this, her mind got easily diverted towards Swayam. Somehow she felt that Swayam would feel bad about this. Hence without causing much inconvenience, she shoved this decision off her mind. But there was one thing because of which she was feeling uncomfortable- Rey's presence. She decided to go from there.

"Swayam its 5.45...come at 6...in the rehearsal hall...please don't be late." Sharon said.

"Ok" It was not like Swayam didn't sense her problem. He did. But he didn't say anything to her. In a way, he thought, that it was good that Sharon was kind of avoiding Rey. It was good for her.

Rey had been observing Sharon spend time with Swayam in that half an hour. It was not normal for him, but he thought about Swayam hooking up with her. He felt that Swayam and Sharon liked each other. And since, according to him, Sharon liked Swayam, she broke up with Rey only because of this. Maybe she was searching for a right opportunity. And this was a great one. These kinds of thoughts filled Rey's empty mind but he didn't think much about it since he felt that Sharon had known Swayam for only ten days and Rey for 10 years. So it was only a waste of time to think about Sharon dating Swayam.

It was not that Rey was not feeling empty. He was and he very well understood that Sharon was not over possessive. She was not even possessive. He had misunderstood her and he needed to talk to her and patch up with her. He knew that she would be feeling the same. But before that, he wanted to talk to Swayam.

After Sharon left the canteen, Rey came and sat near Swayam.

"Hey bro, why did khushboo ma'am call you?" he said.

"She made me the ACS..." Swayam said and gave a light smile.

"Swayam" he began,

"Yes?" Swayam was surprised at this behavior of his but he remained quiet and thought that it was something important.

"I wanted a favour from you"

"What favour?" Swayam looked up.

"Swayam I was thinking...actually I am not thinking...I am sure of my decision...I want to talk to Sharon and patch up with her...I want to clear the misunderstanding and now I know that she is not over possessive..As a matter of fact, she is not even possessive about me..I was thinking too much...And I shouldn't have done that...It's normal for a girl or a boy to feel insecure when someone else gets close with his or her better half." Rey said. Swayam knew that this would happen. He knew about Rey but he didn't want Sharon to feel the same.

"So what do you want me to do?" Swayam asked.

"Ask Sharon"

"Ask her what?"

"If she wants the same or not. I mean if she wants a patch up with me or not. Now since you are the ACS...you'll be spending time with her..." Rey said.

This was exactly what Swayam was scared of. He didn't want Sharon to feel the same. He felt like protecting her because he knew that she had been through emotional turmoils. Rey was not the right guy for her. He knew this from the very beginning but he decided to help his best friend. He was not interested in Rey's relationship with Sharon but he was interested in what Sharon felt about it. Hence he decided to talk to Sharon.

"Ok fine" Swayam smiled and checked his mobile.

It was 6.10 and 6 missed calls from Sharon.

"Crap" he muttered. "I got to go Rey...I'll do your work...Bye"

"Bye" Rey said.

Before he could leave the canteen, an exasperated Sharon entered it searching for her ACS i.e Swayam.

"I am dead" Swayam mumbled under his breath.

Sharon saw Rey sitting next to him and she gave him a helpless look. As a matter of fact she felt helpless on looking at him. She saw Swayam with an anger filled expression and moved huffily out of the canteen, expecting Swayam to follow her.

Swayam followed her and met her in the rehearsal hall. First of all, he apologized for being late to which Sharon didn't reply.

"We have to submit a report by tomorrow morning" This was all she said and continued doing her work.

"Tomorrow morning?" Swayam was shocked.

"Yes. Which means we'll have to sit here for two more hours." Sharon was not in a mood for arguing.

"I sleep at 10!!"

"So? You have a treatment befor that? Are you a model that you have to do each and every thing on time? Will the world end if you shift your schedule?" She spoke sarcastically.

"Fine" Having nothing else to say, Swayam decided to end the talk and concentrate on the work.

For the next two hours, both of them worked meticulously and managed to complete the report on time. At the same time, Swayam remembered about his chat with Rey. He decided to talk to Sharon about it and he hoped that she wasn't feeeling the same.

Straightforward question. He thought.

"Sharon, are you missing Rey?" he asked.

Sharon looked at him to analyze his thoughts. Why was he asking about it? Yes she did but she was still confused about the patch up.

"That's none of your business" she said rudely.

"It is..Rey is my best friend and you are my..." Swayam stopped.

"I am your what?"

"...my boss...so i want to know what the truth is..."

Sharon didn't want to tell it to Swayam. But somehow she blurted the truth to him.

"Yes I do miss him" she said She wanted to give a straight answer.

Ok. Swayam thought in mind. Just because she misses him, doesn't mean that she wants to patch up with him. She is his best friend. And missing a best friend is obvious. Swayam assured himself.

He was right. Sharon was confused about patching up. But she didn't say this to Swayam.

"Do you want to talk to him about patching up...You want a patch up?" He asked her expecting a reply which he wanted to hear.

Sharon thought for a moment. Then she said something which was totally unexpected.

"Yes...I want to talk to him. I want a patch up" she seemed unsure while saying this. But she said it anyway...

Swayam was shocked too. He was not expecting this but he decided to confirm it again.

"Are you sure?"

Sharon thought again, escaped his glance and hesitantly nodded.

"Ok then" Swayam was a bit disheartened. Sharon was disturbed too. Her conscience persuaded her to say that. But she was not going to take her words back.

Swayam knew that he could not lie to Rey about this. He cared for his best friend. Though he had kind of started liking Sharon, he was upset that she wanted the same. Earlier, he thought that she had started liking him too but he was wrong. He decided to tell this to Rey as soon as possible.

Unexpected? Was it? Sorry people...I'll update the next part only by the end of next week, not before that...Next updaete on page 58...Hope you all liked this chapter...If you did, please leave your comments!!Please ignore the grammatical errors...I did not proof read it!!

Edited by tanha29 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
Res😃

*EDITED*

This was a shorter update but you included lot of important stuff in it.
I was kind of disappointed when Sharon said she wants to patch up with Rey😭. Why?
Poor Swayam..
But nice update. You penned it down well.

Check this out
---> causing much incovinience
Edited by Neeti96 - 12 years ago
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Posted: 12 years ago
what is Happening
What is the problem with Rey..when Sharon was around him, he went after Kriya..now when she has broken up, he wants to patch up 😡
And whats wrong with Sharon? Why she said she wants to patch up 😡
Poor Swayam... between these two nutcase's 😕
Cant comment anymore until I read the next update 😆
Edited by Joshua_TANHA - 12 years ago

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